Saga Scarred By These Sands of Time (AU, Female Anakin story)

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  1. Sith-Spitter01 Jedi Knight

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    Jan 26, 2010
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    Foreword: This is a work in the genre of AU where Anakin Skywalker was born female instead of male. I hope to see more of this genre by many different authors. For this story, I chose to progressively jump to various moments where the gender bent Anakin, Annika Skywalker, where she makes different decisions in words and actions than her male counterpart, thus giving an insight into her differing character in general. So if I skip a certain event which took place in either of the movies, one can safely assume that the events played out as they did for the male counterpart unless otherwise explicitly stated in the chapters.

    Also, in order for the female Chosen One to make sense with the actual prophecy, I have rewritten 3:127 itself to prophecy the coming of a female savior and not a male.

    I hope you all enjoy this story as it progresses, and I greatly appreciate any and all criticism as long as you aren't spamming my thread.


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    "... And in the time of greatest
    despair there shall come a savior,
    a daughter of the sands of time,
    for whom these heavens shall be as a road to her glory,
    with a passion as fiery as the seas of Mustafar,
    a voice cool, as winds from Hoth,
    and the children of Diathim shall swoon at the sight of her beauty..."

    Journal of the Whills 3:127


    Chapter 1



    "Girl, get in here now!" heard the young child as she was attending her cleaning duties. She could hear customers in the store just faintly over the fast beating wings and shouting of the Toydarian store owner. Though she was always eager to see the new customers and perhaps ask them for stories of their travels, she personally did not like being told to resign from her duties so soon after having them given to her so she chose to make her slave master wait for her to finish wiping her face before going inside.

    As she ran down the stairs into the shop, only to meet her owner's reprimands for being late. She took a secret delight in irritating the flying merchant. Sure, Watto was not a bad slave master by any means. He took great care of the girl and her mother, who also made herself useful to him in managing his scrap yard, and he didn't excessively beat his slaves like other slave owners on Tatooine, though he was not above giving a good slap to the back of your head with his datapad for mouthing off. He did not abuse the authority he had been given over them, despite being prone to greediness and gambling, and she was grateful for that. However, it was too much fun to push the old buzzard's buttons to pass the opportunity. As Watto commanded her in Huttese to watch the store, she hopped unto the counter top and took a seat, looking at the clientele: a tall man dressed in a poncho with blondish hair past his shoulders, a strange sentient creature with red lizard like skin and duck billed looking mouth who bobbed while he strolled around the store, a blue astromech droid, and a rather young and attractive brunette girl who only looked a few years older than her.

    The slave girl couldn't help but marvel at her as the older man, whom she assumed was her father, left with Watto to the yard out back to look for hyperdrive parts. She tilted her head and ran her fingers through her short dirty-blonde hair as she looked at the other girl's long strands, complete with braids and a bun to prevent it from going too far down, which was hard to believe as her was already such a great length. The slave's mother would never allow her to wear her hair so long and if she ever did, certainly not so much of it would hang down passed her shoulders. She was always told that a young girl, even at only 9 years old, having long hair, especially having so much just hang down, was dangerous on Tatooine unless you had a strong man with you since it attracted other men's attention. Obviously, since she and her mother lived alone, it was a custom of mother's to cut her hair just so no hair was much longer than half a pinky finger's length on top of her head and about a quarter's length she cut hair closer to the ears and neck, giving her a
  2. Lady_Misty Force Ghost

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    Mar 21, 2007
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    A promising start!

    I've read on other forums that people would like to see tis sort of fics more often. I have seen a fic where Obi-Wan was a girl abut the writer didn't even change the name. And I have read one where at least Palpatine was a woman, maybe Maul too

    I have considered doing a fic like this but changing Padme's gender as well. One of my sisters doesn't see how it would work though. I'll have to speak to my friend that also Beta's Dark Angel (a fic where Leia died as a baby from downing and Darth Vader has a young woman with him that calls him father.) and ask her what she thinks.

    Keep up the good work and please PM me when you update. I would love to follow this story and learn if their si going to be a Luke and Leia
  3. Blue Ice Cream Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Aug 9, 2006
    star 5
    Well done.

    Your choice of setting for the first chapter works great. It really captured my attention.

    I particularly liked the description of Watto. Usually, rewrites of TPM feature a disturbingly cruel Watto, but I believe your version of the Toydarian allows for more possibilities. Specifically, the fact that he knows about the girl's special ability seems key. I gather that Watto might be overprotective of her due to this fact.

    The conversation between Padme and Annika was definitely a chapter highlight. Not too wordy, without being simplistic. Quite enjoyable.

    I'm intrigued by the direction you've taken. Let's see where this goes.
  4. Book-Geek Jedi Master

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    May 28, 2011
    star 3
    This should get interesting. I can't wait to see how Annika's life will difer from Anakin.

    PMs please?
  5. Sith-Spitter01 Jedi Knight

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    Jan 26, 2010
    star 3
    Thank you everyone for enjoying the first chapter, despite some obvious, at least to me, typos that were present in the post. Luckily I managed to find the time to come here and fix them. It's been awhile since I wrote a fanfic and I had typed up this chapter very late and was more concerned about finishing than perfect grammar at the time so I'm not too surprised they were there. Hopefully now it is more pleasant and comprehensive of a reading experience, and by the time the next chapter is ready, I won't have to return to edit out any grammar mistakes or bad spelling. :)
  6. Jedi_QueenBee Jedi Master

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    Sep 5, 2008
    star 3
  7. Nerdman3000 Jedi Master

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    Feb 28, 2012
    This is good, please continue this.
  8. la_dabuka Jedi Youngling

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    Feb 5, 2013
    i hope you continue this its awesome
  9. Ahsoka_Tano_11 Jedi Master

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    Mar 30, 2013
    star 4
    Love it! PM with updates please!
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