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Saga One of my Kind (Story of a clone trooper) Update! Chapter 10 finished! Reviews are appreciated!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by REVANLORD, Dec 15, 2005.

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  1. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    ...and sent a shockwave like sonic mines at us. It got 2 of our 8 men. One flew in half, the other burned, falling toward the station. It hit the turret on the left, destroying the quad-laser. The remaining pilots and I aimed for the comms array. It shot off, spraying electricity from the loosed wires. We flew in a spinning loop around the station and fired at the incoming fighters, destroying them. The brilliance of the explosions was great.


    Great space battle! [face_dancing] You're much better at those than I am. Can't wait until the next update! :D



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  2. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Okay, I am really, really sorry for the lack of updates, I was a bit busy... *recalls playing American Wasteland* :p Anyway, I have teh next chapter.


    Chapter 7: Let's see what we can do...


    I woke up to a bump. I couldn't recall where I was. I cleared the sleep from my eyes and shook off my slumber. I saw G7 float out of his cylinder. We had apparently arrived on the station at Kashyyyk to refuel our fleet. I wondered how long I had slept. I estimated about 11 hours due to the difficulty with which I got out of bed. I stood up to ask G7 how long.

    "G7, how long have I been out?" "Agemo, I thought you were dead, youv'e been asleep 14 hours" "I certainly feel like it. Come on, let's see how the fueling goes." He floated up to head level and came with me to the fueling deck. It appeared that it was going well. The seargents supervized while the privates fueled the ship. The Kamino's Rain was being inspected with some concern.

    I walked up to them. "What's the problem here, gentlemen?" One of the supervisors came up to me. "Sir, it appears that a modified buzz droid has been found on your engine. Had it not been decapitated by that shockwave, you might have been killed." I realized now how close I had been to death, how had I not been in a Republic Starfighter, I might have been blown to bits. I was shocked.

    All of the sudden I had an idea. "Give me the remains of the droid." He looked puzzled. "Why, sir?" "Because I wish to inspect it personally." "As you wish." They handed it to me. It was like a buzz droid, but it was smaller, like G7. Just as I thought. "Thank you, carry on." They obeyed. I went back to my quarters. I began to talk to G7.

    "Okay, G7, I have some metal junk that may be useful. It could catch up to a Republic Starfighter, so maybe I could attach it's jets to you." "Just don't kill my repulsorlifts in the process, I don't want to be shut down for too long." "Don't worry, I'll be careful." I took off the jet. "Okay, shut down, let's see what we can do..."

    I got out my fusion cutter, my lightsaber, and my hydrospanner, and got to work seeing what I could upgrade...

    After 4 hours, I was done. I called to G7. "Get up and see how it works, buddy." He turned on. "How is it?" He sounded very secretive. "Agemo, you may want to come outside for this." I walked with him out to the fields. "So what do you want to- HOLY FETT!!!!" G7 had just flown faster than a starship across the plain. "G7, get back over here!" He flew back and stopped. "Wow." He spoke. "There is one more thing. Those blasters you installed, they are good. Very good." "Well, blast away then." He pointed his lasers at the hill. A yellow beam of light blasted at the cliff above. After 10 seconds, 3 feet of cliff fell to the ground. "Holy Force, G7." "I know, thank you Agemo. Let's go back to the ship before they finish refueling." "Agreed." We started back to the ship.

    I knew that he could not just be a recon droid anymore. He was too powerful and fast. Maybe...

    I stopped. "G7, I have a new assignment for you." "And what is that?" I paused. "Will you be my personal escort in the space battlefield?" He stopped. "Well, of course. I feel that to make myself useful, I need to get out there and kick some shiny metal butt." I beamed. "It's settled then, you are my new fighter escort. Make use of that ion cannon I gave you." "With more pleasure than you will ever know." We went back to the ship for our assignment, awaiting our new battlefield.
     
  3. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    "Well, of course. I feel that to make myself useful, I need to get out there and kick some shiny metal butt."


    [face_laugh]


    Aw right! G7 is all powered up now! He'll be better than R2 here soon! ;)


    Great update! :D



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  4. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks for liking my fic so much. :)
     
  5. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Okay, next chapter ahoy! :D


    Chapter 8: Meeting with a Jedi



    When I got back to the ship, a fellow officer greeted me. He appeared like he had just heard some important news. He spoke rapidly. "We need you to come into the Officer's chamber, Omega 65. We have heard some suprising news and we need to act quickly. Come with me." He hurried off onto the ramp. I followed, wondering what it could be.

    When I arrived, I was awestruck. I could barely believe my eyes when I saw Ki-Adi-Mundi looking me in the eye. I saluted upon seeing him. He saluted back, and motioned for me to sit down. The Kashyyyk Major spoke. "As you undoubtedly know, this is Ki-Adi-Mundi, our Jedi General. He has brought some news on Eratia, a neighboring planet thought to be nuetral. Mundi, please speak."

    He rose. "As you know, the Republic has a strong foothold in this area. However, some CIS activity has been located on Eradia, in the heart of Toraliac Station. The station has not sent any transmissions for trade or anything else. Only mechanical things have been traded. We have managed to get our hands on one of the cargo ships. Inside was one of these:"

    He produced a small buzz droid. "This is a modified buzz droid. It has the speed capabilities of a starfighter, and a strong beam cannon that can cut very effeciently through thin surfaces like snub fighter engines. Very powerful, but there is good news. We have been told that they are very expensive, and the CIS has limited funds. Substantial, yes, but limited. You will not see these in high quantities anytime soon."

    "You're job is to find the droid factory that we believe to be in the Station and blow it to the other side of the planet. If you find anything important, contact the orbiting fleet. They will send some fighters in to assist you. The orbiting fleet will be led by Captain Epsilion 934. The ground force will be led by Officer Omega 65. They may plan the strategy as they choose. May the Force be with you!"

    As I left the room, I wondered how we would strike. Brute force? Stealth? Sabatoge? I needed to decide quickly, because briefing was in 12 hours...


    Author's note: And yes I know it's really short.
     
  6. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Short? o_O

    That chapter made Yoda look tall.


    [face_laugh]



    Still a great update, just the same! :D I can't wait to see what happens next! It's very suspenceful.



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  7. Antilles2001

    Antilles2001 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Uh-huh. [face_tired]

    Sig doesn't work, by the way.
     
  8. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Here is the next chapter, enjoy.


    Chapter 9: Back to the briefing room


    As I walked into the room, I wondered how I would pull this off. I was sure that the ground force would have to land, and not on a cruiser. All clones were decent pilots, but how would we blow through the defense that was surely there was beyond me. How many of us were there? 400? I would need to pray that my plan would work.

    I walked up to the center of the room, and spoke into the mic. "Hello, gentlemen. As you know, we will need to keep our distance from the station to avoid detection. However, there is a way to find out the situation. Sharpshooters!" They stood. "You will use your recon droids to travel unheard to the station to gather information. When they return, you must give us your report. We will then transfer the information to the orbiting fleet, who will take action. Now as for the situation and what you should do."

    "If the report is of CIS takeover, as expected, then you must attack. Officer Gamma 384 will lead you. I will then go up to the orbiting fleet and lead thier attack. When you complete the task of eliminating the CIS invaders, fly back to the ship and await further orders."

    "But if the CIS is running the city completly and utterly, then return to the ship and we will bomb the station, destroying the prototype buzz droids. But there is one thing standing in our way."

    "In orbit around the planet is a small CIS battleship. We cannot fight it, we must get around it. To do this, we need to wait until our ion cannons fire thier shots to disable the ship. We will go 100 by 100. You will fly in a row under the ship and flee to the surface. If they find you there, we will send in a reinforcement squad. After we all are on the surface, the orbiting fleet will destroy the battleship."

    I motioned with my hand. "Go, and may the Force be with us." They left. I muttered to G7. "When I fly down, take a few shots at those auto turrets." "With much pleasure." I ran down to the hangar, got into my ship, and awaited departure. "Okay G7, lets kill some of those cousins of yours." "I love these kinds of family reunions!!!" I suspected the CIS was in for a surprise.

    I looked outside, staring in the emptiness of space, then saw it turn into a sky full of streaking lines. Eratia, here we come.
     
  9. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great update! [face_dancing]



    Looking forward to the attack on CIS! :D




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  10. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thank you. :)


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  11. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Hey REVANLORD, I got a question for ya. You've probably noticed the list on my bio of my fave fics. I was just wondering if I could add yours? If you'd rather I didn't I understand.



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  12. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Of course you can! I'd be honored.


    Prolouge to Chap. 10: Assault Preperation on Eratia




    When we arrived in orbit above Eratia, it was a beutiful sight: All the great red nebulas surrounding the large blue orb in the sky was a sight to behold. The planet had 1 sun but 8 moons, a testimony of this was the giant oceans. The planet was engulfed by water save one island, about 350 miles long and 100 miles wide. That island had no settlements but one. The Station. There was a large field on the planet, and that was where we woul be landing. I had to turn my eyes from that sight to look at the shadow in front of the planet. The silhouette of a CIS battle cruiser.

    The intercom blasted out of the walls. "Omega 65, prepare your first squad, you will be taking off in ten minutes." I sighed. Time to do battle with the CIS rebels again. I got G7 and the Kamino's Rainready for entry. I told G7 his directions to get behind the heat shield on the ship when we hit the atmosphere. He agreed. I announced my orders.

    "Go as soon as I leave the hangar, and remember, don't fire!" All of the sudden blue fire blew from the ion cannons, soaking the CIS ship in blue lightning, lighting it up. It glowed a light blue for a moment: our cue to go. I took off, and the new R2 unit beeped and booped as we flew out of the hangar, first squad behind us. G7 flew beside me. We flew down toward the planet, that blue gem below us. My men followed.

    It was an easy enough entry, calm, no action or fire. We landed at the target site with little trouble, and so did the others. Unusual, conidering all the commotion that usually happens on entry. Oh,well, better for us. We set up camp at the island.

    When time for orders came, I was quite content for simplicity. "Sharpshooters, send your recon droids to gather information on the state of the station. The rest of us will wait for the information on the place. Please be quick, and use no more than 12 hours to get info, then get back to base. Simple enough. Now go, and please hurry."

    They all left, getting prepared. I turned to G7, when we were alone. "Be safe G7, I'll miss you until you return." "Okay, Agemo. I'll be safe." He left, and I fought back tears as he dissapeared into the Eratian horizon.
     
  13. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Just a note, I wont have another update for a week at most, school is hectic. [face_plain]


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  14. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I hear ya, DRL is a pain. I'll be looking forward to your next update! [face_dancing] Let me know when you get back.




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  15. Firestorm_500

    Firestorm_500 Jedi Youngling

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    My master has the next update tonight! :p No, really, I wrote this on paper first, and I hated shortening the prolouge, but most of it was not good anyway. It'll not be the 9 pages i have now, so you all sob. :p See ya in an hour or so!
     
  16. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks, Moe! [face_peace] *stuffs his sock on his foot* Well, here goes.


    Chapter 10: The Eratian Graveyard


    I paced the floor, staring at it. I felt lost. G7 was in danger. I had seen Geonosis, the bodies with holes drilled through them by blaster bolts of battle droids. I had seen troopers with thier masks torn off, revealing the face as it sank into the Geonosian sands, forever locked in an eternal silent scream. I had seen troopers with legs torn off, bone protruding from the appendage. Blood had rained that day. I had nightmares still about the one corpse in particular that had been impaled with his own armor plates. Terrible.

    I had seen the hoorors of war in space, when I had led the assault. I remembered the scream that I had intercepted from the pilot who had been hit on his stabalizer and heat shield. He had died screaming as flames engulfed him when he entered the atmosphere, flying in a spiral with no hope. I had seen troopers that had died because of suffocation, one of the worst deaths imaginable yet so common in war. No pain, only the terrible feeling of being strangled in your own skin.

    I knew that these would not happen to G7, he was a droid, but how I would feel if he was gone could kill me. I might fall into a deep depression, in which case the Republic would know and would terminate me before I could rebel or lead a mutiny. G7 was the world to me, not a possession. My fusion cutter, my rifle, even my prized lightsaber I would relinquish if only to keep G7 for a moment longer. He was what kept me going in the morning, my lifeblood. And I could only sit here, waiting.

    He was well armed, I had given him the best equipment that I could spare. He was safe, if only he kept hidden. I was not only afraid for him, but for us as well. What if the SBDs were on the move already, leading the attack on us? We were not ready, not standing guard. My men were tired, they had no slept for at least 16 hours. I wanted them to sleep, but they could not. They had to take thier energy serum and wait. Wait.

    Now the sun had set, the 8 moons were rising in a circle around us, consuming us. Moonlight glowed on the waters, giving them a lifelike sense about them, the aura of the living eminated from them. The moons looked at us, surrounding us. Consuming us. Like knives coming down before the kill.

    The moon was dead, the sky was dark. The light from the stars was so pale and lonely. And I had to do this for what purpose? To bring a man to power that would kill millions? To kill to no end for someone who would kill entire populations? I grew drowsy. I set my alarm in my ear, and slept.


    And suddenly I was in a hall, coming to the Jedi Council Chamber. I looked into the face of a hooded figure, a dark man. The dark man. I heard myself speak.

    Sir, should I go in? I thought. "What are your orders, Lord Vader?" I realized I still had free will. (no no no hes gonna do it no) "Stand guard, I will not be long." (please no dont no) I heard a small voice. "Master Skywalker, there are too many of them. What do we do?" I heard a snap-hiss, and a scream. (force no please please stop it stop) "You traitors! Die! Die!" "Aaaaaaggggghhhh!!!!!" (NO DONT DO IT PLEASE DONT KILL THEM THEYRE ONLY CHILDREN DONT!) More yells now, with unimaginable pain and intolerable fear. (NO!!!!!)

    I bolted up in a cold sweat. Sweat shook off my forehead. I shook. My mind raced, wanting to save them. I had to save them... I realized it had all been a dream. A dream. Others in the clone army had nightmares, it was a part of life. I shook off the dream, and viewed out the window. The sun was rising, the moons setting. In the distance was a small group of specks. Recon droids.

    I ran to greet them, less to hear them then to assure myself everything was okay. I walked up to G7, and asked him the situation. He spoke in a grave voice. "They're all dead." I was puzzled. "The droids?" "No, they didn't
     
  17. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    WOW! Great update! I sure hope he manages to save the younglings!


    I kinda thought that battle would go sour. Great descriptions, REVANLORD!



    Really looking forward to the next update!



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  18. REVANLORD

    REVANLORD Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks Moe. Lemme fix up the title a bit... :)

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  19. MoeTharen

    MoeTharen Jedi Padawan star 4

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    What? What's wrong with the title?





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