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Before - Legends Recurring Nightmare (Q/O) Post 2 of 2

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Arldetta, Mar 29, 2003.

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  1. Arldetta

    Arldetta Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 19, 2002
    Title: Recurring Nightmare

    Author: Arldetta

    Spoilers: None what so ever

    Rating: PG-13, some violence

    Summary: Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan are sent on a routine mission. They discover something that they never planned on. And the past comes to light.

    Disclaimer: Star Wars, Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan and that's encompassed in it belong to Lucas Films/Fox Studios. The rest is mine. If I was getting paid, I would have quit my job last year. ;)

    Author's note: All thoughts are in italics. I would really like feed back. Just so you all know. This was the second story I ever write. I just never posted it to tf.n. And I am not entirely sure why I do it now. I think it's an interesting story just badly written. ( :p ) So please be kind to it. Thanks. :D

    Oh yeah a few more things. This is slightly supernatural. And I have Obi at about age 15/16. I will post it in two sections, it's not that long. Like I said, I was still just starting. ;)


    The ship eased itself out of Hyperspace, and a planet came into view. Obi-wan looked out the viewport to the green and blue planet below. He and Qui-gon had been on a number of dangerous missions together recently, this mission was guaranteed to be easy. Every year a Jedi is sent to the Planet Lan?li?arch as a Peace Officer. All the Jedi had to do was show himself now and then and oversee the customary elections. Originally, the planet had a Monarchy, however about 10 years prior the last remaining heir disappeared before coronation and was never seen again. Many speculated that he did not want it, others believed that someone or group had gotten rid of the Prince to end the Monarchy?s reign. Since no one could legitimately claim the throne, the Council Cabinet was appointed to rule the planet. Elections were held yearly so that there was a constant change in leadership. The Jedi were merely there for support. An easy mission. One could almost consider it a vacation compared to the troubled and often volatile missions usual for the Jedi. Even still, a single Jedi Master was often selected for this particular event. It was rather unusual for a Master-Padawan team to be sent. The Jedi Council thought this would be a good reprieve for the two since their last three missions had almost cost both of them their lives.

    Obi-wan could sense his Master coming up quietly behind him. ?This should be a nice calm mission for us, Obi-wan.? Qui-gon laid his hand on the boy?s shoulder and peered out the window.

    ?I hope so, Master. We really could use a break.? Obi-wan replied softly. His eyes never left the planet. Something deep inside of him told him that this was not an easy mission.

    Qui-gon noticed the restless feeling deep inside the 16-year-old boy next to him. ?There?s nothing to worry about. Everything will be fine,? he tried to reassure.

    ?Everything will be fine,? the Padawan repeated distantly. Slowly, he pulled his eyes away from the growing ball in front of him and managed a meager smile toward his Master.

    ?Come, let?s get ready,? his Master smiled back.


    D?antera was a tall gentle woman. She was the Ambassador Liaison for the Council Cabinet. She had offered to take in the Jedi for the length of their stay. She lived in a house on a farm away from the city. A forest skirted the edges of her land. The Jedi were actually early, the elections were not to be held until the end of the following week. From what she had been told the Jedi that were coming apparently needed some time off. She hoped that her home would suit them. She had some beasts of burden if a ride fancied them. When they arrived she greeted them with a smile, ?Welcome to Lan?li?arch, Gentlemen. My name is D?antera L?orran. I will escort you to my home.?

    ?Thank you D?antera, I am Qui-gon Jinn and this is my Apprentice, Obi-wan Kenobi. We will be delighted to stay with you,? Qui-gon responded. Obi-wan had nodded his greeting to the woman in front
  2. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi

    Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Knight star 5

    Feb 9, 2002
    Nice job there!!! I wanna know what goes on next. I'm shaking here!!
  3. forever_jedi

    forever_jedi Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Jun 5, 2002
    Yes, great job! I have read this elsewhere and found it to be excellent. If this is what you produced when you just started, then surely the Force was with you when you began. :D

    This is a very unusual and different kind of story!
  4. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 31, 2001
    I've read this before, but it is still just as creepy as the first time.
  5. HotHoney22

    HotHoney22 Jedi Youngling star 1

    Apr 1, 2001
    Hey you should post right about now. That would be cool and we would all be happy.
  6. Arldetta

    Arldetta Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 19, 2002
    Oh alright, you talked me into it. Honestly, I just hadn't gotten around to is since I was caught up in finishing another fic of mine. Anyway....

    Arwen-Jade_Kenobi - Thanks. I'm glad I can send shivers through you. ;)

    forever_jedi - well I wouldn't have called it excellent, but I thank you for the praise. After reading it through recently, I realized it was as bad as I originally thought. Awww, [face_blush] Thank you. that means a lot to me. I would like to think I progressed significantly. And I still hope to continue to grow. But I will keep your comments in mind to give me encouragement. ;)

    PadawanKitara - LOL, thanks. ;)

    HotHoney22 - Thanks for the reminder. I hope you like the end of it. Mind you, since this is one of my older stories, it wasn't very long. Enjoy! :D

    Well, here's part 2. :D


    Qui-gon woke the next morning feeling a little uneasy. He could not sleep knowing his Padawan was not well. He got ready and headed to Obi-wan?s room. He felt they needed to talk. He knocked and again there was no answer. Maybe the boy was sleeping. He opened the door and saw the bed was empty. Qui-gon tried to hide his disappointment. As he held the door open he found that his Padawan was lying on the ground in the middle of the room. The boy?s back was to him and he went to the youth. As he approached he felt something was not right here. He touched Obi-wan?s shoulder and gently pulled him back. The boy?s face had some minor bruises and some dried blood in the corner of his mouth. Concern gripped Qui-gon?s heart and he picked up the youth and put him on the bed. ?Obi-wan? Obi-wan? What happened?? He gently touched the boy?s face to wake him up.

    Obi-wan began to stir at Qui-gon?s prodding. He moaned softly at the ache in his head. ?Master,? he whispered, and then a panic crept back in, ?I don?t know. I don?t know.? Obi-wan kept repeating but it was not in response to Qui-gon?s question but the man in his dream?s question.

    ?It?s ok, Obi-wan, it?s ok. Everything will be all right. We?ll figure this out. Don?t worry.? Qui-gon reassured. But Obi-wan was still caught in his dream. He started to struggle away from Qui-gon.

    The door opened suddenly and D?antera ran in. ?Prince K?affer K?ontii!? She exclaimed.

    Obi-wan?s eyes shot open and he looked at her. She explained, ?That?s who he looks like. F?erant brought me my paperwork early this morning. There is a picture in the file of a man by the name of G?ondir T?ahanii. He was a personal servant of the K?ontii family like I said. He is standing next to the Prince. The picture was taken shortly before the Prince disappeared. I?ve only seen a few pictures of the Prince in my youth but that was at least 7 or 8 cycles ago. That?s why I couldn?t place him earlier. I?m so relieved.? She ended with a smile, which faded, as she noted Qui-gon?s taut features. ?What?s wrong??

    ?Obi-wan has been attacked.? Qui-gon stated.

    ?What?! How can that be? Who would have done such a thing?? She was completely bewildered.

    ?It?s nothing, I must have done it to myself. I had a bad dream last night.? Obi-wan?s voice was clear. Qui-gon turned back to regard his Padawan. He had not expected Obi-wan to deny what had happened. Obi-wan forced himself to a sitting position. Obi-wan even managed to get fully upright even if he did waver a moment. ?I just need some fresh air. It?s ok Master. I?ll be fine.? Cutting off Qui-gon?s protest, Obi-wan made his way past D?antera.

    Qui-gon started to follow when D?antera spoke, ?I don?t understand, what just happened?? He turned back toward the young woman.

    ?Neither do I. Only Obi-wan knows that, and he?s not ready to tell us.? Qui-gon thought a moment. ?You said you have the file, right?? She nodded. ?Is the picture there too??

    Again, D?antera nodded, ?It?s right here.? She pulled a flimsy piece of paper out that had an image on one side. Qui-gon took it and noted the close rese
  7. forever_jedi

    forever_jedi Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Jun 5, 2002
    Yes, just as creepy as the first time. Good job - we normally don't see Obi involved in ghostly matters.

    One comment: when I first read this story, I thought, for some odd reason, that Obi-Wan was 12 or 13. That works better for me than a 16-year-old getting involved with ghosts! But, wonderful, anyway!
  8. Arldetta

    Arldetta Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 19, 2002
    forever - You know, I think I kind of picture him that way too. Honestly, I have not been sixteen for a while and 12/13 longer. And since this was early on in my fan fic career, I never really thought about the age thing. Maybe I'll go back and change it to 14 at least. ;)
  9. Arwen-Jade_Kenobi

    Arwen-Jade_Kenobi Jedi Knight star 5

    Feb 9, 2002
    Great Show Arldetta!! Chilling and thrilling all at once!
  10. Jedi_Knight150

    Jedi_Knight150 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2002
    Ooooh. I really liked this story!
  11. TheSwedishJedi

    TheSwedishJedi Jedi Master star 4

    Sep 15, 2001
    Oooo, creepy but good. I like. Nicely done, Arldetta. Hope you do something like that again even if it's not your usual style.

    ~Swede :p
  12. Jedi_FuzzyWuzzy

    Jedi_FuzzyWuzzy Jedi Youngling star 1

    Apr 11, 2003
    **shivers as all body fur stands on end**

    :D Creeeee-peeeeee :D

    Nice Arldetta. I really think you should write more along this line. Very shivery :D

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