Hate Leads to Suffering - JA (Not a new story, I just finally found a title)

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  1. greencat336 Jedi Grand Master

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    Hate Leads to Suffering (Finally came up with a title, after just seven months :) )

    Formerly: Just another Obi-Torture JA by Greencat

    Time: JA, Obi is sixteen

    Summary or the thin plot that I am using as an excuse to torment Qui & Obi: An old enemy gets his revenge against Qui-Gon through his padawan.

    Disclaimer: Qui, Obi and the rest belong to Mr. Lucas. I?m merely romping through that galaxy far, far away. A nod to Jodiwent for her influence on how Obi would spend a free day.

    Rated: PG-13 for violence

    Feedback: Questions, comments and odd remarks are always welcome!

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    A free day to be spent on Coruscant was a treat that happened rarely. Obi-Wan intended to make the most of it. A pocket full of credits and nowhere he had to be until evening meditations. The only thing that made it less than perfect was none of his friends were at the Temple to share the day with him.

    Obi-Wan had wandered through the open air market that was held near the Temple. Purely by accident, he had come across the perfect birthday gift for Bant, a delicate abstract glass sculpture of blue, green and gold. He had been to the shipyards, watching in fascination one of the huge cruisers under construction. At last, his growling stomach reminded him it was lunch time.

    There was a Corellian fast food joint Obi-Wan liked. Qui-Gon hated the heavy, spicy food so Obi-Wan seldom got to eat there. Today, however, he could indulge himself. Contemplating potential lunch choices as he walked, Obi-Wan was startled when the woman ran up to him, begging for help.

    ?Please, Jedi, come quick! They?re hurting him! Please!? The slender Fallen female, wearing a loose fitting sundress, radiated distress. She tugged anxiously on his arm.

    ?What?s wrong?? Obi-Wan asked as he allowed himself to be pulled along.

    ?In the alley. They?re beating him,? the woman cried out.

    From the near by alley Obi-Wan could hear the thumps of flesh being pounded and pain filled grunts. Pulling away from the woman?s grip, he ran forward, igniting his lightsaber.

    In the back of the alley, a gang of thugs were beating a Bothan.

    ?Step away from him, now,? Obi-Wan ordered.

    The thugs paused, but did not release the Bothan. A flash of warning from the Force made Obi-Wan risk a quick glimpse behind him. The woman pointed a small blaster at him. Before he could react, the bright blue rings of a stun bolt hit him. Obi-Wan crumpled to the ground.

    Holstering the blaster beneath the flowing dress, the woman smiled at the thugs. Tossing a roll of credits at one of them, she said, ?Thanks. You all did great. There?s extra in there for you to remind your little friend that he never saw us.?

    The thug who caught the credits shrugged. ?Guy needed to be reminded not to be late on his loan payments. Didn?t matter where it was done. Glad we could help you out.?

    Pulling a large drawstring canvas bag from behind some boxes, the woman stuffed Obi-Wan inside. Throwing the limp form over her shoulder, the Fallen strode from the alley.
  2. Padme_the_Angel Jedi Knight

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    Please don't leave us hanging there!! In other words? POST SOON!!!!!
  3. Red_Forever Jedi Knight

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    Yay!! Another greencat story!! YAY!!! Post more soon!!!
  4. Cheryl_Kenobi Jedi Master

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    * stares at the computer screen* OBi did it again
  5. Cow_Girl Chapter Rep Niagara ON, CA

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    Obi-wan...
    The poor kid can he ever stay out of trouble?!?
    That was really good and now I'm hooked?
    Post really soon!!
  6. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

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    With a title like that who could resist

    :D :D :D :D :D

    The story is pretty good to!!!!!
  7. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    Ah, I see you've given up on even naming them. :D
  8. Jedi_Laura_Kenobi Force Ghost

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    ::looks at the title and then at the first post that she just read through::

    Very exciting this is! Looking forward to more I am! ;)

    Can't wait for the next post, greencat!

    :D
  9. SiriGallia Jedi Master

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    Wow this is really good Greencat. Hey that's what you decided to call it! Hee hee Obi-Torture yeah! More please!
  10. Artemis_Silverbow Jedi Master

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    What's a Fallen :confused: or do you mean Falleen(Prince Xixzor in "SOTE")? Whatever she is, she must be strong. Good start, greencat. I posted a title suggestion on the resource board. Please, let me know what you think.
  11. Sarah_K Jedi Master

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    Golly! I didn't realize you'd start this soon, greencat. Still, here I am; just like I said I would be! :)

    'Fallen'. What a fitting title for this particular fellon. ;)

    I guess this clinches the debate on whether Obi is capable of doing anything without getting pounded, huh...

    More soon! (preferably with the torture that you mentioned ;) )

    Sarah >^,,^<
  12. KenobisGirl Jedi Master

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    Yay! More Obi torure! I, too, looked at the title and nearly crushed my cat in my excitement. ::Strokes kitty's head, who's fur is standing on end:: I'm so sorry Kitty! :(

    Anywayz... Great start GreenCat! I've always enjoyed your stories and I look forward to more! :D :D
  13. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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  14. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    Greencat, you had me with the title.

    On with the torture!!!!! :D
  15. Kaylla_Norn_II Jedi Knight

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    um i agree with who ever it was that said that the f lady must be strong.... just popped him in a bag and tossed him over her sholder... course... obi is a bit small if as an adult he's only 5 10 then as a 16 year old he would be pretty small.... unliess he just hit his growing spree.... but that doesn't usually start until 16 sooooooo.... um guess i'm just filling up space here I'll stop now and up this.
  16. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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    Ahhh, another Obi Torture [face_love] :D
    Loving it already!
  17. Jenny_The_Jedi_Girl Jedi Master

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    ok i just found this story and as soon as i saw the name i knew i would love it and i do so post soon...... :) :) :) :) :)
  18. Renton Kenobi Force Ghost

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    *Does Beavis and Butthead Laugh*

    Hehehehe Torture Hehehehe.
  19. The_Rogue_Jedi Jedi Padawan

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    Aug 5, 2001
    Does the hyper little kid voice "Torture, torture, torture, torture!!" :)

    ~TRJ~
  20. SiriGallia Jedi Master

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    She comes collects 10+ readers and disapears into the void. Hmmmm there's a mystery there. ;)
  21. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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    A mystery indeed Siri ?[face_plain]
  22. Ginger_Jedi Jedi Grand Master

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    sits patiently

    Where's the next post?

    Here postie, postie, postie!!

    Another excellent start GC!!! :)
  23. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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  24. Sarah_K Jedi Master

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    GREENCAT!! :eek: You can't come in, promise torture, and then LEAVE!! Right guys?

    Sarah >^,,^<
  25. Artemis_Silverbow Jedi Master

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