Hand Mara Jade Poem; PLEASE read and coment!!

Hand Mara Jade
In a dark room with
only the moonlight to see, a woman looks at her showdowy reflection; her green eyes glowing ominously in the dim light.
She is the Emperor's Hand, waiting for her Master's smallest request or assasination assignment.
Her Master's wish is her command and she follows through with her orders to the slightest detail.
She is the ultimate predator, all who know her for who she truly is fear her.
When the Emperor calls she answers and is ever at his command.
Even Grand Admirals obey her commands for they fear her rath or the Emperor's or both.
His right hand, his closest affiliate, his personal assasine, his secret body guard.
Smirking the Emperor's Hand Mara Jade turns away from the mirror: her Master has called her.
She slips on a cloak and goes through the secret passage ways that only she has the access codes to, to the Throne room where her Master awaits her.

Well ? How is it ?

Better in the Mara Jade Fan Club.

 

It's nice. It would be more at home in the Fan Fiction forums, though.