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"Oidhche et Fàiredàn Trilogy I: Aftershock" Completed 11 July!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by Dantana Skywalker, Jul 11, 2002.

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  1. Runaway_Shadow

    Runaway_Shadow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! now I have to wait

    That's okay, have to study anyways :(
     
  2. ChaseherChiss

    ChaseherChiss Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Just upping!

    Can't wait for more of this story !!!

    I'm way into it!

    Chase
     
  3. sith_lady17

    sith_lady17 Jedi Master star 3

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    Good posts. :)
    More please! ;)
     
  4. SWMara

    SWMara Jedi Youngling star 3

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    :eek: You let Anakin be dead in this one? :_|
     
  5. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Here's a nice long one for all of you. :)

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    Dantana spent three straight days in the bacta tank. When she finally emerged, Katrael helped her dress in a soft, white robe and tried to help her with her hair. When it became apparent that the task was impossible, her daughter cut it. Luke watched with pain, recalling when his sister had shaved her head over a year ago, losing her abundant dark hair. Dantana's was easily as long.

    Mara insisted on being in the room with Luke when he was with Dana, as he called her. The wounded woman hadn't spoken since being removed from the bacta tank, and only looked at her daughter. Luke had already noticed the resemblance to Mara, and so had his wife.

    Katrael finished using the vibroblade to cut Dantana's hair and set the blade down. she ran her fingers through the carefully trimmed locks, now not much longer than chin-length. "Mathaire?" she queried. "Thu na'bha bhogh obhebharach?" You are well enough for visitors?

    Dantana looked up at Katrael and nodded. She motioned for Katrael to leave, then, as the door slid shut behind the girl, looked to Luke.

    "Lucais," she murmured, finally speaking. "And Mara Jade. I had not thought to ever see you again."

    Luke didn't respond to that. He glanced at Mara, then back to Dana. "Zekk explained finding you on the worldship at Myrkr. How did you get there?"

    Dana fiddled with the hem of one sleeve, then said, "Gaeina was taken. It was not expected. We weren't on the path for the invasion. But they came anyway, arriving in the sky one morning. They gave us a little warning, asking for Jedi, if there were any. I instructed Kaeta to take everything in our home and leave. Though she put everything in the ship as I asked, she refused to leave me, so I gave her my lightsaber. We were still arguing when the invaders attacked our village. Kaeta put up a valliant fight, but finally left when I told her to find you. I raised her knowing who her father was. I was honest with my child."

    She gave a slight cough, then turned her gaze to Mara. "Et thu, Mara Jade, bhan na Skyewali? Mharich thu dohn thuar thortha dearch thuar clanna?" And you, Mara Jade, wife of Skywalker? Would you give your life for your child's safety?

    "Sea, Dantana, et e mharich dohn mo fearan," Mara snapped, then jerked, startled. Luke looked at her in complete surprise. In perfect Fellescae, she'd said, "Yes, Dantana, and I would for my husband."

    Before anyone could speak, the door slid open and Han and Leia walked in. They looked at Dantana, then at Mara, and back. Leia's expression was filled with consternation. Han was just flat-out shocked.

    "Sith blood!" he burst out, using an expression one of his kids had used recently. "What's going on here?"

    Luke looked at his brother-in-law and sister. "They look remarkably alike, don't they?"

    "Hell, kid, they could be twins!" Han burst out.

    Dana stood up and walked to stand next to Mara, who was a little taken aback by this. But once they were side-by-side, the resemblance was even more pronounced. Save for Mara's green eyes and additional two inches or so in height, and the differences caused by different experiences and illnesses, they were perfect mirrors of each other. Leia sucked in her breath sharply.

    Dana turned to Mara, no longer paying attention to the others. "Mara, you have no memory of your family?"

    The other woman shook her head. "No. All I know is that I was taken from them at a very young age and raised by the Empire."

    "You speak Fellescae as well as I do," Dana said, glancing at Luke. "Well, almost. Better than Skywalker there."

    She returned to the bunk she'd been sitting on when everyone had come in. "Let me tell you a story. It begins 42 years ago, on a planet near the Uncharted Regions of the galaxy, third from the sun Braetin, called Gaeina. My father had been a warrior in the Clone Wars, on the side of the Old Republic. Our people were very secluded, having spent four thousand years by ourselves. After the Clo
     
  6. Runaway_Shadow

    Runaway_Shadow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    hhhmmm...it makes sense now... I think.
     
  7. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Guess what? I got the KAJSU website up! It's the top link in my sig.

    Dana
     
  8. Dantana Skywalker

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    Dantana watched Luke and Mara leave, following Han and Leia. Seeing Luke and Mara together in person had been like a fist to her gut. Only after the door slid shut did she allow herself to cry.

    After a few minutes, Dantana silently called her daughter to her. Katrael arrived with Dantana's lightsaber. She held it out to her mother.

    "Thank you for caring for it," the older woman said in Fellescae.

    "It was an honour, Mother." Katrael sat on the bunk next to Dana. "How can you stand to see Father and Mara together?"

    Dana looked at her daughter, then sighed. Quietly, she told her daughter everything she'd told Luke and the others. Katrael sat silently beside her, fiddling with a silver ring she'd been wearing for several months, but actually belonged to her mother.

    "So she is my aunt, as well as my stepmother," Katrael muttered.

    Dana reached over and took the ring from her daughter. "I believe I will take that back, now, daughter."

    "Mother, the ring. It's a union ring," Katrael burst out. "For a marriage. And you've been wearing it as long as I can remember."

    Dana looked at the ring as she slid it on her finger. "I know, Kaeta. I know."

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    Dana
     
  9. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Hey, where are my readers today? :(

    Dana
     
  10. Jedi_Liz

    Jedi_Liz Jedi Grand Master star 6

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    okay, I *wasn't* going to post on this, only read it *until* you did something bad to Mara (like Emmi Darklighter said about how she would read until......)

    Its getting very interesting.....but I do not agree with the direction it seems to be going nor with the fact that you want Kyp and Jaina together.............

     
  11. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Hey, I don't agree with the whole Jag/Jaina thing, so what's the big deal?

    Try to keep in mind that it's FICTION! It's not real. It's just a story I'm writing. It has no official bearing on the Star Wars universe.

    Nothing really bad happens to Mara. She's okay in the end.

    Dana
     
  12. Master_Jaina1011

    Master_Jaina1011 Jedi Master star 4

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    hey you got yourself another reader. Interesting, Mara and her family. now Luke is really meesed up! Cool!
     
  13. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    I do believe I specialise in really, really, really messed up people . . .

    There are some parts in this story that I'm really eager to post, so I'm going to post several segments right now.

    Dana

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    Mara paced back and forth in their quarters, while Ben slept. Luke sat on the edge of their bed and watched her. "I don't like her, Luke. It's just too- I don't care if she's my sister. I just met her, so I don't have any ties to her."

    "Mara-"

    She whirled on him, eyes spitting green fire. "I can tell you're still attracted to her, Skywalker. You don't have to deny it. I can tell. Just . . . stay away from her."

    "Mara," he tried again. "She's the mother of my daughter, and one of my first students. I'll admit I'm a little confused right now, but I'm married to you. Okay?"

    She calmed a little. "Please, for right now, just stay away from her. I have a bad feeling about this."

    Luke stood and wrapped his arms around her. "Mara, come to bed."

    But even as he drew her down with him, he was picturing blue eyes.

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    The ring Dantana wore on her left hand, according to the custom of her people, was worn and scratched, its once-smooth surface battle-scarred. Tradition dictated that the wearer, always the female, design and manufacture the ring. The style was that of Kaeta ni Oboshi's union ring, designed upon her marriage to Lakus ap Grydd. All following union rings had followed the pattern, Dantana's included. But Dantana was far from skilled in most manners of technology; Luke had built her lightsaber, for the most part. She could draw, and write, but just about anything else, she had a difficult time doing.

    For this ring, however, she had struggled and even bled--once, when she cut her finger on a sharp edge of an engraving tool. The top of the ring had a symbol, always individual to the united pair the ring represented. Hers was a broken circle, open at the top, with a V shape touching the bottom of the circle, point directly below the break in the curve. The ends of the V extended past the edge of the circle. It stood for S, for Skywalker--Skyewali in her language--and U, for Uiletor.

    Apparently, though, this ring did not mean the same to Luke as it did to her. He either did not remember, or did not care. True, nearly twenty years had passed, but she had remembered. Having Kaeta there had been a constant reminder, but to be honest, she hadn't needed it. Every time she'd closed her eyes and dreamt, it was of Luke.

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  14. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Wanted this part in a section of its own. Here's where things really start getting crappy for Luke . . .

    Dana

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    Luke turned away from the viewport. "You realise that things are completely different now."

    "Really? I hadn't noticed," Dantana replied dryly. "Oh! Where am I? This isn't Gaeina!"

    He found himself smiling, in spite of himself. This was the first opportunity in nearly three weeks that they'd been abel to talk without Mara present. With a sigh, he walked over to where she reclined on the sleepcouch in her quarters on the Nubian. "I'm still absolutely amazed that I have a daughter, who's almost the same age as my niece and nephew. I never thought . . ."

    "No, you didn't. You never considered, in anything, what I might possibly want or need. Or have to do." She sat up, swinging her legs over the edge of the bed. "When you left, you didn't stp to think about the fact that you might have a child. I realised just after you left that I carried your children. If you hadn't been so enamored of the idea to start an academy right then, you probably would have realised it, too.

    "You were thinking only of yourself, what you wanted, what you felt you needed to do."

    "Dana." He shook his head. "I needed to start the academy then. It was the right thing to do."

    "And not giving me the time to get my affairs sorted out and come with you? You wanted me to drop everything and go with you, which is something I couldn't do. I lied to Kaeta, and told her that you wanted to stay, if I wouldn't go."

    He flinched.

    Changing the subject, she asked, "So what, precisely, did you tell Mara about us? Or did you just ignore our union?"

    "I told Mara about us. She knows we were engaged-"

    "Engaged?! Merely engaged?!"

    "Look, Dana, I don't know what your people's laws are on betrothal, but I'm married to Mara now, and-"

    She stood up. "No, Luke, I'm afraid that's incorrect. You see, you've been married to me for eighteen years. By New Republic and Fellescae laws, I am your wife."

    He sat down abruptly. "What?"

    Dana crossed her arms and glared at him. "Don't tell me you've forgotten. Our union ceremony? Remember that? We were married."

    "No, we weren't. You told me that was a betrothal ceremony, or something."

    "I said no such thing!"

    Luke shook his head violently. "Well, I didn't understand, then."

    "I thought the concept was fairly simple," she said. "We stood before my sister, the senior priestess, and she asked if I would have you as my husband, and I said yes. Then she asked you if you'd take me as your wife, and you agreed. Then she pronounced us husband and wife."

    "Is that what she said? My Fellescae wasn't that good."

    "It still isn't." Dana stalked over to the viewport. After several moments, she whirled around and pointed at him. "You should have realised what that was before it took place, Luke. I thought you understood. You're the one that asked me to marry you. So we did. I explained to you everything about it. Now you tell me you didn't know. That's so absurd it's almost amusing."

    "Does it still make it valid if I didn't understand?"

    "Yes, Luke, I'm afraid it does. You were perfectly coherent when you said 'I do'. That makes it legal. And, for your information, abandonment in Fellescae law doesn't constitute divorce. And by the New Republic's laws, I would have had to file for divorce. I never did. We're still married."

    He shoved a hand through his greying blonde hair. "I don't believe this."

    "How do you think I felt when you went off and married my sister, without divorcing me first? You've hurt not only myself, but her. And your son is illegitimate now, you realise. You've commited adultery with at least three other women, and had one child with one of them. Callista, Akanah, and Mara."

    He frowned. "How did you- No one knows about Akanah."

    She walked up close. "One interesting little thing about us, Luke. I could feel it whenever you took another woman to yo
     
  15. ChaseherChiss

    ChaseherChiss Jedi Youngling star 2

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    wahoo!!!!! More posties!!! <G>

    I love this story!! Keep up the great work!

    Chase
     
  16. Shy_Introvert

    Shy_Introvert Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I like this story.
    BUT, I hate what you're doing to Luke.
    I like Mara-Jade Skywalker. A lot. Don't hurt her. Please? I'm begging here. Or if Luke does do what I think he's about to, let her kill him. In the interest of justice
    Sorry for the bloodymindedness :)
     
  17. Dantana Skywalker

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    I repeat, MARA WILL BE FINE! I happen to like Mara now, which I didn't when I started writing this story. But when I tried to hurt her (I'll admit it, I tried to kill her) I found I couldn't.

    Things are going to be nasty for a while, but it's okay, don't worry. Just keep reading. There's madness to my method, don't worry. :)

    Dana
     
  18. Dantana Skywalker

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    I feel like pointing out here that A) in this story, Mara isn't really Mara Jade Skywalker. She's not legally married to Luke, because he was stupid, and B) IT'S JUST A STORY! DON'T WIG! Also, something Dana says in this segment contradicts something she just said to Luke, but I don't feel like rewriting it. Just look at it from the perspective that Dana's trying to not rip Mara's heart out, chop it into tiny pieces with her lightsaber, and then stomp it into the floor and feed it back to her. She's just not very good at it, because she's hurting, too. Yeah, that's it . . .

    That said, on with the show . . .
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    Leia looked over at Mara as her sister-in-law jerked and nearly fell out of her chair. "Are you alright?"

    "I'm, uh . . . fine. I think. I . . ."

    Han frowned, then glanced at his wife. Neither of them had ever seen Mara this flustered. "What's wrong?"

    Mara stood up and went over to where Ben lay on the floor on a blanket, and scooped him up. "I, uh, I need to be alone for a little while. Um . . . I'll see you guys later."

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    Dana was standing in the hangar, watching repairs being made to the light freighter the Jedi had brought from Myrkr. She was in conflict with herself. One side of her rejoiced in the memory of her time spent with Luke, while she regretted their actions in hurting Mara, even though she'd intended to punish him with the guilt and confusion.

    She sensed her sister's presence before Mara spoke. Slowly she turned as the other woman approached.

    "You," Mara hissed. "I knew you were trouble. Why couldn't you just go, and leave the past in the past?"

    Dana looked sadly at her sister. "You love him, as much as I do. There is nothing to be done about it. But the fact remains that I married Luke eighteen years ago, on Gaeina. Lawfully, he is my husband."

    Mara gritted her teeth. "I don't care what happened eighteen years ago. Luke left you. After so many years apart, I don't think you're really married anymore."

    "Luke didn't leave me. I made him go."

    Dana's quiet words gave Mara pause. "What?"

    "Luke wanted me to go with him to Yavin. I told him no, I had to stay on Gaeina. So he was going to stay, too. I made him leave. I told him I didn't want him to stay."

    Green eyes focused harshly on her. "Fine, you gave up claim."

    "I did not. I knew what had to be done at the time, and I did it. Many times, I was going to find him, but something always came up." Dantana tilted her head to the side. "Have you ever wondered, since I came here, if Luke married you because you reminded him of me?"

    "Yes!" Mara shouted. "Yes, I have! Quit tormenting me!"

    "I'm not trying to torment you. I'm trying to figure out a solution to this tangled ryll spider web. I've frequently wondered if his attraction to me was because of you. After all, he met you first."

    Mara's lightsaber flared blue. She lunged at Dana. The brilliant green blade of Dana's lightsaber sprang to life with a snap-hiss, just in time to block. She found herself on the defense, as Mara furiously attacked.

    One by one, the mechanics in the hangar stopped to stare. It was like watching an oddly choreographed dance. Both women were equally skilled, perfectly matched. One with a long red braid, dressed in a sleeveless green shirt, boots, and pants battled another, with short red hair in a flowing blue dress.

    Dana spun away from Mara and flipped a neat cartwheel to avoid the swinging blade. She brought her lighsaber up to block a downward swing. The blades connected and sizzled loudly.

    She didn't want to be fighting her sister. It was the last thing she wanted. But only one could end up with Luke, and after finding him again, Dana did not want to lose him.

    Mara had only felt this sheer anger twice before in her life, once when she was trying to kill Luke, by the command of the Emperor, and once when her child was threatened. It seemed that her greatest trials in life revolved around the Jedi Master from a back
     
  19. Shy_Introvert

    Shy_Introvert Jedi Youngling star 1

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    IT'S JUST A STORY!
    But it's such a realistic story. I don't normally care what happens in fanfic, but I find that I'm getting absorbed in this one.

    in this story, Mara isn't really Mara Jade Skywalker
    To me she's ALWAYS Mara Jade Skywalker, and had been since the Thrawn trilogy. Legalities don't come into it.

    Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading, since you aren't going to allow her to sustain permanant damage
     
  20. ChaseherChiss

    ChaseherChiss Jedi Youngling star 2

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    I totally agree that I think I'm wrapped up in this story because of the realism to it. I mean that in a strictly fictional sort of way.

    Great Posts Dantana keep up the good work!!! <G>!

     
  21. Runaway_Shadow

    Runaway_Shadow Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Me like this posts!!! It's developping great!
     
  22. Jedi_Johnson

    Jedi_Johnson Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Wow... I'm, glad i found this story. I'm definitly going to keep tabs on it.
     
  23. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    I can't express how much it means to me that you guys like this story. This one has been my baby for almost nine months now, and it's still in the works. I'd almost venture enough to say it's reaching novel length.

    I don't have another section to post today, because I'm rushed for time (got a trip to finish packing for), but I'll get some more posted when I get back.

    Dana
     
  24. Master_Jaina1011

    Master_Jaina1011 Jedi Master star 4

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    Oh poor lukie. Dantana you are one mean girl!!!!!!! but oh well it going and its goign good. keep it coming and keep it as interesting as this. you make one heck of a mean writer! and i mean it in a good way!
     
  25. ChaseherChiss

    ChaseherChiss Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Just upping to the front page where a good story should be kept!
     
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