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Beyond - Legends Flee: A Tahiri Poem

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Deneveon, Mar 24, 2003.

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  1. Deneveon

    Deneveon Jedi Master star 4

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    FLEE


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    I seek escape
    I seek a way
    I try to catch the ghost with his face

    In the distance, voices
    No second chances
    No last dances

    My footsteps echo in the darkness
    They disappear into the darkness
    Slowly they erode in the blackness

    I cry with tears that are blood red
    As nightmares play again in my head
    The movie comes to no end

    I am prisoner to the past
    My own fate has been cast
    On the crimson-stained die of time

    Forever I will run
    Forever I will hide
    From the lingering horrors
    That are trapped unheeded inside


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    --Den
     
  2. MadamMidnight

    MadamMidnight Jedi Youngling star 1

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    This is good, this is very good! Nice job!
     
  3. AERYN_SUN

    AERYN_SUN Jedi Knight star 5

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    I cry with tears that are blood red
    As nightmares play again in my head


    those are my two favorite lines. good job, dene :D

    ~aeryn
     
  4. Elfsheen

    Elfsheen Jedi Knight star 5

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    Feb 9, 2003
    Wow! This is very good! I never saw this before! Well done!
     
  5. Xaara

    Xaara Jedi Master star 3

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    Excellent job, Deneveon! I think you've really captured Tahiri in this poem (I find that sometimes her character is actually easier to write in a poem format.)

    I like how you focused on the fact that Tahiri is desperately trying to run from the Yuuzhan Vong within her, but can't quite escape the effects of her shaping. My favorite lines:

    No second chances
    No last dances


    Those just made me shiver! Great job, and keep up the good work.
     
  6. Arina_Jaylin

    Arina_Jaylin Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Apr 17, 2003
    Wow, nice writing.
     
  7. Deneveon

    Deneveon Jedi Master star 4

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    Thanks all.

    --Den
     
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