Master, I forgot the parachute...

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  1. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    His blue eyes filled with tears as he looked back into the deep chasm that had engulfed their relationship. The longing filled his heart and he knew that he had made a mistake, but he couldn't bring himself to take back the words that had been spoken in anger only the night before.

    "How can I undo what's been done?" he thought to himself. "He'll never understand. He'll never learn. He betrayed me."

    He sat in the cold, dark room alone and he would be alone for the rest of the night. He knew what he had to do, but he couldn't bring himself to a standing position. His guilt and pride weighed him down like a thousand bricks.

    To think, only a week ago, everything had been perfect...
  2. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    COOL! Who was that?
    You got MY attention!

    :D
  3. Abbi_Cee Jedi Master

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    This first part has certainly gotten my attention, not to mention the title. I definitely want to read more. :)
  4. Liz Skywalker Ex-Mod

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    hnn...interesting. More?
  5. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    Messa wanten more!!! *ducks object thrown in her direction, for the Jar Jar immitation* :p
  6. Jemmiah Jedi Grand Master

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    LOVE the title!!!

    More?
  7. Rogue1-and-a-half Manager Emeritus who is writing his masterpiece

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    This actually sounds interesting.
  8. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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  9. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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  10. Uisceban Jedi Master

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  12. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    You asked for more... you got it....
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    "Master, when are you going to tell me about this mission?" asked a seventeen year old Obi-Wan Kenobi.

    "In due time, my young padawan." replied the ever patient, wise, old Jedi, Qui-Gon Jinn.

    *He's always doing this to me* thought Obi-Wan. *He never lets me know what we're heading into until the last minute, right before the ship runs out of fuel.*

    "The ship's fuel tank is completely full, I assure you, Obi-Wan. Nothing will go wrong on this mission provided you stay out of trouble and do as I say."

    Obi-Wan was always finding a way to stretch the rules and always ended up in some kind of predicament where his master had to come and rescue him. Even though he had only been let off probation the year before, his mind still seemed to be clustered with his own ideas of how they should accomplish their missions which almost always lead them into trouble. To tell you the truth, Qui-Gon was starting to get sick of it.

    "Have we been to this planet before?"

    Obi-Wan had been trying to get Qui-Gon to give him a clue as to where they were headed for the past hour and both were getting sick of their game of cat-and-mouse.

    "Obi-Wan, why don't you go and work on your lessons from the temple, or count the droids to make sure none of them have been sucked into outer space?" Despite his annoyance, Qui-Gon was able to display his ever quite composure.

    Obi-Wan left the room with a sigh. Was he ever going to be able to regain the complete trust Qui-Gon once had for him?

    "Time will tell, Obi-Wan." the words of Yoda flowed into Obi-Wan's head. He had expressed his deep longing to regain Qui-Gon's trust to the little troll-like creature before he and Qui-Gon had left the temple. "Patient you must be."

    It was never easy for Obi-Wan to accept Yoda's advice. He always wanted to rush into things and hurry people along. Qui-Gon constantly reminded him that patience was a virtue and that it needed to be learned. Eventually Qui-Gon would tell him exactly what was going on and where they were headed, but for now Obi-Wan could only fill the time with other tasks.

    Obi-Wan started to count the droids, "One...two..."

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    How's that for now? I'm on spring break right now so I'm not sure when I'll put my next post up for sure. Keep checking in.
  13. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    Hee Hee! Messa like this! Poor Obi, never has enough patience, and poor Qui-Gon who has to put up with an impatient padawan! :D
    More!
  14. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    Knight_Maria, I spent all last night trying to think of a new post and all of this morning to. You better be happy...

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    The two Jedi were assigned to the planet Chrestan to act as ambassadors for the Galactic Senate. The planet had, as of yet, been untouched by anyone outside the system and had invited the Jedi to come and see how things ran there. THen they would discuss the planet's joining the Senate.

    Qui-Gon would have told his young apprentice, but had reconsidered it when he decided this mission would act as a good lesson of patience, for both of them. Unfortunately, neither one of them were reflecting a clear image of that characteristic.

    "Master Jinn," the co-pilot, Sarai interupted Qui-Gon's thoughts.

    "Yes, Sarai. What is it?"

    "We will reach the planet in about half an hour and will be docking immediately."

    "Thank-you, Sarai. I will inform my padawan and we will collect our things."

    Qui-Gon exited to go find Obi-Wan. Now, he would inform him of their mission.

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    I hope that helps to ease some of your curiosity. I'll post a new part soon.
  15. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    Okay! I'm really bored. Here's the next post...

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    "That's it!!" Obi-Wan looked shocked and confused. He had expected something more to the mission then being an ambassador for the Senate.

    "Yes, Obi-Wan. I expect you to be on your best behavior. We must show the Chrestarians what they will be joining. We must set an example. They will be watching everything we do."

    Reality quickly grabbed a hold of Obi-Wan. Had he just spoken like that to his Master?? Obi-Wan quickly regained his composure.

    "Yes, Master." he said without faltering.

    "Listen to me, Obi-Wan. I expect you to do exactly what I say, when I say it. No questions asked."

    "Yes, Master." Obi-Wan had to keep himself from rolling his eyes. Qui-Gon was beginning to sound like Mace Windu in his lectures. Sure he may have gotten into trouble before, but he didn't need to be treated like a two year old.

    "All right, then. Let's pack our things. We'll be landing shortly."

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    Anyone reading this??? I need some feedback.
  16. Uisceban Jedi Master

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    Wooohooo posts!!
    That was good!
  17. Abbi_Cee Jedi Master

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    Yes, I'm reading! :D I'm liking. Write more. ;)
  18. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    Hee Hee! That was Great! :D Can't wait for more!

    Loved the Mace comparison! :p
  19. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    I knew you would love that part, my infamous Knight. Thanks for all the replies guys. Here's some more reading for your pleasing....

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    The landing platform lowered and the two cloaked figures walked out into the spaceport.

    "Remember, Obi-Wan," Qui-Gon reminded him, "Take in everything. It may be important later. Get to know your surroundings."

    "Yes, Master." Obi-Wan replied. His common response was becoming more of a sing-song answer then an actual response.

    "All right, then. What do you see?"

    "There's a pile of crates to our left; a few stands, mostly closed; to our right is a tall building which I would assume is a hotel because of the cute, little curtains in the windows; and in front of us there's a large group of people milling about." Obi-Wan couldn't help but smile at his little joke about the curtains. He looked over and saw his Master's stone cold expression. His face wiped clean.

    "And what are the crates made of?" Qui-Gon asked.

    "Made of?" asked Obi-Wan.

    "Yes, Obi-Wan. You must remember, even the smallest detail may be of value to you later."

    "I don't know what they're made of. I did not realize it was important." //And while you're at it, why don't you ask me the names of every person in a place I've never been to before// Obi-Wan thought in disgust.

    "Everything is important, Obi-Wan. They are made of a rare metal found only on Chrestan called Titaria. Titaria is nearly indestructable."

    "Then it must be someone fairly wealthy that those crates belong to."

    "Perhaps. But now we must go to meet our escorts at the Palandro Cafe. It's just down the street aways. Come, Obi-Wan."

    "Yes, Master."

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    That's it for now. Have a good Monday. I'll post something a little longer next time.
  20. Knight_Maria Jedi Knight

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    LOL!!! :D

    ***//And while you're at it, why don't you ask me the names of every person in a place I've never been to before// Obi-Wan thought in disgust.***

    You GO Obi! :D Great post Cerasi!
  21. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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  22. JediKnightZarc Jedi Master

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    Wonderful story Cerasi! Keep it up, I can't wait to see what happens next!
  23. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    ********

    The crowd parted as the two Jedi walked into the street which wasn't at all surprising because of their definate diffence in appearance.

    The Crestarians were short in stature and violet in color. They would have reminded us Earthlings of the munchkins from the Wizard of Oz and their color, the color of the boy from Charlie and the Chocolate Factory who turned into blueberry. To Obi-Wan however, they were just fat, little purple people who came up to his waist at the most. How would they ever be able to be inconspicuious if the need arose? Already Qui-Gon had to almost get into a squating position just to fit through the doorway of the cafe.

    "Ah! The Jedi! You've finally arrived!!" cried an excited Chrestarian male who was rushing towards Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan the moment they entered the cafe.

    "Hello." replied Qui-Gon, "I am Qui-Gon Jinn and this is my apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi. And you are?"

    "Oh! How stupid of me! I am Oyclah Narro. This is Icnuo De. She and I will take you to see the Emperor."

    "Alright. Let's be on our way."

    Qui-Gon jimmied his way back throught the doorway.He couldn't help but think that something was out of the ordinary. He could sense the fear hiding beneath the surface of this quiet, little planet. The citizens had a longing in their eyes, as if they were waiting for a saviour. He would have to talk to Obi-Wan about this later.

    Obi-Wan was following his master quietly down the street. He was trying to walk with the same calm demeanor of his mentor, but the stares of the people made his palms sweat and his steps falter. He had never had such an eerie feeling before and it was hard for him to describe it in words. All he knew was that something wasn't right.

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    I think this has to be the longest post I've done so far. I hope you guys appreciate all the time and effort it took for me to write this ( And type, contrary to popular belief)!! :)
  24. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    Very interesting start! I loved the way Qui-Gon told Obi-Wan to go count the droids to make sure none of them had been sucked into outer space! Really, I almost fell off my chair laughing. The way that Obi-Wan is singsonging "Yes Master" and the image of Qui-Gon squatting down to get through the door--hilarious!
  25. Cerasi Jedi Knight

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    UP!!!

    Thanks for the commments Jane Jinn. I really appreciate it. I'm glad that someone caught onto my little jokes! :)
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