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Beyond - Legends "Living For the Breath of Others" A Leia poem

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Princess1, Jun 6, 2003.

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  1. Princess1

    Princess1 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    *****

    Falling
    Isen't optional
    It just happens

    Suddenly
    You drop
    Emptiness below you


    Reaching
    For no reason
    Except to see what you touch


    Looking
    In the dark
    Trying to understand the light


    Crying
    Is more then just tears
    It envolves your heart


    Explaining
    Takes more work then its worth
    If needs doing, do it


    Hopeing
    Is painful
    But I try anyway


    Smiling
    Keeps others going
    But it isen't always real


    Teaching
    To those that don't understand
    Is impossible without compassion


    Loving
    Is work
    And worth every minute

    Living
    For the breath of others
    Except when my love reminds me to breath


    ******


    Comments? :)

     
  2. little_Skywalker

    little_Skywalker Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Leia sacrificed a lot to be a diplomat and help save the galaxy but in a way it rewarded her but in a way the path she choose was a lonely path.

    it seems (to me) that you were trying to protray Leia's choice she chose a path and gave her all to it but she gazed once in a while at other paths. yet at times she walked two roads.

    great work! :D
     
  3. AERYN_SUN

    AERYN_SUN Jedi Knight star 5

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    Crying
    Is more then just tears
    It envolves your heart


    this stanza and the first are my two favorite, princess :D

    ~aeryn
     
  4. Princess1

    Princess1 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Ashley: Exactly! That was exactly what I was trying to say, although not in such exact terms of course. She sacraficed so much, and never really turned back, she followed her goal, pursuing it relentlessly. But asscaionally she might imagine what her life would have been like otherwise....But in the end she see's what its gotten her, what its done for others, and see's her family, and knows she was right. Thanks soooo much! :D



    Aeryn: I kinda liked that line too.:) But the first one is the one that just sorta popped into my head, finished and complte. The rest of the poem grew from there. Thanks, glad you read it. :D
     
  5. Princess1

    Princess1 Jedi Padawan star 4

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  6. J_Girl

    J_Girl Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Living
    For the breath of others
    Except when my love reminds me to breath



    I like that stanza the best. Very nice work. :)




    J_Girl


     
  7. duskwings

    duskwings Jedi Youngling star 3

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    Very nice portrayal of Leia. It does seem like, as a diplomat and a leader, she has to give up so much for others. She really does live "for the breath of others." Nice poem. :D

    -duskwings
     
  8. Princess1

    Princess1 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    duskwings: I'm glad the title was apropriate, the 'living for the breath of others' was the favorite part of the poem for me. As you said, she really does give up so much. Then HAN reminds her to breath. :p Thanks! :D


    J_Girl: That was my favorite part too. Thanks sooooo much, I'm glad you liked it, I love writing poetry. :D



     
  9. Miska

    Miska Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Awwww that's sweet!! Great portrayal of Leia's character there!
     
  10. Princess1

    Princess1 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Miska: Thanks! :D Leia is such a intersting character to write, although sometimes difficult. :)
     
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