NEW: I Miss You (3yrs post-TPM, Obi remembers Qui)

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  1. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Okay guys, here is my latest Fic, hope you like it.

    Title: I Miss You (Thanks to singer Randy Newman for the title)
    Author: Obi the Kid (hlnkid@aol.com)
    Rating: G
    Archive: Sure, why not, just drop me an e-mail.
    Summary: 3 yrs post-TPM, Obi?s POV as he remembers his master.
    Disclaimer: As usual, Qui and Obi belong to George, and I make zero dollars from this.
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    I Miss You

    I shouldn?t dwell on the past. You always told me to keep my focus on the hear and now, where it belongs. I can?t help these things, these feelings of loss. There is such a void in my life.

    I miss you.

    Anakin is doing well; he?s grown quite a bit in the three years since your passing. He asks about you constantly, wanting to know every tiny piece that was Qui-Gon Jinn.

    I share what memories I can with him. There some that I cannot speak of, they are much too emotional for me. And I fear not being able to tell them without losing myself. They are too painful, and those will continue to remain hidden from him.

    It?s funny; I remember these periods in my life and have come to realize how much I miss the little things about you.

    I miss your advice, even when I thought I knew all there was to know and couldn?t possibly benefit from what you had to say. I was a bit cocky at times wasn?t I ?

    I miss the compassion you possessed for all living things. How many pathetic life forms did we pick up during our years of traveling from planet to planet? I lost count a long time ago. I laughed then, questioning your uncanny ability to see the good in everyone and everything. Now, I see that your actions spoke volumes about the man you were. You taught me to respect all life, and for that, I am forever grateful.

    I miss our saber sparring sessions. You were always prepared to teach me something new. I defeated you a few times, though, you never would admit to it. But I saw that look of pride in your eyes on those rare occasions when I just happened to best the greatest swordsman in the Jedi Order.

    I miss your legendary stubbornness and defiance when dealing with the council. I didn?t understand it then, I do today. They tell me how much of you they see in me, my actions, my opinions. I take that as a compliment and feel nothing but pride when they speak the words. Your legacy still carries me. It always will.

    I miss your voice. I?d do anything to hear its soothing tone one last time. To ease my fears and calm my soul.

    I miss your guidance. Do you know what?s it?s like to need a friendly face to look to for help, then turning around to find that person always there. Never once did you turn your back on me when I was sick or injured or just needed a shoulder to lean on, to cry on.

    Most of all, I miss your physical presence in my life. I will never forget the comfort of the hand you would place on my shoulder. Just that simple contact was enough to give me the strength and confidence to do anything. I felt safe with you, nothing could hurt me so long as I stood by your side.

    I miss you.

    Your lightsaber still hangs on my belt. I have built one of my own, but haven?t yet been able to let yours go. Is that childish ? Is it unhealthy for me to hold onto the past ? Perhaps, but it gives me a feeling of home, of family. It?s all I have left of you, providing the strength I need to continue my journey. It reminds me of my training and of the role you took in shaping my life.

    I wish you were here to see what I?ve become. To see how well Anakin is progressing. You?d be proud, I know you would.

    Sometimes I think I feel you near. I wonder if it really is you or just my imagination and hopefulness getting the best of me. Are you watching over me as you promised you would ?

    I should go now. Anakin will be home soon from classes and I promised him that I would tell him the story of our trip to Tikus IV. You remember that mission, when you tried to ?fit in?, had a few too many drinks and ended up with a 3-day hangover. I warned you about drinking that
  2. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Apr 13, 2000
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    doobie, doobie, doo....
  3. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Jul 7, 2000
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    You write the most amazing 'shorties'. Full of incredible warmth and depth. I just love them. Keep it up!!!
  4. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Apr 13, 2000
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    awww, thanks HL, I've tried drafted up longer stories, but they tend to wander to much, so I thought I keep to the "shorts" for now. Thanks so much for letting me know what ya think. You don't know how much I appreciate it!!!


    Obi the Kid
  5. Neon Star Jedi Grand Master

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    Mar 30, 2000
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    That was great, Obi the kid. My mother likes it as well and she doesn't even like SW very much. I agree with Healer Leona, you do write the best stories.
  6. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Cool, Thanks Neon, so Mom's a fan too. Now if we can just get into liking Star Wars !!! :)


    Obi the Kid
  7. Renton Kenobi Force Ghost

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    May 24, 2000
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    *sniff* Raises glass...

    TO Qui-Gon!

    *Starts balling*

    Sorry...I get emotional with these things. Great Job! Very Very Well written.

    Yousa do good thing!
  8. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    LOL !!! Cheers and thanks Renton.
  9. Tenel'Ka Jedi Knight

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    Apr 5, 2000
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    that was great as usual. I (and I'm sure others) would LOVE to hear more about the 3-day hangover. And Qui-Gon whining?!? It would b great if you could write a fic about it! (hint hint!!!)
  10. Jedi-Jade Force Ghost

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    Nov 21, 1999
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    *Sniff* That was great! *Sniff*
  11. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    Feb 11, 2000
    star 4
    I like it, I like it.
  12. Deborah Jedi Knight

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    That was just beautiful...
  13. light_sabe_r Jedi Master

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    Beautiful! Just Beuatiful
  14. Alli-Wan Jedi Knight

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    "I've tried drafted up longer stories, but they tend to wander to much, "

    Tell me about it. Same problem. Maybe I should try a "shorty"

    Beautiful work, a pleasure to read. Looking forward to more of your short pieces (or longer ones.) Excellent. --AWK
  15. Jedi McGregor's girl Jedi Master

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    Aug 27, 1999
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    I loved that story. It was just so cool. I can't think of any better way to put it, it was just great. I loved it so much. Please write something else soon.

    Jedi McGregor's girl
  16. Jedi Shali Jedi Knight

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  17. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Apr 13, 2000
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    Thanks guys for the feedback, it helps inspire me to write more. I'll have to work on a story about that mission to Tikus IV, several people have asked for that...it'll take some thinking though...

    In the meantime, for everyone who didn't get a chance to check out my other stories, here are the addresses for them. Please let me know what you think. They are all short stories.

    Thanks!! Obi the Kid

    For a Short Time More (my first ever fic)
    http://boards.theforce.net/message_flat.asp?topic=221913&start=221921#221921

    Beyond the Shadow (2nd fic)
    http://boards.theforce.net/message_flat.asp?topic=222669&start=222670#222670

    Loss of a Friend
    http://boards.theforce.net/message_flat.asp?topic=456805&start=461436#461436

    Bant's Gift (sequel to Loss)
    http://boards.theforce.net/message_flat.asp?topic=456805&replies=5


    The Blue Banana (humor, my very odd fic)
    http://boards.theforce.net/message_flat.asp?topic=466074&start=469721#469721

    See ya......



  18. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    get back there...to the top !!!
  19. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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  20. Jedi McGregor's girl Jedi Master

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    Aug 27, 1999
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    You write great stuff Obi the Kid. I am going to go check out those other stories of yours. Keep up the great work.

    Jedi McGregor's girl
  21. Obi-wan's Padawan Jedi Knight

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    Apr 11, 2000
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    This is a really touching story. I will definitely check out your other stories and I would also love to hear more about Qui-Gon's hangover and whining.
  22. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Apr 13, 2000
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    The story about the mission to Tikus IV has been drafted. I need to do some editing and such, and may have it posted by the end of this week.

    Wow !! I made 2 pages !! Thanks guys !!!
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