Saga REMEMBERING ANAKIN (short poem - Obi-Wan remembers Anakin)

Title: REMEMBERING ANAKIN

Author: Magenta_Moonshadow

Timeframe: Saga

Summary: Obi-Wan remembers Anakin...

Genre: Angst, Poetry

Notes:This is a fragmentary 'poem'/ blank verse

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REMEMBERING ANAKIN

We both had much to learn
In the early days,
Anakin and I...

I was reluctant to take responsibility,
But I had promised to train the boy
And I would not break my word.

I was hesitant and unsure,
I made mistakes,
As Anakin looked to me for guidance.

I had to make the decisions,
Be the Master,
But as time passed,
I truly believed he was the Chosen One,
Who would bring Balance to The Force.

Long years rolled by,
And our bond flourished,
Anakin grew strong with The Force.
And the boy became a man, a mighty Jedi.

His courage was renowned
Throughout the Galaxy.
They called him
"The Hero with no Fear",

The bravest pilot I ever knew,
He saved my life
Many times.

More than comrades,
We were as close as brothers.
I thought that nothing would break
The bond we had.

I was wrong...

Subtle and insidious,
A Sith Lord seduced him,
Under the guise of friendship,

And the silver-tongued Sith
Promised him many things
In exchange for allegiance.

So he sold his soul
To save the one he loved,
And by doing so, lost everything.

Consumed by darkness
Deeper than the night,
And drenched with despair,
He succumbed to the Dark Side
And could not return
To the Light.

I did not spot the warning signs
Until it was too late.
I failed...

And the Galaxy paid the price of my failure.

Marching into the Temple
With betrayal in his heart
And troopers at his back,
He massacred his fellow Jedi.

Showing no mercy,
Not even to the Younglings,
Who pleaded to him for help...
To no avail.

Now Anakin is dead,
Consumed by flames
On Mustafar.

And I ask myself the question
Which I know I cannot answer...

Where did I go wrong?

 

Nice poem


Self realization is hard but necessary.

 

Very very very good... Obi-wan blames himself for Anakin's fall... not true in my opinion... I loved it... so beautifully tragic!

Rachel Rose

 

Darth_LaudrupThank you for reading!

AnakinLuverGlad you liked it!

 

Obi-Wan blames himself, it's so heartbreaking. You captured his pain very nicely. Well done Magenta!

And the silver-tongued Sith
Promised him many things
In exchange for allegiance.

I especially liked this verse. I can completely picture Palpatine.

Well done!

 

Consumed by darkness
Deeper than the night,
And drenched with despair,
He succumbed to the Dark Side
And could not return
To the Light.

A beautiful poem, Padawan! So sad... Obi-Wan had so many negative emotions to deal with - betrayal of trust, despair, guilt. It's a mark of his belief in the Jedi way and his faithfulness to the Force that he did not change drastically or go mad. That, however, doesn't mean he's not in need of a few cuddles...

to you as well. Great job!

 

anakin_luverThank you!

Nienna_Narmolanya Glad you liked it, Master!

I know, poor Obi-Wan...

 

I did not spot the warning signs
Until it was too late.
I failed...

And the Galaxy paid the price of my failure.

so sad!
And that last line was the icing on the cake. This poem was very beautiful, and fittingly sad.

 

Very, very sad. And so Obi-Wan, taking all the blame on his shoulders when it isn't so.
Good job!

 

I love poetry, and that was simply lovely.

 

Meredith_Kenobi Thank you!

Lincoln_6_Echo Glad you liked it!

Just-Plain-Shmi Thank you for reading!

Thank you, everyone...

 

That was excellent, Magenta! You really captured Obi-Wan's thoughts of Anakin. I thought the poem was just lovely and everything blended together nicely. Great job! You do so well at poetry too!

 

So he sold his soul
To save the one he loved,
And by doing so, lost everything.



Hauntingly beautiful Magenta - but so sad...

I always feel that Obi took too much of the blame.

Wonderful work

 

Katieelessar Aw, shucks, I'll be blushing in a minute! Thank you!

Kestrel_Kenobi Thank you, too!

I'm really glad you both liked it!

 

Awwww! Poor Obi! You never went wrong! Ani was just too self-centered to listen to you! You did the best you could! If anyone's to blame, it would be Qui for putting such a heavy task on your shoulders!

Wonderfully written, as always! You've really captured the way I think Obi felt about Anakin's betrayal.

 

Thank you, Sionnach-Airgid!