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Promise of Betrayal

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by sheleigh, Aug 14, 2002.

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  1. sheleigh

    sheleigh Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 31, 2002
    Title: Promise of Betrayal
    Author: sheleigh
    Disclaimer: I don?t own them, nor do I make any claim to them!
    Summary: Obi-Wan realizes his dreams have meaning.
    Author?s notes: Short. Incredibly short- but I like it, so it's posted. Nerr. ;)
    Blame the bunny on Padawan Travina- she gave me the idea!

    ?Fight.? The young man stubbornly shook his head, saber hilt held un-activated in his hand.

    ?I won?t.? A snarl escaped his opponent.

    ?You will fight, or you will die.? The young man abruptly lit his blade, bringing up it time to block a blow to his neck. A sneer graced the other?s features, watching the young man impassively.

    ?So you can be provoked into fighting. Now- we battle.?

    The sound of saber?s clashing against each other echoed through the room. The young man held is saber in a classic defense posture, the bluish color casting an eerie glow on his face. His opponents held his own green blade offensively. The two watched each other warily, before the provoker launched forward, green saber heading for the other?s heart. The young man blocked weakly, his energy rapidly lessening.

    ?You become weaker- death comes quickly.?

    ?You speak too much.? An angry scowl appeared on the antagonist?s face. He brought the saber up, the speed of the attack astounding.

    ?Die.? The saber entered through the young man?s chest. He stiffened, his grip loosening on his own saber.

    ?Good bye, Obi-Wan Kenobi.? Obi-Wan stared up at his Master, sea colored eyes becoming dull. He reached a hand up, before letting if fall weakly to his side.

    Qui-Gon turned from his now dead apprentice, an angry smirk on his face.

    ?May the Force be with you.?

    Obi-Wan awoke abruptly, his hand coming up to rest on his chest. He quickly checked himself over, as his mind repeated the dream. A sense of unease filled him, and he fell to his knees, allowing the Force to wash over him, and comfort him.
    I don?t understand- what could it mean?

    Oh, my Padawan, but you do. Obi-Wan reached out with his mind, his mental touch brushing his Master?s mind.

    What does it mean then? In his own meditation, Qui-Gon smiled ruefully.

    It is the Force?s way of telling you I will betray you. Qui-Gon abruptly cut the connection.

    Betray? impossible!

    Obi-Wan reached out to the Force, seeking the future, and an answer.

    It was silent to his call.

  2. TheFallen

    TheFallen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Nov 27, 2001

    Excellent in a morbid sort of way.

    I like morbid.
  3. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    I am not even morbid and enjoyed it.

    PEACE ewen
  4. obaona

    obaona Jedi Master star 4

    Jun 18, 2002

    Yes, that was praise. 8-}
  5. sheleigh

    sheleigh Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 31, 2002
    TheFallen- why thank you. And you like morbid- smashing. ;)

    ewen- Even better! Thanks! :)

    obaona- Oh, wow- disturbing you say? Thanks!

    End shameless up! ;)
  6. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi

    Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Knight star 5

    Feb 9, 2002
    Oh my....:mad: Qui if you betray Obi....

    You have captured my attention sheleigh! MORE!!!
  7. Ginger_Jedi

    Ginger_Jedi Jedi Knight star 6

    Jun 4, 2001
    Whoa. Freaky.

    Way cool interpretation of Qui-Gon's bretrayal sheleigh.
  8. IamZam

    IamZam Jedi Grand Master star 5

    May 19, 2002
    Interesting beginning. YOu have my attention.

    Now what?
  9. Padawan_Travina

    Padawan_Travina Jedi Padawan star 4

    Aug 5, 2002
    Oh WOW!!

    Ok that was good..and your can't leave it there...

    Let me think on it a bit and i will pm ya my ideas..

    great job
  10. Obi-WansApprentice

    Obi-WansApprentice Jedi Youngling

    Jul 24, 2002
    Hi, Sheleigh! *waves*

    This was great! Angsty, angsty, angsty...hehheh.

    Good ol' Qui...The loveable Jedi Master that must have thousands of tricks up his sleeves! :p Hmmm....I suddenly had this silly idea....*jots a few notes down* :D

    Anyway...hehheh. Thanks again for the treat, Sheleigh! It was wonderful, as always! :)

  11. obi_ew

    obi_ew Jedi Master star 5

    Apr 14, 2002
    Hum.Very interesting. :D
  12. sheleigh

    sheleigh Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 31, 2002
    Bad writer- hasn't been responding to her reader's comments.

    There may be more on this- maybe. :)

    Thanks for all the wonderful feedback!! :)
  13. Masterpool

    Masterpool Jedi Youngling star 2

    Aug 11, 2002
    What the?!?

    I hope that there is more of this...cause this just seems too weird but too interesting not to continue!
  14. Jedi_Tanya

    Jedi_Tanya Jedi Youngling

    Aug 28, 2002
    WHAT!! THE END!??! Oh C'mon sheleigh, there has to be more. Please please. YOU CAN'T LEAVE ME HANGING!!! :( Oh well. Great job. Enjoyed it very very very much! Please write some more. :D

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