School Days - A 1st JA fan-fic

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  1. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    hurry up and reveal it, then!
    :D

    just kidding, don't listen to me!
    :D
  2. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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    Feedback, please! If there are any lurkers out there, please post!

    *~*~*

    The light was warm and comforting, but it's brightness only hurt his unopened eyes. Obi-Wan Kenobi squinted in the bright lights of the Medical Center.

    Once his eyes got used to the the lights, he turned to see Qui-Gon standing over another bed, with his back to Obi-Wan. The sight of Qui-Gon brought back memories of the past few days. He shuddered.

    Qui-Gon turned around, and his weary face lit up. He walked to his Padawan's bedside and placed a hand on the boy's arm. "Hello Padawan."

    Obi-Wan gave a weary smile to his Master. "How did I get here?"

    "I'll tell you about that when you get better, all right?"

    Obi-Wan nodded. He spotted Keni on the bed. Something about the way she looked, even the way that she was laying, bothered him. She curled up in a ball, and her hair was partially covering a red streaked face. Were those tears he saw glistening on her cheeks?

    "Master, whats wrong with Keni."

    Qui-Gon was silent for a moment. Finally, he brought his serious blue eyes up to meet his Padawan's. "Her Master was killed."

    "What? How?"

    "I don't know. But as soon as you get better, I'm going to find out."

    Obi-Wan nodded. He looked at the sleeping form of his friend. He swallowed. "What about Adem?"

    "He lost his leg. They think he's going to survive."

    "He's still unconscious."

    Qui-Gon turned and found Daen standing at the door. "I was just wondering... about Keni."

    "There is nothing to wonder about."

    Keni sat up slowly, and pushed her dark hair out of her eyes. "I'm fine."

    "But what about..."

    Cold eyes turned on Daen. "I said I'm fine."

    Obi-Wan stared at his friend. He could feel her anger radiating like a nuclear explosion through the force. She made no attempt to hide it. It's intensity surprised him. Anger was a Jedi's greatest enemy. Qui-Gon had noticed too, and the two Jedi exchanged a look.

    Qui-Gon cleared his throat. "If you'll excuse us, Daen. We have something to discuss."

    Daen's face flushed. "Have you forgotten that I'm in on this mission to? That I nearly lost my partner because of it?"

    "So what," Keni said, her words dripping with anger. "Do as he says and get out."

    Daen looked at her, the anger in his eyes matching the anger in hers. "So what? He lost his leg! Adem will never be able to.."

    "At least he's still alive!"

    "Whats up with you, Keni?"

    Keni jumped up and ignited her lightsaber, touching it to his throat. "GET OUT!"

    Obi-Wan stared in shock. Qui-Gon moved forward, and in one smooth motion took Keni's lightsaber from her hand and deactivated it. Daen scrambled away and out of the door.

    Qui-Gon turned to Keni. "A Jedi uses his or her lightsaber only in defense and never to lash out in anger.

    Keni gave him a lethal glare. She started out the door.

    "Keni!" Qui-Gon called after her. She continued out the door defiantly. Qui-Gon sighed. It had hit her hard. The sorrow had turned to hard anger. No, it was past anger. It was rage, even hatred. She was walking on very, very thin ice. It was only a matter of time until she used all that pent up hurt and anger for the dark side, like she had almost done a few moments before.

    "Master... I've never seen anyone act like that after losing a Master." Obi-Wan said, his blue green eyes looking shocked and slightly confused.

    "She lost more than her Master, Obi-Wan. She was still dealing with the fresh pain of losing her brother. She had to work with agents, and now her Master is dead. She's dangling over a dangerous cliff. And if we don't do something to help her control her anger, she'll turn to the dark side."


  3. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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  4. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    I'm reading!
    this is really good, Jedi Obi-wan. I'm so happy it's still going.
    :D

    up!

    (only I didn't reach my goal of having an entire page of 'ups!' :( oh, well, maybe somewhere else...)

    :D
  5. Jaya Solo Jedi Grand Master

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  6. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  7. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    *delurking here*

    Poor Keni, that's an awful lot to deal with. I hope she finds her way past her anger.
  8. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    but... what happens to a Padawan who's still in training when their Master dies? Obviously, she can't be a Knight yet...

    :(
  9. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  10. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    um, are posts not showing up or something? a couple of other stories are up, like they've been updated, but they haven't been...
  11. Jedi_KnightMariah Jedi Master

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  12. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  13. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  14. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  15. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    up.
    <remembers something about a post last Monday...>

    not to be annoying or anything, of course.
    :p
  16. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    up

    <hopes Jedi Obi-Wan will notice this>
  17. padawan3 Jedi Master

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  18. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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  19. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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    *deep breath*

    I'm re-writing this. I've been totally mad at myself for how it turned out. So I'm going to re-write it, then re-post it in a month or two. I'm sorry! I hope you'll read the new version.
  20. Senni_Arava Jedi Knight

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    we will :)
    just tell us the name when you post it
  21. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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    Awwwwww! You guys are sooooo understanding! Thank you all! :)
  22. padawan3 Jedi Master

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    That we are. But remember understanding goes only goes so far.
  23. Jedi Obi-Wan Jedi Master

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    So in other words I better have it up on time or you'll come after me with a lightsaber? :D
  24. Jaya Solo Jedi Grand Master

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    Top! (I still want more of this story.)
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