Loneliness ( AU ) Obi (angst)/Qui-Gon completed *10/5* !!!!!

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  1. ewen Jedi Master

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    Angst and mush=making of a good story.

    Good plot=an even better story.

    Good one here!!

    PEACE ewen
  2. Seven Jedi Knight

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    That was so beautiful Angel. I don't know what else to say.

    That was simply stunning.

    Would it be to much to ask for more?
  3. PadawanKitara Force Ghost

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    Hurray- they're back together :)
  4. Falcon Chosen One

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    yay awesome post Angel need more soon.

    begins to track Nool down so she can beat him senseless again
  5. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Malz4JESUS: Thanks ;) Yes, in the end Qui-Gon came to his senses [face_love] ;)

    JediFalcon: Thanks! I´ll try to write more soon ;)

    ewen: That´s nice to read that you still like it ;) . But what shall I say, I had a wonderful beta :D

    Seven: *smile* You can always ask for more. But I don´t know when I´ll find time to write more... though I´ll do my best ;)

    PadawanKitara: You´re right! It´s co nice to see both back TOGETHER ;)


    Thanks for all the replies :D


    Angel
  6. Master_Comedy_Kitty Jedi Master

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  7. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Master_Comedy_Kitty: ;) Thanks for your reply!

    Angel
  8. Jedi_Nifet Jedi Master

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    A wonderful post, Angel! Couldn't reply earlier.

    So mushy. I love it!

    One thing is left to hunt down Nool [face_devil]
  9. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Jedi_Nifet: Thanks ;) I´m glad that you are still reading! It´s never to late for a reply :D . Don´t worry, there will be a sequel, in which Nool will get what he deserves [face_devil]

    Angel
  10. sheleigh Jedi Master

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    *collapses in thread* I'm late- but I'm here! :D

    Aww... what an excellent post, Angel!

    Glad to see Qui-Gon's got his head back where it belongs- and is helping Obi!

    MUSH! Need I say more? ;)

    And a sequel you say? oh well then... DIE NOOL! MWAHAH!

    Can't wait for more- and will be waiting patiently! :)

  11. Jedi_Nifet Jedi Master

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    The sequel? Yay! :) :D :)

    The whole sequel of Nool beating?! [face_big_eyed] Can't wait.
  12. Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal Jedi Knight

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  13. Ganki Force Ghost

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    *grabs tissue* I liked I really liked! For once I don't feel like bonking Qui-Gon on the head!

    Great post ^-^ *sniffesls* My Obi is safe for now and happy YAY! ^_^
  14. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Sheleigh: I´m glad that you are back, I feared that I´d chased the readers away with these last posts ;)
    Yes in the end even Qui-Gon realized what to do and now Obi is save [face_love] but not for long... [face_devil]

    Jedi_Nifet: Yes in the end of the sequel there will be lots of Nool beating [face_devil]

    Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal: Thanks nice to read this :D

    Gankie: *smile* So even you are pleased with Qui-Gon, now? ;) Good news for the slow Jedi ;)


    Thanks for the replies :D :D :D


    Angel
  15. Jedi_Nifet Jedi Master

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  16. Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal Jedi Knight

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  17. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Jedi_Nifet: Yeah, I know I should post soon. But school keeps me busy right now.

    Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal: Well I´ll start to write more when I find the time, right ;)

    Thanks for your uppings :D

    Angel
  18. Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal Jedi Knight

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  19. Seven Jedi Knight

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    You know what I found out while I was ~cough cough~ ... am sick?

    Obi-Wan lives with Darth Maul because he was kicked out of the Jedi Order. Darth Maul currently lives on ice cream, supporting them both by writing fortune cookies.

    Yoda's gone insane, and put Anakin in the care of a robot master. It's name is, creatively, the Master 3000.

    Yoda won't even give Obi-Wan his job back!!!!

    ~stops to pause for breath~

    ~cough cough~

    Ummmm..... yah...

    UPPERS!!!
  20. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Obi_Wan_Kenobis_Gal: I´m truly sorry and very grateful for your patience! I was going to write the rest of the end last week-end, but I became sick.. I´ll promise more as soon as possible!!!

    seven: *LOL* That´s really cool. Yoda would be amused [face_devil]


    Thanks for the replies!!!

    Angel
  21. Falcon Chosen One

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    need more need more locates Nool and tackles him to the ground beating him till he's black and blue. Hay when you're done with Nool give us a warning cause there's an angry mob waiting for him
  22. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    JediFalcon: I´m not really done with Nool, yet. But I´m done with this story. (He´ll get what he deserves in the sequel)

    The last post is back from my beta, but I have no time to post it yet. I´ll put it up tomorrow, thats a promise ;)


    Angel
  23. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Better late than never, here´s the last post:


    *************************


    Obi-Wan was sleeping in his hospital room, the tall master still sat next to him. His former Padawan radiated so much peace and lovingness.Qui-Gon thought, a smile spreading over his face.

    Everything will be alright now, he affirmed to himself.

    "I´ll never hurt you again, little one, I promise." The words were whispered
    as he touched the boy´s face gently.

    Suddenly Obi-Wan moved, moaning quietly. Slowly he opened his clouded bue
    eyes.

    "Did you sleep well?" The older Jedi asked softly.

    "Yes Master Qui-Gon, better than during the whole last year."

    It was no lie. For a moment his still-foggy eyes darkened and seemed to be far away.

    "Obi-Wan," the tall Jedi grasped for his shoulders and forced him to face the Master.

    "You have had a hard time. I can barely imagine your pain and suffering. But
    together we´ll make it, I´ll help you..."

    The boy´s eyes widened with a glimmer of hope.

    "Did you maybe.. perhaps.. want me to be y... with you again?"

    "Obi-wan Kenobi" Qui-Gon started formally: "Would you like to be my Padawan
    again?"

    The joy in the boy´s eyes was indescribable. A bright smile crossed his face.
    However, just as suddenly he took a deep breath and shook his head. His demeanor changed in that instance.

    "I´m sorry Master Jinn, but I can´t accept, though I´m very grateful for you offer to take me back.."

    Qui-Gon opened his mouth as if to say something, but immediately stopped..
    What did he just hear? It had to be misunderstanding.

    "Obi-Wan....why?" That was all he could get out. He seemed dumbfounded by
    the boy´s decline of his offer to renew their training bond..

    "I failed you, I even betrayed you. It wouldn´t be right to be your Padawan
    again.
    I am truly sorry, but its for your own sake."

    Qui-Gon closed his eyes and sighed deeply. When he once again opened them he
    stared directly at his former padawan.

    "The situation on Melida/Daan was cruel, the children fought against the adults. This state is hard enough to split someone´s heart, even or especially the heart a Jedi.

    I don´t want to excuse your behavior,during that time. You acted wrongly, indeed, allowing your emotions to control you. But Obi-Wan, you were only a very yound Padawan. In this age yound Jedi are used to make mistakes, they learn from them.
    That is all I ask of you, that that you have learned something from what happened and move on. It is not good to live in the past.
    And..." Qui-Gon smiled at the littleone before him: "What you did, showed how caring and loving you are."

    Suddenly his eyes darkened again. "But I´m a master and I was wrong, too. I should have protected you, but I was too busy looking for betrayal, because I had been betrayed before, I knew what it looked like, how it felt. When you just indicated your desire to help trying to overturn my decision I saw it as betrayal, instead of trying to get you to clearly see my point. So in a way I have failed you also."


    Qui-Gon´s mouth was dry, his hands were sweating. This confession had trained all his strengh from him. This lying his soul open for Obi-Wan to see every little detail was not over, yet. The hardest part, he needed a long time to accept himself, was still to come. But it had to be said Obi-Wan had to know the full truth.

    The most important part had to be told. He
    couldn´t risk to loose Obi-Wan again and in a quiet voice, he continued:


    "The last year was a horrible. I headed from one mission to another, locking my feelings deep in my self, becoming a shadow of myself. Even Master Yoda couldn´t reach me any more. I felt so lonely. I can´t stand this loneliness any longer. Come back to me my Obi-Wan, please!"

    The last words spoken were no more than a whisper..

    Then it was silent in the room. Master and former Padawan looked at each other. In what seemed like an eternity, the silence hung in the room as Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon sat staring each other.

    During Qui-Gon´s monologue, the b
  24. Malz4JESUS Jedi Grand Master

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    Apr 12, 2002
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    AWWWWWWW!!!!!!! :D :D :D

    You finished it!!!!!!! That was so good!!!

    Yay! :D

    You and your betas did pretty good if you say you can't write English well! I thought it was really good! :)

    Can't wait for a sequel!!!!!!!!

    God bless!!!

    <3-Moose

    PS- First to respond!!! :D Whoohoo!
  25. Angel_Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Feb 10, 2002
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    Malz4JESUS: :D Thanks! I´m glad that you liked this. I have already some main ideas for the sequel, but I want to write a bit before posting, so that you won´t have too wait for a new post so long ;)

    Anyone else, who enjoyed reading this???


    Angel
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