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Jedi do not cry. (my short JA)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by Jedi_KnightMariah, Sep 23, 2000.

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  1. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    *kicks self* I'm a lazy *kicks self* good for nothing *yet again kicks self* writer!!!!!
     
  2. KADI-WAN_KENOBI

    KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Sorry. That was REALLY GOOD and I look forward to your next one.
     
  3. padawan3

    padawan3 Jedi Master star 4

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    I like stories being told from the first point of veiw.
     
  4. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    *sigh* I read 10. Not as good but better than 9. I'll TRY to post some soon! Sorry!
     
  5. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

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    sigh, I know soon is relitive but.....<whine>... this has fallen to page 10!

    Please update soon.

    ;~(
     
  6. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Argh! My story is on my other comp which is not plugged in right now! Man, do I have bad luck!
     
  7. padawan3

    padawan3 Jedi Master star 4

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    I hope your bad luck turns to good luck soon.
     
  8. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I'm finally posting! Ha! You didn't think I would do it, did you?!


    As I walk ahead in the market place, I keep a steady pace. I don?t want to be late for our
    transport. I look for Obi-Wan Kenobi out of the corner of my eye. Though I don?t admit
    it, I am already worried about the boy.
    The boy was trying his best to catch up. This makes me smile.
    I shake away the doubts of losing Obi-Wan to the crowd and look for the docking bay of
    Bendomeer.
    Suddenly, something struck me. It was the Obi-Wan?s Birthday! I silently curse at myself
    for forgeting.
    I again look back and I sigh in relief. Obi-Wan is still there.
    We haven?t been on their first mission and I am already worried about him!
    I see the docking area ahead. When we arrived, I make Obi-Wan do a Jedi exercise.
    The boy is distracted.
    ?Of course, Jinn! Did you think HE?D forget about his own Birthday?!? I ask myself.
    ?Are you distracted by something, Obi-Wan?? I ask.
    ?My first official mission, Master,? Obi-Wan says. ?I want to do well.?
    ?You will do what you do,? I respond neutarlly, seeing right through him.
    Obi-Wan dosen?t say anything for a moment.
    ?Perhaps I?m distracted by something more personal, Master,? Obi-Wan says finally.
    I feel sick. Here it comes....
    ?Ah. A birthday perhaps??
    A grin lights up Obi-Wan?s young face as he nods.
    I can only frown. ?You would be expecting your gift, then.?
    I pull out something that I have had for many, many years now. Something I have always
    cared for: A rock.
    Obi-Wan stares at it for a moment, a thoughtful frown taking away the grin that appeared
    only moments ago.
    I can?t help but feel a little bad, after all, I would be a little concerned if my Master gave
    me a rock.
    ?I found it years ago,? I explain, putting the rock in his hand. ?When I was no older than
    you are now.?
    Obi-Wan blinked at it.
    ?I found it at the River of Light on my home planet,? I continue.
    There came no reply.
    After a few minutes I was wondering if Obi-Wan was going to contact the Council and tell
    them that I am crazy. I wouldn?t blame him if he did.
    He looked up and met my gaze. ?Thank you, Master. I will treasure it.?
    I blinked at him, not showing my surprise. At least he was polite about it.
     
  9. padawan3

    padawan3 Jedi Master star 4

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    That makes sense. I always figured Qui-gon forgot Obi's birthday. I mean who in their right mind would give a kid a rock. No matter how much it meant to him, he was still giving a rock to his padawan.
     
  10. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Up! I posted!
     
  11. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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  12. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Up again! I POSTED!!!!!!!!
     
  13. KADI-WAN_KENOBI

    KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Padawan star 4

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    That was so good.

    Keep it up!
     
  14. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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  16. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I liked it, I like to see a little more depth added to the JA books. I would love to see each and every one rewritten for the adult reader!
     
  17. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Knight Mariah, will you up the post with more story if I stop lurking and tell you how wonderful I thought it was? ...Maybe? ...What if I say I like your storytelling style and the dimention you are adding to the story? ...and that I hope you post again really really soon?

    Please post again, this time right away... (Since your soons are much to long for my liking) <g>

    ;~)
     
  18. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks guys! You don't understand about me; I write on somethings alot and on some it takes me forever to think of something to write. I think the next part will be about when Obi-Wan was missing and Qui-Gon was worried. I thought more should have been added to that. Write more soon! (hopefully)
     
  19. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

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    wow she posted... okay it wasn't story but.... Oh, and here I thought you were just conspireing to help me with a paitence exersise. <vwg> weeeeeeel I guess I'll just have to wait.... have you been inspired yet?

    ;~)
     
  20. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Uhhh. *nervously* I don't really have time to write plus working on different stories...Sorry again, guys!
     
  21. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Different Stories?! hmmm, I will have to go hunting after class today....

    ;~)
     
  22. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    A post! I know it's hort but it's the best I can think of. Sorry if I let you down.


    I toss and turn tonight. No sleep will come. My mind rests on Obi-Wan. My Obi-Wan. I
    can only feel guilt ripping at me, because I lost him and it?s my fault. My fault. The words
    repeat in my head over and over.
    Because of me he lost his memory. I should have been with him! Why didn?t I go with him
    instead of Guerra?!
    I get up and find a empty room in this small house that the Derida?s were staying in. I sit
    down in a chair, lost in thoughts of somehow saving Obi-Wan and reversing the memory
    wipe.
    Every time I think of Obi-Wan without his memory, I shudder. I wonder what he?s
    thinking right now. What he?s doing, where he is, if he?s alright. He sigh and drop my face
    in my hands. It was supposed to be a simple mission......


    Please don't bug me alot if you do like it. :) I have a life too, ya know! Hehehe! ;)
     
  23. MaraJadee

    MaraJadee Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Good job!! I luv ur story Mariah! ~:)
     
  24. Jedi_KnightMariah

    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks Mara! I luv ur story too!
     
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    Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Padawan star 4

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