Not so pathetic lifeform (JA fan fic)

Come on under Bastet and Kaylla Norn, there's room for everyone. *shuffles over*

*oof, watch your elbows. Ow! That's my foot!*

Hmm, I'm in a cretive mood, maybe I should go back to my fic. As might I add should you! More please!

 

Hey...want to see a picture of the monster???

It was drawn by Darth Ratsputin. It's really cool!
here's the address:

http://www.angelfire.com/ok3/TenelKa/images/creature3.gif

Let us know what you think. This was just a quick sketch, but you get the
idea.

 

AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!
That drawing is really kewl! But I would HATE to have it facing me!!!! (I'd die of fright) Those three had better rruuunnnn!!! That big open mouth reminds me of a vacuum cleaner for some reason. Is it gonna simply suck them up with a big *sluuuuurrrrp*, so the rest of the story will take place in its stomach? Hmmm......
Can't wait for mmmmooooorrrrrrrreeeeee!!!!!!

 

I'm having trouble accessing page six, so this is just a test. While I'm here I may as well ask for MORE! And up this : )

 

oooooo help... you definitley need to move over Imzadi... please... although I'm not sure your desk will protect us from that! And your right Tenelka... a post there was... I definitley need to be more in tune with the moment... what a shock... what a horror... epp... please let it not see us... outchhow's elbow is that!

 

Well if you'd move over! LOL!

More soon? Up!

 

Well, I'm working on it, but I've been really busy lately, so hopefully in the next few days, if not sooner. My goal is for Saturday evening.

Glad you all are enjoying it! Again I'm sorry about how long it was put aside, but Darth Ratsputin DID move across the country, and can only talk French now (emersion university) so he hasn't had much spare time. BUT I DO plan on having regular posts, so we can be done with this story. It's fun, but with other priorities, the one-parters are easier to work on.

 

MORE!!!

 

Wow, actually I was a little surprised that Tenel'Ka posted that monster sketch. If I knew she was going to do that, I'd have definitely made it look a lot BIGGER!

Guess I'll have to draw another one, maybe with our heroes in the foreground running for their fragile little lives.

 

Hey Darth R.!!! Yah, I thought the drawing would be kinda cool to show our readers.
Hey, here's a quick thing that can work into the story later, or it can be ignored.

*****
Obi-Wan sat down at his desk in the quarters he shared with Qui-Gon. It
had been one week since their mission, and it was all so fresh in his mind.
He took out an old ashioned stylus and pad, then began drawing. He drew
the hidious creature that they had seen and nearly killed him.

Once he finished a rough drawing, he held it out, and studied it. It wasn't
nearly as terrifing looking as the real thing had been, but it was close.
*****

And that was the drawing I gave you the link to! Okay... not REALLY,
but /maybe/ Obi sent it to Darth Ratsputins computer!

Later!

 

Oh come on!!! Now you're just torturing us! *pout* Is it saturday night yet?! *whine*

Imzadi

 

Hee Hee!!!

 

Hee heee haaa haaaahaa! *choke...couch cough*
Mmmmmmmoooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeee
sssssoooooooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnn
pppppllllllllleeeeeeaaaaaaasssssseeeeee!!!!!!!
Kay?

 

Sorry this is shorter than I promised, but there is one part I have to talk to
Darth Ratsputin about, and he's not in this evening, so here is what I DO
have done. After all, I promised to post tonight, and here I am keeping my
word! See...I could be a Jedi! Okay...you can all stop laughing now!!!

******
As the enormous creature pulled itself from the planet's core, it
stopped momentarily to let out one more of its glass shattering screams,
then made a hideous gagging sound. It wrenched its head up towards
the blackening sky, a gurgling sound came from its mouth and seemed to
work it's way upwards, suddenly black liquid was shot into the sky from
its mouth.

Something appeared at the sides of the creature's mouth that after
a moment the Jedi and Datree were able to identify as arms, they looked like
the arms coming from the creature's neck, only larger. The beast's head
lurched down towards the ground as the clawed hands slammed onto the
ground, taking a strong hold.

The eyes of the creature widened as it let out an incredibly long scream,
the mouth stretched wide open and inside another set of teeth could be
seen, withering. The inner teeth pushed themselves forward as the
creature continued to scream. All at once, it's sides split open, a
surprisingly small amount of black blood slowly oozing from the skin. The
creature shook, then completely tore apart as an identical, larger version
of itself hatches out of it, it's former self going limp around the neck like
a pair of pants dropped to the floor, lying still around the ankles.

The new creature screamed as it seemed to come to life, this time
the scream made the Jedi and Datree's ears ringing for several minuites
leaving them disoriented. The monster began consuming the landscape,
with twice as much power, where it's previous self had left off.

Beneath the black raging sky, Qui-Gon, still unable to move, screamed
at Obi-Wan, trying to regain his padawans focus. "Obi-Wan! We must
do something!" the master shouted.

"I still can't move master!" Obi-Wan called back.

"We must use the Force. It is our only option right now. Concentrate
and help me move my lightsaber from my belt and throw it at the
creature." Qui-Gon instructed. The two centered their attention on the
weapon, willing it to move, but even the seemingly simple task did not
work. It didn't even budge the lightsaber a bit.

"The creature is erupting with the dark side!" Obi-Wan shouted. "It's
too powerful, the Force isn't even responding to us!"

Qui-Gon looked at his apprentice for a long moment, then to the
creature, who screams as another larger self hatches out of the previous
one, growing larger and more powerful each time, and consuming more
of the planet. The canyon was also getting closer to them.
******

Well??? We would LOVE some feedback!!!

 

Aaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!! The thing is getting bigger and bigger and bigger and won't stop growing?! Yikes! What can the Jedi possibly do to stop it?!
Hmmm, did Darth Datree's force lightening awaken the thing, then, since its using the dark side? Eeeep! What's gonna happen?!?!
Can't wait for mmmmooooorrrrreeee!!!!

 

Okay...I'm insulted! Only ONE comment?!?!? (Thanks Bastet!!!) I mean COME
ON people!!!
I went bustin' my back last night to post, and only ONE comment.
BTW, Last night I got a phone call from Darth R. and he asked: "did you post yet?"
I said: "post?"
He said: "yah, you promised to have a post out tonight."
I said: "OH, NO!!!" Then I said: "I gotta go! BYE!" then I practically flew up to my room, and began furiously typing, and luckily had enough for a okay size
post. And what do I get??? ONE reply!!!

ANYWAY... sorry abut that, I never slept much last night.

Any more comments???

 

Wow, Tenel'Ka, calm down!

Anyway, when are you planning on posting the rest?

(by the way, I thought this part was pretty intense. bon travaille!)

 

Oh hey, when I said: "withering" in the last post, I meant: "writhing"
Sorry 'bout that!

 

My apologies for taking so long, I was hiding under my desk. All I can say is EEEWWWW!!!!! And maybe a bit of screaming as well.

Seriously I really liked how you described it all. You guys are great at building tension.

Imzadi

 

Boy, that was powerful stuff! I could just see the creature shedding its skin, and the black liquid shooting out of its mouth. Zikes! And the poor Jedi aren't able to move? Chomp, chomp, good-bye Obi-Wan, good-bye Qui-Gon. Hey, that'd be cool if they were swallowed whole, discovered that they could move again, and then slit their way out with their lightsabers, killing the beast as they emerge, sopping but alive, from its very bowels.

I know that's not what you have planned, but that's the only thing I could think of.

 

Ewwwwww!!! GROSS Jane Jinn!!! Though...it would be kinda cool!

You're right! That's NOT what we have planned, but I still like the mental image
I got from your idea!

I'm going to a Backstreet boys listening party tonight. In the largest mall in the WORLD! :West Edmonton Mall. (I won VIP passes on the Radio) I'm not a huge fan, but it should be cool anyway, considering I'll be one of the first people in North America to listen to their new 'Black and Blue' C.D.
Point being, I won't be able to work on the story tonight, but hopefully
tomorrow!

Later, Y'all!

 

How about, since the Jedi aren`t able to move, chomp, chomp, good-bye Obi-Wan, good-bye Qui-Gon. They get swallowed whole, discover they can move again, and then ignite their lightsabers to begin slitting their way out of the beast. But then they hear a voice from behind them and they turn around to see the Backstreet Boys in the creature`s stomach with them. Now they must decide: do they fight their way out, ridding the world of the intimate evil that is this dark side creature, saving the Backstreet Boys in the process, or do they shut off their lightsabers, sacrificing themselves and the planet to rid the world of the ultimate evil that is the Backstreet Boys?

Maybe only a Jedi is qualified to make such a monumentous decision!


(btw, I`m kidding. All you BB fans, hey, laugh. And come back for Tenel`Ka next post! Though who knows, if she likes that listening party too much, maybe TENEL`KA will be offended and won`t talk to me again...)

 

You're right, I'm NOT talking to you! ;D

Hey everyone, guess what!!! The party was GREAT!!! And they were drawing names for prizes, and I won the second largest prize!!! A BSB T-shirt, that isn't available in stores, and 6 C.D.'s!!! (Not 'Black and Blue' though. ) I got 3 singles, and their 3 older C.D.'s. It was fun. Make that REALLY fun. Even for someone who isn't a huge fan of them!

ANYWAY...enough of that. No more comments???