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  1. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    In case some didn't know, the last post of each page, 'disapears' if you try to get to the threads by the 'latest post' links in the member info parts of the board.

    So I always make sure, now, not to post on the last post of a page. Every 25 to 50 depending on people's settings.

    That's what this is, the post is on the next one.
  2. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Look no further, here's some more ;)

    "Go talk to the Corellians, now, you will," Master Yoda
    suggested. "Your Padawan and the Corellian apprentice send to
    me you will. Find things to keep them occupied I can."

    Qui-Gon knew in his heart he had to do as Yoda said. He would
    first go to speak to the Corellian Jedi. He knew he couldn't
    bring Quarell to where they were, and it would go against Jedi
    politeness to bring Obi-Wan and not their guest. He had other
    reasons for not wanting to bring his Padawan as well. There
    were too many memories the Jedi Master had of his time as a
    young knight on Corellia, some happy, some sad, some joyful,
    and one so painful he did not want to remember. Qui-Gon would
    rather that Obi-Wan never know about it.

    Master Jinn would have to trust that the two apprentices could
    spend time together without causing a scene. When he found
    them practicing, Qui-Gon was relieved to see that they looked
    like they were actually trying to improve rather than playing
    at the one-ups-man-ship of previous lessons. Once again
    Obi-Wan was proving to be slightly quicker than Quarell. This
    time the older apprentice was not aggravated by this. He
    watched to see where Obi-Wan's weakness lay. Quarell thought
    he had seen a slight hesitation when someone else in the
    practice hall took a hard fall. Obi-Wan still blocked the
    older boy's attack. It was not until Qui-Gon appeared that
    Quarell was able to parry away one of Obi-Wan's blocks and get
    a strike in.

    Obi-Wan saw is mistake a second too late, and expected to feel
    the burn of Quarell's saber. Both of their weapons were set
    for practice. Quarell stopped short of contact with Obi-Wan's

    "Very good Quarell," Qui-Gon commended. "It takes a great deal
    of control to stop before your target."

    "Thank you Master Jinn." Quarell shut down his saber and

    Obi-Wan, embarrassed that Qui-Gon had not seen all the times
    he had cornered his opponent that morning, visibly sighed
    before shutting his saber down. He also bowed to his Master in

    "You two will have to excuse me for a while," Qui-Gon informed
    the two boys. "There is some business I must attend to at the
    Senate building." Both apprentices knew what that meant.
    "Master Yoda would like some help teaching today."

    "Us?" Obi-Wan said in curiosity, "he wants us to help teach?"

    "Do you find it that surprising Padawan?"

    Obi-Wan just smiled, he was happy to finally be considered
    able to help one of the Masters teach.

    "The crechelings always like you anyway."

    "Crechelings Master?" Obi-Wan's smile faded. "I was hoping - - "

    " - - to teach older kids?" Qui-Gon finished Obi-Wan's
    sentence. "You have to start 'small' Padawan."

    "Yes Master." Obi-Wan liked the smallest of the Jedi well
    enough, he just didn't see it as quite the honor of teaching
    older initiates would have been.

    "You two will have fun," Qui-Gon said as he left.

    "Yhea fun," Quarell grumbled after Master Jinn was out of ear
  3. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    :D Yeeeee! That was adorable. I can just see it. Obi being creative, Quar being a pain. I can sympathize with the kids. It would be fun to see a falling star!
  4. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Thanks Maychorian. Prepare for more [face_batting] cuteness. Have to have some aww breaks between the angst and the mush.

    Qui Gon had gone to the negotiations with the intention of
    only speaking to Master Kress; the only other Jedi who really
    knew most of Jinn?s secret. When he got there he found that he was going to
    be pulled into the dispute between the colonists and the Corellian Jedi

    ?Well what have we here.? The leader of the colonists beamed
    when Qui-Gon entered the room. Before he could even explain that he was
    only there to speak with Kress Halcyon, Tira Solo got him embroiled in their
    discussion. ?Someone who actually knows what the infamous
    Dalla Suul looks like.?

    ?Like you don?t.? Nejaa Halcyon made his thoughts known.
    ?After all he is your kinsman.?

    ?That is not so Jedi. The Gama?s have never had anyone
    remotely like that in our lineage.?

    ?I wasn?t talking about the Gama?s, I was speaking of your
    husband?s family. So who is he, your husband?s cousin? Maybe
    even his brother??

    ?Don?t you dare - - ?

    While Tira and Nejaa argued, Kress and Qui-Gon looked past
    them, to each other with cautions looks of knowing.

    ?Master Jinn.? Tira Solo activated a holo projector. It showed
    a brief security scan of the raid. ?Recognize any one on
    this?? She zoomed in on one pirate in particular. ?Especially
    this man.? The man was blasting people in the back as they

    ?I have no idea who that is.? Qui-Gon was telling the truth,
    he had never seen 'that' man before in his life.

    ?You?re sure?? Tira widened the view. ?You don?t recognize

    ?I am not a liberty to answer that.? This time Qui-Gon could
    not say he didn?t recognize anyone. It was just not who the
    woman wanted him to recognize. He recognized a man fighting
    along side of a Jedi whom he could only conclude was Sorrel

    ?Why not? I know you were the last one to see Dalla Suul
    before his long absence, which he has now decided to come out
    of. Did you make a deal with him then Jedi.??

    ?Ma'am, you do not know me, but I assure you that the man you
    seem to think is Dalla Suul, is not.?

    ?You Jedi all stick together don?t you.? She shut off the holo
    projector and turned to Qui-Gon. Her gaze never varied as she
    stepped closer with each word she spoke. ?Dalla Suul wanted
    the leader of the colony, and Sorrel Fiercaster delivered.?

    ?That is pure nonsense.? Neeja was actually defending the
    brother-in-law that he had no liking for. ?A Jedi would never
    collaborate with a pirate.?

    ?The two of them are missing. What other conclusion can I have
    after seeing both of them go into that ship??

    ?Maybe that your husband is the one who is in leagues with the
    pirates, and it is Sorrel that is being held.?

    ?A Jedi being held? That?s rich.?

    ?This bickering is getting us nowhere.? Master Kress wanted to
    stop the arguing. ?We need to find them. They are the only
    ones who can tell us what happened. And we need to catch that
  5. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Oh dear. LOL! Quarell and a girl . . . NOT good news. East gate, yep

    It seems that one of the main differences between Obi and Quar at this point is that Obi really WANTS to do well at everything he tries--including teaching little kids--and Quar just doesn't care. Whether it's his personality or anxiety over his father, he's just stuck in his own little world. Obviously lacking our Obi-Wan's stunning compassion.

    Mmm, those snacks sound like ho-hos. I want a ho-ho.
  6. Gkilkenny

    Gkilkenny Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2004
    Quarell's found a girl who will meet him, but I think he will be waiting a long time for her!
  7. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Maychorian You're right. Quarell really doesn't need the distraction now, but distractions come along when they come along. Trouble will be a brewing, but doesn't show up until another story. [face_love] hohos :D

    Yes Quarell will be waiting a long time Gkilkenny,IF he waits at the east gate. ;)

    "See if you can catch it." Obi-Wan played with the crèche
    kids. He concentrated, making the imaginary star dance around
    the room. All ten of the kids followed it, each tried to grab
    it, but Obi-Wan kept it just out of their reach. The teacher
    was having so much fun, he didn't realize that he was doing
    something he thought he couldn't do before. When Obi-Wan had
    practiced the art of illusion before, he could only make the
    apparition appear for a minute at the most. He had let go of
    his non-belief finding that it could be done.

    Obi-Wan felt connected to the Force in a way that was
    different that he had before. It was not just stronger, but
    different, more fluid. It was one of the rare times in his
    early years that he felt completely connected to the Force. He
    didn't have to think about what he was doing, he just did it.
    Obi-Wan also did not notice that as he manipulated the Force
    his consciousness expanded out. He found that his thoughts
    went out to find Qui-Gon, who was on his way back to the
    Temple. That made him think of Master Yoda, because he still
    wanted to plan the surprise for Qui-Gon's birthday. These
    thoughts made Obi-Wan loose his connection, and his
    concentration. The illusionary star faded along with the
    smiles on the children's faces.

    "Aww," they all moaned.

    "Please bring it back Obi," Lani pleaded.

    "The little star needs a rest," Obi-Wan told them. "It's

    "We're not tired," Kaseei said energetically.

    "Do you all agree with Kaseei?"

    "Yes!" They all agreed.

    "You're not tired?" Obi-Wan had them now.


    "Then while the little star rests, you won't mind learning how
    the kata goes." Obi-Wan's statement sent little eyes darted
    back and forth, not sure or what to say. "If you do some work
    now, I'll bring the star back later."

    "Yeay!" Now all the children were ready to learn, and Obi-Wan
    was ready to teach.

    "Now do you all remember - - "

    Elsewhere Quarell was wondering around, head in the clouds,
    thinking of his later rendezvous . As he did this watching
    where he was going didn't seem to be top priority, until he
    bumped into something.

    "Lost are you young Corellian?" Master Yoda was the something
    he bumped into.

    "I'm sorry Master Yoda." Quarell returned to the present. "I
    didn't mean to bump into you, I didn't see you."

    "Know that I do." Yoda didn't seem upset. "Show you the way
    back I have come to do."

    "Show me the way back?" Quarell didn't really want to get
    back, he couldn't tell Yoda that. "Of course."

    "This way lost one." Yoda led Quarell back to the room where
    Obi-Wan was teaching the children. The children noticed
    Quarell's return, it showed in their eyes. This time however
  8. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Aw, how sweet. Mamma Lute is wonderful.

    Cool image of the dancing in the clouds. And neat how it was a lesson for all of them.

    LOL! So frustrating about the birthday discussion. Qui-Gon is going to be fifty! It's an important birthday! Half of a century!

    I expect to see some teasing, naturally.
  9. Gkilkenny

    Gkilkenny Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2004
    So sweet Obi really does have a mother she may not be a birth mother but she loves him.
    thats all that matters
  10. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Glad you both like Mamma Lute. [author plug] She and little Obi are in Snow Bears and the first part of Candles in the Windows [/end author plug] In two of my other stories, Obi's birth Mother isn't as nice, not totaly bad but - - Besides we know his Jedi Mamma is his real mother ;)

    The old Crèche Mother and the young Padawan lingered in that
    embrace, felling joy at their reunion. For Obi-Wan these
    emotions were a bit overwhelming. When the two separated they
    sat together for a good while. Lutia had all sorts of
    observations at seeing him so grown now; other times she was
    silent. He told her all sorts of things about being an
    apprentice, all the things he liked about it. She did not
    press him into talking about anything he did not want to.

    The total acceptance he felt in the presence of Mother Lutia
    gave him a feeling of security that he had not felt in a long
    time. At the same time it frightened him. In finding that
    place of security inside himself again, he realized what he
    had been looking for with his Master. Not because Qui-Gon
    could not protect him from every danger, he had accepted that,
    but from the day that Jinn had watched Obi-Wan fight Bruck, yet
    still refused to take Kenobi as his Padawan, something was missing.
    Even after being taken as an apprentice, every time Qui-Gon did not totally
    trust what Obi-Wan would do, it echoed in that empty part of
    the boy's heart. Things were not as bad as they had been back
    then, still Obi-Wan realized that his relationship with
    Qui-Gon always had conditions attached.

    "It is strange," Mother Lutia, feeling Obi-Wan's conflict,
    commented. "One never knows when or where one will find

    "I never could shield my thoughts from you," Obi-Wan admitted.

    "Because there is no need to."

    "Shouldn't it be the same between a Master and a Padawan?"

    "No," was the Jedi Mother's answer. "Not entirely."

    Obi-Wan waited, he was curious to know what she meant.

    "My duty as a Crèche Mother is to raise, protect, and teach
    our ways to young Jedi. A Master's duty is to produce a
    knight. To do that, they must have some expectations."

    "I'll have to think about that."

    Lutia hoped that Obi-Wan would understand her answer. If he
    did, it would save him a lot of heart ache. She also knew
    Obi-Wan often had to learn things the hard way. He may have
    understood with his mind, but not in his heart.

    Though comforted by her presence, Obi-Wan wasn't comforted by
    that answer. Instead of hearing what Lutia had meant, he
    wondered if he failed somehow in his training, would Qui-Gon
    stop caring about him?

    "Now, as happy as I am to see you, I do have to get back to
    the children," Lutia told Obi-Wan. "And I am sure that there
    are may things that a young apprentice must attend to"

    "Yes, there are," Obi-Wan said.

    "Then we must both get back to where we belong," Lutia said as
    she stood. "Will you accompany me back to the crèche?"

    "Of course." The young man offered his arm and the old Caamasi
    woman took it. As they walked Obi-Wan said, "I wish that we
    had more time to spend toge
  11. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Yay! That's a wonderful party, and a lovely present. And wise little Yoda, always a step ahead. LOL!

    Glad to see Toli again, too. Just too bad Obi-Wan's going to be saddled with a different Padawan the moment he becomes a knight.
  12. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    I hate to keep plugging my other stories, but the problem of that other apprentice and Toli is in TO Stand Alone, and Qui's problem is in Bed of Lies, but both of those are unfinished ones. I am going to repost and fix those stories like I'm doing this one, but I want to finish this one first, and wait for the move.

    The party was a complete success, even though Master Yoda kept
    Obi-Wan busy. Because it was easier to maneuver, while he
    helped Yoda serve the dinner, Obi-Wan got to sit next to
    Qui-Gon, when he could actually enjoy the food himself.

    "Master Yoda, you have out done yourself," the guest of honor
    complimented after the last course was finished. "You have
    made all of my favorite things. Can I assume that is true of
    the dessert?"

    "Assume you may," Yoda said, signaling Obi-Wan to fetch the
    ending touch to the dinner.

    When he sat to eat his own serving Obi-Wan looked a little
    dubious about it.

    "Is something wrong Padawan?" Qui-Gon wondered.

    "I wanted to get you a cake." Obi-Wan frowned. "Most people
    get cake on their birthday."

    "I'll have to remember that when yours comes around again.
    Yoda has made the traditional Cathar birthday desert. It is
    sort of like the one he made a few nights ago."

    "Yhea, that boiled cheese stuff." Obi-Wan looked over to Master
    Aji who was thoroughly enjoying the dessert of his home world.

    The Cathar Master happened to glance Kenobi's way as he took a
    taste and was still looking disappointed. "Young Obi-Wan you
    do like the birthday charoo?"

    "Oh yes, it's very good," Obi-Wan responded. "Especially the

    Everyone else understood the young man's slip of the tongue,
    but one of his best friends Zaize nearly coughed the dessert
    out of her nose when he said it. "Obi-Wan it's curds, not
    cruds." She giggled. Aji gave his apprentice a hard look.

    Even with the apology, Obi-Wan was now sufficiently
    embarrassed. "Okay, okay, curds." He went back to eating, and
    tried not to be noticed further.

    In the back of the guests, Obi-Wan could not see the grin on
    Quarell's face. He whispered to the man sitting nest to him,
    his Uncle Nejaa, "if you ask me the kid is right, it's cruds."

    Nejaa gave Quarell the look he often gave his nephew when he
    behaved less than properly. "The boy said that by mistake, you
    are just being rude."

    "So can you tell me, when I can gracefully escape here and not
    look rude?" Quarell asked.

    "I would think you would want to spend some time with your

    "They are going to be talking to Master Jinn all evening."

    "I suppose."

    "That Master Yoda kept me very busy today." That was true, the
    next part was a little mirky. "I'd like to turn in early

    "Wait till everyone is finished dessert," Nejaa advised. "Then
    excuse yourself."

    "Thanks Uncle Nej, you always know the proper way to do

    'If you would only learn.' Nejaa knew his nephew's
    complement was a back handed one, he did not respond. He just went
  13. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    'Why don't these stupid windows open?' Obi-Wan knew why,
    because of how high they were, he was just frustrated that
    they didn't. He grabbed his pillow again, this time taking off
    the cover to make a sack to put his mini attackers in. Two of
    them occupied it now, four more were flying around the room.
    Obi-Wan caught a third one, not without further injuries. A
    different one flew into the side of his face and pecked at
    this ear causing him to drop the one that was in his hand;
    that one had been pecking at his knuckles as well. "Come on
    now, is this anyway to treat your Daddy? Be good little bats
    and get in the sack so I can - - "

    * RIP *

    The two that had been captured tore through the thin material
    of the pillowcase, and were back to attacking Obi-Wan. Kenobi
    swatted the empty cloth to keep them away. "Come on, I don't
    want to have to hurt any of you."

    This did not deter the baby hawk-bats; they just kept trying
    to get to what they saw as dinner. 'Like they are
    understanding a word I say.'
    Obi-Wan moaned to himself.
    'Okay Kenobi, you have to keep a level head here.'

    That level head, was not apparent as he again ran from the
    swarm of hatchlings flying towards him. Obi-Wan vaulted over
    his bed to get away. They chased him around his room a few
    times, before he realized how foolish he must have looked. He
    stopped, but they didn't. They got a few more pecks in before
    Obi-Wan had had enough.

    "You want to play rough? Fine." The young Jedi had made up his
    mind that not one more beak full of him, no matter how small,
    was going to go into the bats' stomachs. The next time he ran
    to the other side of his room to escape the baby bats he
    turned to face them as the flock flew at him. They were all
    together; he would deal with all of them at once.

    The bats saw the human's hand extend out to strike, but it was
    no where near them. They flew a few feet further before Obi's
    Force push hit them. It blew them back almost as far as they
    had flown, then they all dropped to the floor and didn't move.

    "Oh no." Obi-Wan wondered if he had hit them too hard. The boy
    rushed to kneel next to the motionless bodies. Just as he
    picked one up the door opened. It was Qui-Gon. He had awoken
    sensing something was wrong, and he was right.

    "Master I - - " A very upset Obi-Wan held up the baby bat in his
    hand. "I think I killed them."

    Qui-Gon gently took the little creature from his apprentice's
    hand and examined it. "No, you have not killed them." His
    words relieved the boy. "You only stunned them, but we have to
    act fast to get them where they belong before they wake up."

    The large man picked up three more of the little hawk-bats
    leaving two for the boy to carry. "We have to get them to the
    closest balcony quick," he told Obi-Wan. The two of them
    rushed to get the babies where they needed to be.

    There were no adult bats nearby, so they didn't have to wait to
    get the babies outside. Obi-Wan was the first over the edge;
    he put the two bats he had on the ledge at the appropriate
  14. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Quarell Fiercaster knew that he did not know Master Mikata's
    ship all that well, but he thought he knew it well enough not
    to get lost as many times as he had. He also didn't understand
    why ever since they had boarded he seemed to become a total
    klutz. Being on the ship in transit made Quar think it would
    be all right to let his mind wonder a little bit, so the
    younger apprentices' quiet snickerings, that turned into full
    blown laughter as soon as Quar was out of ear shot, went
    unnoticed. His mind was elsewhere; where ever his father was,
    or back at the Temple with Misu. He didn't know what Obi and
    Zai were up to. They had made a pranking truce between
    themselves to join forces against the Corellian who was
    unaware of their repertoire of tricks.

    It wasn't as much fun as the kids thought it was going to be;
    half of their pranks went unnoticed. Quarell seemed to be
    walking around in a fog that protected him from the things
    that fell from shelves, or squirted out at him more than once.
    One time he sat in something greasy he simply groaned, and went
    to clean up. While he was doing that they were pouring extra
    crackers into the soup Quar was going to eat. When he returned
    it was a big glob of paste rather than soup.

    "I don't remember putting all of those in there." Quar was
    really confused. He looked at Obi and Zai who sat there
    looking like a pair of cherubs.

    "Oh yes, I distinctly remember you putting a hand full in
    before you left," Obi-Wan said this with a totally strait face
    even if it was hidden be hind the data pad he was reading.

    "Why did you leave?" Zai added as she sipped on some hot sweet

    "I sat in something." Quar was beginning to suspect something.
    The same sort of thing happened earlier that day when he went
    away for a moment, and a bowl of cereal that he swore he had
    not added milk to yet, not only had it, but it was too soggy to
    eat. Both times the Masters had not been there, but the
    Padawans had.

    "That's terrible," Zai expressed coyly.

    "You should look before you sit," Obi-Wan advised.

    "Yes, I should." Quar had just been about to sit again, he
    sprang up to look this time. There was nothing on his chair.
    "Strange I always thought Aji would have kept his ship
    spotless." Quar dumped out the mess that was in his bowl,
    and got some more from the dispenser.

    "He does," Zaize assured. "But I think Qui-Gon is a bit of a
    slob. It always seems messy when he and Obi are around."

    Obi-Wan glared at his friend. 'Yhea because you throw food at
    He didn't like the way she implicated his Master. He also
    knew that she had said it to get just such a reaction out of
    him. They may have called a pranking truce, but they had not
    called a teasing truce. Before they reached the Corellian
    system and had to concentrate on their mission, he would get
    her for that.

    When the Corellian was finished with his lunch, he went to
    clean up what he had used. The last time he had used the water
    in the sink, it barely came out so he turned it on as much as
  15. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    Yay! Wonderful posts. The fall-out from the birthday--unfortunate, but well-handled. Bat daddy! Quarell deciding to be friends, Zai and Obi's "initiation" . . .

    And the mission heats up! Great stuff.
  16. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Thanks Maychorian. Yes, the mission is going to get hot hot hot.

    While the Jedi were aboard the Nine Horizons there was nothing
    they lacked. Captain Fu made sure that his old friend and
    companions had every luxury his clan could provide. Rari knew
    Jedi didn't go for too much of that, but they would not refuse
    his kindness. The Masters thought two days of indulgence
    wouldn't hurt the young ones.

    "This ship is just like a star liner," Obi-Wan commented as
    the three apprentices wondered the forward area of the huge
    freighter. This was the part of the ship where the crew and
    other members of the spacer clan lived. Naturally having
    Obi-Wan in the group, they ended up somewhere where there was
    food. "I never expected spacers to have so much," he continued
    overlooking the vending machines' choices.

    "Maybe the smaller clans," Zaize told. "but the Hoshikowa are
    one of the biggest, and successful."

    "Humph," Quarell growled with distain.

    "You have a problem with spacers?" The girl Jedi questioned in
    a lower voice so that only her companions could hear. She had
    turned towards Quarell with a probing look. "These are hard
    working business people."

    "Don't you mean hard working swindlers?" The Corellian spoke
    in hushed tones as well.

    The older spacers paid little notice to the Jedi, the younger
    ones had some interest but kept their distance. Quarell wanted
    neither to know his true feelings about their class.

    "You're very prejudiced for a Jedi," Zaize reprimanded.

    "And if a Hutt strolled in here, you'd think they were a
    philanthropist?" Quarell starred back at Zaize.

    "Spacers are hardly comparable to Hutts," Zaize insisted,
    standing defiantly in front of Quarell.

    "They deal with each other all the time." Quarell stubbornly
    took his own defiant stance.

    "Dealing with Hutts, and being like Hutts are two different
    things," Zaize continued. "Right Kenobi?"

    "M-What?" was the muffled answer. Obi-Wan didn't want to get
    in-between the two arguers, so he had been stuffing his face
    while he could.

    "Urrg!" Zai growled out loud. "Can you think of something
    besides eating?"

    "Give the kid a break he likes to eat," Quarell antagonized.
    "This argument is between you and I."

    Obi-Wan looked back and forth between Zaize and Quarell. He
    took another bite of his snack; if his mouth was full he
    couldn't talk. A third stubborn person's opinion would add
    nothing to the discussion.

    "Argument," Zaize said. "There is no argument you are wrong
    and that's that." Her voice level was now attracting
    attention. A few of the younger spacers peered around a corner
    to see what the Jedi were arguing about. A quick look from
    both of them made the ones that were their age disappear back
    around the corner. A little one who had no sense of privacy
    didn't give up that easily. The boy walked right up to the

    "What ya' fightin' about?" The seven year old boldly asked.

    Zaize and Quarell looked at each other. Neither would hurt the
  17. kateydidnt

    kateydidnt Jedi Master star 4

    Nov 11, 2004
    Can I tell you how excited I am to see this getting closer and closer to where the old thread left off?

    *dances a jig*
  18. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005

    Oh, that was awesome. I especially liked how Quarell helped Obi-Wan by distracting him. Quar has more to him than first meets the eye. Poor Obi, trying so hard to be a good Jedi, when he has all that nastiness from the past trying to pull him down. He's dealing really well, but he shouldn't be afraid of his feelings.

    I liked the reception too, with the veiled comments. And Ensign Giron, "not the sharpest tooth in the sarlacc" LOL!
  19. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Kateydidnt I'm excited too, but also a little nervous.

    Of course there's more to Quar, Maychorian.
    After all, he is Corellian. ;)

    Most of the families in the Hosukowa clan were in favor of, and
    supported the Fu family's leadership. There were however, a few
    that thought they should be in charge. The main three being
    the Ji, the Yu, and the Su families. Naturally the Captains of
    those ships were always waiting for Captain Rari to give them
    any excuse for them to move in, and try to take command of the
    spacer caravan. It was unspoken, but one of these three did not
    think it wise that Fu-Rari was giving transport to the Jedi.
    Su-Konya felt that there could be nothing but trouble where
    ever the Jedi were. Rari and Yume were well aware of the
    tensions among these few Captains. That was why Yume wanted to
    wait to deal with the bad behavior of their crew members.

    "You were a Commander in the Corellian Security Forces?" Zaize
    asked Yume when everyone was mingling. "You must have some
    great stories to tell."

    "I have to admit, I did have quite a few adventures," the
    Captain's wife recalled. "If I can tell them well enough to
    keep anyone else entertained is something else." She could see
    that the young Jedi. looked disappointed. "Sometimes the best
    times I had were the least adventuresome. Many of the missions
    in those days were protecting caravans like this one." Yume
    looked to where her husband along with the Jedi men were
    chowing down. "That's how I met Rari. He flew the goods, and I
    kept the pirates away."

    "But there are still pirates today. Why don't you have a
    security escort?"

    "Those were different times," Yume answered. She seemed to
    miss the more harrowing times. "There are less pirates now,
    and the politicians make overreaching demands for their

    "What do you mean overreaching?"

    "They want to stick their noses where they don't belong."

    Zai wasn't sure she liked that answer. Many people often said
    the same thing of Jedi, when the Jedi interfered with their
    'business'. "So what do you do if pirates do attack?"

    "If any pirates attack this caravan, they'll find that there
    is more than goods in some of our holds." Yume's answer
    interested the girl Jedi, her eyes widened. "The mommy ship
    has a few baby ships that will come out and bite anyone that
    comes after them."

    "You have fighters on board?" Zaize asked with wonder.

    "Maybe I'll show them to you sometime while you are on board.
    Right now maybe we should go get some food. It looks like the
    rabid eaters have cleared out." Yume flowed over to a table
    that again was laden with anything anyone could possibly want.
    Zaize followed but she hesitated to take anything. Even Aji
    noticed, Zai was not a chow hound like Obi, but she was not
    known to give up a chance to eat either. Her Master stepped up
    behind her.

    "Is something wrong child?" Aji asked. "You wouldn't want to
    insult our hosts by not taking what is offered." Jedi were all
    for manners, and spacer manners meant you did not

    MASTER_KAYM Jedi Youngling star 1

    Aug 3, 2004
    Really good story! I didn't have time to post a reply before, but I just wanted to say that this story is really well written and I admire you for writting something this long! ;)
  21. maychorian

    maychorian Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 7, 2005
    I like the complexity of the characters here. You have a talent for writing people who have good points and bad points, and interact in interesting ways. And of course I enjoyed the sleeping problems. LOL! Poor Obi, dealing with hair gel. He has a proper haircut! Nice to see he and Quar developing more of a brotherly-type relationship, complete with teasing and hair-ruffling.
  22. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrely Community Mod star 9 Staff Member Manager

    Jul 7, 2000
    Forgive me Jodi.. I'm finally getting cuaght up. Loving it again just like the first time and thrilled to hear you may be reposting and finishing 'Bed Of Lies'. Still waiting on that one. :D :D
  23. Gkilkenny

    Gkilkenny Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 27, 2004
    I could just imagine Obi sneezing
    I am still reading but have lots of RL happening
    that keeps me busy.
    Great interaction between the Masters and Padawan's.
  24. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Thanks Master_Kaym. It is a long story, but it was written over a number of years.

    I'm glad you like my writing Maychorian, Thanks.

    Don't worry Leona, I know your out there lurking. ;) And I havn't forgoten about young Qui either :D I don't know which is worse, leaving off my other stories, on the eve of Qui's <Shush, keeping secret for those who havn't read it>, or leaving Obi naked in a tube for a few years - - and Zaize's condition going on for way too long LOL

    Gkilkenny no need to explain, Darth RL and I are well aquatinted.

    ?Ah, just the people we?re looking for,? Captain Fu said as he
    and Yume intercepted the Jedi as they walked along in search
    of breakfast. In unison the Jedi stopped in their tracks,
    looked up to see their hosts and bowed.

    ?You were looking for us?? Qui-Gon asked, ?are we nearing the

    ?Not yet,? Rari answered. ?There is just something I?d like
    the young Jedi to see.? He turned to face Zaize. ?You
    particularly, apprentice of Aji.?

    ?Where is Master Mikata?? Yume inquired.

    ?Master Mikata is --? Qui-Gon explained, "Indisposed at the

    ?Then you will have to tell him all about it.?

    ?Let?s stop the yapping, and get there.? Captain Fu ended the
    discussion, and led everyone to a cargo lift.

    The Jedi thought it was a bit odd, but they followed. The lift
    took them deep into the belly of the ship. When the door
    opened before them was a vast cargo hold. Endless crates of
    the goods that the trading clan sold were lined up as far as
    they could see; it must have been miles to the other side of
    the ship. The ship?s captain led the Jedi through the pattern
    of walkways the cargo made.

    ?Even though we left our last port a while back,? Rari
    explained as they walked. ?All of the cargo brought on board
    when we were there still hasn?t been inventoried, and some of
    our goods have to be re-packaged for the places we?ll be
    selling them. That is where our little ones come in.?

    ?Oh, I see,? Zaize started in. Everyone turned to see Aji?s
    Padawan standing with her arms folded in front of her. ?You
    dragged us down here to justify your using underage crew.

    Qui-Gon gave her his best stern Master look. He knew what Aji
    would be thinking. The boys both could see more meditations
    looming in their future.

    ?No, Miss Zai,? Yume spoke. ?We are not justifying anything.
    We are explaining our involvement in the Corellian
    government?s education program to keep runaways and orphans
    off the streets, and out of institutions.?

    "Program?" Zaize's ears perked up. She had a feeling she was
    going to find out that her judgment of the Fus had been wrong.
    "What program would that be?"

    "The one where we agree to house a number of these kids, and a
    few of the government's teachers on the ship," Rari explained.
    "In exchange for a few hours of work down here."

    "But some of them are so young." This time it was Obi-Wan who
    interrupted. "And we could tell those kids were hungry."

    "I didn't know about those kids being hungry. The teachers are
    supposed to see that the children are cared for. That is going

    MASTER_KAYM Jedi Youngling star 1

    Aug 3, 2004
    :eek: Poor kids! :(
    I would have made them stay! But poor Obi and Quar wouln't use their weapons on them...It was so sad when the children aked why they were crying and the told them it was allergies instead of telling them the others were dead! :_|
    Good work! =D=
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