Fire and Darkness -- Amidala's Death (short story)

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  1. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    This is my first fan-fic. It's a relatively short story that tells one version of Amidala's death, with Vader as the main character. I'll do one post a day over the next few days.

    I won't beg for feedback -- yet! I really would appreciate any effusive praise or constructive criticism anyone has to offer though.

    Hope you enjoy it...
  2. Jedi-Jade Jedi Master

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    That was great!!!! (where's the story)
  3. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Vader ran.

    The unsettled terrain was grueling. Dense brush clawed at his suit and cape. Blooming trees swayed gently in the breeze.

    Vader noticed none of it.

    He ran.

    He ran and wondered what exactly he thought he was doing.

    Well?he was running. It was a curious experience. Even now, he wasn?t wholly comfortable in the mechanical suit. And his duel with Obi-Wan was 3 years ago. Of course, the medics had assured him he would return to his peak level of performance and skill. Maybe they couldn?t tell, but he hadn?t fully recovered. He knew he was one step slower; slightly below where he needed to be. The sensation was maddening.

    He couldn?t take a quick breath. He couldn?t take a deep breath. Sometimes he felt that everything he did revolved around the automated actions of his lungs. And though his cybernetic legs afforded him extra height, they weren?t helping him move any faster now.

    But it was his vision that troubled him most. The images filtered through the mask resembled a holo-projection. Various upgrades in his sight hadn?t stopped the outside world from appearing?fake. 3 years, and he hadn?t accepted this surreal existence as his reality.

    Little matter. Where his body had failed him, the Force would compensate. Palpatine?s Dark Side teachings were often all that sustained him. Not today though. Today was about her ? finding her.

    How is it that nothing I?ve experienced ? not the loss of my mother, not betrayal by the Jedi, not joining the Emperor ? has erased her from my soul? Probably nothing ever will.

    That brought Vader?s running to an abrupt halt, a wave of bitterness enveloping him. He could admit he loved her now ? when it was likely too late. Palpatine had surely known all along.
  4. JediPadme Jedi Youngling

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  5. Sith Vegeta Jedi Youngling

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    Like that I do!
    (Don't we all love Yoda speak?)

    Please write more!!
  6. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Thanks for the kind words JediPadme and Sith Vegeta! I hope you like the rest of the story!

    ami-padme rushes to do the next part of her story before Jedi-Jade catches her between posts again

    Here's more...
  7. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Vader knew he provoked his Master?s suspicions repeatedly. Though he joined the Emperor with a fanatical belief in the ways of the Sith, his zeal subsided soon after the Clone Wars. He still agreed with Dark Side teachings, but something inside him had changed ? and his suddenly reflective, low-key behavior signaled that. Palpatine incessantly probed his thoughts on the matter, but Vader countered with the strongest mind shield he could muster, determined to shut him out. But from what? When was the last time he allowed himself to think of her? To miss her? It felt like an eternity. It would be an eternity?

    ?because Palpatine found her first. Shivers ran up his spine. Vader took off again, sprinting towards the capital city. He had no clue if she was there, but guesses were all he had to go on.

    Vader?s search for her had been constantly hindered by a need for secrecy. He had only found out about her by sheer coincidence. An Imperial spy discovered her on Alderaan while tracking the royal family?s suspected ties to the Alliance. Ignorant of the unusual status of this particular ?traitor,? the agent followed protocol by alerting Imperial command before forwarding a thorough account to Palpatine. Vader happened to spot the report mere minutes before its deletion. Vader left for Alderaan immediately, but knew the stormtrooper unit had a small, crucial head start. He had no doubt what would happen to Amidala if they found her first.

    Vader almost unconsciously slowed his pace. His frustration was mounting. The speed with which he ran meant little if he wasn?t headed in the right direction.

    Vader stretched out to her with the Force. Nothing revealed her presence to him. As upsetting as that was, he was thankful for it. Apparently, nothing had happened to her ? yet. Under normal circumstances, she kept a mind shield up for protection. Protection?from him. How ironic, given how desperate I am now to save ?

    Without warning, fear ripped through him and coursed through his veins. Vader barely had time to react to the sensation before it disappeared. But those few seconds were enough.

    He knew they had found her.
  8. Hiroko01 Jedi Youngling

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    Yay!

    Wait, I mean, um... This is a cool idea.
  9. JediPadme Jedi Youngling

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    Ooh, I like this one... eagerly awaiting the next part!

    P.S. HAPPY 2000!
  10. JediGaladriel Manager Emeritus

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    Awesome, a-p -- looking forward to the next part. I love your work on Vader here. I can believe this completely.
  11. Sith Vegeta Jedi Youngling

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    Hey good job!!!
    Keep up the good work ami-padme!!!!
  12. Alderaan21 Jedi Padawan

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    Veeery nice work, girl. I'm glad to see more stories that try to see Vader and his feelings from his perspective, instead of from the POV of someone else. Bring on the next part!
  13. GentleBant Jedi Master

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    Patiently awaiting your next installment...
  14. Jedi Speewwy Jedi Master

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    Jedi Padme told me to read your story and she was right. It's really good. =) Now I'll sit back and wait patiently...
  15. Jedi-Jade Jedi Master

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    This is really good! Keep up the good work, can't wait to see more!
  16. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Wow! I'm glad you're all enjoying this!

    I think Vader is the most interesting character to write for. He's complicated though, so I'm pretty happy that you guys think I'm getting right.

    Here's more...

  17. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    She panicked when they first tackled her, and for an instant, her shield had wavered. Just as quickly, she restored it to ensure no information was obtained from her. The last thing Vader felt from her was a flash of defiance ? they would not see her terror. If he had felt capable of it, Vader would have been amused.

    But now, he was simply relieved that she was considerably closer than he thought. Amidala was in the forest; he wouldn?t have to go all the way to the capital. With a surge of new energy, Vader set out in her direction.

    With each stride, Vader?s apprehension intensified. How would he react when he finally got there? Probably the same way he always had ? awed by her presence, blinded by her beauty?

    What would she think when she saw him? She?ll simply see a monster, he thought bitterly.

    Her eyes would grow wide. Her breath would catch in her throat.

    She?ll recoil in disgust, trying to distance herself from the hideous vision in front of her?Vader was beginning to feel ill.

    None of it mattered. Finding her was his only concern.

    And then?

    She was in his sights. Amidala lay on the ground, surrounded by six stormtroopers. Every attempt to stand, to escape, to move was met with a kick or a punch. The troopers mocked her efforts as they discussed what to do with her before her ?accidental? death.

    Vader watched Amidala glare at her attackers, her brown eyes flashing angrily. He watched her body jerk violently with each blow. Watched her hair fly untamed around the welts and scratches on her face.

    He watched one of the stormtroopers approach her ominously.

    In all the years he had known her, Vader had never seen Amidala look afraid. But now, he plainly saw defeat in her eyes. It broke a heart he wasn?t aware he still had.


    [This message has been edited by ami-padme (edited 01-01-2000).]
  18. Alderaan21 Jedi Padawan

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    Oh. Beautiful. Heartbreaking. I don't know whether to put a sad face or a happy one.
  19. sukiukie Jedi Youngling

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    I'm really into this thread,the story is really compelling, kepp goin with it, you've seemed to catch an audiance!
  20. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Here's today's installment...

    (Don't worry, there's more after this!)

    [This message has been edited by ami-padme (edited 01-02-2000).]
  21. ami-padme Jedi Master

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    Without warning, all six stormtroopers hurtled through the air at break-neck speed. Screams of confusion and terror reverberated throughout the woods, until sickening thuds indicated they had smashed into tree trunks. The troopers collapsed lifelessly to the ground.

    Vader crouched beside his stunned wife. Gently, almost reverently, he lifted her chin.

    Amidala met his gaze, shocked by his presence and by what he had done to her assailants. Though she had never seen him in his suit, she immediately knew it was her husband. Amidala absorbed the appalling image before her, struggling to reconcile it with the young, handsome man she had fallen in love with. The man she had never believed was completely gone. Vader wasn?t him. Vader hadn?t destroyed him.

    But if anything could convince her that the man she loved no longer existed, it was the figure before her. The black mask. That strange breathing?this couldn?t possibly be him. Yet here he was, having just saved her ? bent over her in a posture of concern. Even hidden by this dreadful disguise, Anakin, her Anakin, still shone through.

    Moments lapsed silently. Amidala pulled herself into a sitting position.

    Finally, Vader found his voice. ?Are you harmed??

    Amidala, shaken by the filtered sound, merely shook her head no.

    ?You are obviously injured, Amidala,? Vader replied. His hand went toward a dark discoloration on her face, but stopped just short of touching her. Amidala still said nothing, continuing to stare at him.

    Vader abruptly stood, towering over his wife. ?We must return to my ship. If you are able to walk, we should leave immediately.? This was not a suggestion. It was a command that brooked no room for dispute ? or so he hoped. Vader was trying to shake himself out of the emotional haze he was in, desperate to gain control of the situation, and himself.

    Amidala did not move. Instead, she softly whispered, ?Thank you.?

    She continued before he could form an appropriate response. ?You don?t have to be here?you didn?t have to do this?but somehow, I?ve always known?always felt that you would.?

    Her voice cut through to his core. Vader forgot about regaining control. Deep down, Amidala?s words were what he had longed for.

    Amidala stood and moved closer to him. Her hand reached up to touch the ?cheek? of his mask; she stared as though she were trying to make eye contact. ?What happened to you, Ani?? she asked quietly.

    Mask be damned ? her touch electrified him. Terrified him. What had happened to him? What had he become?

    As if she were reading his thoughts ? she always said she didn?t need to be a Jedi to do that ? she whispered, ?No Ani, you?re not a monster. A monster wouldn?t have risked so much to save me.?

    Vader felt her sorrow. Not horror, not judgement?just searing anguish and a staggering sense of guilt. She still believed she had failed him; still held herself responsible for losing him to Palpatine.

    ?It?s not?your fault, Amidala,? Vader managed to say. His mind spun with things he needed to tell her. Nothing was making sense to him anymore.

    ?Oh, Ani?? Amidala sighed, seeming to understand what he couldn?t articulate.

    A blaster shot rang out. Amidala?s back seized violently as the impact flung her into Vader?s arms. A shriek escaped her lips. Vader felt the burn on her back ? felt her slip slowly toward the ground. He carefully let her fall.

    Vader frantically scanned the area and found a stormtrooper fleeing. The trooper froze in mid-stride. As his hand reached for his neck, he hurled through the air and slammed into a nearby tree.

    Vader collapsed to his knees and stared at his wife. She was already fading, life draining from her body. Vader gathered her in his arms, cradling her against him in agony.
  22. JediMistressAdi Jedi Youngling

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    awwwww! So sweet yet so heartbreaking at the same time....*sniffle*
  23. JediGaladriel Manager Emeritus

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    Still looking great! Violently killing stormtroopers as he is tenderly cradling his dying wife... that's Vader.
  24. Jedi-Jade Jedi Master

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    *sniffle* wipe a tear *sniffle*
  25. JediPadme Jedi Youngling

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