Saga In The Shadows Part 1: Jedi Uprising (AU) (Repost & Rewrite) Completed.

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  1. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    [image=http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v295/ThrawnRocks/poster.jpg] created by ThrawnRocks

    Jedi Uprising


    Disclaimer: Star Wars belongs to George Lucas and so do all his characters. Any characters created by Jude Watson and Dave Wolverton belong to them + any characters I created belong to me.
    I am making no money off of this and I hope you enjoy this exciting adventure.

    Author note: I would like to thank my three beta readers for the time and energy they put in to check my fic over and offer advice. I also would like to thank those who supported me in the writing of this first episode.

    Author note 2: If you would like to be pmed when there are updates and/or for future episode updates then please let me know so that I can add you to my list.

    Author note 3: /bond/ means talking through bond. Italics mean dreams, visions, and/or thoughts.



    What if the Sith won the Sith war?

    Sidious and Maul bowed their heads, then slowly lifted them and looked toward Darth Bane. They stood up, straight and erect, and waited patiently.

    What if the blockade was the doing of the Jedi?

    ?Master Jedi,? Nute Gunray began. ?Queen Misika wishes to speak to you.?

    What if the Sith got to the Chosen One first?

    Maul returned with a gleeful crooked smile. ?The boy has a midi-chlorian count over twenty thousand.? /Master it is possible that he is the Chosen One?/

    What if??

    /Release the destroyer droids./

    ?Who are you?? Anakin demanded suspiciously as he held the spoon ready to defend himself.

    ?It?s the only way to do this.? Garen answered calmly.

    ?I am Nemiraa, apprentice to Darth Milter. I have heard some interesting things about you,? she told him.

    Qui-Gon chuckled. ?Your padawan is growing up and you won?t be able to keep him out of trouble forever.?

    ?I am your padawan no longer. You may address me as Darth Redav,? Obi-Wan replied coldly.

    Maul cackled softly and looked at the anguished stricken padawan. ?One down, one more to go. Prepare to die, Jedi, and follow your Master.?

    Jedi Uprising

    Coming to you on February 21, 2005


    Should they resist?destroy them.


    Dramatis personae

    Jedi:

    Yoda: Jedi Master. Head of the Jedi Council
    Dooku: Jedi Master.
    Renton R?lya: Jedi Master. Garen?s Master.
    Qui-Gon Jinn: Jedi Master. Obi-Wan?s Master.
    Xanatos Crion: Jedi Knight. Bruck?s Master. Former padawan of Qui-Gon.
    Obi-Wan Kenobi: Jedi padawan. Qui-Gon?s padawan.
    Garen Muln: Jedi padawan. Renton R?lya?s padawan.
    Bruck Chun: Jedi Padawan. Xanatos? padawan.
    Kenshin: Jedi initiate.

    Sith:
    Darth Bane: Sith Master. Head of the Sith council.
    Darth Sidious: Maul?s Master.
    Darth Maul: Sidious? apprentice.
    Darth Cralash: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Nemiraa: Apprentice to Darth Milter.
    Darth Milter: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. Master of Nemiraa
    Darth Runder: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Secrenosh: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Meltric: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Meshan: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Mishane: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human female)
    Darth Ronok: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Ribeous: Sith Master. Sits on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Milter: Sith Master Sits. on the Sith Council. (Human male)
    Darth Fraunel: Sith Master Sits. on the Sith Council. (Human female)

    Other:
    Queen Misika: Queen of Naboo.
    Sio Bibble: Governer.
    Nute Gunray: Viceroy of the Trade Federation.
    Panaka: Chief of security.
    Queen Amidala: Future Queen of Naboo
    Sabe: Queen Amidala?s handmaiden.
    Watto: Owner of Shmi and Anakin
    Shmi Skywalker: Anakin?s
  2. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Oh, I can't wait for more! This looks incredible! But then - peeking at the author's name - I'm not at all surprised! :D

    Really hope you update soon, very soon!
  3. Jedi Trace SouthEast RSA

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    Congrats on getting this started. :) Nice cover art!
  4. sdhfs Force Ghost

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    This looks interesting
  5. Odd-Thomas Jedi Knight

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    I'm impressed! Very interesting premise and it looks like it will get even more interesting and exciting as it goes on!
  6. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    VaderLVR64: Oh, I can't wait for more! This looks incredible! But then - peeking at the author's name - I'm not at all surprised! Thanks and welcome :)

    Really hope you update soon, very soon! :D


    Jedi Trace: Congrats on getting this started. Nice cover art! Thanks :)

    sdhfs: This looks interesting I'm glad i could capture your attention. :) Welcome to my fic.


    Odd-Thomas: I'm impressed! Very interesting premise and it looks like it will get even more interesting and exciting as it goes on! It sure will. Welcome aboard. :D

  7. sjtabler Jedi Padawan

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    Sounds interesting. I going to read this version sense the chance of pictures exists here and not on fanfiction.net.
  8. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    sjtabler: Sounds interesting. I going to read this version sense the chance of pictures exists here and not on fanfiction.net. True. I'm glad you could join us. :)

    The post schedule will be every Monday and Thursday unless i say otherwise. :) Here is the next post.
    Remember, I love feedback. :D
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    Chapter 2

    The Shadow Venger landed in the outskirts of Mos Espa a few days later. Sidious and Maul descended the ramp with their black hoods covering their faces, menace clinging to their aura. ?I feel a strong Force presence in the town, Master,? Maul commented as he stretched out with the Dark Side of the Force.

    Sidious nodded once. ?I feel it as well, my apprentice.?

    ?Do you think it is a Jedi?? Maul asked, his eagerness to confront a Jedi evident in his voice.

    Sidious felt for the source and smirked. ?No.? They entered Mos Espa and continued to follow the source. The people in the streets, knowing the evil power the Sith possessed, trembled as they passed. Maul reveled in the peoples? fear of them, enjoyed their frightened expressions.

    Soon they entered the slave quarters and Maul followed his Master to an unremarkable door. Sidious banged on it heavily. ?You will open up and cooperate with us!? he commanded as he waited for someone to open the door. He heard shuffling inside the dwelling as the person inside moved to open the door.

    The door opened, and a worn woman looked out, her gaze wary. Shmi?s eyes widened at the sight of the Sith and she backed up, letting the Dark ones through but blocking the entrance to Anakin?s room. ?What can I do for you,? she asked as calmly as she could.

    Maul?s eyes flashed as he approached her. ?Do what we tell you, slave,? he responded, sneering the last word.

    Sidious felt for any other presences in the dwelling and found a sleeping being, in the room behind the woman that was admitting a strong force presence. ?Maul, get a midi-chlorian count of the person in the room behind her.? Maul nodded in response and entered the bedroom, pushing Shmi aside to do so. Shmi swallowed the nervous lump that was rising in her throat as she waited.

    Maul returned with a gleeful crooked smile. ?The boy has a midi-chlorian count over twenty thousand.? /Master it is possible that he is the Chosen One?/

    /Indeed it is, my apprentice./

    Sidious looked at Shmi. ?Who owns you and the boy?? he asked gruffly.

    ?Watto. He has a small shop not far from here,? she replied with growing unease.

    Sidious ignited his lightsaber and approached her. ?You have been very helpful.? His smile was cruel. ?However, you will be most helpful DEAD!? he finished.

    Shmi?s eyes widened as he brought the lightsaber near her body. She moved back against the wall as far as she could and opened her mouth to scream but not a sound came out as the lightsaber was plunged into her heart, killing her instantly.

    Sidious deactivated his lightsaber and started toward the door. ?Maul, stay here and watch the boy while I take care of Watto.?

    ?Yes, Master, but what should I do if the boy finds his mother dead? Should I stay out of sight??

    Sidious looked straight at his apprentice. ?Hopefully, his mother did not tell him anything about the Sith. When he wakes, act as if you were injured in trying to fight a Jedi that was coming to kill his mother and him.?

    ?Master, I?m not injured,? Maul said, belatedly realizing what a stupid thing it was to say.

    Not more than a second passed after Maul had spoken before his Master reactivated his lightsaber and gave Maul a few injuries to his leg and a gash in his side. ?Now you are,? Sidious stated coldly as he left the dwelling.

    Maul gaped as his Master left and gasped as a sharp pain coursed through his body. Not only had his Master given him outside injuries, but Sidious had also used the Force to strain Maul?s muscles in his left arm. ?I should have kept my mouth shut,? he muttered to himself. He looked around and began to make the scene more realistic f
  9. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Great job!! I'm loving this! :D I had to do a double take cuz I was like... wait haven't I read this before :)

    Rewriting of it? Coooooool! I can't wait for more! The part with them killy Shmi and Maul lying about a Jedi killing her. Poor Ani... already setting him up :(

    Excellent work! :D Love the twist of things!
  10. AnakinsHeir Jedi Knight

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    Fantastic start! :D

    Can't wait for more!
  11. ZaraValinor Force Ghost

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    OOH Jacen this is wonderful. Keep up the good work.
  12. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Kynstar: Great job!! I'm loving this! I had to do a double take cuz I was like... wait haven't I read this before Well a couple of parts were not changed that much.
    Rewriting of it? Coooooool! I can't wait for more! The part with them killy Shmi and Maul lying about a Jedi killing her. Poor Ani... already setting him up Yep. poor guy. Oh and i say rewrite because there are scenes i've rewritten and new added scenes. I also made some improvements to the plot.

    Excellent work! Love the twist of things! Thanks.

    AnakinsHeir: Fantastic start! Thanks. :)

    Can't wait for more! More on Monday. :D

    ZaraValinor: OOH Jacen this is wonderful. Keep up the good work. Thanks. :) I'm glad you could join us.
  13. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Chapter 3

    Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan and Xanatos landed their ship in the swamp and walked the rest of the way to the designated meeting place.

    General Binks arrived a couple minutes later and walked towards them. Nodding respectfully, he began to talk, ?Mesa have news for yousa Jedi. Before yousa arrival Queen Misika informin' Boss Nass dat she will be resignin' and will announce to all of Naboo of her resignation tomorrow evenin'. She wants da Gungans to be dere, if dey can, to hear her speech and to also take part in da election for a new Queen.?

    Xanatos raised an eyebrow and looked toward Qui-Gon, ?Now what do we do??

    Before Qui-Gon could reply Obi-Wan spoke to General Binks. ?Does Boss Nass know of our arrival on the planet yet??

    ?Mesa no dink so. Do yousa wish for mesa to inform hesa of yousa arrival??

    Obi-Wan took a quick glance at his Master who nodded his head.

    ?Yes, please inform him that we wish an audience with him.? Obi-Wan replied.

    General Binks gave a short nod. ?Mesa will give hesa yousa message. Bein' dere anydin' else dat mesa can do for yousa Jedi?? he asked.

    ?No, that is all. Thank you for your information,? Obi-Wan said.

    General Binks nodded once more and left.

    Obi-Wan turned to look at his Master and Xanatos, ?Master, I understand why she would step down, but how will this affect what we are starting??

    Qui-Gon gave a short sigh. ?We must trust the Force in what comes, my padawan.?

    ?We may have setbacks, however that will not stop us from reaching our goal,? Xanatos added.

    Obi-Wan nodded his head in understanding, ?I know there will be setbacks, however I have the feeling that we will have many setbacks to deal with. Master, what if the Jedi are not ready to reclaim their rightful place? What if we are doing this prematurely??

    Qui-Gon?s eyes narrowed, ?Do these questions involve what you have been dreaming of lately??

    ?They are more like visions than dreams, and right now I think that these may be important questions to think about.? Obi-Wan sighed. ?Or maybe I am simply apprehensive of what is going on. I know that I shouldn?t be worried but I feel that things are about to change drastically and not for the better,? Obi-Wan finished.

    Xanatos raised an eyebrow as he looked at Obi-Wan. ?I have had that feeling as well. However we can?t let our feelings get in the way of our decisions.?

    ?Once we complete this assignment here we will go and talk to the council about this. For now we should focus our attention on the situation at hand,? Qui-Gon assured them.

    ?Yes, Master. I will not let my feelings get in the way,? Obi-Wan responded.

    Xanatos just stood there and didn?t say a word.

    ?Now,? Qui-Gon began as he broke the stillness and the quiet that had fallen upon them. ?We should head back to the ship and wait for General Binks to contact us.?

    Obi-Wan and Xanatos nodded their heads in reply as they followed him back to the ship.

    Later that night

    ?Hello little Jedi.?

    ?Go away Torsine!?

    ?You can?t hide forever.? Darth Torsine mocked with a gleeful laugh.

    ?Go away!?

    ?Tsk, tsk my young apprentice, is that any way to treat your Master??

    ?You?re not my Master. Now go away!?

    ?I can?t do that little one.?

    ?Stop twisting my Master?s words for your own use, it?s not going to get you anywhere.?

    The voice cackled evilly as he replied. ?Oh really now? Then how would you like it if I twisted your words against your pupil??

    ?Stay away from him or you?ll regret it.?

    ?Making threats now are we Obi-Wan? I can feel the anger stirring in you now. Now let go of your anger. Only your hatred will destroy me.?

    ?No, it will only make you stronger.? Obi-Wan declared with firm resolve.

    ?Very well, I?ll just have to teach you a lesson then.?

    Agonizing pain ripped through Obi-Wan?s mind and automatically he blocked his bond with his Master. Obi-Wan fought not to scream as the pain intensified, causing him to toss around violently on his bed.

    ?Liked that?? Obi-Wan?s tormentor hissed as he stopped what
  14. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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  15. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Uh oh.. plans upon plans are falling into place now! And a few Jedi apprentice wish to join? :eek: (of course I know hehehe and can't wait to see what all has been changed :D) Great work!
  16. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Kynstar: Uh oh.. plans upon plans are falling into place now! And a few Jedi apprentice wish to join? (of course I know hehehe and can't wait to see what all has been changed) Well you already saw a few of them. :)
    Great work! Thanks. :)
  17. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Chapter 4

    Garen?s cloak swirled as he left the communications room of the ship. I am sorry Master, this is something I have to do. I must speak with Anakin again. He walked into the cockpit of the ship where Bruck was checking the controls.

    ?What is our E.T.A?? Garen asked.

    Bruck turned his head to look at Garen as he sat down in the co-pilot?s chair. ?We will arrive at Naboo in one hour.?

    Garen nodded. ?Good, we are proceeding as scheduled.?

    ?Garen, are you sure it was a good idea to not tell Bant what we?re up to??

    ?Positive. She?ll be able to handle it when we don?t come back.? Garen responded with confidence in his voice.

    Bruck looked out the veiwport, his face wearing a frown. ?What if this plan of yours fails??

    Garen shrugged his shoulders and checked the controls on his side of the console. ?It?s not like we aren?t already involved in something dangerous.?

    ?If Obi-Wan disagrees with your plan then will you not go through with it?? Bruck asked.

    Garen gave Bruck a small smile, ?Oh, he?ll agree. I know he will.?

    Bruck narrowed his eyes in suspicion as he refocused his eyes on Garen. ?There?s something else going on, isn?t there??

    Garen?s smile faded as is face became an emotionless mask. ?It?s nothing you need to concern yourself with.?

    ?On the contrary, I believe I have the right to know.? Bruck responded firmly.

    At that, Garen stood up and swiftly left the cockpit.

    Bruck watched Garen storm out of the cockpit, stunned at the way Garen had reacted and only reaffirming his belief that something more was going on.

    Bruck?s mind wandered back a few days ago to when he met Garen after the funeral.

    Garen stood alone near his former Master?s funeral pyre. His gaze was transfixed at the ashes that were the remains of his Master. Bruck heard Garen whisper a few words before he turned around.

    ?What are you doing here Bruck?? Garen questioned.

    Bruck gave Garen a hurt look. ?Why shouldn?t I be here? I am your friend and you need the support of your friends right now.?

    Garen turned away from Bruck as he spoke, ?I want to be alone right now.?

    ?To let you wallow in your guilt and pain? I don?t think so.? Bruck responded.

    ?Leave me alone, Bruck.?

    Bruck decided to go for a different tactic as he sensed that he wasn?t doing any good by being direct. ?Have you received any news from Obi-Wan??

    ?You know that we are supposed to avoid contacting Jedi teams unless the council permits it.? Garen replied as he turned around to look at Bruck.

    ?I know but he hasn?t let that stop him before.? Bruck replied.

    ?Maybe he?s busy.? Garen suggested.

    ?And all the other times he was not?? Bruck shook his head. ?Honestly Garen, you should know Obi-Wan better then all of us.?

    ?Why do you want to know anyway?? Garen asked, redirecting the subject.

    ?Kenshin?s been having bad dreams.?

    Garen raised an eyebrow. ?And you?re concerned about a bad dream??

    ?Garen, Kenshin told me what they were and you would be concerned too if you knew what the dreams were about.? Buck answered. ?Kenshin said that he saw Obi-Wan wielding a red lightsaber and wearing a black cloak.?

    Garen pressed his lips together firmly in thought. ?What was Obi-Wan doing in the dream??

    ?He was instructing a nine year old boy on how to fight with a lightsaber.? Bruck told him.

    ?What did the boy look like?? Garen asked, curiosity in his voice.

    ?The boy had sandy blonde hair and bright blue eyes.? Bruck described. ?Why do you ask??

    Garen shrugged his shoulders, his face passive. ?Just curious. Now if you?ll excuse me, I have things to do.?

    Bruck watched Garen walk away and frowned at Garen?s behavior, something was up and whatever it was, he would be ready.

    That night, Bruck was tucking Kenshin in bed when he sensed that Garen was up to something.

    ?Bruck,? Kenshin said in a low voice. ?Are you leaving too??

    Bruck ruffled Kenshin?s hair and managed a smile. ?Why do you say that??

    Kenshin?s blue eyes searched Bruck?s face as he answered. ?I saw your bag behind
  18. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    [face_thinking] hmm. There must be something wrong if i have to up my own fic.

    Edit: is it the days i post? do you think it will help if i pm you guys about the updates?
  19. Yodan Force Ghost

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    Nice story, I like where you're going with it.
  20. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Yodan:[b\] Thanks.

    Hey guys. Just some news for you. Todays post and the next post is going to be delayed. One of the reasons being is ability to get on the internet due to the fact we have to share a phone line on our trip plus i may be to busy or tired to get on or something else.
    So, i have a proposition to make. you guys up the thread while i'm gone and i will post an update or two ;) on Sunday or late saturday night, depending when we get back and are able to get into our rooms.
  21. Yodan Force Ghost

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    I can't wait until the weekend... coughbumpcough
  22. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Yodan: Here is the next post. Another one will be posted some time tonight.

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    Chapter 5

    Obi-Wan stopped outside the ship and watched his Master and Xanatos enter the ship. /I?ll be back, Master. I?m going to check something out./

    /Don?t be gone too long./ Qui-Gon responded.

    /Yes, Master./ Obi-Wan answered as he walked away from the ship. He kept on walking in the direction where he felt Garen briefly indicate where he was. A few minutes later Obi-Wan came upon a small clearing where he spotted a small ship with its ramp lowered. A figure came into view as it descended the ramp.

    ?It?s good to see you again Obi-Wan,? Garen said in greeting.

    The two friends embraced each other and patted each other on the back. ?What are you doing here, Garen?? Obi-Wan asked in a surprised tone.

    Garen?s cheerful mood faded and a solemn look crossed his face. ?Let?s get into the ship and I?ll explain,? he said as he started back to the ship.

    Obi-Wan raised his eyebrow as he followed Garen up the ramp. They went into a small room where they sat down across from each other.

    ?We are going on a dangerous mission and I would like you to join us,? Garen began. ?Master Qui-Gon and Master Xanatos can?t be told; not even the council knows of this mission.?

    Obi-Wan hid his surprise under a mask of Jedi calm. ?Your Master knows that we can?t do any missions without the approval of the council.? Obi-Wan stopped when a look of anguish crossed Garen?s face before disappearing behind a mask of serenity disappeared.

    ?My Master is one with the Force. He was killed a couple of days ago,? Garen said in a soft, anguished voice.

    Obi-Wan looked at his friend with sympathy. ?I?m sorry for your loss, Garen.?

    Garen just nodded his head as he looked down at the floor.

    ?So who is the ?we? you were talking about?? Obi-Wan asked.

    Garen looked up at Obi-Wan, grateful that his friend hadn?t pressed for details on what had happened.

    ?Me,? a new voice said.

    Obi-Wan turned his head to see Bruck. Startled, he hurriedly blocked his bond with his Master. ?Bruck?? he said in a surprised voice.

    Bruck gave a sheepish grin and sat down next to Garen. ?Who did you expect? Master Yoda?? he asked humorously.

    At that they all laughed for a moment, easing the mood in the ship.

    ?No, it?s just that I can?t see you working with Garen in the first place,? Obi-Wan remarked.

    Bruck just shook his head. ?I may not like working with Garen but there are times when there?s no option.?

    ?Ok, back to why we are here,? Garen began. The mood in the room sobered as Garen continued. ?We are going to infiltrate the Sith Temple.?

    Obi-Wan stayed silent, his face expressionless while turbulent emotions raced throughout him. He quickly got a grasp on his emotions and managed to blurt out his question. ?Why??

    Garen bit his lip before replying. ?I am going to finish what my Master and I failed to do.?

    ?And that is?? Obi-Wan pried.

    ?I need to speak to Anakin again and get him away from the clutches of the Sith,? Garen responded. ?Obi-Wan, Anakin is the Chosen One; he is the key to defeating the Sith.?

    One of the keys, Obi-Wan mentally corrected. ?If he is the Chosen One then why don?t we let the Council take care of it??

    ?Because by the time they act on it, it may be to late,? Garen replied.

    ?So what?s your plan?? Obi-Wan asked as he narrowed his eyes.

    ?We are going to turn,? Bruck responded.

    ?WHAT?!? Obi-Wan yelled in shock.

    ?It?s the only way to do this.? Garen answered calmly.

    Obi-Wan stood up and began to pace the room. ?This plan is highly irregular, dangerous, foolhardy and down right out of the question,? he snapped.

    ?We know the risks, Obi-Wan, that is why I have an idea,? Garen responded.

    Obi-Wan sat back down but the Force around him was agitated. How did he find those documents? I hid them where no one can find them.

    ?I was looking through some old, very old, documents from the very
  23. jacen200015 Force Ghost

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    Chapter 6

    The next day Obi-Wan, Garen, and Bruck set out for Otoh Gunga. They entered the swamp, put on their breathers and began their long swim underwater. In the distance the city looked like hundreds of bubbles trapped under the water all clustered together. As they neared the bubbles they began to look more translucent and more spread out and they also began to make out the shapes of Gungans walking around. Entering one of the bubbles they were met by General Binks. "Welcome, Jedi, to our home. Right dissen way."

    They nodded their heads and followed General Binks to a spherical room. Bruck shivered as the cool moist air hit his face as a bubble turbolift opened and they stepped inside. Obi-Wan on the other hand dismissed the feel of his wet clothes as a minor detail and took the time to study the colorful fish that swam by. Garen used the Force to warm himself up and engaged in small talk with the Gungan. The turbolift doors opened to reveal the meeting place and the three Jedi walked to the center of the room and bowed, as a sign of respect, to Boss Nass. General Binks went forward and introduced the Jedi before going to the side of the room.

    "General Binks has informin' mesa dat yousa Jedi wish to bargain wid ossen. However yousa will tyell mesa why wesa should bargain wid yousa." Boss Nass began.

    Obi-Wan stood in the middle of his two companions and moved forward a couple of steps. ?The Jedi are looking for allies in our campaign against the Sith; for this campaign to succeed, we will need supplies, shelter and information. We do not ask for much and we will in turn grant your people protection.

    Boss Nass gave a huge belly laugh, "Wesa no nedin' protection; wesa have a grand army to protect ossen. What yousa offer ossen bein' null and void."

    Obi-Wan remained calm as he fumbled for solid footing, ?We don?t doubt your abilities and we can offer something more useful if you wish.? That was a close call, but what if he asks for something we cannot give?

    ~*~*~

    Qui-Gon and Xanatos stood once again in the room they were in the last time and waited for Queen Amidala to begin.

    ?I have gone over what was said in the last meeting and read some of the former Queen?s notes on this matter. After many hours of contemplating with my advisors and handmaidens I have come to a decision. We will accept your terms and become your allies. I feel that you are trustworthy; don?t prove me wrong.?

    /She?s good, I didn?t even realize the ?whole? meeting yesterday was a test./ The young knight told his former Master in astonishment.

    Qui-Gon chuckled mentally. /You may not be my Padawan any more, Xanatos, but you still have a lot to learn. In a way, we never stop learning./

    Xanatos mentally sighed. /Sometimes I wonder how I ever passed the trials./

    /We all have our weaknesses Xanatos, mine would probably be my stubbornness, although I don?t think it?s necessarily a bad thing./

    /That is definitely your main weakness. But ever since this campaign began, I?ve noticed that you have tried to restrain yourself more./ Xanatos replied.

    /Well, we wouldn?t want the Council to get worked up, would we?/

    Xanatos and Qui-Gon mentally chuckled before returning to the actual discussion.

    ?We won?t, your highness. And on behalf of the Jedi, we thank you.? Qui-Gon replied.

    ?Good, now we can begin by passing along information that will be helpful to both of us.? Queen Amidala continued.

    ~*~*~

    "Da Sith no boder ossen, wesa no owe da Jedi anydin', and wesa no nein' anydin'. Why should wesa aid yousa?"

    ?We need some shield technology to help protect our bases and other areas.? Garen replied.

    /Garen!/ Obi-Wan nearly shouted across the newly formed bond. /That is giving away information to someone who is not our ally yet. We are not supposed to do that./

    /I was just trying to help./

    /Do me a favor and don?t; I?m the one who made first Jedi contact with the Gungans? in a millennia. I got this meeting started./

    /Well it doesn?t look like it?s getting anyw
  24. Yodan Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Feb 21, 2005
    star 3
    Nice chapters. Obi-Wan and his friends seem rather foolish, but padawans will be padawans.


    I'm looking forward to the next update.
  25. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 2, 2004
    star 5
    Yay I didn't miss the ceremony! *whew* Sorry for getting behind there!

    Poor Anakin... he's confused at what Padme said :( but she's right kid, it'll take a bit for you to realize... a while at that.

    Love the Darth names ;) Poor kids... turning but not yet turning. Still gonna break some hearts :( a couple of Masters to be exact.

    Great job! :D
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