Before Luminous Beings reposted & continuing MESSAGE JULY22 LINK to sequel inside

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  1. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    This is a repost of one of my stories that I started in 2000, before I had spell check. It also got mangled in the switch over to snow board.

    I havn't worked on it in a looong time, but I was inspired to start on the sequel. I will start posting that over on the Saga board soon.
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    Luminous Beings / JA


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    Warning some may find the first posts of this story
    disturbing. It involves torture,
    but the rest of the story is about more than that.
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    The negotiations were stalled. This bothered the two Jedi
    Masters because there was no real reason for the delay. They
    had all the proof they needed that the Drahsil were up to
    their old tricks. It was a fine line Mace Windu and Qui-Gon
    Jinn had to walk.

    Dranal was not a Republic planet, but they constantly harassed
    boarder systems. Now they had been accused of taking a
    colony's children for the slave trade, and killing all the
    others. All but one, who would testify to that fact.

    The Drahsil warlord Bannool was present but he only spoke
    through his ambassador, who only offered complete denial.

    "You republic lap dogs always assume we did it."

    Of course they had. Of course the Jedi knew it to. The only
    reason Bannool agreed to negotiate at all was to get his hands
    on the lone witness to the Drahsil's crime. If he was gone, the
    Republic could not legally declare war on Dranal.

    Master Jinn and Master Windu were the only ones who knew where
    that witness was. It annoyed Padawan Obi-Wan Kenobi, that they
    did not think he was old enough to be trusted with such an
    important secret. The fourteen year old thought the long
    meetings with all of their diplomatic procedures were a
    complete waste of time. He had nodded off more than once.

    "Obi-Wan maybe you should go and get some air." Qui-Gon told
    the boy after the sixth hour of negotiations. As usual it
    wasn't long before trouble found the young Jedi.

    He couldn't hear what the fight was about, but saw ten boys
    about to whoop-butt on one, very young one.

    "Heay!" Obi-Wan called down to the road where they were. He
    went down. "Do you think these odds are fair?"

    "As fair as this Drahsil scum deserves."

    The boy looked to be around eight. The others were all teens.

    "Leave the boy alone." Obi-Wan said.

    "Why should we?"

    "Because a Jedi tells you to."

    That worked sometimes. They looked at Obi-Wan and realized he
    was what he said he was. The saber hanging on his belt gave
    them a hint.

    "We beg your pardon Jedi." They walked away.

    Obi-Wan recognized the boy as one who had been seated next to
    Bannool. "If you belong inside," he told the boy. "You best
    get there. You're not safe around here."

    The boy gave him a curious look as if he was going to say
    something argumentative, but he did as the Jedi said. At the
    same time a Drahsil found the boy. Grabbing him by the
    shoulder, they dragged him back inside. The adult spoke harshly
    towards the boy. Obi-Wan didn't understand their language, but
    co
  2. Black_Scout Jedi Master

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    Nov 10, 2003
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    Poor Obi! :(

    I like this story, where was it before? I'm sure I've seen it before but I can't remember where.
  3. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Hi Black_Scout glad you like it. It is still over on the classic board *chough* unfinished.

    It's really hard to read over there, many many spelling errors and type-os

    If anyone wants the link, there's one on my bio.

    I'm working on fixing the next bit to post. I'm kind of posting what ever is on one page of the old thread as one post.
  4. Healer_Leona Scattegories Host. Manager Emeritus

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    Jodiwent, how lovely to see this here again. Unlike last time when I hadn't found the story till it was well going, I get to start at the beginning her with everybody else!

    I'm thinking there's a couple other stories of yours that need to be fnished along with this one, huh?? ;)

    I look forward to reading more.

    Post soon, post often!
  5. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Great story! I look forward to more!
  6. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Healer Leona always great to see you!I think about those other storeis all the time - - I just have to do something more than think aout them ;)

    Hi VaderLVR64,I'm glad you like it too. Here's somemore.

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    To everyone's surprise, the sixth Drasilian warlord did not
    arrive; his ambassador did. Rolin testified, shaking the
    whole time. He not only had his word, he also had some holos
    he had managed to take and smuggle out of the devastated
    colony. His wobbly hand could hardly slip the disc into the projector.

    On seeing the Holo-vids there was no doubt in anyone's mind that Bannool had
    a hand in it. He had been there, participating in the butchery.

    When asked again if they would help bring Bannool to justice, one of the
    Warlords said, "We are not prepared to sacrifice our people to go after
    Bannool."

    "Then let Republic forces deal with him," Master Windu
    forcefully suggested.

    "Not in our system!" A second Warlord barked. "You have no
    authority over us."

    "Would you prefer that the Republic declare war on all of the
    Drahsil? Because if you do not cooperate, that is what we will
    recommend."

    "You'll be at war either way," Qui-Gon added. "With Bannool or
    us. You can either side with Bannool, facing the
    consequences; Or - - you can benefit from aligning with the
    Republic."

    "How do we know that once you've caught Bannool, you won't go
    after one of us.?"

    "Yhea." "Right." The others murmured.

    "We can draw up an agreement," Windu said. "Then you'll just
    have to trust us, won't you?"

    The Warlords murmured some more then the leader said, "We will
    have to think about this. give us time to discuss this among
    ourselves."

    The Jedi nodded. All left except the Warlords and Bannool's
    ambassador.

    "Will any of your people go against Bannool?" One asked.

    The ambassador looked at them trying to sense their moods.
    "Some may. Not all of us want to die for him."

    "You know if something were to happen to Bannool, you will
    still have Dranool. Maybe he will grow to be a wiser Warlord." When
    they said wiser they meant sneakier, so as not to get caught.

    Then one asked, "Does he have the Jedi boy?"

    "Of course he has the boy. He wants him to tell him where the
    Jedi are keeping Rolin."

    "Well it doesn't matter much now, does it?"

    "If he goes to Coruscant to tells his story there, the
    Republic will declare war on all of us."

    "And what if we are not willing to go to war for Bannool?"

    "Maybe - - We can get the Jedi to deal with Bannool. Then his
    clan can't blame us, and the Republic can't declare war on us
    for his crimes."

    "And how do we do that?"

    "Tell the Jedi where the boy is. Then, believe me, they will deal with
    Bannool."

    They looked at the ambassador who nodded. 'Yes I will betray my
    leader.' It didn't hurt that the ambassador saw his chance at
    power by controlling Dranool.

    ====

    'Hold on, hold on to yourself. This is gonna
  7. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Ever since he remembered who he was and what had happened to
    him, Obi-Wan became the one who could not sleep. One of the
    healers making the rounds wanted to give him something to make
    him sleep.

    "NO!" Obi-Wan protested. "Get that thing away from me." He
    hated shots, didn't want anything controlling him.

    "You need sleep," the healer, who didn't know Obi-Wan,
    insisted.

    "I'll sleep when I'm good and ready to."

    The healer gave up. Still he said, "we will see what Master
    Kimu has to say about this. I will be back."

    When the young healer and Kimu returned, they found that
    Padawan Kenobi had gone.

    "What did you say to him?" Kimu asked.

    "I told him you'd make him take the sedative."

    "Oh great, get him afraid of me now."

    "Master, I don't think it is wise to let a strong willed boy
    rule over us."

    "Do you know what that boy has been through?"

    "I know his chart shows extensive injuries. It says he hasn't
    slept in days."

    "You are clueless."

    "What?" The confused healer inquired.

    "Did you look at the whole chart, or just today's entry? Look
    at the name."

    The younger healer finally looked at the other side of the
    flimsy-plast chart.

    "Kenobi - - He's the padawan that was tortured." He turned
    pale. "And I just tried to force him to take something. Oh
    shavit."

    "Shavit indeed. He couldn't have gone too far," Kimu said. "I'll
    find him." She let the force guide her to where he was.

    She found him asleep; Obi-Wan had snuck into Qui-Gon's
    chambers. Not wanting to wake his Master who was finally
    sleeping, he had curled up in a chair next to Qui-Gon's bed.
    Kimu thought,'At least their both asleep.' She let the
    two of them be.


    Qui-Gon awoke in the morning because he heard a stirring in his
    room. He could feel Obi-Wan's presence before he opened his
    eyes. He turned to see his Padawan where he'd been all night;
    curled up on the chair. He wondered if the healers knew Obi-Wan
    was there. 'I'd better find out,'he thought.

    "Obi-Wan," Qui-Gon whispered as he tapped the boy on the
    shoulder.

    Obi-Wan awoke with a start. At first he took in a panicked
    breath. When he saw his Master he knew where he was.

    "Do the healers know your here?"

    "I don't know."

    "Why are you here?"

    "I don't want to be there anymore."

    "Why didn't you go to your own room?"

    "Are you upset that I'm here?"

    "No, no. I just think you would be more comfortable in your
    bed than on that hard old chair."

    "Master, I didn't want to be alone."

    ====

    No mater how many times the healers tried to get Obi-Wan to
    stay in the healing center, they always found him the next
    day, back in Master Jinn's room. The Jedi Master did nothing
    to discourage this either. After a few days they gave up. They
    still kept a close eye on him.

    It seemed the best treatments for him were the times he spent
    meditating with Qui-Gon. Over the next two weeks Obi-Wan
    gained most of his strength back. The problem now was that the
    Padawan would laps into moments when he thought he was back
    with the Drahsil. When he wasn't in one of those moments Obi-Wan
    wavered between passive and aggressive moods.

    One time, in a practice hall, he felt as if he were being
    pushed aside while waiting to get a practice staff. Determined
    not to be pushed around, he strode up to the boy who had
    walked past him and grabbed the object he wanted from the other
    Padawan. Instantly he realized his behavior was not
    proper and gave it back. He started to leave in embarrassment.

    Qui-Gon had just seen what had transpired. "Don't you want to
    train today?" he asked.
  8. Healer_Leona Scattegories Host. Manager Emeritus

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    Poopies! Missed the post form the 19th. That had me in tears over what poor Obi-Wan had to endure. Qui-Gon's talk with Tahl, all so sad. It was such a relief when He remembered that he was ideed Obi-Wan, but then to have to remember what he'd gone through... :(

    It was also sad how he curled up in a chair in his master's room in escaping from the infirmary.

    Jodiwent I like how you added pieces from Misadventures! Ouch, Bruck's a 'mercy padawan', thought he's lucky he's any at all... little brat!

    Awww, I love that Bant's going to become a mother... and that put Zaiaze at a loss for words. [face_laugh]

    Wonderful posts!
  9. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

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    Mar 23, 2000
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    Thrilled to see you repost this! I loved it the first time I read it and know I will enjoy reading it again.

    I am really looking forward to when we get to some new stuff.
  10. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Master

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    Jan 28, 2000
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    Hey jodiwent
    This is great! Can't believe I never read this before!I'm loving this so far! Can't wait for more!

    ~s-wk
  11. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Feb 11, 2000
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    Healer Leona I added the part from Misadventures becuse it was easier than linking to it.

    OH WOW Kelly Kenobi and snowbee-wan kenobi I havn't seen you guys in ages! It is great to see you reading this. :D :D

    I want to ask readers, is it a good idea to post the sequel I am working on at the same time as I am reposting this? It takes place in the Saga era. I am debating if I should wait, or post away.

    Back to story - -

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    Mon Calamari was one of the most peaceful planets in the
    galaxy. It was also far away from Coruscant; beyond Kashyyyk;
    beyond Kessel. Bant was a rarity, in that era not many Mon Cals left their
    watery planet.

    The Mon Calamarians had just started making interstellar space
    craft. None of those ships were war ships. They were star
    liners. The more well to do beings of the core planets paid
    plenty to cruse the galaxy.

    Along with the sight seeing aristocrats on this occasion were
    three Jedi, hitching a free ride. It was Bant, Obi-Wan, and
    Healer Attan, who was also a Mon Calamarian. She had made
    the arrangements with the owners of the star liner, who were
    more than happy to help out a fellow Mon Cal.

    The two young Jedi were more than overwhelmed
    by the opulence. They would have a few days
    living in the lap of luxury while their Masters went to
    investigate reports of ships disappearing near colonies in the
    expansion zone. While overwhelmed the Padawans were not
    necessarily impressed.

    "Wow, look at all the food," was Obi-Wan's first reaction.
    "Are we allowed to - -"

    "Yes Padawans," Attan told them. "We can partake in any of the
    ships amenities."

    The two Padawans grinned.

    "That does not mean you should forget your manners, or what is
    appropriate for apprentice Jedi. Other than that your free to
    enjoy yourselves. Don't forget your meditations either."

    "Yes Healer Attan," they echoed.

    Attan was still young and had not taken on an apprentice yet.
    She didn't figure the two young teens could get into that much
    trouble.

    ====

    "How could one boy eat that much?" Attan said as she looked at
    the now greener than Yoda, Obi-Wan. "And you wonder why your
    ill."

    "It's not the first time," Bant told the healer. "I've seen
    him eat more than that."

    "It was the green stuff," Obi-Wan groaned. "What was the green
    stuff?"

    "The green stuff, very descriptive Padawan." Attan glared,
    irritated at the boy. "If you hadn't stuffed yourself you
    wouldn't be sick now."

    "He always eats like that. His Master says he's got worms."
    Bant did not tease Obi-Wan often. It was just too easy this
    time.

    "No, I'm telling you it was the green stuff. I didn't have much
    of it - - It made me sick right off."

    "Padawan Eerin, do you know what Padawan Kenobi means by 'the
    green stuff?'
    ."

    "I think it was sea leaves wrapped around crustacean lungs."

    As soon as the human boy heard what he had eaten, Obi-Wan
    turned a paler shade of green. He ran to the nearest waste
    deposit and 'all' that food was out of hi
  12. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Master

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    Jan 28, 2000
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    Wonderful post again!
    Poor, Poor Obi-Wan.
    Hehe that's cute, Bant "fantacising" about Obi a bit.
    I love the songs you include...especially "Crash and Burn", I love that song!

    Great job!
    As for the sequel, I'm enjoying this so much having never read it, I'd say save it for after this. But those who have already read this fic might not agree. Whatever you decide, count me in as a reader!
  13. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Thanks snowbee-wan I get a lot of ideas from songs, or find that songs I like fit my stories.

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    The two Jedi Padawans sat there for a while. Attan went to
    look for them. She saw them from a distance; sensing
    Obi-Wan was not in any true distress, she let them be.

    "Do you think I'm a being a coward?" Obi-Wan asked Bant.
    "Hiding like this I mean."

    "Just because your scared does not make you a coward," Bant
    said. "Your one of the bravest people I know."

    "Now the monsters are in my head."

    "Only if you think they are - - Just like when we were little.
    It will take time to see that the monsters in your head are as
    illusionary as the ones I thought were in my room."

    "The Drahsil were real."

    "Yes, but they are not really in your head, are they?"

    "Your right. How'd you get so smart, I'm the older one."
    Obi-Wan gave Bant one of his lop-sided smiles, that showed
    things were not as bad as they might seem. One thing Obi-Wan
    never lacked was hope.

    "Well isn't this a holo-post moment." It was Kasfal. he had
    gone looking for Bant. "I guess there's no question you're the
    inter-species type Miss. Eerin."

    "Oh shut up," Bant huffed. "That's not even funny."

    "I wondered why you and your friend disappeared so quickly," he
    continued to goat. "Did you find the conversation unpleasant?"

    The junior officer then turned directly to Obi-Wan. "You wouldn't
    happen to know the fellow that was the topic of conversation
    would you?" He said it in a tone that no one could mistake as
    one who had figured something out. "Those injuries Miss. Eerin
    said you were recovering from - - wouldn't happen to have been
    inflicted by the Drahsil, would they?"

    ===

    "Just what did they do to you," Kasfal continued. "that made
    your Master take such brutal revenge?"

    Obi-Wan just glared at Kasfal. Was this jerk for real? Just
    what was his game? Most Mon Cal's were kind and
    gentle people - - This guy must have been the one twit.

    "If this is your idea of how to impress me," Bant pointed out.
    "you are greatly mistaken."

    "I am under no dilution that you even remotely like me Miss.
    Eerin," Kasfal admited. "But I will put it to you plainly. I have every
    intention of being the father of your first clutch."

    "How dare you, YOU - - "

    "What difference does it make. As a Jedi you will not raise
    the hatchlings. My family is more than willing and able to do
    so."

    "Why don't you go find some sap who will buy your garbage?"

    "You don't realize what a prize you are. Being a Jedi makes
    your genetic material very desirable."

    "I think I'm going to puke again," Obi-Wan interrupted the
    argument. "Why don't you get lost?"

    "It looks like your pet human wants another trashing." Kasfal
    had apparently forgotten the force push Bant had given him in
    the pool, or maybe he was just stupid. "I will be the father
    of your hatchlings. And you will agree."

    "Don't you get it. I don't like you. I despise you. What makes
    you think I'll let you anywhere near my eggs?"
  14. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Pain; Grabbing hands; Giant fangs; The smell of filth; A knife
    behind his ear; Blood; Fear; Yelling, "DOG!" Fighting;
    Struggling; The need to escape; Humiliation.

    He never remembered more than bits and pieces of the things
    he saw in his sleep. They kept Obi-wan awake.

    "You're having nightmares?" The healer asked.

    Obi-Wan nodded

    "Do you wish to tell me about them?"

    Obi-Wan did not say no, instead he looked everywhere in the room
    except at Attan.

    "I don't see it all," Obi-Wan told her. "It still frightens me. I think they have
    me again."

    "That will lessen with time."

    "I did not see my Master fight Bannool, but in my dreams I can see his head
    on the floor - - It says thing."

    Attan shuttered thinking of the image in the boys mind. "What
    does it say?"

    "That I'll never be a Jedi. I'll never be free of them."
    Obi-Wan burst into tears again; as soon as they surfaced he tried
    to stuff the feelings down again. "That I'll never be - - a
    man."

    The boy buried his face in the pillow to silence a scream that
    he let out. Attan could feel the anger radiating from Obi-Wan.

    The boy now began to hyperventilate. He had been so brave when
    he stood up to Kasfal and the gossipers. Now he was just a
    wreck.

    "Why did they do that to me? Why me?"

    "Calm your breathing Padawan," The healer said, placing her
    flipper on his back, sending him healing energies. "Do not be
    afraid to cry. It takes a strong man to be able to cry. Don't
    you know that?"

    Obi-Wan looked up into Attan's peaceful eyes. Then he let
    loose a flood of words, "- - and then some of the other Padawans thought
    it was funny. Then Kasfal tried to use it against Bant. The
    looks on the faces of the people on the ship. When does it
    stop!"

    "It will not go away altogether. It will stop being like it is
    now. A wound of the soul takes more than a Bacta patch to
    heal young man," Attan said gently. "Your wound is still raw.
    Your fear that it will not go away is like - - reopening the
    wound."

    "I can't forget - - I can't forget," Obi-Wan repeated.

    "You will never forget Obi-Wan. However you do not have to
    fear it. You can learn from it. That is what you are here to
    find out. You will see it is very peaceful out on the reef.
    Maybe it will bring some to you."

    Obi-Wan said only one more thing before finally falling
    asleep, "I miss Qui-Gon."

    ===

    The ship that carried the two Jedi Masters, and its pilot, was
    now drifting in space on the border of Hutt space and
    Republic space. The droids were working on what they could, trying
    to make the ship able to limp into some port where it could be
    repaired. They all just hoped it was a port in the Republic.

    Qui-Gon was still stewing over the situation, and more. The
    way he had left those people reminded him of how he had left
    Obi-Wan when he needed him. Qui-Gon was still blaming himself for that;
    Now this.

    He wondered what would happen to Obi-Wan i
  15. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Master

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    Great two posts!
    Sorry to just be catching up, busy weekend :)

    Great job
  16. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Here's some more.

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    "You're bleeding Qui-Gon," Soliqua said reaching up to look at
    her fellow Master's forehead. "Ganar's boot must have done
    that."

    "It's nothing," was all Qui-Gon said.

    "Even if it's nothing, we better get some Bacta on it."

    "We should save that. It may be needed for something more
    important later."

    "I'm still going to wash it of you stubborn man." Soliqua
    insisted putting a little bit of water on a clean Med-cloth.
    She carefully wiped the blood off of Jinn's forehead. "This is
    not that little of a cut."

    "It's fine."

    ===

    "OWCH!" Obi-Wan moaned as Attan tried to apply the sun relief
    to the padawan who now looked as red as a cooked crustacean.
    She was mentally hitting herself in the head for forgetting
    that a human's skin would be much more sensitive than a Mon
    Cal's. "If you had put the stuff I gave you on before you
    wouldn't be in this predicament."

    "That stuff smelt."

    "And you thought you could keep the sun off your face
    with your Jedi powers?" The healer gave a dig.

    Obi-Wan sighed. He knew she was right; he didn't
    want her to be right. "This stuff stings."

    "I'm sorry but this is going to heal your face."

    That night at the gathering, Bant noticed that Obi-Wan was not
    eating. He must have really felt bad. If Obi-Wan wasn't eating,
    something was wrong.

    Another thing Bant noticed was a boy who was not there the
    night before. He always seemed to be at the edge of the crowd.
    There was something about him that kept Bant looking to see if
    he was there. She wondered if he had seen her?

    Obi-Wan felt so miserable that he went aside and sat
    down. He wanted to keep an eye on how the young men treated
    his friend, but he found himself closing his eyes half the
    time because they were so sore. Why hadn't he listened to the
    healer? Was it really that much trouble to have done as she
    had suggested that morning. He did not believe the first day
    out he'd get so sun burnt. His head was the only thing he hadn't
    protected and now he was paying for it. Even his ears hurt.

    The next time he opened his eyes he was surprised to see Lofis
    and Bant talking to each other. That was the boy that kept
    getting Bant's attention. They did not talk for long because it was
    almost time for everyone to go home.

    To everyone's surprise, a little while later Lofis was at the door of
    the section of the Eerin home where the Jedi were staying at.

    "What are you doing here?" Bant asked.

    "I have something that will help your friend," Lofis said. "He
    looked like he could use it." The boy handed her a small
    container of some kind of home herbal remedy. Bant had a
    feeling it was not the only reason he had stopped by but she
    took the container.

    "Thank you." She said quickly closing the door. She liked him
    but didn't want him to know that, yet.

    "Wa - - wait," Lofis said before the door shut. Bant re-opened
    it.

    "What?"

    "Would it be all
  17. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Master

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    Jan 28, 2000
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    Hi jodiwent!
    Wonderful post as usual!
    I like Lofis alot, this looks like it could start to get very interesting!
  18. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Feb 11, 2000
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    Thanks snobee-wan! Hope you enjoy this too.
    Hope the lurkers are out there.

    NOTE:This was written way before AOTC so there is no Dooku in this one. In my stories Qui-Gon's old Master is Aji.
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    With much effort, and the help of Soliqua and Ganar, Qui-Gon
    made it the three miles to the natural spring in the
    mountains. That was as much as the Jedi Master's body could
    handle. Strength of the Force or not, he had to stop. The
    others would rather stay by the water for the night anyway. It
    would give them time to plan their next move.

    "This is annoying," was all Qui-Gon had to say.

    When night fell it was cold, colder than it had been any other
    night they had been stranded on Kessel. The sleeping
    arrangements were complicated by two things; Qui-Gon still had
    a fever and did not want to be any warmer; Soliqua refused to
    be next to Ganar because of his over friendliness. Ganar was
    cold and he let them know it.

    'I'm going to freeze," He complained. "It will be on your
    conscious."

    "It is not freezing," Soliqua argued. "You will be
    uncomfortable, you will not freeze."

    As the night went on Ganar's chattering teeth were keeping
    both Jedi masters awake.

    "Will you stop that!" Soliqua finally demanded.

    "I...I...Caaaannn't," The pilot spoke through his chattering
    teeth. "P...ppll..eese. I wooon't t..t.try an..ny thhhing."

    Soliqua huffed.

    "Ganar get over here," Qui-Gon finally said. "Please Soliqua,
    I'll make the sacrifice of having to look at his face all
    night if you will put your back to his, and shut him up so we
    can all sleep."

    Ganar was there in a flash. The Jedi Master reluctantly made
    her way to the others. "I swear if I feel as much as a pinkie
    on me, I'll stuff your head down that spring; then you'll
    know what cold is."

    "Okay okay I get the point," Ganar said as he was thinking he may
    have already known what cold was.

    ===

    Bant watched as Obi-Wan and Lofis both stuffed their faces.
    She didn't think anyone could eat like Obi-Wan, she was wrong.
    While they devoured the 'snacks' he had set out, Lofis had
    some crab like creatures boiling away. He brought them to the
    table and the chow down continued.

    "These are great," Obi-Wan said between the gnawing of shells.

    "But your leaving half of it," Lofis said taking a big crunch.
    "The lungs are the best part."

    Lofis continued to munch away but Obi-Wan was reminded of 'the
    green stuff' that had made him sick on the star liner.

    "I think I've had enough, thank you."

    Bant snickered behind her finned hand. Someone could out eat
    Obi-Wan. "Yhea Obi-Wan the lungs are the best part," She
    teased crunching on the part of the creature that the gills
    were at. Instead of enjoying her joke she got an ill look
    across her face. She put down the crab like food and winced.
    Her hand went to her abdomen.

    She had made no sound, but Obi-Wan knew she was in pain.
    "What's wrong?"

    "Are you all right?" Lofis asked.

    "I think - - " She doubled over a little. "I think it's tim
  19. jodiwent Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Feb 11, 2000
    star 4
    On seeing her friend reunited with his beloved Master, Zaize
    could not keep her cool 'Jedi' exterior. She looked at her
    Master and wondered what she would do if anything ever
    happened to Aji. She ran over to the towering man and gave him
    a fleeting hug around his waist, then quickly went back to
    taking care of Soliqua. Aji wondered what had come over his
    Padawan. Although often very verbal, she was not one to show
    her feelings openly.

    Now Master Mikata was trying to figure out how to get the
    injured Jedi back to the ship. Just as he was thinking about
    it he heard the rumble of an engine. It was a human riding on
    some kind of mining machine; It was Ganar.

    "Look, My hero has returned," Soliqua joked as the pilot
    climbed down from the drill. "This is our pilot, Ganar." She
    introduced.

    "Hi there Jedi guys," Ganar said uneasily. "I guess we don't
    need this now."

    "Just where did you get that?"

    "The mines. They were reluctant to follow me so, I kind of
    borrowed it."

    "Well we can use it," Aji said. "We need to get them to our
    ship."

    "Oh yhea," Ganar saw that Soliqua was injured and lifted her
    to a spot she could ride on the drill. Aji was the only one
    strong enough to lift Qui-Gon. The others climbed up and clung
    on for the bumpy ride.

    When they reached the ship Ganar carried the lady Jedi Master
    inside. After he put her down, Soliqua called him back to her
    side. She propped herself up on her good elbow. The pilot
    leaned over to hear her.

    "By the way - - " She pleasantly shocked Him by planting a big
    wet kiss on his cheek. "Thank you."

    "You're welcome." Ganar went all goofy and had his head in the
    clouds the rest of the flight.

    Because they were often in the extremely remote parts of the
    galaxy, the ship had a bacta tank. It was decided that
    Soliqua was in worse shape than Qui-Gon, so she was hooked up.
    Young Zaize was quite skilled in med tech procedures.

    The bacta capsule Aji had made Qui-Gon take had done more in
    a few hours than all the meditating he had done. Qui-Gon had
    been distracted.

    "We have to get you to Coruscant," Master Mikata pointed out.

    "Excuse me Master Mikata," Obi-Wan interjected. "Mon Calamari
    is much closer."

    ===

    "Why do you want to take them there?" Master Mikata asked.

    "Soliqua promised Bant she'd be there when her eggs hatched,"
    Obi-Wan explained. "If we go to Coruscant it will be too
    late."

    "She needs a healer - - "

    "Healer Attan is still there, and another healer called
    Old Fin and his apprentice."

    "You think they can handle these two?"

    "I'd trust my life, and my Masters to them," the Padawan said
    as if he were trying to convince the head of a planet on some
    point. "I am sure Master Soliqua will be good hands."

    Aji contemplated the young Jedi. "You are very convincing
    young man. Mon Calamari it is."

    "The council is going to have a fit," Zaize commented.

    "It won't be the first
  20. jodiwent Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Feb 11, 2000
    star 4

    Later Qui-Gon decided that it was time for Obi-Wan to get
    back into some serious training. He knew Obi-Wan was not
    back to his usual strength, but he shouldn't let things slide
    either. He knew Obi-Wan would be happy; there was nothing that
    boy liked better than sparring, except maybe looking at the
    stars. In that way the two were alike. In other ways they were
    so different.

    Obi-Wan gave it everything; he still could not land
    any strikes on Qui-Gon. Qui-Gon would not make it easy for him.
    When a Jedi needed to use his saber, it was a life and
    death situation. The Master was pleased, his padawan was
    as good as he had been at his age. Obi-Wan even had a few
    tricks of his own that would have worked on most, but not his
    Master.

    After a while Qui-Gon could see Obi-Wan fading. He started to
    make clumsy mistakes. "You're tired we should stop. Kneel and
    meditate, see if you can tap into the Living Force to gain
    strength."

    While Obi-Wan did that, Qui-Gon went to see how close to
    Coruscant they were. They would arrive early the next day.

    When Qui-Gon returned to where he had left Obi-Wan meditating,
    he found his Padawan not resting or trying to gain strength,
    but going over his saber combinations. It was clear that the
    boy was exhausted, he would not give in. Qui-Gon watched him
    trying to figure out why Obi-Wan felt different than he always
    had when he practiced before. Instead of improving he was
    getting more and more frustrated.

    "Obi-Wan that's enough for today."

    "No Master I can't stop now - - "

    "Yes you can."

    "Please, I want to practice."

    "Not now, can't you see that your getting tired and sloppy."

    Qui-Gon had not meant it to hurt Obi-Wan, only to point out that
    he needed to rest. Obi-Wan heard it as 'he was fighting
    sloppy.'
    Too many things had built up inside of Obi-Wan. He
    shut off his saber and leaned against the wall. His head was
    down, he would not look Qui-Gon in the face. Qui-Gon immediately
    knew Obi-Wan was upset, he could feel it in the Force. He could
    feel the boys erratic breathing and beating heart.

    "Obi-Wan what is the matter?"

    "If you think I'm not good enough, the council won't either.
    They're going to send me away aren't they?"

    "Did I tell you you were not good enough?" Qui-Gon asked.

    "You said I was sloppy."

    "I said you were getting sloppy. You need to rest. No one is
    going to send you anywhere."

    Obi-Wan still would not look at Qui-Gon.

    "I'm still letting my emotions control me."

    "You are still young, and have been through a lot. Look at me
    my Padawan." He got the boy to look at him at least. "You are
    misunderstanding me. I understand why. Listen to me, I am so
    proud of you and how you've handled all of this."

    "Really?"

    "Really. What I meant was that I don't want you pushing
    yourself too much."

    "We'll be back on Coruscant soon, and I'll have to go in front
    of the council. They - - "

    "They will see a strong Jedi standing in
  21. Kelly Kenobi Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 23, 2000
    star 4
    Love those little Jedi, almost as much as I love Obi-Wan!!!

    Thanks for posting on such a regual basis. Like I said before I really loved this story the first time I read it and it's just as good this time. I really look forward to reading it.
  22. jodiwent Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Feb 11, 2000
    star 4
    You're welcome Kelly, thanks for reading again.

    I'm making an effort to correct a page a day, so I can post once a day, and yes, finish where I left off ;)

    --------------------

    "Look at this," one of the young restaurant workers moaned.
    "Some guy is bringing like ten kids in here."

    "Well we'll sell a lot of food," his co-worker commented.

    "I see a mess in our future."

    Why his Padawan had a passion for Corellian junk food Qui-Gon
    never did figure. He would take a few bites of one of the
    concoctions and wonder how Obi-Wan could eat it at all, let
    alone three servings of it.

    "You going to finish that Master?" the teen asked.

    "No but I think you've had enough. All I need is for you to be
    at the healers tomorrow sick on this stuff."

    The children seemed to like the food too. 'Maybe one had to be
    young to enjoy such things,'
    Qui-Gon thought.

    To the surprise of the worker who had seen a mess in his future,
    the children were clean and quiet compared to most kids that
    came in there. They were not fighting over the free toys like
    most children did. It dawned on him that the quiet children
    were Jedi. He wasn't sure if their behavior was a relief or
    weird.

    All in all it had been a good day Qui-Gon believed. Aji's pay
    back wasn't as bad as he thought it would be. They were all
    sleepy when they rode the transport back to the temple. He and
    Obi-Wan both had tired little Jedi curled up beside them.
    Qui-Gon watched as his padawan snoozed. Tomorrow might not be
    as pleasant a day for him. He could not imagine that any of
    the council would see anything that would give them
    reason to 'send Obi-Wan away'.

    ===

    Obi-Wan's nap was rudely interrupted by someone yelling.

    Down the other end of the transport, a large man yelled at
    a small boy, "Don't give me any crap. You'll do as I say and you'll
    like it."


    A shiver went up the padawan's back. He was sure that his
    Master had heard it as well. When Kenobi opened his eyes, he saw
    Qui-Gon grabbing the man's fist before it could strike the boy.

    Qui-Gon gave an age old Jedi warning to the man, "Do you really want to do
    that Friend?" Then he used a mind trick. "You want to calm down."

    "I want to calm down."

    "You don't want to hurt anyone."

    "I don't want to hurt anyone."

    "You'll never lay a hand on the boy again."

    "I'll never lay a hand on the boy again."

    "You'll just take a seat now."

    "I'll just take a seat now."

    Obi-Wan couldn't help but admire how his Master had handled
    the situation. Qui-Gon now turned to the boy and asked, "Is this
    man your father?"

    "Yes sir," the boy shyly answered. "What did you do to him?"

    "Changed his mind. I think you'll be all right, now."

    ===

    "Master, " Obi-Wan asked, "is it a good idea to leave that boy
    in the hands of that man?"

    "There are some things even a Jedi can not change." Qui-Gon
    sighed. "Fortunately that man is very easily influenced. I
    made sure
  23. snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Jan 28, 2000
    star 4
    WONDERFUL POSTS!
    Glad I finally caught up...school...grrr ;)

    Obi was so cute with the kids. But poor guy, thinking he made then all sick!

    GREAT JOB!
  24. ZaraValinor Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    May 31, 2002
    star 4
    I thought I had read this before. Poor Obi-Wan. He just can't catch a break. Of course, if we didn't like to torture our characters we wouldn't be writers.
  25. jodiwent Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Feb 11, 2000
    star 4
    I wish I had something more to say than thanks for reading snowbee-wan, but I'm glad you are reading, and letting me know you're reading.

    Zara you may have read this before over on the classic board, or before the boards split. I'm sure it will be easier to read over here with 'most' of the type-os gone ;)Thanks for reading again.
    -----------------


    "You should be taking it easy too Master Jinn," Kimu said. "As
    good a job as Attan and the Mon Calamari healer did, you are
    still on the mend."

    "Is that a subtle hint that I should leave?" Qui-Gon asked.
    "So you can see what's up with Obi-Wan?"

    "Exactly."

    "I'll see you tomorrow Padawan."

    "Yes Master."

    Qui-Gon left, Obi-Wan wasn't sure what to expect now. "Are
    we going to have to do all that talking stuff again?" He asked
    as if he'd rather do the most boring temple duties than that.

    "Not until tomorrow," the healer said. "Tonight we're just
    going to sort of hang out."

    "But you're still going to be watching me to see of I'm ready to
    go on mission; Right?"

    "Yes."

    Obi-Wan did not look thrilled.

    "You know I don't bite. You can even see Mother Nisa's
    children. I checked, both you and Qui-Gon have had what
    they have before, so you are immune."

    "Aren't they sleeping?"

    "Are you kidding?" The healer laughed. "They're bouncing off
    the walls."

    "Where are they?"

    Kimu led the padawan to the ward that the children were
    staying in.

    "OBI!" the children called out.

    "Hello children," the padawan greeted.

    "We got boo boo's in the belly," one said.

    "I know - - "

    ===

    "Have you got our 'ami-nam-an-als'?" one of the children asked.

    "No they're in my room."

    "Aww."

    "But if I remember right - - " Obi-Wan looked around. "When I
    was a kid, they had some games in here." He saw some things on
    a shelf in the corner. "Look there's some markers and
    flimsy-plast. You can draw your animals."

    "Yhea!" "Cool."

    Obi-Wan plopped the drawing items on the floor between two of
    the beds and sat down to give each of the children a piece of
    flimsy-plast. Then he dumped the multi colored markers in the
    middle. The children sprawled around their new best buddy.

    The children started drawing the animal toys that they had
    gotten at the fast food place. They started to draw other
    parts of their trip. One of the children drew Qui-Gon and
    Obi-Wan carrying them. Another drew Mother Nisa sick in bed.
    One of the boys drew when they were all throwing up.

    "That's icky!" one of the girls said, but the others were
    thought it was funny and laughed.

    Before Obi-Wan knew it a few hours had gone by. He hardly noticed
    Kimu had been observing them. The children were finally
    getting tired. A few fell asleep on top of their masterpieces.
    Their faces and white tee shirts now multi colored.
    Even Obi-Wan curled up and closed his eyes.

    "I think a bed would be softer," Kimu said shaking the
    padawan's shoulder.

    "I wasn'
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