Min egen Star Wars Episode III Story

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Note: This is only a draft and not by any means complete.
Please answer what you think so I could make it better.

Episode III ? The Hidden Prophecy (First Draft)

The galaxy is in turmoil with the Clone war raging to its end.
More and more star systems join in the fight against the
Confederacy of Independent Systems who is temporary weakened.

Striking at Count Dooku's hidden base, the Supreme Chancellor
has ordered mass growing of troops to fight in the war.

A Jedi is sent on a mission to assign a very important person who's
Expelled from the Jedi Order ? a person who could help win the war.


EXT Space
Pan to the right to reveal Tatooine
A cruiser sweeps by nearing the planet

EXT Tatooine, Lars Farm
The cruiser lands and Obi-Wan comes out thru the ramp and head for the farm.
Beru Whitesun comes to meet him.

BERU
Hello can I help you with something?
OBI-WAN
Yes, I'm looking for Anakin Skywalker. I was told he would live here with his wife.
BERU
And you are?
OBI-WAN
Oh I'm sorry.
I'm Jedi master Obi-Wan Kenobi.
Anakin is my former apprentice. May I see him?
BERU
Off course. I believe Anakin has mentioned you from time to time.
OBI-WAN
I'm sure he has.
BERU
Well, Anakin is in the courtyard. Please follow me.

Obi-Wan follow Beru thru a door opening leading to the farm.

EXT Tatooine, Lars Farm, Courtyard
On the yard Owen and Anakin is having a conversation
OBI-WAN
Hello I'm Obi-Wan Kenobi
OWEN
My name is Owen
OBI-WAN
Hello Anakin
ANAKIN
Master. What are you doing here? I knew you'd come back some day. I've missed you.
OBI-WAN
I've missed you too. I heard Padmé is having a baby. Congratulations.
ANAKIN
Thanks
OBI-WAN
Can we talk somewhere private?
ANAKIN
Sure. Excuse us (points to Owen)

Anakin and Obi-Wan goes to the Lars garage.

INT Lars Farm, Garage
OBI-WAN
Cutting to... It's really sad that you have been expelled from the Jedi Order because of the secret marriage with Padmé.
I really tried to change their minds to no success.
I don't understand why you did it. What were you thinking about Anakin. The Jedi code forbbi?
ANAKIN (angry)
I don't care about the Jedi Code. All I want to do is to be with Padmé. Even if it means that I'm expelled!
OBI-WAN
I'm sorry to hear that. Why don't you listen to your inner feelings?
ANAKIN
But that's what I'm doing. You don't understand. Why did you come here in the first place? Not to lecture me I think, I know you all to well for that.
OBI-WAN
No I have come here because I?.

Suddenly they are interrupted by Padmé
PADMÉ
Master Obi-Wan.
I'm so glad to see you.!
OBI-WAN
Hello my Lady
I hope everything is alright?
PADMÉ
I could not be any better. I assume you heard about our little baby.
OBI-WAN
Yes. But how will you support yourselves now that Anakin is expelled?
ANAKIN
We'll be fine thanks! (little angry)
PADMÉ
Anakin is right, we'll be fine.
OBI-WAN
I'm sure you will (glancing at Anakin).
PADMÉ
Oh, I almost forgot. Beru sent me to ask you if you want to have dinner with us?
OBI-WAN
That would be nice.

The three begin walking toward the courtyard heading for the dinner table

EXT Tatooine, Lars Farm, Courtyard
OWEN
It's positive the wars is going in the right direction don't you think Anakin?
ANAKIN
I agree. I'm sure the Supreme Chancellor will have his victory over Count Dooku soon.
The Chancellor is a great man.
PADMÉ
I think he's beginning to control the galaxy by force. I have a bad feeling about his ruling.
ANAKIN
Is it so bad that someone strong controls the war? It's better that it's a strong man than a weak one.
PADMÉ
But he's holding the people of the galaxy in a stronghold, don't you see it.
ANAKIN (looking at Padmé angry)
No I don't see it my dearest wife!

There's a brief silence then Anakin begins to talk again
ANAKIN
So my old master why did you come here?
OBI-WAN
I've come here with direct orders from the Chancellor
The Jedi need your help An

 

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yes. lock this one please