Before Hauntings from the Past: OC, Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan (40 BBY AU) Chapter 14 Posted 3/16

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  1. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    Obi & Jane - so cute. I understand Qui-Gon's worry about Jane (because he is right on that score) but I just hope this doesn't lead to his worrying more for Jane and focusing less on Obi-Wan (which in turn would make Obi-Wan a bit insecure) - but perhaps Qui-Gon AND Obi-Wan will be so focused on Jane that such does not happen.
  2. Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus

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    No, he doesn't know yet, but he will figure it out. Love the idea of Jane and Obi-Wan dancing--very sweet. Fun update!
  3. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    obimom: Loved the receptionist's reaction to the story of the Moon Ponies, and Obi-Wan's matter of fact statement about it..
    Jane and Obi-Wan, freaking out poor hospital receptionists since 40 BBY. :p

    Hazel: Thanks! [:D]

    Jade_eyes: That C'baoth is more than creepy and that's a good question - why's he on the Council anyhow
    Qui-Gon?s going to answer that question next chappie! Personally, I think it explains everything.

    AzureAngel2: Being a regular watcher of shows like CASTLE, BONES, CRIMINAL MINDS and so on I know that the answers are never that easy.
    Well, of course it can?t be easy. What fun is there in that?[face_batting]

    Shira_Adola: I love the way you portray Obi-Wan in particular, especially that part with the receptionist
    Obi-Wan?s fun to write!

    Valairy_Scot: Don?t worry. Obi-Wan?s relationship with Qui-Gon is going to stay as strong as it was before.:)

    Luna_Nightshade: Love the idea of Jane and Obi-Wan dancing--very sweet
    I?m glad you enjoyed! [:D]
  4. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    Chapter Nine: Ilum and Secrets

    Jane took a deep breath as she followed Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan off the ship, absentmindedly twisting one of the earrings in her newly pierced ears?a gift from Qui-Gon for her fifth birthday the week before.

    She looked around Illum, her eyes searching for the mountain filled with caverns where she would build a lightsaber of her own, instead of using spare ones from the Temple.

    She double-checked the pouch at her waist full of tools and parts for her lightsaber, knowing she?d find pre-made hulls and the focusing crystal inside the cave.

    She followed her Master and Obi-Wan up the snow covered hills, shivering underneath her heavy coat. Finally, they stopped at the top of a hill. Qui-Gon pointed to a castle-like structure carved out of the mountain with his gloved hand at the top of the next hill.

    ?That is where you will find the rest of the materials to build your lightsaber and where you will construct it. Obi-Wan and I will wait here for your return. Do you have everything you need?? Qui-Gon asked.

    ?Yes, Master,? Jane said, patting her pouch gently.

    ?Then you may begin your journey, Padawan,? Qui-Gon said. ?May the Force be with you.?

    ?And with you, Master,? Jane said with a bow. Then she proceeded to run down the hill, up the next one and into the old stone fortress.

    Obi-Wan bit his lip nervously as he watched as she entered the caves.

    ?Think she?ll be alright?? Obi-Wan asked, rubbing his hands together for warmth as he entered the tent he and Qui-Gon had set up minutes before.

    ?I know she?ll be fine,? Qui-Gon said as he sat down and began to fiddle with the space heater. ?Come sit with me, Padawan. We have things to discuss while we are alone.?

    ?We do?? Obi-Wan asked as he positioned himself across from his Master.

    ?Yes,? Qui-Gon said. He sighed, then looked at Obi-Wan. ?Two years ago, shortly after I took Jane on as my apprentice, you asked me what was so special about her that I took on a three year old as my Padawan.?

    ?I remember,? Obi-Wan said, remembering his initial jealousy of Jane?s ability to capture attention?Qui-Gon?s in particular. He hadn?t liked sharing his Master, but had been mature enough to hide it, for which he was grateful because in two short years he and Jane were very close and many days they drove Qui-Gon insane by finishing the other?s sentences.

    ?Do you remember what I told you in response?? Qui-Gon asked.

    ?That it was a matter of politics that we would discuss when the time is right,? Obi-Wan said. Then he sat up straighter. ?May I assume that that time is now, Master??

    ?Yes, my Padawan, it is,? Qui-Gon said. ?After explaining that Jane?s mother wanted me to train her, I told the Council that I would train her after your training was completed and she was of age to become an apprentice. I was then informed that I needed to begin her training then because of how strong and smart she is, so that in ten years or so, she could be knighted.?

    ?Well, whoever came up with that plan didn?t think it all the way through,? Obi-Wan said with a slight smile. ?The Council does not want to have to deal with a knight going through puberty.?

    ?Obi-Wan,? Qui-Gon said in a warning tone.

    ?I?m sorry, Master, but, really, why would anyone want Jane to become a knight so young?? Obi-Wan asked.

    ?To further her training.? Qui-Gon said softly.

    ?In what?? Obi-Wan asked, the grin disappearing from his face.

    ?In anything the Council wants.?

    It took a moment for Obi-Wan to fully comprehend what Qui-Gon was saying and his eyes widened.

    ?They want to turn Jane into a weapon,? Obi-Wan whispered.

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    ?While I am Jane?s guardian, she is under my protection. Masters Yoda, Windu and Gallia are helping to protect Jane. But shortly after our mission to Hapes, I began to worry. What would happen to Jane if I died? After several long discussions with Master Yoda, we came to a conclusion: I will find a lawyer and write out my Last Will and Testament, passing on my guardianship of Jane to whomever I choose.

    ?And I
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    Timeless words of wisdom from Nonna BookGeek! @};- Transcending galactic bylanes from here (our time and place) ;) to there =D= =D=

    Lovely saber she made, I have a partiality to green :D

    Enjoyed the Qui/Obi talk and their decision on how to keep Jane out of power-mad, self-serving hands :p

    [:D]

    !!!!

  6. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    So Jane is the Chosen One? Or someone equally important, it seems.

    Loved Qui-Gon's and Obi-Wan's talk.


    As Jane held the gem in her hand, she saw through the Force that this gem had been overlooked many times as it lay alone in the dust and dirt amid the mounds and mounds of beautiful gems. It had never been picked simply because it was simply in the wrong place and because it would mean work to use the crystal. Those who came to build their lightsaber would rather use an already perfect crystal than one they would have to shape.

    Like the Jedi, Jane thought. They?d rather take the perfect ones and use only them. The imperfect ones just won?t do. They don?t want to take the time to shape them.


    Certainly, if one is familiar with the JA books and the Agri-corps solutions for initiates not becoming apprentices, this rings very, very true. I'm not sure how canon the JA books are, no matter how prevalent in fanfic, but even so, that was a very moving and insightful passage.
  7. Hazel Force Ghost

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    I'm glad about Qui-Gon's decision and I loved all the good advice Jane got from Nonna.
  8. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    Love the scriptural references...they fit...and I've always thought so.

    Ominous future for Jane and Obi-Wan it looks like...it will be interesting to find out who Jane really is...

    Val's thought was interesting - Jane the chosen one? Will Anakin come into play here then?

    Five still seems young, but then Jane is exceptionally precocious, with more to her than meets the eye...

    This should be very interesting, especially when they face off against members of the Council who think Jedi should weild more controlling power over the Galaxy (sound a little sithly to me)..

    Looking forward to more! :)
  9. AzureAngel2 Force Ghost

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    Chapter Nine: Ilum and Secrets

    Jane took a deep breath as she followed Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan off the ship, absentmindedly twisting one of the earrings in her newly pierced ears?a gift from Qui-Gon for her fifth birthday the week before.

    She looked around Illum, her eyes searching for the mountain filled with caverns where she would build a lightsaber of her own, instead of using spare ones from the Temple.

    She double-checked the pouch at her waist full of tools and parts for her lightsaber, knowing she?d find pre-made hulls and the focusing crystal inside the cave.

    She followed her Master and Obi-Wan up the snow covered hills, shivering underneath her heavy coat. Finally, they stopped at the top of a hill. Qui-Gon pointed to a castle-like structure carved out of the mountain with his gloved hand at the top of the next hill.

    ?That is where you will find the rest of the materials to build your lightsaber and where you will construct it. Obi-Wan and I will wait here for your return. Do you have everything you need?? Qui-Gon asked.

    ?Yes, Master,? Jane said, patting her pouch gently.

    ?Then you may begin your journey, Padawan,? Qui-Gon said. ?May the Force be with you.?

    ?And with you, Master,? Jane said with a bow. Then she proceeded to run down the hill, up the next one and into the old stone fortress.

    Obi-Wan bit his lip nervously as he watched as she entered the caves.

    ?Think she?ll be alright?? Obi-Wan asked, rubbing his hands together for warmth as he entered the tent he and Qui-Gon had set up minutes before.

    ?I know she?ll be fine,? Qui-Gon said as he sat down and began to fiddle with the space heater. ?Come sit with me, Padawan. We have things to discuss while we are alone.?

    ?We do?? Obi-Wan asked as he positioned himself across from his Master.

    ?Yes,? Qui-Gon said. He sighed, then looked at Obi-Wan. ?Two years ago, shortly after I took Jane on as my apprentice, you asked me what was so special about her that I took on a three year old as my Padawan.?

    ?I remember,? Obi-Wan said, remembering his initial jealousy of Jane?s ability to capture attention?Qui-Gon?s in particular. He hadn?t liked sharing his Master, but had been mature enough to hide it, for which he was grateful because in two short years he and Jane were very close and many days they drove Qui-Gon insane by finishing the other?s sentences.

    ?Do you remember what I told you in response?? Qui-Gon asked.

    ?That it was a matter of politics that we would discuss when the time is right,? Obi-Wan said. Then he sat up straighter. ?May I assume that that time is now, Master??

    ?Yes, my Padawan, it is,? Qui-Gon said. ?After explaining that Jane?s mother wanted me to train her, I told the Council that I would train her after your training was completed and she was of age to become an apprentice. I was then informed that I needed to begin her training then because of how strong and smart she is, so that in ten years or so, she could be knighted.?

    ?Well, whoever came up with that plan didn?t think it all the way through,? Obi-Wan said with a slight smile. ?The Council does not want to have to deal with a knight going through puberty.?

    ?Obi-Wan,? Qui-Gon said in a warning tone.

    ?I?m sorry, Master, but, really, why would anyone want Jane to become a knight so young?? Obi-Wan asked.

    ?To further her training.? Qui-Gon said softly.

    ?In what?? Obi-Wan asked, the grin disappearing from his face.

    ?In anything the Council wants.?

    It took a moment for Obi-Wan to fully comprehend what Qui-Gon was saying and his eyes widened.

    ?They want to turn Jane into a weapon,? Obi-Wan whispered.

    Qui-Gon nodded.

    ?While I am Jane?s guardian, she is under my protection. Masters Yoda, Windu and Gallia are helping to protect Jane. But shortly after our mission to Hapes, I began to worry. What would happen to Jane if I died? After several long discussions with Master Yoda, we came to a conclusion: I will find a lawyer and write ou
  10. Shira_Adola Jedi Master

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    for which he was grateful because in two short years he and Jane were very close and many days they drove Qui-Gon insane by finishing the other?s sentences.
    That is so sweet!!!
    And now you've made me insanely curious to find out her real name.

    Kill 'em with kindness
    I like it ;)
  11. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    I?m glad everyone liked the Scripture references. :D

    Jade_eyes: I?m glad you enjoyed! :D

    Valairy_Scot: So Jane is the Chosen One? Or someone equally important, it seems.
    Equally important, but not in a way you might think. [face_mischief] And I?m counting JA and JQ as canon (you?ll see why later [face_whistling]).

    Hazel: Thank you![:D]

    obimom: Ominous future for Jane and Obi-Wan it looks like...it will be interesting to find out who Jane really is...
    All answers will be revealed? eventually![face_devil]

    AzureAngel2: But being a guardian of peace carries certain dangers. Not only for one´s life and one´s health. Ani developed some serious ego problems.
    Yeah, he did. Anakin didn?t know how to handle the powers he was given, but Jane?s wisdom and knowledge beyond her years helps her stay grounded.

    Shira_Adola: And now you've made me insanely curious to find out her real name.
    I?ve been working on the chapters where you learn her real name. I just hope I can get them up before ?The Move?.
  12. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    Chapter Ten: CSI Coruscant

    Jane and Obi-Wan knew they needed to be somber; after all, they were investigating a possible murder. But they were excited that they were getting a chance to be like the characters on GCIS: Galactic Criminal Investigative Services, their favorite holoshow. Qui-Gon, however, was unimpressed with his Padawans? enthusiasm and more concerned about the mystery that lie before them.

    Healthy twenty-eight year old Senator Durane of Alderaan was found dead sitting at her desk and the cause of death was electrocution. Her computer terminal was fried, and forensic experts were searching through the remains for a trigger to have gone off but found nothing. Any trigger that had been there had more than liked been disintegrated when it went off. Also, security footage from that night were completely gone and the curtains had been closed, so no witnesses from the outside could have seen what was going on.

    The king of the senator?s planet and the other senators were worried that it was possible that she was murdered, given the strange circumstances. So the Jedi were asked to step-in. Chancellor Valorum, having heard praise of the trio?in particular of Jane?s skills and genius?asked for them specifically to investigate.

    ?So, do we get those little cards with numbers on them to put beside evidence for cataloging, then send it to a perky Goth forensic specialist named Amy?? Jane asked as she climbed into the back of the speeder.

    ?No, the security force should have already done that,? Qui-Gon said, starting the engine.

    ?Do we get to take pictures of evidence like Tommy, Lisa and McGregor?? Obi-Wan asked innocently beside Qui-Gon.

    ?No,? Qui-Gon said, starting to seriously consider restricting his apprentices? holo-viewing hours.

    Both Padawans were silent for a moment when Jane softly asked,

    ?Can you introduce yourself as Special Agent L. J. Tibbs??

    Fortunately they were at a red light, for Qui-Gon pinched the bridge of his nose with his eyes closed and shook his head with a sigh.

    ?I am getting way too old for this,? Qui-Gon muttered as the light turned green. Jane and Obi-Wan decided it was best not to speak for the rest of the trip; it was rare when Qui-Gon was in a bad mood, usually due to stress, and they both knew his limits.

    Once they arrived at the Senate Building, they met with Senator?s Durane?s replacement, Senator Bail Antilles. Senator Antilles was joined by two assistants and a man in his late twenties who was introduced as Bail Organa.

    ?I personally believe this was a freak accident,? Senator Antilles said, looking at all three Jedi after pleasantries and introductions were made and sympathies expressed. ?Senator Durane had no enemies. She was loved by all.?

    ?Unfortunately, it is all too often the best in the Galaxy that are cut down before their time,? Qui-Gon said, a grim look in his eye Jane had never seen before, yet she knew instantly who he was thinking of. Obi-Wan had told her about Tahl, Qui-Gon?s best friend and the only woman he had ever loved who had died about a year before Jane?s arrival to the Temple.

    Qui-Gon took a deep breath before continuing.

    ?Obi-Wan and I shall investigate the area, see if we can find or sense anything that was missed in the initial search,? He explained to the Senator. ?In the meantime, Jane will ask around some questions. Can you think of anyone in particular she should speak with??

    ?Not off hand,? Senator Antilles said, running a hand over his beard in thought. ?Young Organa here can help her. He?s been here for nearly a year with Senator Durane. He would have a better idea of whom she should speak with than I would.?

    ?That shall work perfectly,? Qui-Gon said, both he and Senator Antilles not noticing the look of shock on Bail?s face as his fate was decided for him.

    Within minutes, the two groups split up.

    ?So?.? Jane said slowly as she and Bail walked down the halls. ?I?m Jane.?

    ?Bail,? Her companion responded.

    ?So you?re from Alderaan?? Jane said, trying to make small talk.

    ?Yes,? Bail said
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    Book-Geek! Cool title for the chapter ;)

    Icky slimy Palpatine is behind it, no shock there :p

    Oooh, evil cliffie. OK, like we need an update every day until the end of February [face_batting] [face_laugh] unless the move happens Monday - o_O [face_laugh]

    Jane makes an excellent sleuth BTW. =D=
  14. AzureAngel2 Force Ghost

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    :eek:

    Obiiiiiiii! Nooooooo!

    But well with Palpatine being around people run danger to end up pretty hurt or dead.

    ?I think I know who did it,? Jane said later that evening back at the apartment in the Temple shared by Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan and Jane.

    ?Oh you do, my darling precious flower?? Qui-Gon said as he began to cut some vegetables for their dinner. Jane smiled at Qui-Gon?s special name for her.

    ?Yes,? Jane said as she laid napkins on the table. ?It?s Senator Palpatine of Naboo.?

    ?Why Senator Palpatine? What motive did he have? And how did he kill Senator Durane?? Obi-Wan asked from the stove where he was cooking pasta.

    ?All the information I gathered today points to his motive,? Jane said. ?Senator Palpatine proposed to build this huge battle station with lasers that could blow up planets to defend Coruscant, but Senator Durane didn?t approve. So he killed her so that he could sway her replacement to vote for his bill. He only needed one more vote for the bill to pass.?

    ?So then how did he kill her?? Qui-Gon asked, tossing the salad he had made.

    ?He electrocuted her with his Sith lightning powers.? Jane said nonchalantly as she laid out the silverware.

    Both Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon stopped what they were in the middle of.

    ?Jainy-bug,? Obi-Wan said, calling Jane by his pet name for her. ?Hate to break it to you, but Senator Palpatine isn?t a Sith. He?s not even Force-Sensitive. The Council would know it if it was otherwise.?

    ?You haven?t met him, Obi-Wan,? Jane said, putting her hands on her hips. ?He just feels evil. It?s radiating off of him.?

    ?Jane, I am sure Senator Palpatine is a perfectly decent gentleman,? Qui-Gon said, placing the bowl of salad on the table. ?Besides, can you even place him at the time and place of Senator Durane?s death??


    It does NOT surprise me in the least that he is suspect number 1. I know Charles Dickens villains who act more innocent and look more innocent than old Palps.
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    Ooh, Jane is on to Palps. But no, not Obi-Wan! [face_worried]
  16. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    Jainy-bug..how completely adorable...[face_love]

    All the CSI references and Qui-Gon's reaction had me literally laughing out loud. That was great! [face_laugh]

    Loved this! Will little Jane be the one to stop Palpatine's evil plot before he gets started?

    Oh, No!! Poor Obi-wan! :eek:
  17. Shira_Adola Jedi Master

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    *glares* You would end the chapter like that. I'm studiously ignoring that fact. Other than that terrible ending, this was a very good chapter. Jane is a very attentive young girl. I absolutely adore Qui-Gon's and Obi-Wan's nicknames for her ^^. They're very sweet. But they obviously need to trust her instincts more, even if I understand why they don't. She's only...how old is she now? Around seven?

    I loved the NCIS references. I couldn't help going "They mean Gibbs!" and such nonsense. Poor Obi-Wan. It's hilarious that he acted exactly the way a hopeful fan would.


    ?All the information I gathered today points to his motive,? Jane said. ?Senator Palpatine proposed to build this huge battle station with lasers that could blow up planets to defend Coruscant, but Senator Durane didn?t approve. So he killed her so that he could sway her replacement to vote for his bill. He only needed one more vote for the bill to pass.?

    ?So then how did he kill her?? Qui-Gon asked, tossing the salad he had made.

    ?He electrocuted her with his Sith lightning powers.? Jane said nonchalantly as she laid out the silverware.


    I love how she just blurts this out as though it should have been obvious. [face_laugh]
  18. Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus

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    Perhaps they should listen to Jane's intuition. I laughed with the CSI references... and cliffie for Obi-Wan! He's always getting into rough spots like that. Great update!
  19. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    Jade_eyes: Oooh, evil cliffie. OK, like we need an update every day until the end of February unless the move happens Monday

    I would love for that to happen; however, my life just won't allow that at the moment. *sigh*

    AzureAngel2: It does NOT surprise me in the least that he is suspect number 1. I know Charles Dickens villains who act more innocent and look more innocent than old Palps.

    Even Tom Riddle was acting more innocent than Palpatine when he was asking about Horcruxes.:rolleyes:

    Hazel: But no, not Obi-Wan!

    Don't worry! Obi-Wan's gonna be.... *cuts self off and grabs story notes, hastily flipping through them* Yep! Obi-Wan's gonna be okay! *tries and fails to look innocent*

    obimom: Loved this! Will little Jane be the one to stop Palpatine's evil plot before he gets started?

    We shall see.[face_mischief]

    Shira_Adola: I love how she just blurts this out as though it should have been obvious.

    When you re-watch the prequels, it kind of is.o_O

    Luna_Nightshade: Perhaps they should listen to Jane's intuition.

    They should, they really should. Oh, silly boys.[face_shame_on_you]




    So, was going to update yesterday.... Then my laptop's charger died.:mad: So I haven't been able to work with my laptop for anything, stories or school pappers. Fortunately, I wrote down the first half of the chapter and can re-write it on the computer in the family room. In addition to that, I took a CLEP test this week (I passed, but I was one point shy of the score the college I want to go to accepts) and my soccer team is in a tournament this weekend (tied a game, won a game and play at 10 AM tomorrow).

    And we got a puppy. She's 7 and a half weeks old and a Rottweiler mix and her name is Fiona Rain. She's had us all on our toes since she came home Wedensday. I'll try and get a picture up next update.
  20. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    So, really didn't mean to keep ya'll in suspense for two weeks. Sorry. On the bright side, laptop's fixed! Sort of. It wasn't the powercord like we originally thought, it has a part that needs to be soldered back on, according to the guy at Best Buy, and it's an easy fix, but the laptop would have to be shipped away for two to three weeks.

    This is probably the longest chapter for the story (so far[face_whistling] ). And there's another song to go with this chapter. Eyes on Fire by Blue Foundation. This symbol # will tell you when to play the song.



    Chapter Eleven: Senator Secret Sith Lord Strikes Again

    Jane knelt down beside Obi-Wan, waiting anxiously for the paramedics to arrive. She knew from previous her books that if she moved Obi-Wan, it could prove more harm than good, especially if he had damaged his neck. So, instead she stroked his hair, trying to soothe him as he gave the occasional moan of pain.

    Jane couldn?t have been more relieved when the paramedics arrived. Only after she was sure that Obi-Wan was in good hands did she let Bail lead her off. Bail took her to his speeder to the hospital; on the way there, Jane contacted Qui-Gon through the Force to the Jedi Master?s relief. Qui-Gon had been panicking because he was unable to get to his Padawans, nor known which apprentice was injured. He told Jane to stay with Bail and that he would meet her at the hospital shortly.

    What felt like an eternity later, Bail led Jane up to the reception desk of Coruscant General and asked about Obi-Wan.

    ?He?s still in triage,? The receptionist said. ?Are you family??

    ?I?m his sister in everything but blood,? Jane said, having to be held by Bail as she was too short to see over the desk. ?And, trust me, I know this drill: no allergies, not on any medications, contact the Healers at the Jedi Temple, they?ve already got his medical file on standby.?

    ?This happens often?? Bail asked Jane as the receptionist made a note.

    ?Often enough that the Healers have a betting pool every time we go on a mission over which one of us is going to come back with the worst injuries,? Jane said as Bail put her on the ground.

    Just as Jane finished giving the receptionist the number for the Halls of Healing, Qui-Gon entered the building, followed by Winna Di Uni?the trio?s primary Healer?and Bant Eerin, Obi-Wan?s best friend and Winna?s apprentice.

    Winna and Bant showed their credintals and were allowed back. With a feeling of helplessness, Jane crawled onto Qui-Gon?s lap and allowed herself to get buried underneath the Jedi Master?s arms. Neither spoke, but they didn?t need to in order to comfort each other.

    Ten minutes later, Winna came out and pulled up a chair to sit directly across from Qui-Gon and Jane.

    ?Is Obi-Wan alright?? Jane asked softly.

    ?He?s conscious,? Winna said, Jane noting that she skirted around the actual question. ?And he wants to see you both before he is sedated. But first I need to prepare you for what you will see.

    ?His left arm is broken and will need surgery and a cast. He cannot be immersed in bacta at this time because of some of his other injuries. He has a concussion, but fortunately his skull is intact and there appears to be no bleeding or swelling of the brain or damage to his spinal cord-? Jane said a little whisper of a prayer of thanks. ?-His right shoulder was dislocated, but it seems that it popped back into place shortly after. His right hip is also dislocated; he will have to be sedated for it to realigned, as it is very painful and, if it doesn?t work manually, he?ll have to have surgery to get it back into place. Either way, he will have to wear a brace for a month or so, depending on how bad the damage is. He also has a few cracked ribs, a sprained ankle and lots of lacerations and bruises. So far there has been no indication of internal problems.?

    It took a moment for all this information to comprehend and also?primarily on Jane?s part?to swallow back tears.

    ?Are you going to be alright?? Qui-Gon asked as he set Jane on her feet.

    ?I think so,?
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    Aug 31, 2004
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    Book! [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh] How much of that did Obi-Wan hear is the question [face_laugh] [face_laugh] Woohoo! Siri's a fangirl underneath it all [face_laugh]

    Yay for Jane with Palps but it's icky about the tape.

    [face_thinking] [face_frustrated]

    Wish he'd come down with the SW version of Bubonics or something :p

    Big hugs for techie stuff being straightened out again [face_dancing]

  22. Hazel Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 9, 2010
    star 4

    Tee hee! Siri's got it bad.

    I want to hit Palpatine right now. :mad:

    Anyway, really great chapter BG!
  23. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Sep 16, 2005
    star 5

    I always have this dream where due to strange circumstances, I?m about to almost drown in the lake, ocean, river, whatever, but it?s always okay because you rescue me. Bare chested. Then you give me mouth-to-mouth. Then it?s always ruined by Master Yoda in a pink feathered tutu, or something similar before it gets really good,? Siri sighed, twirling Obi-Wan?s Padawan braid around her finger. ?Oh, Force, I am so glad you?re not awake and there is no one around to hear me ramble.


    Hey - she stole my drea - oh, oops, not, sorry, different one - Yoda was wearing a polka dot tutu.

    [face_talk_hand] Just kidding!
  24. Shira_Adola Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Feb 15, 2011
    star 4
    *giggles like the fangirl I truly am*

    I wanna feel his washboard abs! [face_batting] *clears throat* I mean, that was a very, erm, vivid chapter, Book. Well done. And poor Siri, lol. I can't imagine how mortified she must have felt, although I feel I would have said exactly what Jane did XD.

    I absolutely love the chemistry between these characters ^^ Especially between Obi-Wan and Jane. They are so sweet together! And I can't wait for her to pound Palpatine;) I'm glad she had the strength of mind not to retaliate to his jibe about her father. I'm still waiting to find out who it is, by the way.

    Looking forward to more! @};-
  25. obimom Jedi Grand Master

    Member Since:
    Oct 31, 2010
    star 4
    You brought Siri in!! [face_love] And oh yes, there's a lot to love with Obi-Wan...and if he heard what Siri said...he's not letting on, at least not yet.

    How creepy, especially when Palps stroked her hair...ewwww..[face_frustrated] . He basically told her everything she thought was true..why doesn't she tell Qui-Gon..?

    And her father turned. Now I"m really curious as to who her father is...

    Love the brother/sister affection Obi-Wan and Jane have..very sweet. [face_love]
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