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  1. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    I'm posting here first to avoid the wierd end of page disapearing post syndrome.

    The real post is in the next box.
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    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    The following morning, because she knew one of the wild cats
    had been there, even though Qui-Gon had not said how big,
    Zaize went down to the shelter early. When she got there she
    could not believe what she saw. The wood of the door leading
    to here animals was carved with huge grooves that the big
    cat's claws had left on it. "Un-holy Sith - -" She went in to see
    that the animals seemed not to care or remember what had
    happened the night before.

    It was not the same as the feeling Obi-Wan had for Scrapper,
    but the girl Padawan liked all of her cuddly friends and did
    not want any of them to get eaten, at least not while they
    were there. "By the size of those marks, you guys would have
    just been an appetizer for that one," she said as she fed them
    all. "You're all staying inside now."

    Zaize could not help thinking that when they were let loose,
    there was the chance that they would just end up being some
    carnivore's dinner. "I hope you all can run fast."

    When she opened the door of Scrapper's side of the shelter,
    Zaize called out, "Kenobi you up yet?"

    She heard a moan and some rustling of cloth. "I am now."
    Obi-Wan curled up in his blanket even more.

    * Soft friend. * Obi-Wan's live pillow moved and rubbed
    against Zaize.

    "Good kitty." She patted Scrapper. "You
    wouldn't eat any of 'my' friends, now would you?"

    Scrapper was at the cooling unit again. Scratch, scratch,

    * Food. * * Feed me time. *

    Obi-Wan sat up from the floor, where he had been sleeping. "You
    had to say 'eat' didn't you?"

    "It's time to get up anyway."

    "Scrapper cage now."

    * Food now. *

    "You know the rule, cage first, then food."

    The cub sulked back to the cage. As Obi-Wan fed him Zaize told
    him about the huge claw marks on the door. "Yhea, you should
    have seen the thing. He was twice as big as Scrapper, and you
    should have seen Qui-Gon scare it off. He sounded just like
    one. I can't wait till he shows me how to do that."

    "Do you think that's the one that killed the farmer's

    "I guess, I think there are two others."

    As soon as Obi-Wan finished feeding Scrapper, the two Padawans
    were off to meditation. On the way back to the ship Zaize told
    Kenobi that she had arranged everything with the camp ladies.
    The dinner for Soliqua and Ganar was on. She had also told
    Ganar to be ready for it. The pilot at first thought it was
    one of the Jedi's jokes.

    "No really, we wanted to do something nice for Master Soliqua
    and you're included."

    "You aren't cooking he food, are you?" He remembered the
    results the last time he had eaten something she made.

    She gave him a sour look. "No I'm not cooking it, the camp
    ladies are."

    "Okay then."

    "Dress nice."

    "I always dress nice."

    "Dress - - nicer."

    She had also explained that Obi-Wan had something that he,
    Ganar, was to give to Soliqua. They didn't want her to know
    they had spent
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    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Qui-Gon felt that the kids should sort out what ever mess they had
    created themselves, but not long after telling them that,
    he got a feeling that something terrible was about to happen.
    Something that he had better check and see about before it was
    too late.

    Something told him to get to Ganar's ship; get there now.
    When Master Mikata saw Qui-Gon get up he too felt the coming
    of something that needed to be stopped. The two Jedi Masters
    raced through the ship to find the unhappy pilot swallowing an
    entire bottle of some kind of pills.

    "Ganar what are you doing!"

    "What does it look like."

    "Over a women?"

    "Not any woman, My liquid sun," he slurred. It was obvious
    that not only was the man sad, he had been drinking all day.
    They had never seen Ganar drink, but he must have had something
    on board.

    The Jedi did not go into long-windiness about how he was being
    a fool, or how he should not have done what he had done.
    Qui-Gon immediately grabbed Ganar and started to put his
    strong arms around his chest and started to push up on his
    solar plexus. "Come on Ganar, throw it up!"

    "Stop it Jedi, I want to die."

    "No you don't."

    "Yes I do."

    "No you don't." Qui-Gon pushed on Ganar's gut again, the
    pills and booze all came up.

    "Gross Jedi, my cockpit's a mess."

    "If you wanted to die so much, it wouldn't matter," Aji told
    him. "Let's get some tea into him. One of us is going to
    have to keep an eye on him."

    They brought the pilot to the mess area and made him drink a
    few cups of tea to sober him up. Then they talked him into
    going to sleep. Qui-Gon stayed to make sure he did not try
    anything until Aji could round up the Padawans to tell
    Soliqua what had happened.

    No one had guessed how much Ganar did love Soliqua. Enough to
    think he could not live without her.


    The lion like Jedi took no time to find his and Qui-Gon's
    Padawan. Aji felt that all of the ones involved in this
    scenario had to talk to each other, all in the same place to
    get to the bottom of why Master Soliqua had gotten so mad, and
    why Ganar felt that he would never get her to forgive him.
    Zaize had said it wasn't Ganar's fault; Mikata hoped it was not
    the apprentices' either. Maybe it was all just a very
    unfortunate misunderstanding. Obi-Wan and Zaize were still
    cleaning up in the cooking area when Aji found them.

    "Children follow me now," the old Master said. "Hurry."

    The apprentices stopped what they were doing and followed Aji
    Mikata to where Master Soliqua was still meditating.

    "My fellow Jedi, I am not ready to stop my contemplations."

    "This is no longer a time for contemplation," Aji said with
    urgency. "Have you not felt what has been going on with

    "I have felt him all day, wallowing in the consequences of his

    Obi-Wan and Zaize were looking at each other in confusion as
    the Masters spoke.

    "What about a few minutes ago."

  4. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    I can't remember the name of the brothers who sing this.
    Somebody & Jarrin?

    " - - You look at her
    She looks at me
    She's got me thinking about her constantly
    but she don't know how I feel

    She carries on
    Without a doubt
    I wonder if she's figured out
    I'm crazy for this girl - - "

    Over the next few weeks, Obi-Wan concentrated on teaching
    Scrapper to hunt. One of those days Qui-Gon went to see just
    what his Padawan was up to. The Master was impressed with the
    good use Ganar's seat covers were going to. He was also
    impressed by the teeth marks that now nearly tore the
    duraplast water container to shreds.

    It happened that that day Qui-Gon had decided to teach
    Obi-Wan how to mimic the growl of the linaxus, or any other
    animal he might want to sound like.

    "What do I do Master?" Obi-Wan asked. "I've tried before, I
    sound like someone's pet feline not a linaxus."

    "Well first off we have to get Scrapper to growl, so you can
    listen with the Force, not your ears."

    "Okay." Obi-Wan prepared himself. "Not my ears."

    Qui-Gon gave a call, Scrapper's head popped up out of the
    tall grass where he had been gnawing on the lure. His ears
    twitched towards the humans. Qui-Gon knew he was going to
    growl before he did. "Listen Padawan."


    Obi-Wan let the sound move through him, he absorbed it. Scrapper's
    growl had indeed become a powerful sound, not a little 'Merow' or

    "Can you see it?"

    "Yes, Master I can see it."

    "Now all you have to do is match it."

    "Oh, that's all."

    "Obi-Wan." The Master knew the apprentice was half kidding, but he
    felt he had to say, "you have to believe you can. You have to
    believe you are what you attempt to imitate. You must project
    out - - linaxus."

    "Yes Master, project out linaxus." Obi-Wan took a deep breath.
    The sound that came out of him was anything but linaxus.

    Qui-Gon smothered a laugh that was on his lips. "Obi-Wan you
    have been sleeping next to that beast for months now. If you
    do not know what is essentially a linaxus by now, we're in
    trouble with this lesson."

    "I see Master." Obi-Wan was indignant. 'If it's linaxus he
    wants, it's linaxus he will get.'
    This time instead of being
    self conscious, not really thinking like he was the animal,
    Obi-Wan did himself even one better. He thought of everything
    that made Scrapper what he was; he reached out to him and
    imagined himself becoming the cub's brother. The sound that
    came out of the young Jedi surprised the Master.


    Qui-Gon, for a moment, even saw Obi-Wan turn into, at least
    appear to turn into, a linaxus. A big mean ferocious linaxus
    that made the one that had tried to eat the Padawan and the
    animals look like a kitten.

    Even Scrapper was hiding in the grass.

    "It's all right Scrapper," Obi-Wan reassured. "It's just me."

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    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    When tomorrow came, Scrapper was really hungry. Obi-Wan was
    there bright and early so the cub could start looking for his
    food. Scrapper didn't ask Obi-Wan for food, he seemed to
    have gotten the message no more food from him. Scrapper
    thought about where they had found the animals the day before
    yesterday, but that was where the other linaxus stole it from
    him too.

    Scrapper went in a different direction that morning, a
    direction that brought the cub and his Jedi friend to a place
    he should not be. Ahead of them they saw a lot of animals that
    looked like they would be good to eat. Between the four legged
    food and the hunter was a strange wooden and wire structure
    that sort of looked like something near the animal shelter.

    * Lots of food. * The linaxus pawed the ground like he was going
    to stalk.

    Obi-Wan looked in horror. "NO, Scrapper. Not good for food,
    not Scrapper's food." The boy pointed to the fence and told
    the cub. "You see that, you always stay away from that. That
    will hurt Scrapper."

    Scrapper looked at the fence, it didn't look like it would
    hurt him. The human knew it was not the fence that would hurt
    Scrapper, but the Madori farmer that lived there that would.

    "You can't trust other humans, only Obi-Friend, Big-Friend,
    and other friends."

    Scrapper turned his head the way he did when he did not quite
    understand what Obi-Wan meant. * Human's not friends? *

    "Not all of them, only some. Human's who live here have a big
    ouch that will hurt Scrapper. Make Scrapper dead, like food.
    We have to stay away from here. Scrapper you have to stay away
    from places that look like this. Understand?"

    * Scrapper understands. Friend takes care of Scrapper. *

    They got away from the farm unseen by any of the farmers, and
    went deep into the wilds. Soon they came across the heard of
    hoofed animals again. Scrapper watched them and looked around
    to make sure there were no other thieving hunters around. The
    cub saw one of the animals limping, that one, that one was
    his. The linaxus stalked the heard, focusing on the injured
    one. Once again he showed what made the wild cats one of the
    most feared animals on Tarrimier.

    In a short burst of energy he was on the beast, tripping it
    up with it's massive claws. Again he went for it's neck
    crushing it's throat almost instantly killing it. For some
    reason Scrapper felt like he should roar out to Obi-Wan to
    tell him it was all right, he could come and eat too, but
    if he called to his friend, the other linaxus might hear.
    Scrapper dug in and ate instead. If Obi-Friend wanted some, he'd
    have to come over and get it.

    Obi-Wan looked every once and a while to see if Scrapper was
    done eating. It looked like he had stopped when a good third
    of the carcass was gone. Scrapper had stopped eating but was
    reluctant to leave his kill. The cub saw Obi-Wan watching,
    then he gave a bunch of short little huffs as if to say, 'get
    over here before it's gone.'
    Obi-Wan didn't really want to see
    what was left of the poor animal, but h
  6. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Qui-Gon Jinn was not surprised when the animal Healer Kron
    interrupted his and Master Soliqua's morning meditations.
    Qui-Gon expected to get the third degree from Healer Kron, so
    he cut him off before he could talk. "I do not know where my
    apprentice and the linaxus are, so don't bother asking." A
    second time in as many days the Jedi Master let his annoyance
    over ride his senses.

    "You already know?" Kron asked. "I came here to tell you, the
    boy broke out the linaxus last night. Director Ris and some
    others are tracking them."

    "He will not find them."

    "You sound so sure."

    "I am sure that my Padawan will get his friend to the place
    YOU told him you would help get him to. I hope you're not
    going to start with the threats to charge the boy with
    something when he returns." The Jedi Master did not stop to
    even take a breath. "Because he left me some interesting
    reading material about the wildlife laws of this planet. I
    happened to find a disk with all of them on it, that he had
    been reading - - "

    "Wait," the healer finally got a word in. "I am on the boy's side. I
    don't want the cub caged up. We need the linaxus' in the wild
    so their population can grow. Director Ris is the one who
    wants to keep him locked up."

    Once again, Qui-Gon felt embarrassed that he had jumped to a
    conclusion. It was out of character for him, but lately he was
    letting his protectiveness of Obi-Wan take over his thinking.
    "I see. I'm sorry I thought otherwise."

    "I am on the boy's side, but I couldn't stop Ris from going
    after the boy and the cub. He threatened to stop funding of
    the wildlife clinic if I said anything about the linaxus going
    free. That's what I'm afraid of. I was hoping maybe you could
    do something, but you said you would not interfere."

    "Not interfere with Scrapper; I said nothing about not
    interfering in anything else." Qui-Gon grinned. "You know the
    laws well?"


    "Then you know that Director Ris could be in serious trouble
    for all of this."

    "I told you, he will take away the money for the clinic, then
    all the animals will suffer."

    "Not if - - " Master Soliqua was thinking on the same lines as
    Qui-Gon. "If we go to the authorities now, and find a way to
    charge him with the wildlife laws violations, and the threats
    to you."

    "If we fail - - "

    "You need a little faith," Qui-Gon told the healer. "From what
    I read, Ris could be looking at some hefty fines. Fines that
    could go to funding the wild life clinic. If you agree to
    testify that is." Kron looked at the two Jedi Masters. He knew
    they were right. He was not a total coward. With the Jedi
    beside him he felt like he could do something, and
    still help the other animals as well. So while Director Ris
    was out trying to find Obi-Wan and Scrapper, Ganar was flying
    the Jedi and the healer to the capital of the planet, the city
    of Madoris. There they would file the charges against Director
    Ris. Obi-Wan and Scrapper had not stopped for anything the
  7. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    On the other side of the planet, the two Jedi Masters and the
    animal Healer had been to the proper authorities. They had
    submitted their charges against Ris. Two law enforcers were
    sent to the animal center to apprehend the director. As for
    the complainants, they were told not to go far. If Healer Kron
    and Master Jinn were to testify the next day; if they caught
    Ris that is. They were given reams and reams of paper work to
    deal with, that kept them busy.

    Qui-Gon Jinn did not like having to stay over night. He knew
    that Obi-Wan must have returned to the landing site by now. He
    knew that Master Tudan would take care of his Padawan, he
    still worried. He hoped Obi-Wan would understand why he was
    not there. It was the first time they had been really
    separated since the young Jedi had found them on Kessel. As
    Qui-Gon lay in bed he thought, 'it doesn't seem that long a time
    ago; has it really been almost six months? Has it been almost
    five months since Obi-Wan's fifteenth birthday? Have we
    been on Tarrimier that long?'
    All this, and other things
    crossed Qui-Gon's mind. The main thing that Qui-Gon thought of
    was when he and his apprentice returned to the Temple.
    Would Obi-Wan would be ready to go on a 'real' mission? The Jedi
    Master cringed at his own use of the word 'real' to describe
    dangerous fighting missions, or one involving complex
    negotiations. This mission had been no less real, or difficult.

    He was proud of Obi-Wan; how he kept his word to Scrapper.
    Obi-Wan was not normally that attached to living beings, that
    was what made it all the more exceptional to the Jedi Master.
    Maybe somewhere, along with that always thinking mind of his
    Padawan's, there lurked a heart that was more in tune with the
    Force than the boy himself knew. Without thinking Qui-Gon let
    out a heavy sigh and said under his breath, "please be safe

    Obi-Wan was safe, but his second phase of sleep that night was
    not as peaceful as the first. He felt uncomfortable out of his
    own clothes. He missed Scrapper. He could feel the antagonism
    of some of the other boys in the room. He was having dreams
    again - - There was nothing solid in the dreams. He had not
    seen the Drahsil in his dreams since he had booted Banool's
    head in that dream. It was more like unseen things, just out
    there somewhere. Mainly it was his own anxieties of being
    separated from Qui-Gon. In one of his dreams he saw Qui-Gon
    struggling in something that kept him from Obi-Wan. When he
    saw his Master sinking in that dark something, the Padawan shot
    up in his bed and shouted out, "MASTER!" He instantly knew it
    was a dream, but he had already woken everyone up.

    "Geeze," one boy moaned.

    "Shut up!" another one shouted, tossing a shoe at Obi-Wan,
    beaning him up the side of the head.

    "Ow!" Obi-Wan could not help letting out.

    "Nailed him!" yet another said with glee.

    "Big bad Jedi Padawan misses his Master, boo hoo." A few of
    them laughed.

    "That's enough!" Vargis finally said.

    Obi-Wan said nothing. His head sti
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    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Later that day the Jedi Master and Padawan went with the law
    officials to the place where the animal keepers said they had
    abandoned Ris. They tracked where the director had gone. A
    little ways along they could tell that the Madorian humanoid
    was following an animal. The group followed the footprints,
    the Jedi felt the Force print Ris had left. At another point
    along the trail the Jedi Master could feel something, what had
    alerted him first was his apprentice's own sudden rise in
    breathing and heart rate.

    "You can feel it?" Qui-Gon asked.

    "Yes Master, something dark - - " Obi-Wan said gravely.

    "Violent at the least."

    "What's wrong?" the law officer asked.

    "Something happened up ahead," Master Jinn asserted. "I'm not
    sure yet, but I think the man we are looking for is dead."

    The law officer understood that Jedi could tell these things
    and trusted Qui-Gon's statement. They still had to find out
    what had become of Ris. As of now, he was a felon on the run.
    "Do you think it's safe to proceed Jedi?"

    "Cautiously." That was how they proceeded. Qui-Gon activated
    his saber, so did Obi-Wan. The two officers drew their
    blasters. They walked to the place where the big cat had eaten
    Ris. The two officers felt a little uncomfortable but noted
    that the young Jedi was turning very pale. Obi-Wan was trying
    not to be sick at what he sensed. Qui-Gon sensed it too but
    after all of his years as a Jedi, he dealt with gruesome things
    with a Jedi's infamous steadiness.

    "You won't find Director Ris," Qui-Gon said as a matter of fact,
    as he closed his eyes. It was a violent death, but Qui-Gon
    knew that those who live a violent life often met with violent
    ends. That was one of the reasons Jedi made every effort to
    walk in balance. He knew all to well that despite this, Jedi
    often met with violent ends as well. "I believe what ever he
    was following found him instead."

    The officers did not need to have it spelled out for them.
    They looked at each other an grimaced. "What are we supposed
    to put on the report?" One asked the other. "Can't very well
    say 'was gobbled up by big critter', can we?"

    "Why not, that's what happened?"

    While the law officers debated about paper work, Qui-Gon
    turned his attentions to Obi-Wan. The young Jedi had
    deactivated his saber. He had a 'I'm going to be sick' look on
    his face. He did not get sick but clutched at his tunic over
    his stomach as he fought it.

    "Death is never pretty Padawan. No matter the manner, dead is

    "I know," Obi-Wan said in a low tone. "I just can't help
    seeing myself in his place. I know it's a trick my own mind,
    it must have been awful."

    "Can you feel his emotions?" Qui-Gon was turning the boy's
    fear into a lesson.

    "First he was - - confident, arrogant. He felt like he was
    better than what he sought." The apprentice reached deeper
    into the Force. "He did not have time to have any other
    emotions, just shear fright, and - - the awareness of being blind

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    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    "Hee-e-e ha ha. Ha-a-a-ah." Obi-Wan heard the squealing glee
    of the missing infant. He and Bant had been chasing him all
    around the ship. When Lowan's honorary uncle found him, the
    little Mon Cal was pushing the button on a drink dispenser in
    the ship's mess. The sweet sticky liquid sprayed the amphibious
    hatchling; he got some of it in his mouth. Most of it was
    on his face and his clothes. Each time he got it to work he
    would laugh again; Squirt, laugh, squirt, laugh.

    'How did the rascal get up there?' Obi-Wan wondered as he
    snuck up on Lowan. The hatchlings favorite new game was 'stay
    away'. He kept escaping from his mother; exploring the ship.
    The apprentice Jedi crept closer and made his move on Lowan.
    As Obi-Wan sprang to grab the boy off of the counter, he slid
    on the sweet drink that was all over the floor. Who knew a
    baby could be such a difficult foe to catch. As Obi-Wan lay on
    the floor, Lowan giggled in glee again.

    "You funny Uncie Obi."

    The hatchling jumped off his perch, bounced off his uncle's
    gut, "OWCH!" and scampered off to his next project. Obi-Wan
    wondered if he shouldn't just lay there and forget catching
    Lowan. 'No the little guy might get hurt. I better go after

    "Did you find him?" Bant, who was in the corridor, asked.

    "Yes, but he got away."

    "Got away?"

    "He must have gone this way." Obi-Wan pointed the opposite way
    from where Bant had come from. He also saw the trail of green
    liquid that was dripping off the hatchling. They followed the
    trail. At the end of the trail they saw Lowan. He was in
    Master Jinn's arm, pulling Qui-Gon's hair with his sticky
    fingers. The rest of his sticky self also left its impression
    on the Jedi Master.

    "I believe this is yours," he said to Bant as he handed her
    sticky child to her. "And I believe you - - " He looked at
    Obi-Wan. "Were supposed to be helping Bant keep an eye on

    "I have been Master."

    "Well I suggest you lend a hand as well." Qui-Gon turned and
    went back to the meditation that Lowan had interrupted. The
    two Padawan's looked at each other. They had to laugh at the
    clump of sticky mess Qui-Gon's hair looked like.

    "Maa," Lowan interrupted their giggle. "Lowan has to go."

    "You're not going anywhere. You're going to behave now." They
    started walking back to The room Bant and Lowan were in.

    "No Maa. Lowan has to go."

    "No little man, you are going to our room, and you're going to
    stay there."

    "Lowan is gonna go - - " And just as he had tried to tell her,
    Lowan went.

    "Oh no," Bant moaned knowing her mistake.

    "What's that smell?" Obi-Wan asked as the odor reached him.
    Bant looked at her friend, then he knew what it was. "Well
    he did say he had to go."

    "Now he needs a bath for sure."

    "I guess you're going to have your hands full."

    "Me? Oh no, not just me. Didn't Master Jinn just say you should
    be lending a hand?"

    "Not in that," Obi-Wan protested.

  10. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000

    "I wanna' see my pink frog!" toddler Kenobi yelled the way
    only a two year old can, then sniffed. "I want Mamma Lute!"

    "Mother Lutia has other children to look after as well," the
    apprentice Healer who was 'dealing' with the stubborn child
    told little Obi-Wan. "And the Mon Calamarian baby is not
    your pink frog."

    "I don't like this place." Obi-Wan pouted. "Beings here like
    to stick you with ouch sticks."

    "Look little fellow weather you like it or not, you have to
    stay here for a few days so the healers can fix the boo boo on
    your head." The apprentice Healer had had enough of whining
    children that day and left the human boy to his heaving cries.

    "Not gonna stay here!" Obi-Wan said with a quivering lip after
    the apprentice Healer had left. "Go see my pink frog." The
    determined little Jedi was out of his room again looking
    in at Nisa taking care of Bant.

    "Hello there." Apprentice Mother Nisa smiled at Obi-Wan. "I
    don't think you're supposed to be here."

    "I'm not sick; I got a boo boo." Obi-Wan reached up to feel
    the stitches on his head and bent so it was in Nisa's view.

    Nisa still was thinking, 'ouch'. "Yes I see. You have a very nice
    boo boo."

    "Ladder went boom on me," he said as he peeked in on Bant,
    clinging to the side of the crib.

    'I'm surprised more things have not gone boom on this one,'
    Nisa thought.

    "Hi pink frog!" Obi-Wan said exuberantly.

    Bant now awake was not sure what to make of the creature
    looking at her now. "Hi-," the sick Mon Calamarian said

    "Obi-Wan," Nisa called to the boy, who turned to look at the
    woman. "You may not be sick but Bant is very sick." Obi-Wan
    gave a worried look to the apprentice Mother. "I have to give
    her some medicine for her skin now."

    "Medicine? Not an ouch stick?"

    "No not an ouch stick." Nisa reached for a tube containing a
    sealing balm that was made to keep amphibious beings skin
    moist and water tight as it should be. "This is good for
    Bant's skin; it got all dry." She picked up Bant and started
    spreading the ointment all over the baby Mon Cal. As she did
    this the curious human toddler picked up the tube and - -

    "Obi-Wan put that down."

    He put it down, but not for long.

    He picked it up again, and took a little bit of the gooey
    stuff letting it spread on his hand. He laughed with glee as
    he saw it turn his hand blue and green. It shined like
    sparkles. "Pretty sparkles."

    "Oh no," Nisa moaned. "Put that down Obi-Wan."

    Obi-Wan huffed and put the tube down still enchanted by his
    own hand. Nisa was going to have to take off Bant's under
    garments to put on more of the ointment. She wanted to get the
    little boy out of there, and her hair. She went to find someone
    who could deal with Obi-Wan. In the short time that the
    apprentice Mother was gone the little human managed to spread
    the whole tube of amphibian ointment all over himself.

    "Good for Bant's skin - - Good for Obi's
  11. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    These stories of Bant's first days at the Temple led to
    other stories. This is one that Qui-Gon himself told to little
    Lowan and the others.


    It was a big day for little Qui-Gon Jinn. Today he was turning
    six. Today he'd be an initiate. That meant he'd get his own
    room and not have to live in the crèche any more. It also
    meant he'd start his Jedi training in earnest. He and the
    others who turned six this month had been presented with their
    training sabers.

    There were twenty-two that day. Different Masters and knights
    helped the new initiates learn about their new weapons and how
    to use them so they wouldn't hurt themselves on the first day
    they had them. Then an older initiate was assigned to each of
    the new ones to be their buddies and help them get adjusted to
    their new semi-independence. Qui-Gon's buddy was an easy going
    ten year old named Tenbo. The Master in charge gave him a
    paper with the number of the new initiates' rooms.

    "Come on Qui-Gon," Tenbo said "Let's fine your room." The two
    boys ran off to fine it. When they found it Tenbo said, "Wow,
    you're lucky. You're only a few doors away from Master Yoda."

    "That will be good if there are any monsters," Qui-Gon said.
    "He'll stop them."

    "Monsters?" Tenbo tried not to laugh at the younger boy.
    "There aren't any monsters here."

    "Trodo said there were."

    "Trodo, who's that one of your friends?"

    "He left the crèche last year, but I wouldn't call him a

    "Well don't be scared there are no monsters."

    Qui-Gon put his few things in his new room and the pair were ready
    for lessons the rest of the day. He met a lot of new people
    that day. At the end of it Tenbo asked him, "do you think you can
    find your way?"

    "Yes, I'm good at finding things."

    "Okay, I'll see you tomorrow, bye."


    Qui-Gon was good at finding things. He easily found his new
    room. At first He was a little apprehensive. The room seemed
    so big for one person. He missed the Crèche Mother of his peer
    group, and his friends. He would not let himself cry though.
    The boy was tired, it was easy to fall asleep. Not very long
    after that Qui-Gon heard something.


    It was dark. Qui-Gon covered himself with the blankets. If the
    monster couldn't see him, it couldn't get him. The monster
    didn't arrive, and the little boy fell asleep again. then,
    again he heard :


    'A monster for sure!' Qui-Gon thought. He was a little
    afraid. Then he thought, 'If I'm going to be a Jedi, I can't be
    afraid of even monsters.'

    He got up and grabbed his training saber. He reached the door,
    opened it, and looked out into the dim hallway.


    "AH!" Qui-Gon jumped and ran back to the bed; again hiding
    under the sheets. Now that his door was open it was even


    Qui-Gon took a deep breath and worked up his courage to go
  12. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    "I think that is a great idea," Qui-Gon told Obi-Wan when the
    Padawan told his Master about the boy at the Healers. "You
    don't know how proud it makes me when you go out of your way
    for others. Sometimes you've made me wonder if you are not
    connected to other being on a certain level. You've helped a
    wild animal, and now you want to help this child. There's hope
    for you yet."

    "Qui-Gon don't make fun of me."

    "You're always after me for picking up strays, and here you
    are - - "

    "It's not the same Master."

    "Ah, but it is Obi-Wan."

    "No it's not," the apprentice said in a sing song manner that
    he teased his Master with.

    "Okay it's not, from your point of view. Scrapper and this - -
    Tolinn boy are worthy of your concern."


    "And the beings I find attached to myself?"

    "Very often are pathetic life forms, of no use what so ever."

    Qui-Gon sighed he knew Obi-Wan was half joking but he was
    concerned about the half that wasn't. "I hope one day you will
    see things differently."

    "I very much doubt it."

    "Obi-Wan sometimes you can be so - - "

    "I know." Obi-Wan grinned.

    At the set time Padawan Kenobi showed up in the room of little

    "Obi-Wan!" Toli was so happy to see the apprentice again.
    "What are you doing here?"

    "I'm going to stay with you tonight."

    "While they give me my medicine."

    "That's right, I'm going to be your buddy."

    "Don't you have Padawan stuff to do?"

    "Not tonight."

    "Tonight you're here - - Just for me?"

    "Just for you."

    "I like that, it's like your my big brother, like in all the
    stories." Many of the little Jedi in he crèche dreamed of one
    or another family member like in the fairy tales they heard.
    Toli had always wanted a big brother. "Thanks Obi."

    "Your welcome Toli. I'd be happy to have you as a little

    Just then the Healers who were going to take Tolinn for his
    treatment arrived. "Hello who are you?"

    "He's my big brother!" Tolinn explained. "And he gets to stay
    while I have my medicine."

    "Ah, Master Kimu mentioned that there might be a buddy here
    for him. You must be Obi-Wan."

    "Yes, that's me." Obi-Wan bowed.

    "I am Issuni." The young woman Healer who had addressed the
    Padawan said, "I am in charge of Tolinn's treatment plan."

    "She's MY Healer," Tolinn pointed out.

    "Yes, I am." Issuni nodded. "And that is what we are going to
    do, heal you."

    Obi-Wan got a look on his face that the Healer read as worry.
    She understood that even if the little boy did not know, there
    was a chance he could die; the older boy knew.

    "I bet you beat this old disease to a pulp."

    Obi-Wan was amazed at how cheerful the Healer could be in the
    face of such a sad thing.

    "Okay now, you have to take your three shots, and then you have
    to be hooked up to the drippy thing." That was what Issuni
    called the I.V.

  13. Gkilkenny

    Gkilkenny Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2004
    Great story
    Obi's compassion for others is why he gets hurt
    so much.
    easy to read and full of interesting side stories
    Keep it coming

  14. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Do my eyes deceive me? [face_hypnotized] A reply!

    Thanks for reading Gkilkenny. It's always nice to know people like your stories.

    Just to let everyone know, on the old thread this was page 58, so there are 41 or so more posts (in this thread I've been condencing each page or two into one post)to go before new stuff will be posted, to finish this story.

    I plan to fix my other ones too, but I'm going to wait for the move, and concentrate on each one at a time, maybe.


    On the way back to his own chambers, Obi-Wan had to pass where
    Bant and Lowan were staying. It was not so early that they
    might not be awake, so he gently tapped at the door. He could hear
    talking, so they were not asleep, indeed Bant opened the door,
    wondering who could be calling this early.

    "Obi-Wan - - " Bant looked him over. "You look like you were
    just sat on by a wild bantha."

    "Now that's a greeting I've not heard too often." Kenobi
    smiled. "I've kind of had a long night"

    "I can tell."

    "Who is it Maa?" Lowan could be heard from inside.

    "It's Obi-Wan, but I don't think he's here for a visit," Bant
    told the hatchling.

    "You're right, I wanted to let you know I was going to sleep
    for a few hours. I'll tell you all about it later. I'll be
    back around lunch time."

    "Where have you been all this time?"

    "At the Healers."

    "You're not sick, or anything?"

    "No, it was not for me. I'll tell you later."

    Bant watched Obi-Wan go down the corridor, wondering what could
    have been going on. Her feelings told her it had something to
    do with the Lowan's new little pal, but she was not sure.
    Obi-Wan had never returned after lunch the day before, when he
    brought Tolinn back to the Healers. She thought maybe Master
    Jinn had given him some chore to take care of and didn't give
    it a second thought until now. During that afternoon the Crèche
    Mothers confirmed all of Bant's beliefs that Lowan was a
    perfect candidate to be accepted into the order of Jedi.

    The Mother's found that, despite his dislike for the Healer's
    shots, The baby Mon Calamarian had a very agreeable
    disposition and a bright personality. Not that a shyer child
    would not have been accepted. Sometimes a child's gifts were
    not apparent right away. The Mothers and the Masters had a
    way of seeing them. They had played games with Lowan; games
    that would show them how the little one would react in
    dangerous situations, or personality traits that a Jedi
    would need. A candidate need not have all of the traits, each
    species had their own talents and traits. One thing that Lowan
    showed that was definitely a Mon Cal trait was gentleness.

    One of the tests the Mothers gave him was to handle a
    particularly delicate globe that if not handled in just the
    right way would break. Lowan was very careful and had it for
    quite a while before the Mothers took it back. This was a test
    they would never dream of giving a human baby, not at that age
    at least. At the same time that he demonstrated that trait, he
    also showed another. He was a curious little being, not afraid
    to go into new places.

  15. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    I've been reading this story for a few days now, but it took me a long time to catch up. This is a very good story. You write with great sensitivity and power. Characterizations are right on. It is a mini-series rather than a single story, but I like it very much. There is great truth here--it's taking Obi-Wan a long time to heal, and that's as it is in real life. His compassion for others is one of his great strengths, one that will help him very much. I like little Tolinn a lot, too. I'm sure Obi will make the right choice.
  16. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Thanks for your kind wordsMaychorian. That was a lot of reading, glad you enjoyed.

    This is more than one story; when I first posted it someone kept waving their hands in front of my face, and I felt compelled to keep writting. ;)

    Maybe I'll put mini-series back in the title line.

    Apprentice Mother Kelee was playing with Tolinn in his room
    when Obi-Wan arrived to say hello to his buddy as he had
    promised. She looked a little surprised to see him.

    "Obi!" Toli said with a smile. "You can play this game too."

    "Well what is this game?" Obi-Wan inquired.

    "I don't know the name. Kelee has a bunch of cards that have
    planets on them, and I have ones with animals on them. I
    have to put the animal that belongs on that planet on top of
    it, if I have it."

    "Sounds interesting, I'll just watch for now." Obi-Wan sat
    down on the floor with them.

    "Actually, you probably want to spend your time with Tolinn
    just with him," Kelee said. "I should be going, you can take
    over my part in the game."

    "No, you don't have to go - - " Obi-Wan said, but the apprentice
    Mother insisted.

    "I'll be back later to tell you that story Tolinn. I'll have
    the Healers call me when your buddy is gone."

    "Can't you stay now?" Toli asked. "It would be neat if you and
    Obi were both here."

    "I'm sorry Tolinn, you're not supposed to have so many
    visitors." With that Kelee was out the door.

    Now Obi-Wan was really beginning to wonder; just why was it
    that every time he showed up, Kelee disappeared. She wasn't
    still mad at him for what had happened months before, was she?
    Obi-Wan began to play the match the animal to the planet game
    with Toli.

    "Obi? Why did Kelee really leave?"


    "The Healer's allowed you, Bant, and Lowan in here this
    morning." Tolinn was a smart little kid. "That's three. You
    and Kelee are only two. She said I wasn't allowed too many
    visitors, but that's not too many."

    "Maybe she has some other children to look after."

    "No, not now. There aren't any other kids staying here. She
    has been helping the Healers with the sick kids. All the other
    sick kids that were here got better, and went back to the
    creche. So I think she was fibbin' a little."

    "Does it bother you that she might be fibbing?"

    "Only if she didn't want to be here with me. Maybe she goes
    when she gets the chance." Tolinn frowned thinking that the
    apprentice Mother didn't want to be with him.

    "No Toli, I don't think it's you she doesn't want to be
    around." Obi-Wan did not want Toli to believe it was him Kelee
    did not want to be with, and he was convinced it was because
    of himself, not Tolinn, that Kelee had left.

    "I don't know." Toli was thinking. "She couldn't of left
    because of you. I can't imagine anyone not wanting to be
    around you. You're the neatest grown up I've ever met."

    Obi-Wan could not help but smile at the little boy's
    sweetness. It was fun being the grown up for a change. "Well
    Kelee and I had a disagreement a few months ago. I'm not
  17. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Oh, poor Obi. It's too bad he didn't feel comfortable asking for Qui to be with him. I know Qui-Gon would have been there in a heartbeat. I liked the relationship with Garen.
  18. kateydidnt

    kateydidnt Jedi Master star 4

    Nov 11, 2004
    Ok, so I just spent three days reading the original story. Glad I found this thread otherwise I would have been pretty upset at finding it incomplete. :D I look forward to more. Perhaps you could put the URL for this thread in your profile, rather than the old thread? Anyway, since the old thread was locked I could not respond to anything, but I just want to say you have a fantastic way with words. I love your turns of phrase and your creativity, but as well how realistic the people and emotions are. Looking forward to when you catch up to where the old thread left off!
  19. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Maychorian, You may have noticed that I like to pile on the angst...

    Angst leads to mush, mush leads to :D

    Obi was trying to protect Qui too, because of what Ganar said.

    Wow,Kateydidnt, you made it through all of the old thread, spelling and all... You're braver than I thought. Thanks for reading. That is a good idea about the links.

    I know I've said it forever and often, but I do intend to finish this story and the other unfinished ones.

    "Oh my goodness." Tahl stretched and yawned. "I think I'm
    going to call it a day." She stood to leave.

    "I'll see you to your chambers," Qui-Gon offered.

    "Thanks, but that is not necessary." She bowed her good bye to
    her friend and then Master Yoda. They bowed in return.

    "I too. Sleep calls my name." Yoda hopped up to go. The
    younger Master bowed and the older one was wobbling off to his

    Qui-Gon was not quite ready to do as the others had and go to
    sleep, he had a feeling that his apprentice might return soon,
    looking for what he had left behind. Jinn dozed off while
    waiting. He did not dream often, but when he did he would
    dream of the past as he would like it to have been, or the future
    as he would wish it to be. Only in his dreams did Qui-Gon forget
    the present.

    He was quite disorientated when he saw three different Jedi in
    his dream. One a brash young man saber and braid of many years
    swinging as he fought off enemies, then an older man calmly
    teaching young Jedi, and lastly a old man with eyes that
    seemed full of regret, yet bright and wise - - In his dream
    state Qui-Gon wondered just who were these Jedi. He did not
    recognize them; did he know them? Who was this Jedi - -

    "Mater?" Obi-Wan gently shook Qui-Gon from his foggy state.
    "Wouldn't you be more comfortable in your room?"

    The young Jedi did not know why when his Master awoke, he had
    a smile on his face. In the split second between dream and
    awake, Qui-Gon had recognized the color of his Padawan's hair,
    and the bright yet wise eyes. He had been given a glimpse of
    the man his apprentice would become.

    Obi-Wan had gone to the counter to get - -

    "Looking for this Padawan?" Qui-Gon held up the pouch of herbs
    that Obi-Wan was looking for.

    "Yes Master, that's mine."

    "Did it smell this bad when Kimu gave it to you?"

    "Yes, it's supposed to smell that way." He took the pouch from
    Qui-Gon. "She told you?"

    "She had to. I am your Master after all." Qui-Gon didn't seem
    angry. He indicated the other seat on the couch. "Take a seat.
    We need to talk."

    Obi-Wan sat next to his Master. He wondered if he was going to
    be read the riot act for not letting Qui-Gon know what was
    going on. "I didn't want you to worry. You have enough to
    think about without having to worry about me."

    "And just what have I had to worry about these last few days?
    We are home, not out on a mission. Even if we were, I'd want
    to know that you were all right. When I can be there for you
    there is no reason for me not to be by your side, unless you
    don't want me to be."

    "Don't say that Master. I'l
  20. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Ohhh. My heart hurts for Obi-Wan. Yes, angst leads to mush. Bring on the mush. That was some very sweet mush at the beginning of this post. But Obi in no way deserves this attack. Somehow things always go wrong for him, no matter how hard he tries to be kind. Qui-Gon needs to straighten this out right away. Silly Kelee and Oorami. Rrr. I'd like to be able to step, just a few moments . . . .
  21. kateydidnt

    kateydidnt Jedi Master star 4

    Nov 11, 2004
    "Wow,Kateydidnt, you made it through all of the old thread, spelling and all... You're braver than I thought." And exactly how brave did you think I was previously? ;) Anyway, despite the spelling errors I could still recognize the quality of the story, which is more than I can say for some fics I've read--even though I'm fairly new on TFN, I'm going on five years with which has an unhealthy amount of stories worth zilch: bad spelling *and* bad plot (or no plot) and absolutely no concept of grammar or character development. I recently migrated into Star Wars fanfiction (I'm a Harry Potter addict) and am delighted at the number of quality stories I've found so far. Anyway, you're posting huge chunks of this at a time so I am enjoying skimming it for my favorite parts again.
  22. tberquist1

    tberquist1 Jedi Youngling

    Jan 24, 2005
    I can't say how happy I am to see this story again! I found it a year or so ago and read every bit of it to where it left off. I checked and checked for months hoping for more.... Now I'm thrilled to see it back and hopefully with more to come!!!!
  23. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Maychorianit is going to get worse before it gets better.


    therquist1Thanks for hanging in there, I'm sorry it has taken so long.

    I didn't write any Star Wars stuff for over a year for a few reasons. The main one being some health issues that didn't help my concentration. That has been taken care of.

    "A serious matter indeed this is." Master Yoda strode back and
    forth in front of the four people before him. "All sides will
    be heard, tomorrow. Have time to think about what say you will.
    Found the truth will be." Yoda was looking at Mother Oorami
    when he said that last bit, as if he already knew the truth.
    Still a charge like this could not be swept aside by one
    member of the council, it would appear like he was taking
    sides, or letting one of his favorites off the hook.

    "Thank you Master Yoda, for bringing this before the council."
    Mother Oorami bowed. "And until tomorrow when it is before the
    council, I request that Padawan Kenobi be required to stay
    well away from my apprentice."

    Obi-Wan felt as if he were begin treated like some criminal.
    She seemed to think he had hurt Kelee or something.

    "She has duties at the Healers tonight." The Jedi Mother went
    on, "I want him to be restricted from going there while she is

    "No, you can't." Obi-Wan could not let that pass. "I have to
    be there. Master Yoda I am a sort of buddy to a sick kid there
    who is having a treatment tonight and - - "

    "Kelee can stay with Toilnn tonight."

    Even Kelee didn't want that; she could not take seeing the
    little Salimar go through his treatments. She wanted to say it
    was all a mistake, Obi-Wan had grabbed her but he didn't mean
    anything by it. If she said anything now Mother Oorami would
    look foolish. It seemed her loyalties were to her teacher, no
    matter how much it hurt Obi-Wan, or little Tolinn. She would
    have to bare seeing Tolinn through his treatments to save
    face. If tomorrow everything was dropped, that would be the
    end of it.

    "Sorry I am Padawan Kenobi." Yoda did not call him by his
    first name, that meant he was being 'official'. "For tonight,
    away from where Apprentice Kelee you must stay."

    "Yes Master Yoda." Obi-Wan would obey, but he was finding it
    hard to fight his anger.

    "Master Yoda." Qui-Gon finally spoke, "what is Obi-Wan to do
    should he need to speak to Healer Kimu?"

    "Please," Oorami spouted disrespectfully. "What could he possibly need to talk to her about?"

    Every time the woman opened her mouth, she said something that
    would hurt Qui-Gon's apprentice. What Obi-Wan did not know was
    that the animosity between Master Jinn and Mother Oorami went
    way back. She had been Xanatos' Crèche Mother, and blamed his
    demise all on Qui-Gon. Along with her misconceptions about
    Obi-Wan, she saw a way to get back at Qui-Gon as well. She was
    doing a good job at that so far. Qui-Gon hid his anguish at
    seeing his Padawan so maligned well. He knew that Obi-Wan was
    the last person who would hurt another, other than in self
    defense. To see how Oorami used Tolinn as well gnawe
  24. Gkilkenny

    Gkilkenny Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2004

    Yay aleena go girl give'm both barrels
  25. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Yay! Obi has allies! He deserves them. Poor Toli. I'm glad they let Obi-Wan be with him. Kelee needs to stay out the Healers'.
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