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Beyond - Legends 'Kiss and Tell' (L/M)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by ginchy, Feb 26, 2014.

  1. ginchy

    ginchy Jedi Master star 4

    May 25, 2005
    Title: Kiss and Tell
    Author: ginchy
    Disclaimer: I don't own Star Wars. I own a lot of Star Wars stuff, though, so I've chipped in a bit. ;)
    Notes: This isn't exactly for the new SJRS truncation challenge. But while I was looking around to find a fic to change, I came across this one. I think it was for either an SJRS or MMM 'All Dialogue' challenge. But there were always a few lines that bugged me as being OOC so I have fixed them here and hope it's a bit more IC (even talking about kisses). The ending remains the same, however, cause... [face_love] Thanks to taramidala for giving this a fresh look-over for me!!


    “Tell me about your first kiss, Skywalker.”


    “You heard me.”

    “You want me to tell you about my first kiss.”

    “I believe that’s what I said, yes.”

    “But why?”

    “Why not?“

    “I don’t know. I just never…pictured talking to you about something like that.”

    “Too busy picturing other things, Farmboy?”

    “Mara! No, I just…That’s not what I meant.”

    “Mm-hm. Now quit stalling. Tell me about your first kiss.”

    “Why do you want to hear about that? I don’t want to hear about you kissing other men.”

    “I don’t want to hear about you kissing other men, either. Your first kiss wasn't--”


    “Kidding, Skywalker, kidding. I’ll even go easy on you and not make a joke about you having kissed your sister.”


    “Oh, that’s right. I forgot. She kissed you. At least that wasn't your first kiss.”

    “Ha. ...or my last.”

    “Very true. Anyway, I couldn't tell you about my first kiss. I don’t remember it.”

    “Don’t remember?”

    “No. I think it might have been on an…assignment, but it obviously wasn’t anything worth remembering.”

    “Really? Well, have you had any memorable kisses lately?”

    “My lips are sealed.”

    “Maybe I can do something about that.”

    “Skywalker! Wipe that grin off your face. And you’re still stalling. Was your first kiss so amazing that you can’t possibly put it into words?”

    “…something like that, yeah.”



    “I’m impressed.”

    “So was she.”


    “Thanks. She thought I was cute, too.”

    “Ha. Okay, enough stalling. On with the story.”

    “Mara…Fine. Uh…Well, I already told you it was pretty amazing.”

    “Amazing. She must have had really soft lips.”

    “Actually, her lips were sort of chapped…at first.”

    “I guess Tatooine isn't exactly conducive to kissable lips.”

    “Not really. Too dry. But even still, she looked beautiful, standing in front of me, her hair hanging down over her shoulders and glinting in the light.”

    “Was she gazing at you adoringly?“

    “There might have been a hint of adoration in her gaze.”

    “ ‘Might have been’. I like this girl. So what happened? You leaned in and pecked her lips…”

    “Peck? Maybe I need to brush up on my technique.”

    “You have technique?”

    “Haven’t heard you complain, Jade.”

    “...You’re still stalling. I’ll set the scene. You’re on a sand dune and …Farmgirl... is about to get her peck--”

    Kiss…Yes. So she’s standing in front of me, and she’s beautiful. To look at her almost hurts me physically, because I want her so badly. It’s almost as if we’re pulled by fate. She leans in to me and meets me half-way, just as eager for the kiss as I am.”

    “I’ll bet.”

    “The first touch of our lips was electric…”

    “Maybe I don’t want to hear about this, after all--”

    “…her lips, even chapped, were soft against mine, softening as our kiss became deeper.”

    “Wait. What happened to the peck?”

    “I couldn't believe that she was letting me kiss her like that, and she seemed willing to let me take it even further. I wrapped my right hand into her hair and cupped the back of her neck…”

    “I've heard enough.”

    “…and pulled her against me. She trembled in my arms, the cool evening air making her shiver…”

    “I really don’t want to know--”

    “…as it blew against her wet hair and skin.”



    “‘Wet hair and skin’? You cheat!”


    “That wasn't your first kiss! That was our first kiss.”

    “Maybe I only ever remember kissing you.”


    “Once I touched your lips, I forgot any other woman. And since you've forgotten your first kiss…”

    “Maybe your lips induce memory loss?”

    “I don’t know. Want to check and see?”

    “...Mmmmm…Just to clear things up, I wasn't trembling from the cold.”


    “When we kissed that first time. It wasn't the cold that made me tremble.”

    “Is that something you just remembered, Mara?”

    “No, that’s something I never want to forget.”
  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 7

    Aug 31, 2004
    LOL and SQUEEEEE! SQUEE! Sweetness & awwness all wrapped up in a great dialogue. He's forgotten every woman but Mara. Good thing, because none of them count [face_dancing] [face_laugh]
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  3. Jedi_Lover

    Jedi_Lover Force Ghost star 5

    Nov 1, 2004
    Awesomely sweet! Very nice dialog.
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  4. taramidala

    taramidala Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Jun 18, 1999
    I had no idea you were posting it so soon! :-D

    But anyway, it's adorable, and Luke is such a sap. You're welcome, my dear, as always. :)

    Sent from my SCH-I415 using Tapatalk
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  5. Demendora

    Demendora Jedi Knight star 2

    Apr 9, 2010
    Yeahhhhh! You posted it! [face_love]@};-@};-@};-:D
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  6. Tarsier

    Tarsier Jedi Master star 4

    Jul 31, 2005
    That was really, really cute :)
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  7. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Jedi Grand Master star 6

    Aug 21, 2006
    A sweet piece with the great banter between Luke and Mara
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  8. Jade_Pilot

    Jade_Pilot Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 10, 2005
    [face_love] LOOOOOOOVE IT!!!! SOOOOO MUCH!!!! [face_love]
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  9. Padawan Fangirl

    Padawan Fangirl Jedi Padawan star 3

    Nov 28, 2013
    Ahhh that was so sweet! Great job! <3 :D

    Sent from my stupid little astro droid using TapaTalk 2.
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  10. Carlos Danger

    Carlos Danger Jedi Knight star 2

    Jul 25, 2013
    I think it is IC. I want to hear the backstory to that first kiss. :D
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  11. divapilot

    divapilot Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Nov 30, 2005
    Adorable! And snarky. Just how I like it. :)
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  12. ethereallights

    ethereallights Jedi Knight

    Aug 5, 2009
    Love this! I think it's totally in character: Luke is a smart man, no need to bring up other women when he has Mara. [face_love]
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  13. Briannakin

    Briannakin Grand Moff Darth Fanfic & Costuming/Props Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

    Feb 25, 2010
    AWWWW! That was just so gosh darn CUUUUUUTTTTTEEEEE!
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  14. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Mar 5, 2004
    You should've told me you posted this. It would've made me feel much better while I was sick. [face_love]@};-
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  15. serendipityaey

    serendipityaey Jedi Master star 4

    Jan 24, 2004
    That was really So SO SOOOO good. I absolutely loved it. The banter was adorable and cute and funny, and the kiss was perfect. I loved how romantic he was, and cheeky too. It's was just beautiful and sexy and lovely :D Loved that she wasn't trembling from the cold, love the way he teases her! What a treat! [:D]
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  16. ginchy

    ginchy Jedi Master star 4

    May 25, 2005
    Nyota's Heart: Thank you, gal. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I always liked it, too, but I like it even better now that I changed it up a bit!

    Jedi_Lover: Thanks, lady!!!

    taramidala: He’s a sap in luuuurve. [face_love] Thanks, girl!!

    Demendora: Thanks for giving me the impetus to look again at all my old fics!! [:D] And thanks! I’m so glad you wanted to read it again!

    Tarsier: Thank you!! I can’t help it where those two are concerned. ;)

    earlybird-obi-wan: Thanks!! I love banter.

    Jade_Pilot: Thank you, lady!!! [face_love]

    Padawan Fangirl: Thanks so much!!

    Carlos Danger: Thanks!! You know, I wouldn’t mind knowing that myself. LOL

    divapilot: This version definitely has more snark. I like it better myself. Thanks!!

    ethereallights: Thank you!! You’re right—he’s no fool!

    Briannakin: Thank you. Cute is my specialty. ;)

    JediMara77: Aww, I hope you’re feeling better!! Thanks, gal! Since it was a repost, I wasn’t sure if you had already read the first!!

    serendipityaey: Thank so much!! You got out of it all that I wanted the readers to. I just love the idea of small, intimate, teasing moments like this for L/M. [face_love]
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  17. serendipityaey

    serendipityaey Jedi Master star 4

    Jan 24, 2004
    Those are my favorite types of moments! The small sweet ones. Life is *rough* but it gives us that Star Wars hope to see the little important moments too :)
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  18. Gemma

    Gemma Jedi Master star 4

    Dec 25, 2013
    Awwww -- this is so sweet and loving.
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  19. mayo_durron_666

    mayo_durron_666 Jedi Master star 1

    Nov 26, 2005
    Omg one of the sweetest things I've read in ages![face_love]
  20. JadeLotus

    JadeLotus Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2005
    Oh, this is so sweet! Love all the dialogue, especially Luke's.

    “I’m impressed.”

    “So was she.”


    “Thanks. She thought I was cute, too.”

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