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Ordinary World/A.U. J.A. ( posts June 25,28 NEW POST JULY 12 )

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by jodiwent, Jan 14, 2001.

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  1. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

    Mar 2, 2000
    Jodiwent you are an absolute sweetheart! You posted here too. Wow! You have been a very very busy girl. Thanks alot! A wonderful post!. Course I'm wondering a couple of things like where will obi get the money since he doesn't have any...course he doesn't know that... and what will happen with oren and... oh, obi hasn't made a bad assumption about owen being safe anywere on that moon has he. I hope nothing happens to owen, he's sweet and cute. and I can't wait for the next post! wow. Two long posts in one night! Cool!

  2. Kit'

    Kit' Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Oct 30, 1999
    Hmmm, interesting.....what is going to happen next? Smasher sounds just like his name and seterotype....big muscles but dumb?

  3. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

    Jan 12, 2000
    All right, great post! I agree with the goodie-goodie girl about smokers. Yuck! Wonder what made Obi-Wan start up in the first place? Wanting to look cool, no doubt. So the next race is in two weeks and he still has to come up with the entry fee. And is Owen really safe where he is? Get lots of sleep, Jodiwent, so you can write more later!
  4. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

    Sep 19, 2000
    I almost missed that post! Quite interesting, I look forward to more!
  5. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrely Community Mod star 9 Staff Member Manager

    Jul 7, 2000
    >>That was how all the guys who got the girls in the Holo-films talked.<<

    That had me chuckling like crazy. And the fact he ditched the cigarette after that girl's comment.

    Excellent posts Jodi!
  6. nitid

    nitid Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 19, 2000
    Obi smoking, lol. Do Jedi get addicted to nicotine? Another enjoyable post, keep up the great work!
  7. naw ibo

    naw ibo Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Mar 18, 1999
    This story is so excellent, jodiwent. It seems so plausible in terms of Obi-Wan's characterization.
  8. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    'I should go pick up Zero.' Obi-Wan finally thought of the droid he was supposed to be picking up from the repair shop. Obi-Wan still smiled when he thought of the prank he had pulled with poor Zero. Zero was a protocol droid, but not a newer model, he was a Q-2 model that looked like a children's drawing of a stick figure more than modern droids that looked more realisticly human. The reason poor 0Q-2 was at the repair shop was Oren did not trust Obi-Wan to fix what he had done. The droid was being fitted with a block on it so no one but Oren could change any of Zero's programing.

    Obi-Wan had changed the code on poor Zero's name i.d. Program so one day when greeting a group of important buyers who had come out to the farm to bargain with Lars, instead of saying his real name he came out with, "Hello I am (bleep)Q-2 human cyborg relations, how may I help you..."

    Needless to say the ladies and gentlemen that were there to do business with Oren were horrified at what the droid had said. Oren turned white and tried to explain that the droids name was not 'Four' but Zero. The seeming obscenity was a 'mistake a terrible mistake'. Obi-Wan was in the next room rolling on the floor laughing. He imagined the look on his step father's face and thought if he got whacked again it would have been worth it. Of course when questioned about it he was all "I didn't do it, there must be a wiring problem. If you like I can try to fix it."

    Oren could not prove that Kenobi had tampered with the droid but he was taking no chances, and so sent Zero to Hove to be fixed. Hove's shop was not far from the sport center and Obi-Wan glanced in to see that Owen was now playing other games with his friends from school, before he went to get the droid.

    "Hello Kenobi." Hove greeted the young man. "You here to pick up Mr.Lars' droid."

    "Yes sir." Obi-Wan said politely.

    "Strange how that i.d. Got changed isn't it?"

    "Yes, strange indeed." Obi-Wan strained not to grin.

    "You can tell old Hove now, no one else is around. You did it huh?"

    "No sir." Obi-Wan said with as strait and as angelic a face as one could imagine. There was no way he was going to admit to it. Oren probably told Hove he'd give him an extra twenty credits if he could get the boy to confess.

    "Well it won't happen again. By accident or otherwise." Hove went to the side where Zero had been placed and activated the droid. It jerked back to life.

    "I am Zero Q-2..." He went through his booting up vocalizations, and looked around. "Hello Hove thank you for repairing me."

    "You are welcome Zero."

    The droid looked around and saw Obi-Wan. "Hello Obi-Wan Kenobi sir."

    "Hi Zero."

    "Sir I might warn you that I have been programed that you are not to get within a foot of me."

    "Oh really?"

    "If you do I am to let Master Oren know."

    "You don't say."

    "I just did say sir."

    "Gonna' be hard to ride back in the speeder that way."

    "I will manage sir."

    "Well let's go." Obi-Wan started to walk out.

    "You tell Mr. Lars I want the rest of my money within the week young man."

    "I will." Obi-Wan had no intention of relaying anything to Oren.

    "Sir." Zero asked as he followed behind at the appropriate distance that the teen could not get his hands on him. "Did you really tamper with my programing."

    Obi-Wan turned and look right at the droid and once again boldly lied. "Zero would I do a thing like that to you?"

    "Well sir..." The droid gave up.

    Kenobi didn't even trust that the droid hadn't been programed to get him to tell Oren that he indeed had been the one who had changed Zero's i.d. He was taking no chances. "Go wait in the speeder." Obi-Wan told Zero as he went to look in on Owen again. His little brother was still playing games with his friends. Owen would probably play until his credits ran out, that could be a while. They should have been going back to the farm, but Obi-Wan wanted to see if there was anyone he knew around the area.

    The other kids that Obi-Wan knew could not really be called his friends. He didn't really have any
  9. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

    Jan 12, 2000
    Boy, Obi-Wan must really have it in for Oren! Hah, that was funny! Clever of Oren, too, to program poor Zero not to let Obi-Wan within a foot of him. What other Obi-Wan antics are we going to see next?
  10. Kit'

    Kit' Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Oct 30, 1999
    That was great Jodiwent! I sympathise with Obi-wan and not making friends at school but then given his attitude it is not really suprising.

  11. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

    Sep 19, 2000
    Great post! Oren is so sneaky. I'm looking forward to reading more.
  12. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Squirrely Community Mod star 9 Staff Member Manager

    Jul 7, 2000
    That was hilarious Jodiwent! I'm sure Oren's business associates were horrified...LOL!

    And like Kit I'm not surprised Obi's having trouble meeting friends.
  13. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    (okay this is a sneek on post from work so not spellchecked)
    Before Obi-Wan could find out if there were any other kids he knew around he was approched a group of two men and a woman. All of them not much older than Obi-Wan, but clearly adults. They looked like a ragged bunch.

    "Yes that's the one." The woman pointed out.

    At first Obi-Wan thought he was in trouble for something, but he hadn't done anything. he reached out with his mind reading skills and saw that they had no mallace in there thoughts. Still he had always been taught to be wary.

    "Hi there kid." The dark haired man said. "Janlis says she saw you do some fancy shooting in there."

    "In there?"

    "The sport center."

    "Yes, I'm sorry I have a bad habit of asking ratorical questions."

    "Sounds like you come from Coruscant or something" The Blond man said. "But you can shoot huh?"

    "Yes on both accounts. I am from Coruscant, or was... and I can shoot, good day." Obi-Wan started to go back inside.

    "Hold on there, we just want to ask you a question."

    "No I won't shoot anyone for you." He assumed instead of verifing.

    The group burst into laughter. "Shoot some one." The Blond man Yuroosi "No, no, nothing like that."

    "Just a little game of skill." The dark haird man Quoto put forth. "A wager."

    "We got word from some of the kids around here," Janlis added. "That you might be looking to make some credits."

    That was all Obi-Wan needed to hear. "One can always use more credits." He hadn't when he was a jedi.

    "Then let's go kid the credits are just sitting there waiting to be won." Quoto grinned.

    "Hold on a minute." Obi-Wan looked in to see that Owen was still all right, playing with his friends, happy and content. He went back to his new associates and nodded. "Let's go."

    The trio of young adults led the teen to the local tavern. At first Obi-Wan was going to say 'wait I'm not old enough to go in there.' Quoto beat him to it.

    "You're eightteen, you got it?"


    "You're eighteen."


    "And don't show them how good you are on the first round right?"

    "Right." Obi-Wan was a little nervous. This was the roughest place on the farming moon, so it was nothing compared to some of the places he had found himself in on Alderaan. Still, he knew he could get in trouble for being in there.

    It was still early in the day, but many of the customers in there had never left from the night before. Many of them were still sleeping off the night before. At tables with their heads on them, on benches in corners, and even a few on the floor.

    "Get up Tagins." Yuroosi gently kicked one of the men on the floor. "Where's your shooter?"

    "Huh?" Tagins, the man on the floor yawned. He sat up and was more alert than one would imagine. "Bass is upstairs, snug in his beddy bye. Can't let my star shooter get worn out."

    "No you can't." Janlis said. "Especaly when we have a challanger."

    "This early in the morning? Taggins stood and streached, and cracked every bone in his body to unstiffen.

    "Well if you don't want to get your money back from last night."

    Tagins' face srunched up, he kicked the other man on the floor. "Brother dear," He kicked him again. "Wake up Ravlin."

    "Rovin I told you not to do that." The other Tagins grabbed his brother's foot and twisted it. "I'm trying to sleep!"

    "Well Janlis and the boys are here to loose some money." Rovin pulled his foot away from Ravlin, after pushing it on his horizontal brother. "So get up and go get Bass!"

    Ravlin grumbled and did as he was told. Meanwhile one of the other patrons, a lady was trying to make it to the fresher before she got sick, she did not make it. It was a good thing the Tagins brothers had moved.

    Obi-Wan was wondering just what he had gotten himself into.
  14. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

    Sep 19, 2000
    Just what has he got himself into?? These people hardly seem trustworthy, but then again it's not as if he's got much to lose. Great post!
  15. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

    Mar 2, 2000
    ummmm, obi just incase you can't tell, I don't think these folks are toooo reputable... um and whatch were you step!

    intreuging post! Can't wait for more! soooo more please!!!
  16. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

    Jan 12, 2000
    People with no malice in their thoughts, huh? People looking to make money? Could come in handy for Obi-Wan, with him needing the entry fee for the swoop race (among other things). But as Kaylla said, watch where you step!
  17. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Mar 23, 2000
    Intersting group Obi has meet up with. I hope he keeps an eye on them, they don't seem very trustworthy.

    I loved how Obi reprogrammed the droid, Oren must have been furiuos and then to have no proof that it was Obi.
  18. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    Bass did not look like anything out of the ordinary, actually he looked, if there is a look, just like a typical resident of that place. The manner of his dress and the overly developed arm muscles of the man all cried out 'farmer'. The woman who clung to him as he and Ravln came back down the stairs did not. She looked like someone from Aldera or Craves City. These were all judgments that immediately formed in Obi-Wan's mind. She looked like the women one could find on the streets of any Alderaanian city. The ones that the house of Organa would like to pretend did not exist on their ideal planet.

    "Kid put your eyes back in place." Janlis said. "You just think about shooting, Bass would choke you in an instant if you even thought about."

    "Huh?" Obi-Wan snapped back into focus. "I wasn't..."

    "Sure you weren't."

    Bass saw Obi-Wan and figured this was his next defeatee. "What little pond did you fish this one out of?" Bass laughed.

    "They didn't fish me out of anywhere, may I remind you that you're the one with a name like a fish." Even Bass' escort chuckled.

    "This kid is not a farmers son." Grooda, the woman with Bass comented. "You may be in for some compititon."

    "I doubt it." Bass sneered.

    "All right lets get this little contest under way." Rovin announced and everyone followed him to a room in the back of the tavern where there were all kinds of games of skill of a more adult nature, all ones that people could if they chose to gamble on. The fact that gambling on the farming colony was illigal did not stop them.

    In one corner of the room there was a target generator. Over the area there was a large sign that said 'Blast Zone'. "Oh." Obi-Wan thought. He had seen the game before on Alderaan. Contestants were given a low level blaster and targets would appear as colored light circles on all walls except the one where on lookers watched. They were flashed up at a fast rate, and the object of course was to get as many as possible. Each color was a different size and thus more difficult and worth more points. There was also what was called 'the blank', a white colored light that one was not supposed to shoot. If you shot the blank the game was over.

    "I know how to do this." Obi-Wan told his three new associates.

    "Good." Quoto said. "Saves time on explanations. "Remember don't do your best on the first round."

    "I want to win."

    "Of course you do, but you want to reel in the pigeons first."


    "Are you really as dim as you are seeming?" Yurooi asked.

    "Get me a blaster."

    Yaroosi went to a box on the side where the game blasters were kept and picked one for Kwnobi. There were no real blasters allowed in the tavern. The most these could do was give a small burn or put an eye out. Not that that would be too pleasant. No such incident had ever occurred there either, despite the may fights that had broken out over this very game. Of course the wager had to be made first, the first round was one for a small amount of credits.

    "You need some practice shots kid?" Bass asked his opponent.

    "No." Obi-Wan said as a matter of fact.

    "Let's do this then." Everyone was surprised, Bass always took practice shots. He must have felt he could beet Obi-Wan handily. "Start her up."

    Rovin turned on the target generator and Bass started shooting. His blaster rang out quickly and accurately and in two minutes his round was over. In that time he had attracted a few more on lookers and a cheering section. "345 for a two minute round. Beet that!" One of Basses friends high fived him as he walked away from the shooting area and called for a drink.

    Obi-Wan wondered if anyone would cheer for him. He nodded that the generator should be turned on and he too started shooting away. He did hold back as _ had told him too. Some people were impressed with this new shooter, he was good, but not good enough it seemed.

    "290! My round." Bass yelled out. "Maybe you did need that practice kid."

    Janlis handed over the credits owed to the Tagins'.

    "That was my practice round." Obi-Wan said.
  19. Kit'

    Kit' Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Oct 30, 1999
    GREAT! Obi shoots them all down! Funny how things come along right when you need them isn't it??

  20. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

    Sep 19, 2000
    Hopefully this will get him the money he needs, at least for the entry fee. The way they were methodical about winning and losing was great. Hopefully it will work!
  21. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

    Jan 12, 2000
    Don't drink the ale, Obi-Wan, and listen to your associates. Sounds like they know what they're talking about. This is getting suspenseful, Jodi, keep writing!
  22. Kaylla Norn

    Kaylla Norn Jedi Youngling star 3

    Mar 2, 2000
    actually jane jinn... I'm not sure obi should be listening to them... they are why he is in this little dump of a bar in the first place and well...

    liked the part about him wishing he could stop thinking like a jedi and the forshadowing that he won't be able tooo after all he is jedi.. even if he doesn't believe it.. all those years and the boy he was couldn't just disaper over night....

    Please plesae plsesas post more!
  23. jodiwent

    jodiwent Jedi Master star 4

    Feb 11, 2000
    The morning crowd gathered around the 'blast zone' to see what would happen in round two. Bass was confident he would again handily beat this little punk. He stood at the line and called out 'Hit it!" The target lights were once more flashing and he was making more hits than misses, and he was fast. When the two minutes were up the score read 358pts. It was not the best he had ever shot, but it was darn close, and he was the champ. Again he invited Obi-Wan to, "Beat that."

    Obi-Wan confidently and calmly stepped up to the line and nodded for the targets to start. Again Obi-Wan was good, but not quite good enough, it seemed, to win.

    "345 too bad kid." Rovin grinned and held out his hand for Janlis to pay up. "I guess that's it."

    "Whit a minute, you have to give us a chance to win back some of our losses." Janlis insisted.

    "You think the kid can do better?" Bass asked.

    Janlis turned to Obi-Wan and pretended like she didn't know how good he really was. "What do you say kid, want to think you can do better?"

    Obi-Wan went right along with her game and looked all puppy faced. "I don't know." He let his head drop a little, then he looked up. "But I can try."

    "You heard him let's go round three."

    Now some of the on lookers felt for Obi-Wan, the underdog. Most still bet on Bass, but thought it was noble of the kid to try.

    "Okay kid." Quoto was whispering in Kenobi's ear again. "You win this one, but just by a hair. You got it."

    "I understand."

    Bass got up to shoot the third round, he did not slack in his shooting. He knew the kid might get lucky if he did. At the end of the round he had racked up 370 points. Unfortunately for him and all who had bet against Obi-Wan, Obi-Wan shot 375.

    "Pure luck!" Bass huffed. "Get up there and shoot again."

    "Don't you go first?"

    "Winner goes first. This will be the last time you go first."

    Obi-Wan went to Quoto to hear what they wanted him to do this time."

    "Hit a blank at 350."

    "A blank? I'd never hit a blank."

    "But they don't know that."

    "Of course."

    Obi-Wan stepped to the line nodded for Rovin to start the target generator and he shot another round. The bets were split this time. Those who bet for Obi-Wan this time were disappointed when their shooter hit a blank at 350.

    "*#**!" Swears could be heard all over the tavern. "Oh bad luck."

    Obi-Wan did his best to look disappointed.

    "Should I bother to shoot." Bass joked. The champion shooter got up and shot 351. In the game it was considered an insult because he didn't have to bother to even shoot out the whole two minutes to win.

    "Lets go again." Obi-Wan was learning how to bait the hook.

    "My pleasure." Bass stepped up again. He had to be getting fatigued. He shot a 360. He was not worried, if he was getting tired the kid had to be too.

    This time Quoto told Obi-Wan to win. Obi-Wan did, by one point. Bass' eyes bugged out. The insult had worked. "Shoot again now!"

    This game he was told to loose so Obi-Wan shot another low game 344. Bass handily beat him but this time racked up as many points as he could, 380. "You want to try again?"

    "Yes." Almost everyone bet against Obi-Wan this time.

    This time all three of his new 'friends' gathered around him while Bass shot.

    "This is it kid hit as many as you want." Quanto said.

    "Yhea time to bring home the credits." Yuroosi slapped Obi-Wan on the back.

    "It's all yours kid." Janlis smiled at him.

    With his ego sufficiently pumped up, and being now unleashed from his promise to losses, or only win by a margin, Obi-Wan was ready to beat Bass' round of 374. This was going to be fun and rewarding as well. Now he would have the credits to enter the swoop race next week, and maybe even pay Spanner for the part he 'talked' him into giving him. Right from the start everyone knew something was different. The kid was just putting his blaster up and shooting only the highest point target. It looked as if he were not even really looking at what he was doing, as if he knew where the targets were going to light up next. Th
  24. KSkywalker

    KSkywalker Jedi Master star 3

    Aug 7, 1998
    Yikes!! Poor Obi-Wan!!! I really feel for him. He had such high hopes growing up in the Temple. I can't blame him for his "Nasty Boy facade" he's only been rejected and used since he was sent away from the Jedi!

    This is the sole problem I have with the Jedi Apprentice series, other than this, I love the stories! (Before I get chided,,Yes, I do realize it's a story. Although, at times, that's difficult to remember! Please, Indulge Me! ;>)

    I'm irked that the Jedi don't have a more compassionate plan for their unchosen initiates. You would think they'd "Make Darn Sure" the former initiates were in a healthy environment, and content, especially considering the risks involved! (Dark Side!!) I certainly hope that the way Ob-Wan was "sent off" (In the books) would not be the norm!
  25. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

    Jan 12, 2000
    Boy, I must be as naiive as Obi-Wan. I also expected him to get more than just twenty Dactaries, and when the girl said she had to know how much to charge him, I almost fell out of my seat. It's a hard way to learn a lesson, but it looks like Obi-Wan's earned it. I should have known something was up with those people, acting so nice at first. And now Obi-Wan's left with only a pittance of what he could have earned, and they've ruined his chance of winning anything else. And Oren would have to show up just *then*, too. I don't see Obi-Wan getting off the farm anytime in the near future.

    Owen is such a sweet kid. I liked the way he tried to change Serra's opinion of Obi-Wan because she seemed nice. And it was funny the way Zero asked,"Should I keep informing you that Obi-Wan is within a foot of my person?" The humour really offset the bitterness that I felt in the middle of this post.

    Will Obi-Wan at least win the swoop race? Or will somebody sabotage him? Please post more soon, Jodiwent!
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