"Oafy-Wan "Jedi Apprentice[Maybe] 7/28 sample new story

Boy, Plo Koon really has a stick up his.....well I think we get the point that he does not like Qui or Obi.

I liked Qui's explanation of Obi's inability to properly release his anger into the force. And that he admitted that all people(jedi included) struggle with anger on a regular basis. It would have been nice if he had used Plo Koon as an example

Can't wait to see what the council decides. Good post ewen

 

Well, great posts! I like te way Qui-Gon defends Obi. He doesn´t excuse him, but remids the council who he is.

But this Plo Koon is such a dump one, he should throug out of the council immediately!

NEED MORE SOON !!!!


Angel

 

ditto Shanobi

I can't wait for Monday

 

Yes, I have to agree. Can't wait for Monday..Is Bruck going to get his?

 

Waiting is a crual thing, isn´t it?

Can´t wait for the coucil´s decision!

NEED MORE SOON !!!!

Angel

 

Ohh... Plo Koon really has some... problems... right...

Sorry I haven't managed to post on the last couple, ewen. As always it was wonderful! Can't wait until Monday!

 

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The dismissal of the four Jedi?s left them in the anteroom of the temple chambers. They waited for the ruling by the council. The silence between them was all that could be heard in the large empty room.


The same padawan page that ushered them out returned to escort them back in.
They returned to hear the council?s decision.


Yoda wasted no time when the four reentered.


?Decision made it has been. Padawan Chun step forward you will.?

The curt demand of Master Yoda to Bruck was short, crisp, and painfully to the point.

Bruck felt a twinge of apprehension but dared not show it.


?Not the first time it is before this council with same problem, you have been. Reluctant we are to say coincidence it is. Three demerits on your permanent record not to be removed your punishment is?.

A gasp from Chun and his master could be heard as it echoed through the hollowness of the enormous Council chambers.


Plo Koon sat in his chair and squirmed as if he were uncomfortable. But even he seemed reluctant to say more. His argument for Bruck had already gone unheard by the other three Council members.

It looked like Ramina wanted to object then he stopped. He was not willing to anger the Council further either.

Bruck stepped back in place beside his master.


Yoda looked at the ?little one? whose searching eyes revealed so much apprehension. Yoda felt an immediate urge to ease his worry.


?Obi-Wan Kenobi step forward you will.?

Obi made the two steps forward on trembling legs. Legs so weak he thought he might collapse.

Yoda motioned the boy further and directed Obi to kneel before him. Their faces were within two feet of each other and their eyes met. Yoda being a powerful Jedi sent a wave of comfort to the boy and gave him a wink. Obi thought he winked or he sent a mind suggestion of a wink to him. Whether it was an actual wink or a mind suggestion it brought instant solace to Kenobi..

?Fear us you should not Padawan Kenobi. Here we are to make your journey to knighthood easier. That is, if wise enough you are to listen.?

Obi started to nod his agreement,but remembered his master?s teachings. He respectively raised his head and properly addressed the council.

?Yes Master Yoda. I will listen to the masters' instructions and I am not afraid now.?

The smaller apprentice spoke with the little timid voice he had used when first confronted by Qui-Gon in this very chamber.

A flash of memory of that day skirted Jinn?s mind and he watched his padawan with Master Yoda.

Obi had regained some of his strength he had lost earlier in his lower extremities. He was no longer afraid his legs would fail and he that would fall flat on his face.

?Step in the right direction you are taking young one. Punished though you will be. First offence for you it is. It has been deemed by the council that not before your midclorians are totally normal will demerits be handed out to you. Hope, I have never necessary that will be. Want to see you here again I do not."

Master Yoda paused for a moment as if to give the boy time for the words spoken to sink in.


?As for your punishment, much meditation the council expects from you. Later when time you have, work in the kitchen you will. Lots of potatoes to peel and pots to wash there always is.?


Obi rose and returned to his master. He was relieved that the punishment had not been harsh.


Mace spoke up before the masters and their apprentices had time to leave.


?We have also decided it would be wise for the two padawans to truly learn how to work together. Neither was blameless in this confrontation.?


Yoda nodded in agreement.

?Work together you should. Mission you will be sent on together?.


Gasps could be heard from at least three of the standing Jedi?s. The fourth, Obi-Wan had shrunk back in sheer terror at the thought of it. Bruck was not only against him. Obi felt Chun was not too hot on his master either. What if he did something to try to make Maste

 

What's going to happen on this mission? I can't imagine those four not getting into some kind of trouble, when they can't even get along. Great post, ewen . This is really a great story.

 

Wonderful post. Glad to see that the entire council wasn't taken in by Brucks games this time. But sending them together on a mission? That is punishment!

Anxiously awaiting Wednesday

 

It's nice to see the council is compassionate towards Obi-Wan while his midichlorians come back. And Bruck got everything he deserved...

Hmm... Obi-Wan and Bruck on the same ship- coraperating with each other? I have a bad feeling about this...

Can't wait until Wensday!

 

I'm not sure about this. They are either going to kill each other or actually come together and work like real jedi.

The latter is too much to hope for me thinks. I wonder who will get kidnapped and tortured..Obi?....Bruck?....Obi and Bruck?

Post soon ewen. This has galactic incident written all over it

 

warning;corporal punishment,but very mild.

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* Upon the arrival of the four Jedi?s to Alderaan at the King?s palace.****************



Introductions were preformed. Master Ramina and his padawan had never met the king and queen of Alderaan. But he was all too aware of Qui-Gon?s friendship with the King and Queen. He wanted this mission to be one of failure for Obi-Wan. His padawan had suffered the indignation of being hauled before the council again and he felt it was Obi-Wan?s fault. If his failure were witnessed by one of Qui-Gon?s deepest and dearest friends that failure would be that much sweeter.

A trickle of guilt passed through the now vengeful master. As quickly as the quilt appeared Master Ramina managed to tamp it down. His unbalanced reasoning for the vengeance was justified he thought .His padawan had been humiliated by Jinn?s apprentice.



The King gave each master/padawan set a large ornately decorated room. Obi had loved it here last time and this time he thought would be no different.


****** The Jedi pairs retired to their respective rooms after last-meal...This mission was different from the last, it required actually work. There was little time to entertain or be entertained.

Qui noticed his padawan sitting on the bed, obviously daydreaming.

?Obi I assume you have finished your extra meditations?

Meditations were part of Obi?s punishment. There was also ceiling to floor cleaning of their apartment his master had planned for Obi upon return to the Temple.


?Sorry Master. I was just thinking about Bail. He was so interested in Bruck?s expert abilities; we had very little time to catch up on what?s been going on.

Jinn, ?Bruck does have Jedi abilities that far exceed his age mates. Bail is just in awe of that. He?s always held a fascination for the Jedi.?


?Well Master Ramina could not wait to enlighten King Organa of Chun?s talents with the saber.?

Obi spoke, hoping it would draw criticism of Master Ramina?s attitude from his master. He thought Qui-Go might agree that Chun?s master was too boastful when it came to Bruck.

Qui-Gon snapped the towel he had been holding from drying his thick long mane of hair toward Obi-Wan.

?Sounds like a case of jealousy of your friends attention being diverted from you. Is that the case Obi-Wan??

?Master don?t be ridiculous. I?m not jealous. [In truth it was more than jealousy.] ?I mean we did have things to catch up on.?

?Don?t worry imp. Next time we have free time I?m sure Bail with not be as sidetracked. He?s always been infatuated of younger Jedi?s and their abilities. He might even be a little envious of them. Because his destiny is already plotted for him. One day he will replace his father here as king. He?s being groomed for that and that alone.?


?I thought Master Ramina was exhibiting too much pride in his padawan.?

Obi still tried to get Master Jinn to agree Master Ramina was in the wrong.


?Obi, you can?t blame Master Ramina for bragging on his apprentice. Even I am impressed by Bruck?s advanced abilities. While having too much pride is frowned up on amongst Jedi. It is definitely not precluded from our lives.?

?Were you like that Master? I mean did you brag about Xanatos??

Dark memories and old pain came to Jinn as he thought of how to answer Obi?s question.

?I suppose I was no different. I too was guilty of prideful thoughts and boastful comments.?


Jinn continued to linger with his past thoughts of Xani.

Obi was now able to feel things sometimes through the bond with his master. Right now he felt twinges of hurt and loneliness from his master.

\\I understand why he still hurts with old memories, but why is he lonely. He has me. Maybe I can?t fill Xanatos? shoes. Maybe no one can. He was like a son to master. I guess maybe the depth of our bond will not be that strong although Master Jinn said it would be even stronger. I can?t hold a candle to ?XANI?.\\


?Enough of idle thoughts.

 

Oh, wonderful, compelling suspense, Ewen - and I can't wait for more. Too long? Are you nuts? It couldn't possibly be too long.

And I must say, you are reinforcing my occasional observation that Qui-Gon can really be thick-headed when he so chooses. How can any grown man leave a child to dwell on his perceived FAILURE at such a tender age?

It's a bloody miracle the kid didn't just turn Sith on the spot.

Nice going. Keep it coming.

 

Nope, not too long.

You know, the council really should require their masters to take some type of training in child psychology. Qui's flying blind here. Bruck's master is not doing too much better either.

Bruck's master is turning a blind eye, while Qui is almost too much of an emotional basket case himself. Out of the 4 I don't know who is acting more the child!

Force help them all

 

You're right about Qui-Gon.He is flying blind.I love Q/O together but in Phantom Menace Jinn proved what an idiot he could be when he tossed Obi to the side and took Anakin.

I guess that is why we still like to make him kinda dense when it comes to a Master/ apprentice relationship.


Of course we FF readers and writers love the mush when Obi shows him how blind he is!!!!!!

PEACE Ewen

 

Wow. I love all the conflict, and it's definitely not too long. With all the emotions spinning out of control, Qui's neglecting to really listen to the Force. The foreboding of approaching danger is great, and it looks like things are heading into dangerous waters. Keep up the wonderful work, ewen .

 

You have me wondering if the tremors that Qui-Gon feels are just an upset little padawan, or something much more ominous??

 

poor obiwan,,, poor quigon,,, poor us allll!

 

If anyone is out there reading.I will have the next post ready in an hour.

It's just sitting here and so am I,so I thought I would go ahead and post today instead of Friday.Back in a few.

PEACE Ewen

 

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Masters Jinn, Ramina and padawan Chun made their way up the steep cliffs. They stopped several times to allow the younger Jedi time to catch his breath. It was indeed a feat just to climb the jagged edged rocks.

Although Qui-Gon tried to stay focused his mind drifted back to the argument he and Obi-Wan had engaged in.

\\This difficult climb more than justifies my reasons why I left my apprentice at the palace. Even Chun with practiced force abilities is having a rough time of it. I can correct the rift between Obi and I when I get back. I only hope I can straighten out the other part. Maybe Yoda was right; I should have never used physical punishment on the child.\\

A crackling sound of a twig indicated that the Jedi were not alone. Jinn was drawn out of his thoughts and immediately went into a defensive mode.

?Ramina get your padawan to the ledge just above. It might have better footing there.?

Jinn shouted the words. He abruptly turned to the direction he had heard the noise.

The other two Jedi scurried to the large ledge as Jinn watched their backs.


The Denitar bush that grew from the side of the cliffs deflected the first blaster shot that was directed at Master Jinn. The next shots came within seconds of the other but Jinn was ready. He had drawn his glowing green light saber as he whirled around with his Jedi robe billowing in the wind and managed to deflect the next blaster shots himself.

?We have come here in peace. I am Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn of Coruscant. Why are you attacking us?

The sinister gravel sounding voice of a Hutt spoke up.

?I am Jitar the Hutt Master Jinn. You sir are trespassing on my land.?

?I was not aware that a Hutt owned part of King Organa?s land. Especially the section that holds all the silver rich laden veins on Alderaan.?


The grotesque looking Hutt was angered by Jinn?s words.

?Aye, I see the King has set the Jedi on me.?

Jitar the Hutt stepped from the shadows of a hidden cave.

?I have heard the Jedi are honorable so I trust you will not slice me into with that impressive looking weapon you have if we just talk?

The Hutt displayed an oily smirk on his cellulite-layered face.

Jitar nodded toward the still activated glowing green saber that Jinn held .


?Are you the King?s army now??



Jinn spoke with confidence yet with a warning tone to his voice.


?My friends and I have been sent here to investigate the raids on the king?s silver mines. I don?t suppose you would know anything about them would you? In answer to your question, we never engage in a war or battle except as protection. Can the same be said for you??

Jitar stood toe to toe with the feline mass of Master Qui-Gon Jinn. He did not fear the Jedi and Qui-Gon saw his assuredness and confidence in beady coal black eyes.

?TSS, TSS Master Jinn I have no fight with you. I am also not a thief. I?m just here to do some escavating work on the cliffs. They have been known to hold diamonds in the crevices deep in the cliffs walls.?

Jinn did not believe a word the Hutt spoke.

Ramina also found it hard to believe and voiced it to the Hutt as he yelled down below.

?Any imbecile knows that the diamonds have been cleaned out of these cliffs years ago. The only thing left is the silver. In either case they belong to King Organa, not you.?

Jitar shot a threatening glare to Ramina and Chun. The boy had never confronted a Hutt before and it was unsettling.

Jitar once again spoke.

?You tell King Organa I will be in touch. Until then Master Jinn I give you leave. You may go, but as I must warn you do not return. The Jedi are not welcome on these cliffs. Harm might befall you next time.?

Ramina wanted to object, but Jinn waved him off. Padawan Chun was more than a little ruffled that Jinn could dismiss his master so wantonly but said nothing.

?I think we should return to the palace Master Ramina. I have a feeling that the safety of those there could be jeopardized because o

 

At first, I was surprised by Ramina's encouragement to Qui-Gon about finding Obi, but Ramina is a Jedi and he must act like one sometimes, and this action also shows a new facet of Ramina's character, and makes him seem more real.

But I can't help but feel upset with Bruck for telling the Hutts that Obi was the King's son. Now Obi's in trouble as a result. I hope Bruck gets in trouble for this, but I don't think Ramina is going to do anything about it. Great post, ewen .

 

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I don;t know if Bruck will get in trouble. But I was happy to see his master even considered that Bruck could have offered Obi-Wan as a sacrafice as a form of revenge. Maybe he realies his padawan isn't so perfect after all,

 

Poor Obi, the abuse seems to only get worse for him just when you think it will get better. Ramina knows about their soul bond, and why Master Jinn chose Obi, but he can't or won't try to get past the hurt and wounded pride of his Padawan-Obi's mother leaving him and the Order. PEOPLE GET YOURSELVES TOGETHER!!!! SAVE OBI!!!! HUTT'S ARE BAD! I REPEAT BAD!!!!! btw love your story ewen 7

 

Great angst, Ewen - and very gripping, visually. Poor little Obi - looks like he can't ever get a break.

More soon, please!