Saga REFLECTIONS (Obi-Wan remembers Qui-Gon - short poem...)

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  1. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Title: REFLECTIONS

    Author: Magenta_Moonshadow

    Timeframe: Prequel Trilogy

    Summary: Obi-Wan remembers Qui-Gon...

    Genre: Angst, Poetry

    Notes: This is my first attempt at writing Star Wars poetry, so it's more fragmentary than my usual style.

    Parts of verse 6 are taken from my vignette "The Promise", which can be found here: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22254436/p1/?26

    Thanks go - as always - to Nienna...:)



    REFLECTIONS


    Green light-saber
    In sturdy hands,
    He guided me and taught me,
    With kind words and compassion,
    The flowing power of the Living Force.

    With far-seeing eyes,
    And a free spirit,
    Yet grounded in the here-and-now,
    He took delight in the small, insignificant things,
    And respected all life,
    No matter how worthless it seemed
    To those around him.

    Strong yet gentle,
    Some called him maverick and rebel,
    Because he followed his heart,
    Wherever it led him.

    Comrades in arms,
    Master and Padawan,
    We fought together side-by-side
    In Jedi brotherhood.

    Cut down by red Sith blade,
    I held him in my arms
    As he lay dying.
    And as I wept,
    He tried to comfort me.

    I felt his mighty spirit
    Leave his broken body far behind,
    To soar on silver wings
    Within the Living Force,
    Which he had humbly served
    All the days of his life.

    If I listen carefully,
    I hear his voice,
    As he speaks to me
    In hushed whispers
    On the wind.

    And I feel his presence,
    As he stands beside me.
    Guiding me,
    As he did before.

    My Master, Father, Friend...
    Neither Sith nor death
    Can truly separate us,

    Now as one with the Force,
    He will live forever...

    ~ THE END ~
  2. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

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    Cut down by red Sith blade,
    I held him in my arms
    As he lay dying.
    And as I wept,
    He tried to comfort me.

    I felt his mighty spirit
    Leave his broken body far behind,
    To soar on silver wings
    Within the Living Force,
    Which he had humbly served
    All the days of his life


    Very touching!
  3. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Jul 26, 2005
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    My Master, Father, Friend...
    Neither Sith nor death
    Can truly separate us,


    This was just beautiful and a perfect way for Obi-Wan to remember Qui-Gon.

    Great job

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  4. Gina Force Ghost

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    That was absolutely beautiful. =D= =D=

  5. Nienna_Narmolanya Jedi Master

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    And I feel his presence,
    As he stands beside me.
    Guiding me,
    As he did before.


    :_| You did wonderful job, Padawan, capturing Obi-Wan's emotions! Beautiful phrases!

    I'm going to make you write poetry more often... :p
  6. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Valairy_Scot, KELIA, Gina, and Nienna_Narmolanya

    Thank you for all your kind words! [:D]

    I'm glad you liked it!:D
  7. Katieelessar Jedi Knight

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    Aug 1, 2005
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    That was beautiful,Magenta! I agree with our Master, you should write poetry more. You did a great job. I loved it.

    =D= =D= =D=
  8. jedisamsel Jedi Knight

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    Nov 19, 2005
    Very good, i liked the compassion.....very good!
  9. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Katie, jedisamsel, thank you for reading!

    I'm glad you enjoyed it!

  10. Layren Force Ghost

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    Awwww, that was beautiful, Magenta! Well done! =D=
  11. Darth_Laudrup Force Ghost

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    really good.

    Poems are hard, but this one was really good.
  12. GEN_MASSIMO Jedi Knight

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    Well, I have not great passion for poems, but this is really good.
    Your words perfectly pictured Qui-Gon as Obi-Wan saw him. Very sweet.
    Well done.
  13. Kestrel_Kenobi Force Ghost

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    ah, lovely magenta if so sad :(

    My Master, Father, Friend...
    Neither Sith nor death
    Can truly separate us,


    Beautiful=D= thanks for the heads up...
  14. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Layren, Darth_Laudrup, GEN_MASSIMO and Kestrel

    Thank you! Glad you liked it!:) [:D]
  15. QuiGonGal Jedi Knight

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    Oct 22, 2005
    that was so beautiful and sad! :_| :_| :(
  16. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Thank you for reading, QuiGonGal:)
  17. Just-Plain-Shmi Jedi Knight

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    This was just as beautiful as your poem, Remembering Anakin. @};-

    I felt his mighty spirit
    Leave his broken body far behind,
    To soar on silver wings
    Within the Living Force,
    Which he had humbly served
    All the days of his life.



    :_| =D=

    JPS :)
  18. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Just-Plain-Shmi Thank you for reading - I'm glad you liked it!:)
  19. Meredith_Kenobi Jedi Master

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    That was absolutely beuatiful!

    My Master, Father, Friend...
    Neither Sith nor death
    Can truly separate us,

    Now as one with the Force,
    He will live forever...


    Wow. Lovely job, Magenta_Moonshadow!!!! =D=

  20. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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    Meredith_Kenobi Thank you! Glad you liked it!:)
  21. Sionnach-Airgid Jedi Youngling

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    [face_hypnotized] :_|

    As always, an excellent job!=D= =D= =D=

    Thanks for the pms! [face_dancing] I know I've been off-line for quite awhile, but I should be back on more regularly by the middle of August. DRL's been really beating on me!
  22. Magenta_Moonshadow Force Ghost

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