Saga Knight Of Darkness-(V/P romance with a twist)AU(10/01) Rewrote the mush of the last post.

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  1. Mystralgurl Jedi Padawan

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    *snicker*

    The little boy could definitely teach Anakin something about charm. But I love how Anakin was defending himself against an eight-year-old.

    ~MG~
  2. Darth_Karanaus Jedi Youngling

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    im back finally my pc has been fixed and my coonections stable.AAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWW looks like theres still no post please hurry up sabrelight with the next post
  3. michaellover Jedi Youngling

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    Ha! Ani better keep a close eye on his wife, less she gets wisked away by other more charming

    guy!!
  4. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Mystralgurl:The little boy could definitely teach Anakin something about charm.

    He's learning, along with the raging hormones and the skin suit padme's wearing-his approach to enticing Padme into his trap is getting more sublte. As you will see in the next post.

    Darth karanaus: Glad that your back. I'm working on the next post-had guests for the past two days.

    michealloever:Ani better keep a close eye on his wife, less she gets wisked away by other more charming

    Yep! If 'other more charming guy' can get past possesive Vader's hunting knife!
  5. geno Jedi Knight

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    took me about 3 days to read all the way through this long and very well written story. Look forward to more
  6. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Thanks, geno. This is a long novel fiction and each posts is pretty long, hence takes me some time to write it. Hang on, more coming soon.

  7. WANNA-BE-JEDI-KNIGHT Jedi Knight

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    I liked the banter between Anakin and Padme. Could there be more mush coming?
  8. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Wanna-be-jedi: mush coming in the post after the one I'm working on. Actually the post became long and I have decided to make two posts out of it.
  9. Kitten Jedi Youngling

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    LOL! Does Vader realize how ridiculous he sounds arguing with an eight year old child?[face_laugh]
  10. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Kitten: Vader will not take any competition when it comes to Padme-not even from an eight years old. Besides, he more than anyone realises how dangerous this childhood infatuations can become. But at least Padme had a good laugh and the little mitt did manage break a little more of that thick ice thats constantly coming between them.
  11. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Have another post. I posted even though I don't feel the post is right yet, but I lost patience. Also I've changed the tense so many times there are bound to be inconsistencies which I regret very much but I will rewrite this post later-I might even change it all back to the present tense. All I want to do right now is the next post where Vader and Padme become a lot closer and the story will begin to really move. If you guys have grammer help concerning this post feel free to share it.

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    Vader rose slowly from the soft cushions his legs were stiff from sitting crossed legged for over an hour. He had finally convinced the council of elders for a scout escort to the hunting grounds but it hadn?t been easy and the terms weren?t what he?d had in mind.

    Having been invited to the council of elders, he and Padmé had taken their seats on one of the cushions that had been spread out in a wide rectangular shape outlining the numerous rugs that had been spread in the middle. They were offered the customary cup of steaming chai after which he had made his request to the council which had been rejected-unanimously-by all members. The bluntness of their decision had naturally stunned him until he had learnt of their reasons.

    As his luck would have it, his precious vacation cum hinting trip had landed him right in the middle of a major tribal crisis. Major in the sense that the Tauregs hadn?t faced something like this for centuries. A crisis of this proportion had visited them so far back in time that the tribals had assumed it to be part of a legend that the story tellers retained in their oral lore.

    For generations Alori children had been mesmerized and haunted by the tales of a monstrous demon creature, the Adizumi; in guise of a giant targu, vicious and cunning as only demons could be, that had, supposedly, terrorized their ancestors; killing and destroying man and animal alike in reprisal for the crimes of a few desperate souls. If not for the courage and sacrifice of one brave, selfless warrior, Tamijo the valiant, one of their greatest leaders, the Alori might have been wiped out altogether.

    According to the lore, thousands of the best Taureg warriors had lost their lives in the quest to down this creature. But it was too strong, too fast and too clever for ordinary human beings to tackle. The Adizumi with the swipe of one giant paw could swat a dozen armed warriors like so many insects. Spears, axes, iron shots, cannon balls and many other weapons of the day had done nothing more than merely agitate the creature and make it more violent.


    But Tamijo had used not only his inexhaustible courage and great wit to outmaneuver this hulking, indestructible mountain of flesh but it was also said that he had a way with animals and that he could influence them.

    After a month of trying and failing to kill the creature by conventional means Tamijo had finally come up with an ingenious but fatal plan. He had the top of a deep and narrow chasm camouflaged with branches and piles of snow. All that was left was to lure the demon to this trap. Here again the creature proved his intelligence was not that of a mere animal. The warriors had tried taunting and shouting to lure it to the trap, they tried baiting it with pieces of fresh meat and even live cattle but Adizumi would not fall for it.

    Tamijo was then said to have used his special powers to lure the animal to the trap. In a mighty crash the creature had gone down to its doom, five hundred feet below. Sadly, the brave Tamijo too had been swept along by the avalanche that followed. The tribes had grieved for the great warrior who had freed them from the terror of the seemingly invincible demon once and for all.

    Until now. There was no doubt amongst the Tauregs now that, indeed, the demon Adizumi had risen again-to avenge the excesses of man, to punish him for his transgressions. Now they knew that the great monster that had rampaged the wastelands millennia before was not just part of a legend, the great white beast
  12. WANNA-BE-JEDI-KNIGHT Jedi Knight

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    Anakin seems so confident -- I hope he can do it.
  13. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Wanna-be jedi: Vader has plan up his sleeve. Padme doesn't know about it but you can be sure she will not approve of his tactics.
  14. geno Jedi Knight

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    very interesting story and look forward to more

    Please add me to your pm list if you have one
  15. Onimi-fav Jedi Youngling

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    Great Post. hes Lord Vader he can destroy anything, well almost anything. lol great update once again :)
  16. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Geno: Thanks. If you give feedback you will be automatically added to the PM list.

    Omini_fav:

    Lord Vader he can destroy anything

    Yes! He is after all the Dark Lord of destruction, but Padme thinks he is over confident.
  17. sabrelight Jedi Master

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  18. BattousaiCV Jedi Youngling

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    I'm interested to see if this is going to be a struggle for Vader or pure ownage. [face_skull]
  19. naadi Jedi Youngling

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    I'm sure vader can kill it,I don't think padmes too pleased with his decision!!
  20. Darth_Karanaus Jedi Youngling

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    Sorry Missed the post, darned school got on the way. Vader can probably kill the monster however i feel he will not hold back once he tracks it down.
  21. DountCooku Jedi Youngling

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    Looking forward to the inevitable showdown with the creature, whether it turns out to be a close fight or a mismatch (either way).
  22. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Am working on the next post-most of it is done, as I originally intended to make a single post but it became long so I made it into to parts. Just need to edit some needless stuff.

    I can't seem to decide padme/Vader approach to becoming a bit soft towards each other (God only knows how many times I rewritten that) but I'm getting somewhere.

    Thanks guys for the feedback, will drive me on to make the next post.
  23. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Sorry I didn't get time to write during the weekend and since. Every time I sit to write something fromt he blue pops up.
  24. sabrelight Jedi Master

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    Rewrote the whole post-breaking my own rule that I will not make any changed to my fic once I've posted it but I just couldn't get to the next post without amending thsi post. I am sorry to say that it has become even longer so I divided it into two.

    POST NO# 76

    They rode in a pack, skimming low over the white landscape heading to the place where the Taureg?s had last confronted the creature. Kaziik was leading the team, with six other warriors riding pinion on three airbikes. At the last minute Mai Alori had insisted that the clan medic, a man named Dilon Ckai- a foreigner from Nain Hooth- accompany them.

    The Cresenu Plateau was a large flat snow field that lay atop the Cresenu shelf; walled in by three great mountain chains on its eastern, northern and western sides. The snow field stretched for as far as the eyes could see, merging in the distance into the blank whiteness of the mountains. The wall that defined the eastern limits of the plateau ran along their path keeping to their left all the time. The center of the plateau was flat featureless except for miles and miles of rolling snow drifts and occasional low mounds or knolls along with a insignificant number of dry scraggy trees. The landscape reminded Vader of Tatooine?s unending sandy wastes, only here the endless wastes were white instead of golden brown.



    Vader risked a glance at Padmé sitting behind him, she was withdrawn and reticent. And yes they were NOT talking, again.

    He had managed to piss her off once more. As of late, he thought, she had become rather sulky. It didn?t take much to get her to get into that mood; all he had done was suggest she stay with Kaziik?s wife, Nahlan because he thought this expedition might become dangerous and she?d taken offence and they?d ended up arguing again and now she was clammed up like a cold oyster refusing to open up even when he took back his suggestion and brought her along. He just couldn?t understand her.


    He sighed. He had to work to get her to make up. He had plans for when they got back to the villa; plans that depended very, very heavily on Padmé?s co-operation. He had convinced himself that Padmé was as ready as she ever would be to finally consume their marriage and now the pendulum had swung again and she was sour as ever. ?Back to square one!? He sighed.

    After about an hour of coasting at a leisurely pace
    They reached a cone shaped knoll near a large frozen pond. They stopped near the eastern edge of the pond which was the only level spot in the vicinity


    There was no wind but Padmé felt the chill bite at her skin the minute she removed her safety helmet. The others all dismounted from their vehicles and clustered around their leader.

    ?Now people!? Kaziik said, ?This is where the creature attacked Yir waan?s party, so be on the look. Keep your comms synchronized and DO NOT stray too far from each other. All members should keep the others within visual range at all time. The chance of actually seeing the creature is quite dim since we know that it never ventures out of its hiding place except in low visibility situations. This creature is extremely clever and might I remind you, dangerous. If by any chance we should find it ,say, for instance it is out prowling for food. We have strict orders not to provoke it in any way-all we are here for is to observe the creature and to figure out a way to capture or destroy it. Hurnaan, you keep your imager ready and get some decent images and then we all leave as soon as possible.

    ?The hunting party was attacked several days ago, what makes you so sure he may still be around in the vicinity?? It was Vader.

    ?I?m not really sure; I?m just assuming that since the Adizumi looks like a targu, that some of its dispositions too might be that of an ordinary targu. You see a Targu doesn?t really know when to stop eating. Food is scarce in this environment and big games is a luxury so when they do find it, targus just keep on eating till they cannot move. When that happens it is impossible for them to get as far as their dens so
  25. Amidala66 Jedi Padawan

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