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Before - Legends Hate...Rise of a new Sith...Short COMPLETED...

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Zane-Marit, Jun 21, 2005.

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  1. Zane-Marit

    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Hate



    Down I look upon my?master. Was he really? How pathetic.

    Easily I ended his life, snuffed its flame for all eternity. Allow him to rest in peace I can?t. I hate him that much. For as long as I could remember he pushed me, prodded me, manipulated me until I said ?No more.? I never dared utter those words aloud of course, out of fear. But now, suddenly it seems so childish to have feared this?this man.

    Always he pushed me to?and beyond my breaking points. The only power of the dark side he commanded was fear and manipulation. I showed him. I showed him the true power of the dark side. Hate.

    For years I grew to loathe the man I called master, grew to hate him. That is what he wanted after all. And the dedicated pupil that I was?I refused to let him down. Years of pent up rage, anger, and hatred let itself loose in only a moment. I focused it. Used it.

    And then unleashed it?

    I snapped his neck with speed and power that he never knew I possessed, thoughts and memories releasing through my fingers of a lifetime of pain. I put it all back into him where it should have stayed.

    I look down at the broken body. Damn I wanted him to suffer. You should have suffered?as I have.

    ?Your hatred makes you powerful?.? His words echo in my head.

    Even in death you still torture me.

    I spit with vengeance upon this lifeless body before me.

    ?Always two there will be?a master?and an apprentice?? more words that haunt me.

    I kick this pile of diseased flesh once more as I motion to my minions to remove it from my sight. ?Burn it. Leave no trace of it.? I command.

    Again the words echo? ?a master?and an apprentice.?

    I turn to leave?Time to perpetuate the cycle.

    Time to find someone to hate me.

     
  2. DarthIshtar

    DarthIshtar Chosen One star 10

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    Heehee, great last line.
     
  3. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrel Wrangler of Fun & Games star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    Whoa.. quite the scary look into a sith mind. Nicely done!! :) :)
     
  4. tangled_sphere

    tangled_sphere Jedi Master star 4

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    Well done Zane =D= I have been wanting to catch up with your fics :) Its a dangerous occupation, being a Master ;)
     
  5. Zane-Marit

    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    thanks for reading guys...

    Healer - I was in a dark mood when I wrote it...a very dark place.

    TS - As always, many thanks for reading. We need to get together and come up with another story. I was thinking maybe Exars revenge???

    Ish - Glad you enjoyed it. I thought that the best way to end it was to have him repeat the process and become what he has always hated, to pass it on to another.
     
  6. tangled_sphere

    tangled_sphere Jedi Master star 4

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    With your muse urging you to write dark stories, now is definitely the time to start Exar's Revenge ;)

    [face_thinking] Definitely let's do some brainstorming when you have the time:

    1. What did Caden do with the broken amulet?

    2. What is Exar's response to his being manipulated?

    3. What is the state of the universe now, is Exar still in power? Has Caden become a Knight? And the fate of his friend who went over to the dark side.

    You've got me thinking now :p
     
  7. Zane-Marit

    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Thanks TS for the confidence boost...Lately Ive needed it around here.

    I pm'd you with some thoughts on the project. Let me know what you think.
     
  8. Zane-Marit

    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    bumperoo
     
  10. BrokenNoseOfQui-Gon

    BrokenNoseOfQui-Gon Jedi Youngling star 2

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    This was very, very good! It was powerful and consise. I enjoyed it a lot.
     
  11. Zane-Marit

    Zane-Marit Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Thank you.
     
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