Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Jedi_Liz, Jun 30, 2006.
thanks for the bump jasa.
I realize I hoped to post the next chapter at the end of September, but massive writers block has hit me. And I'm trying to write other stories as well. I'll do my best to see what I can come up with for chapter 6. Due to changes made in this rewrite, chapter 6 will be written differently than the previous version. This means its a little more difficult for me. If I'm lucky I may be able to post the next chapter by November 1st or 2nd. Otherwise, I'll post before the end of the year.
Also, those on my updates PM list, please try to open the PMs ASAP so it can be marked "Read". Its okay if you don't read the actual PM, but if I have so many unread SENT PMs, it renders my PM sending abilities useless.
okay, after a long bout of writers block, I finally came up with something. BIG HUGS to Jedi_Trace for her beta on this!
Chapter 6 - Confusion
Meanwhile, back at the Solo apartment, the atmosphere was unusually quiet. The twins were down for their afternoon naps and the calm was a welcome change from the hectic schedule that Han and Leia normally kept.
In their bedroom, Han leaned down and brushed Leia?s cheek with a kiss and her eyes fluttered open.
?Sweetheart, I?m going to run an errand. I?ll be back in an hour or so.?
Han went to exit the room quietly when Leia propped herself up on her elbow
and whispered, ?Han??
?Tell Luke I said ?Hi?.?
Han muttered something to himself about Jedi and their instincts as he quietly slipped out the apartment door.
Han walked down to the docking bays to find Luke doing some routine maintenance on his X-wing. Just as he was about to enter the hangar from the side entrance, he noticed Gaeriel Captison walking out of the main entrance with a slow step and mournful expression. Han wondered briefly if something had happened.
Han approached Luke?s X-Wing with caution and called down, ?Hey, Kid!?
Luke bumped his head and rolled out from under the X-Wing. ?Hi, Han. Is there something I can do for you? Did Leia send you??
?No, I have something of yours to return.?
Luke rubbed the bump on his head. He hadn?t loaned anything to Han lately.
?What is it??
Han simply handed over the cylindrical object to Luke. It felt cool in his hands.
?Wait a minute, how did you get my old lightsaber??
?A friend returned it.?
Luke looked down at the saber, then clipped it to his belt. Without realizing that Han had not yet left, he muttered to himself out loud, just loud enough for Han to hear,?Why doesn?t she realize I had no romantic intentions when I gave her the - ?
He stopped mid-sentence when he heard Han clearing his throat.
Luke didn?t finish what he had been about to say. Instead, he leaned down to talk to Artoo Detoo. Artoo rolled back to the X-Wing and extended his arm, closing the compartment that Luke had been working on.
* * *
Mara Jade stood outside the docking bay. Gaeriel Captison had left just moments before and she knew that something had to be going on between the Bakuran Senator and Luke. She had not missed those looks that Skywalker had given Gaeriel during dinner the night before.
Mara was about to enter the hangar from a side entrance when she saw Han Solo enter it from another, a familiar looking object hanging from his belt. Not wanting to be caught personally trying to retrieve the lightsaber, Mara hurried away, planning to catch Skywalker off guard at his apartment.
* * *
Luke exited the hangar with Artoo, taking a left turn back towards the Imperial Palace Apartments where he lived. He pretended not to notice that Mara Jade was following him, as he could sense her presence in the shadows. He wasn?t a Jedi Master for nothing.
Artoo squawked a question, but Luke just patted his dome top, reassuring him.
When they reached the apartment, instead of putting the lightsaber in a safe place, Luke placed it down on a small table that was in the foyer of his apartment. He had a feeling Mara Jade would probably try to take it back and he was going to catch her in the act.
* * *
Indeed, Mara was planning to take the lightsaber back, but as she walked up to Luke?s apartment, the door slid open before she could press the buzzer.
Mara gulped. Skywalker had felt her coming. She chastised herself for not shielding herself in the Force. Or borrowing a ysalamiri from Karrde.
?Hello, Mara,? Luke said casually.
?I guess you were expecting me?? Mara answered coolly.
?I sense you?re looking for something?? Luke said, fingering the lightsaber which was just within her reach on the table.
?You DID give it to me.? Mara tried to grab for the lightsaber, but/>
I'd be confused too! If that's not a sign of blooming love, I don't know what it is ... when she thinks he's interested in Gaeriel, she realizes she's interested in HIM. No turning back now though. Thank goodness.
Now ... what?
Yes, an update!! I love the confusion Mara has and the fact that she thinks she is fooling the Jedi Master. Are Mara and the twins going to have some time together?
Hrmmm Luke. . . bad boy. . . You didn't say the magic words "Gariel is not my girlfreind"
How is Mara supposed to pick up on that if you don't say it
YAYYYYY!! An update! And an awesome one at that! Maybe Mara will finally realize that Luke is NOT interested in Gaeriel!
You can't stop it there! I need more! AAHHH!
*takes a deep breath*
Sorry. I'm ok now. Good post. Mara and Luke's interaction make me giggle.
Good post, Liz I can't wait to see what happens next. Will be interesting to see if Luke just lets Mara have the lightsaber back or if he's got some plan in mind
Post more soon
I bet Mara's a little embarrassed from the show she put on now. Great post!
Can't wait to see Mara's response. Great post! I'm looking forward to more.
I'll work on her response ASAP.
Yes,I think Mara's very embarrassed.
*thinks really hard* I'm not sure what he'll do. I've got a LOT of work to do.
Sorry about stopping it there. It was either stop there or have anothe week or two of no post. And I knew I didn't want to torture you guys and gals much longer. So, Trace was kind enough to beta this for me and I called it good and posted it.
I'll make sure Luke gives a long speech about his love life!
That was different from the first tale. I like it. Mara sure can come off so rough until she puts her foot in her mouth. Hopefully Luke will explain the situation to her. Thanks and super job.
Poor confuzzled Mara... and she's funny, too, trying and failing so badly to be inconspicuous and steal her lightsaber back. Will she ever succeed? Maybe she'd do better just to ask for it, you think? Please PM me when you update! I wanna know what she's going to do next.
I was deep trolling the classic boards on the lookout for good storys about a month ago, and found the original thread, and really enjoyed it. I'm also enjoying the changes you are making. Please add me to the update list as I really like this story and can't wait for the updates!
This is so wonderful! Too bad Gariel left. I kinda like her. Oh well. I love the Jedi tradition of passing on a lightsaber to a loved one. That was an interesting twist. I love the twins! They're so cute! Please put me on your PM list.
DanaeSkywalker,Ikarit and TnTornado - you're all on my master PM list.
Not sure when the next post will come since I'm having minor writers block again. Hopefully by Christmas (December 25). If not then, maybe by New Years (December 31/January 1).
I'm sorry this isn't a post yet - I'm trying the best I can - I'm getting back to work on chapter 7 and maybe I'll have it in time for Valentines Day. Thank you for your patience.
after writers block & some laziness, a new nephew (and entertaining his older sisters for a few hours for a few days), snow storms, a new Sims 2 EP and playing my GBA SP a lot, I am **finally** getting back to writing on the next chapter. I know there are some readers that probably have lost hope this chapter will be posted, but never fear, it WILL get posted. Today is March 19th - I hope to have Chapter 7 posted by April 1st. (This is because April 2nd - April 6th I will not be on my computer).
It probably won't be super long, but it will hopefully satisfy anyone who has been waiting since I posted chapter 6 in November. Hopefully, it won't take too many more days to write and then I just need to ask my beta for help with fixing it.
And here is my current PM Updates List for anyone who is interested:
Anyone who wants removed or added, let me know.
i'd like to be add please, i love your story, hope to see a post soon!
Whee!! Does the happy-happy joy-joy dance!
Chapter 7 is FINALLY here. My beta pronounced it okay and I didn't want to wait any longer, so here it is!
Chapter 7 - Invitations
Just as Luke began to explain more about Gaeriel, Artoo Detoo rolled towards him and twittered impatiently interspersed with several beeps.
"Artoo, slow down. What?"
Again, Artoo twittered and beeped.
"That was TODAY?" Luke hit his head and groaned. Just as he was about to get somewhere with Mara something had to come up. And it was something he knew he could not skip. He had set the meeting up weeks ago and the consequences of skipping a meeting with Borsk Fey?lya were too horrible to think about. For one thing, if he skipped, Fey?lya?s opinion of the Jedi would be even lower than it had been during the Thrawn Crisis.
"Mara, I am so sorry. Artoo just reminded me that I have an important meeting with a Council member. I'll make this up to you, I promise."
Mara rolled her eyes. ?Whatever.?
He escorted Mara to the door, then went to his room to change for his meeting. Before Mara left she snatched up the lightsaber he had carelessly dropped on a small table and clipped it to her belt.
* * *
Leia opened the envelope that had just been delivered by messenger. It contained a data card from Garm Bel Iblis. There was to be a surprise luncheon in honor of Mon Mothma's birthday in two weeks. It was to be a formal function and Leia was required to attend.
She made a face. It seemed that ever since the twins had been born, every function was one she was going to be required to attend. It never ended - the dinners, the functions for visiting dignitaries and had even delayed her hopes to finish her Jedi Training before the twins got too old.
"Well, I guess I'd better go shopping for a new outfit." Leia mumbled to herself. She looked at her wrist chrono. Jaina would be waking from her nap soon, and Han would be fine with just Jacen to look after. She could take Jaina shopping with her.
* * *
After making himself presentable, Luke contacted Mara.
When she came to the screen, she made a face. "What do you want, Skywalker?"
"Did I catch you at a bad time, Jade?" He countered.
"I wasn't expecting you to call, that's all," She replied coolly.
"Then I guess you forgot about my promise to make up for my rudeness yesterday?"
Mara blinked, "Oh, yeah, uh - "
"How about I just take you out to dinner. My treat."
"Okay, I hear Dexter's Diner is a good place." Mara said, not thinking.
"Dexter's Diner? That's where I'd go if I were meeting my old Rogue Squadron buddies."
"Then what did you have in mind?"
"I was thinking, um, The Corusca Gem."
"Isn't that the most expensive restaurant on Coruscant? You probably can?t afford it - ? Distracted, Mara continued to look at the latest report that Karrde had sent her from the Smuggler?s Alliance. She wondered why Skywalker would chose the swankiest restaurant on the planet to take her out for dinner to apologize. She would have been fine eating a bantha burger and jawa fries at Dexter?s diner. She wondered if Skywalker had an ulterior motive for taking her to dinner at an expensive restaurant.
?I?ve got it covered. I'll make the reservation and then contact you with the details." With that, Luke signed off before Mara could retort.
Not only did she have nothing to wear for dinner, she had nothing fancy enough to wear for The Corusca Gem. It was time to go shopping.
* * *
Leia pushed the hover stroller slowly through the crowded shopping center.
"Ah, there it is," She said to herself as she pushed the stroller to the Women's Clothing Boutique and began searching for a suitable dress to wear for the formal luncheon that was planned in honor of Mon Mothma's fiftieth birthday.
Jaina flailed her arms and tried to grab at the dresses as the stroller went past a rack of pretty green dresses marked thirty percent off.
Yes!!! The date's coming up!!! I'm prepared to melt!!
Happily anticipating the sizzly mush to come.
jaina picking out clothes for mara was great. can't wait until the date!