Jedi do not cry. (my short JA)

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  1. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    I'm leaving now. I said good-bye to everyone. I may have won the fight with Bruck, but I
    lost the war. Masters tell me Farming is a good business. They say that to be nice. A
    transport waits outside. I slip my bag into the back as the air speeder ripps through the air to the landing pad.
    The pilot looks at a mirror in front and sees me sitting so sadly. 'Another one going alone,'
    he thinks. In his time he had taken a few Jedi Initiates to the landing pad. Many had gone
    with sad looks on their faces and one had almost cried. But not all let it show. A few kept
    the Jedi posture and acted like they knew they were probably going to work for the rest of their lives. It was a sad thing to go through, but many must suffer.
    I look out the window to see many things. I?ve lived a sheltered life, but now I go out into
    the World and am going away on my own. What was it that Garen said? ?At least you?ll
    be going on an adventure.?
    Yes, that was it. Adventure. I miss Bant and everyone already.
    We are here. I step out and take my bags. As I walk to the Ship I will be leaving on, I feel
    the urge to cry. But I must not cry.
    Jedi do not cry.
    I get on the ship and take one last look at Corusant. It will probably be my last. I feel tears in my eyes but I blink them away.
    Jedi do not cry.
  2. Miana Kenobi Admin Emeritus

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    MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  3. Neon Star Jedi Grand Master

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    That is so sad. But very well written.
  4. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    Uhhh, that was kinda the end but I can make it into, maybe one or two more posts.
  5. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    Up! Next post will be in Qui's POV.
  6. JediCandy Jedi Master

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    More! <<and more tissues, please. sniff>>
  7. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Awwww. So sad Mariah. It's a good thing we all know that this trip is the start of something great.
  8. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Ohh...poor Obi. It's okay to cry...really, even if you are a Jedi. :(
    Can't wait for more!!!
  9. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    Thanks guys. Post soon I promise!
  10. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    ?I did the right thing,? I try to convince myself. ?The boy was to fierce!? I can?t forget that
    haunting look the boy gave me before I left. He looked so alone and sad. I shake my head.
    ?No,? I think firmly. ?I am not going to go through this again!? I pull out my data pad and
    skim through Bandomeer?s history.
    As I read, I feel eyes boring through me. I look up to see the reflected eyes of the pilot.
    ?Yes?? I ask.
    ?N-nothing.? He looks away shamefully.
    I go back to reading.
    After a few minutes of silence, the pilot looks up again.
    ?I...I saw a boy little while before I picked you up, Jedi, sir,? he said shyly.
    I look up. I?m getting annoyed. ?Yes??
    ?He...he was from the Temple...?
    I wait for him to continue, getting a little interested.
    ?He looked so sad, Jedi, sir.? He looked up over a air speeder ahead.
    ?What did he look like?? I ask, silently scowling myself for thinking of the boy.
    The pilot looked thoughtful. ?Brown hair, blue eyes, pretty tall for his age. He wore a tan
    tunic, just like yours.?
    ?Obi-Wan Kenobi,? I think to myself. Then I realize I?m taking pity for him and change.
    ?Sad. Of course he?d feel sad. He wanted to be a Jedi badly...too badly.?
    I get on board after we arrive and after a few moments, someone comes to my door,
    knocking rapidly.
    I answer to find a Human woman pleading me to come see a patient in the Med Ward.
    I go with her to find, who else but, Obi-Wan Kenobi.
    I feel sick as I look at the feverish boy. He looks so small and pale.
    I tell the woman I will take care of him for her.
    ?I?m not a doctor. I just know the kid,? she says calmly.
    I sit down and set for work.
  11. Anika Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Aww... so sad. Don't tell me you're writing tragedy! Oh, well.

    ~Anika Skywalker
  12. Mistress_Renata Manager Emeritus

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    Oh, it's something of a relief! I thought at first it was an AU and he was really leaving the Temple for good; I didn't realize he was off to Bandomeer! We know that it ends happily (sort of...)


    --Renata

    (PS, JKMariah, I finally posted my story! _Of Bonds & Beauty_, where OW & QJ take on the cutthroat world of...beauty pageants! Keep an eye out!)
  13. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    LOL! Beauty pa-pa! *laughs and can't finish* I'll have to check it out!
  14. JediRogue9 Jedi Master

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    Awww this is so sad. I juss started reading The Rising Force (JA #1) So I hope you don't give anything away...
  15. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    Um, the next post was going to be about the end. Just don't read this until you've finished! (P.S. I like #2 better!)
  16. padawan3 Jedi Master

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    This is so sad so far.
  17. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    No spoilers! Well, you might be confused though.

    As I sit on my bed, I think of home. The Temple. Si Treemba says we?re leaving soon. I
    silently wish it was going the other way, back to Corusant.
    I?ve leard to except that fact I?m going to be a Farmer. I don?t want to do it, but I
    shouldn?t hate doing it. I?d be helping others eat. Plus I?ll be working with Si.
    I sit on my bed and look out my window to see the stars and moons outside. Corusant
    only had two moons, this place has a few.
    I wish I could tell Bant about what happend. She?d love to hear. And Garen would
    probably say, ?I wish I was with you!?
    I laugh as I think of that. No. No Jedi Wants to be in my place. But I must learn to except
    this.
    I truly respect Qui-Gon Jinn. He?s a brave, calm man. Better than I?ll ever be.
    The weird thing is last night, I had a dream. In my dream I saw Qui-gon and I. I stood
    across from him and gave him my Lightsaber. I can?t understand it. Maybe I should tell
    Qui-Gon about it. He?d know.
    I hear foot steps down the hall. It?s Qui-Gon. We talk for a while and then we sit in a
    comfortable silence. I sit back and look out my window again. I feel the ship lift off.
    Qui-Gon leaves to check on the Med Ward and see who the others are.
    I turn away when he leaves.
    Although I have began to ?embrace? my fate, as Adi Gallia would say, I still sometimes
    feel the urge to cry. But I won?t.
    Jedi do not cry.

    The End.
  18. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    That was sad! :( How about a fic with Obi and Qui-Gons thoughts and events between scenes of the other JA books, or later in JA#1!!! PLEASE?!?!
  19. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    *grin* I was thinking of doing #5 but I didn't like that book so much...I WILL think about it!
  20. JediCandy Jedi Master

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    Very well then. What you do is...rewrite JA #5 the way it should have been done......to Hades with Melida/Daan, let Obi have the triumph of returning to Coruscant a Padawan! (Let Bruck chew on that and swallow!!!!)

  21. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

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    I would love to see your take on #5. Even if you just filled in the missing scenes and gave us more emotion than was shown in the book. I think that is what I liked the best about what you have written so far, you just made what was IMHO already pretty darn good that much better!
  22. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    LOL! And Kelly, what was the IHMO(sp) thing??? #5...

    "Master are we going to Meilda/Daan?"
    "...Nah! We're going on vactaion instead!"
  23. padawan3 Jedi Master

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  24. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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    Top again! What one should I do next? READERS POLL!!!!!!!

    JA #2
    JA #3
    JA #4...Nah!
    JA #5
    JA #6
    JA #7
    JA #8 (I like that one)
    Or JA #9
    Hey! I could even make up my own JA #13 'cause no one knows what it's about yet!
  25. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

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    #6 and #7 are my personal favorites!
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