Qui-Gon's First Padawan

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  1. JKTRAINING Jedi Master

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    This is a story that Liara and I are co-authoring. Hope you all like it. Feedback is requested, even highly encoraged.

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    Qui-gon sat in his quarters at the Jedi temple. He was thinking about his apprentice, Ariana. She
    was late for curfew! He would have to deal with that when she got home. This was the first time
    that she had ever been late, but that was not an excuse. Suddenly the door burst open and Ariana
    walked in. She had a rather embarrassed, and contrite look on her face. "Uh, hello master." She
    said. "I'm really sorry I'm late, but I got hung up in the hall."

    "I see. What, may I ask, was important enough for you to be late?" Qui-gon strove to keep a stern
    tone to his voice.

    "Not what, who. I was held up by Master Yoda." Ariana explained

    "Well in that case I understand. What did he want?" Qui-gon asked.

    "He wanted to compliment me on my performance at saber practice today master." She replied.

    "That's great Ariana! I'm happy for you, being complimented by Master Yoda is no small thing.
    But it IS late, and you need your sleep. You better get off to bed."

    "Yes, master. Good night." Ariana replied and headed to bed.

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    And there you have it, the first installment of "Qui-Gon's First Padawan"!
  2. DarthTutor Jedi Master

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    More please!! As a Sith Lord I have no trouble in saying: Qui Gon is my favorite Jedi.
  3. Jedi Windu Jedi Master

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    Yes, more please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  4. Liara Jedi Knight

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    well I guess I will post this now I am not sure if it is any good all I know is that there are no spelling mistakes (which is a good thing) so here it goes by the way I really need feedback to function proporly so please please please give us feed back

    Ariana thrashed violently in her small bed. She was having a horrible dream about her
    Master being pulled farther and farther away from her until they couldn?t see or hear each other.
    She screamed in her sleep,
    ?No Master no stop, come back.?
    Qui-Gon Jinn who was sleeping deeply in the next room woke up with a start. He got up and
    walked quietly over to Ariana ?s room. He stepped quickly in to see what was
    wrong. He was astounded to see tears running down his all too tough Padawans face. He tapped
    her lightly on the shoulder and said quietly,
    ?Ariana are you alright?
    ?I am not sure.? She whimpered.
    ?Its okay? He whispered. ?It was all a bad dream."
  5. Liara Jedi Knight

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  6. Liara Jedi Knight

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    I am just upping some more please please post
  7. Melne_Crtor Jedi Knight

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  8. Aralna Force Ghost

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  9. JKTRAINING Jedi Master

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    Thanks Aralna! Now you can read TWO of my attempts at fan fic! Keep the feedback comin!
  10. Melne_Crtor Jedi Knight

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    Two things:

    1. UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP! (Did that sound right, Liara?)

    2. We have smilies once more! :) :D :p ;)
  11. Liara Jedi Knight

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    yeah replies I am so happy
  12. Melne_Crtor Jedi Knight

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  13. Aralna Force Ghost

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    I'll keep replying. I'm like that. Besides the fact that if I don't there probably won't be any new posts on JKTRAINING's story. Not that that would be taken into consideration when replying here.

    I like the name Ariana, I even used it for a school project. Teacher told me I was misspelling it, but I like this spelling.

    That might not have made total sense, but it was a compliment.
  14. Jedi Windu Jedi Master

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  15. Liara Jedi Knight

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    I want to post but I have to run it by my co writter post probably more tommorow
  16. Liara Jedi Knight

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  17. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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    How old is Ariana? This is good! Keep it coming.
  18. Melne_Crtor Jedi Knight

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    Hey, Aralna! Liara says she thinks maybe she got the name "Ariana" from your screen name... or at least subconsciously. Hehe. Up.
  19. Liara Jedi Knight

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    I am not that sure how old she is probably around 16-17
  20. JKTRAINING Jedi Master

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    And the next bit:

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    Ariana woke up around the usual time. She got out of bed thinking about what happened
    the night before. She felt ashamed of how she acted. She hurried getting dressed then walked quickly to the kitchen area. She walked in and saw her Master sitting quietly at the table.

    ?It?s good to see you in a better mood this morning Padawan.? he said.

    ?I am sorry about the way I acted Master.? She replied.

    ?Don?t worry about it, it is okay to have emotions. Everyone has bad dreams
    sometimes.? Qui-Gon answered.

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    Hope you like it! Feedback please.



  21. Liara Jedi Knight

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    by the way I wrote the last bit
  22. Aralna Force Ghost

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    That was good, even though I like LONG posts. I want more.
  23. Liara Jedi Knight

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    I am sorry about the shortness but I have a lot of homework
  24. JKTRAINING Jedi Master

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    I've writen a little more, but Liara has to go over it first. She seems to be away form the board right now. Probably working on that homework!
  25. Aralna Force Ghost

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    Homework is as evil as school. [face_devil] The only good thing about school is friends. :)
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