Jeedia are Redemption planning thread.co-written with Amithyst_Blade

Well we will be writing a NJO story. It's about a shamed one who is captured by Kyp Durron during an attack on a yuuzhan vong base. But there is more to her then just being a prisoner.

Meanwhile Jaina seeks to convince the shamed one that infidels are not evil.

While all of this is happening Jacen Solo is finding more and more things about his families past.

Question is will the shamed one mean the end of the Solo/Skywalker family.

This thread is mostly for organizational purposes, but you can expect a sneak peak at parts of posts.

 

what secrets will Jacen learn? that he's a prince?

 

Not saying a word.nop..nu uh.

plus my co-writer and I aren't done with the list of suprises. And can't promise this will be on there.

Did you see the new thread on Rebecca191?

Don't you dare do that to me!

ignites lightsaber and goes into offensive stance or else!

 

me? don't hert me, its just some fun and games... don't make me hurt you!
*Takes out bullwhip and makes a crack[joke and bullwhip]*

 

Is that a threat or a peace treaty?

Fine I'll give you a spoiler Kyp is going to play a major role.

 

hard to say...
Kyp'll play a big role? What'll happen, whats the Shamed one's name? please tell me, I love the Yuuzhan Vong...

 

I don't know if my co-writer waants me to release that. But if you'll wait for a few hours I 'll consult with her if I can contact her. IF not then expect it to be released along with a scene in about an hour.

Thats when I am gonna send off the next part for her approval.

 

Upping this for you to find Sey!

Feel free to post.

 

Hiya Mayo... ummm, it's Amithyst_Blade now k? Sorry for the name change. Anyways you knew that. So do I just post up the next part of the story on? I'm not going to till you can tell me. Posting is a bit new to me. So I'm a newbie in this section of the universe. Anyways, chatters with me!

I sent the next part of the JAR fiction to you through the FanForce.net private message. I hope you got it. I'm waiting for a response.

P.S. whose this commando guy? you're boyfriend or something?

 

Hmmmm...

 

Ummmm I wouldn't exactly say boyfriend. It's sorta ummmmmmmm. Yeah........

According to him I'm his net girl. So to answer your question yes kinda.

What was the hmmmmm about Qwi? j/k

 

i found it mayo!!!
all the way on page 12!!

 

I'm here!

 

so what do we do now...

 

ok we are going to change some of the plot. *this messege is to our fantastic readers*

 

we start discussing plot ideas

 

wait messa confused
ok let me get this straight before we go on... could u send me what we have together so far???

 

ok plot ideas are... what

 

she is shamed
chosen by Nom Anor
she is captured by Kyp
they talk
Jaina returns to the jedi
Jaina meets Nasrya
things happen that I won't mention here because that would let the cat out of the bag

 

oh ok
i'm sending u my collaberation of what parts you have sent and i have written and i put it together in a order that makes sense hope you like.

 

here it is. tell me what you think

Nasrya was awoken by a hard kick to the ribs. She rolled over on her sleeping pallet to see a warrior named Krenj Lah standing over her. "You have been summoned the Executor Nom Anor," he said.

Nasrya nodded.

"Hurry Shamed One," Krenj snarled.

"I am," Nasrya said as she got to her feet.

Krenj hit her across the face. "Do not dare to insult me beast!" he roared.

"I don't!" Nasrya answered in protest. "Why do you treat me so?"

"You are shamed, nothing more then filth. Has I been another warrior, I would have killed you the first moment you insulted me. But that would be gracing you." Suddenly he bent down and kissed her. "Remember, if death does not come for you neither will redemption".

"Stop please," Nasrya pleaded. "I am not yet an adult. Or worthy. Until I am either I will not do anything of this sort until either has occurred."

Krenj grabbed her arm and pushed her out of the room and down the hall. "Now I must cleanse myself because I can't trust you to obey me," he said a hint of disgust in his voice.

When they reached Nom Anor?s chambers Krenj shoved her in. "The Shamed One," he said as he shoved Nasrya to the floor. He then crossed his arms in salute and left.

Nasrya was recovering from being thrown to the floor. Nom Anor strode forward. "I have heard of your wit," he said after studying her for a moment. "Of course as you know since you are nearing the age of assignment and your parents are with the Gods there is no one to vouch for you. There for the Warmaster Tsavong Lah has given me command over that."

"Yes executor." Nasrya said quietly.

"I have decided that I will keep you. Maybe some day you will be redeemed and be of more use than of what you are now," he said clasping his hands behind his back and striding away.

Nasrya who was still huddle on the floor felt her eyes widen. Maybe this will keep Krenj away from me, she thought.

Suddenly Nom Anor spun around and walked toward her. When he was right in front of her he squatted down and took her chin in his hand. He gazed into her eyes for a moment. He then nodded and took hold and pulled her to her feet. His eyes traveled up and down her body. "You need food," he noted. "We will handle that".

It then hit Nasrya full force. She had gone from abused and unwanted to a slave and abused. But maybe things would be better this way.

 

Just upping this so that you can find it Sey.

Any comments anyone?

 

Sey, we are going to need to update some of our already written posts, so that they fit somewhat into the real timeline now.