Beyond - Legends Fleeting Glory (post-Endor Imperial; EU-based opus) - chapter two up! (9/19/14)

Oh, I'll definitely address it -- it's the only thing about the character we had in the EU to begin with, so naturally I'll have to explore it. But all in due time.

 

Psst—a word from a professional editor: That rule is considered rather old-fashioned and overly pedantic nowadays in English, and I think that's part of why Jello has it come to Edi's mind: because "old-fashioned" and "pedantic" are qualities well suited to the old Imperial order she represents (and knowing Jello, he will take that as a compliment. ). Nowadays, even in formal writing, most editors consider it fine to use a preposition at the end of a sentence if it flows more naturally that way—to carefully tweak a sentence to avoid having the preposition at the end often results in something unwieldy and awkward. (One example given in Chicago Manual of Style, 15th ed., section 5.169, is a quip from Winston Churchill about this very rule: "That is the type of arrant pedantry up with which I shall not put.")

Anyway, just a quick observation. As y'all were.

 

Hey, most native English speakers would, too! But yes, that sort of thing fits her well (and her culture of origin).

 

I tried to go with intentional archaisms for Edi to capture a sort of old world courtly feel. I think it comes out strongest in her initial conversation with the ship captain where she wonders if he means to accuse her of knavery.

The bits about not ending sentences with prepositions and not mixing metaphors also sound outdated because they should be. I figure somebody who is raised by a governess is constantly told what she shouldn't do and constantly reminds herself of it. It's an interesting way of child-rearing: the old admonitory style. Very British and traditional in nature.

I'm very happy that it spawned some discussion though. Perhaps I ought to write quicker in order to spur more conversation. The next chapter switches back to childhood, which I find considerably easier to write.


Missa ab iPhona mea est.

 

"The Twelve redux"? It's all there, actually. It's just not very good.

The formatting is wonky because I went back and pasted straight from Word without fixing any of it, but all of the substantive content should still be there.

 

Heh, I actually appreciate the badgering. I imagine I'm not alone in enjoying having an audience who appreciates my work. Suffice it to say that I think about this story often and wish I had infinite time so I could just focus on writing. But I spend a lot of time on research, too.

And my favorite bit about Edi as narrator is that I can communicate a lot by using few words. Her upbringing was very staid and courtly, and while we'll get into that it's clear from the beginning. And while she was well-educated enough to recognize Sith as an architectural style (rather Egyptian and/or Stygian in style) , she is as ignorant about the religious aspects as the average person in the Empire.

I'm planning to have a lot of fun with that concept, actually. Edi just has no idea that the Empire is evil.


Missa ab iPhona mea est.

 

Jello, I too wanted to weigh in and say congrats on the nomination—this is a very different sort of "Beyond"-era story than we usually see here, and it's nice to mix things up a bit. I completely hear you on wishing for infinite writing time—it's something I wish I had too—but whenever you are ready and able to continue it, we'll be here.

 

I wonder the same thing. Tell us, GrandAdmiralJello!

 

Erm. Yes. I've had the next chapter in the works for a while now, I just need to finish it. Believe or not, I think about this story often -- it's just rare I have time to actually do the work.


Missa ab iPhona mea est.