School Days - A 1st JA fan-fic

Hello?

 

I'm here, I'm reading, I'm waiting for the nexxtttt post! Please post more! Please Please Please Please Please PLease PLease Please Please Please Please Please Please Please PLease PLease Please Please Please Please Please Please Please PLease PLease Please Please post more.

 

Please post now! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!

 

Yes, we must have a post! Soon!

 

I love count downs.

 

Hi, Jedi Obi-Wan, I think I'll wait for the whole story to be published on the net, instead. looking at over 80 post is going to make me confused ^_^
Anway, I already got my story posted on fanfiction.net, it's called Solarya. If you got any comments, please post a review. If there's too many mistake, please tell me the paragraph and the sentence, I'll get it fixed before a week after the post.

 

Thanks Sol! (She is my beta reader, if your wondering)

 

I know this may make me seem stupid but what is a beta reader? I have heard about them but never found out what they are.

 

A beta reader is suppose to read your story and point out mistakes or tell you what he/she thinks of the story. =D

 

Oh, thankyou.

 

POOOOOOOOSSSSSSSSSSSTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

Post soon!

 

I really could use another post right now.

 

Bomb? Flames? Does the Obi-Torture include him becoming Mr. Mosty-Toasty, or what? Post soon!

 

Here posty!

please post soon!

 

Just read this whole thread, and have been blown away! Very wnderful this is! Post more you must! I loved the beginning when you described Obi-Wan and Kendrina's clothes! I could just see them!

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MORE!

 

Still no post. Son of a sith. I was hoping for an other one.

 

Man, you ppl sure like saying the word post a lot. You ppl have no feelings? Why do you want to toture Obi-Wan Kenobi that much? Zeeg(backwards, lol), you ppl should be a little more...I dunno.
LOL!
=D
Off topic:
Does anyone know where I can find the lyric for "If You could Read My Mind" By Stars on 54? I have been searching everywhere! Please e-mail me when you found it!

 

Because it's fun and we rather torture him now so he can get used to it for the future.

 

"So you've decided to join us again."

Kendrina moaned and forced her eyes open. "Wa hap?" She said weakly.

"A bomb, Miss Kenobi."

A bomb? Keni searched her brain. Lightsaber fight, blaster fire, bomb, explosion, Obi-Wan. Obi-Wan! "Bro ther. Obi-Wan. Where is he?" Keni nearly gasped at just the pain of talking.

"Don't try to talk. You've been through quite a trauma."

Keni groaned and tried to prop herself up on her elbows. The room started swirling. She hit her pillow with a thud, and the impact sent needles through her skull.

"No, Kendrina. Don't try to get up. Your father and uncle are here to see you." The doctor motioned to the door. "Let them in."

Father? Uncle?

Keni was relieved when her Master came walking through the door, dressed in a business suit. Keni smiled at him "Hi, Dad."

He stood beside her and stroked her dark head. "Hi, Honey."

She grinned and wanted badly to hug him, but couldn't even lift an arm without pain. "Where's my uncle?"

Her Master smiled. "Outside." He bent down and kissed her forehead. He touched his forehead to hers."I'm so glad you're all right, Padawan."

Keni layed there for a moment and enjoyed her Master's presence. He put an arm under her back. "May I?"

She nodded. She winced as he picked her up, but was glad to be in his arms. She layed her head against his chest and closed her eyes.

"Keni? Are you all right?"

Keni opened them again to see Qui-Gon Jinn, staring at her intently. "I'll be okay." Keni braced herself for the horrible truth that might follow her next question. "How is Obi-Wan?"

"They found his body."

"No. O please Force, no.""

Keni tryed to pull away from her Master, but he wouldn't let her. Qui-Gon leaned in closer. "It wasn't him. The body was found in, ah, bits and pieces. He's alive. I can feel it."

"Padawan." Her Master looked down at her. "We need to know what happened."

Keni nodded. She recounted the whole story for them. At the end she was close to tears. "He knocked me down. He protected me. After I was reckless. If I hadn't been out there, he wouldn't have come after me."

A single tear slid down her cheek. "So what happens now?"

"Padawan, you'll have to stay here. Qui-Gon and I have some investigating to do where we were. And we still need someone to protect the students here. And to help us find Obi-Wan."

"Yeah. So, I just tell the students that Obi-Wan was kidnapped." It was a statement. Keni looked away from both of the Jedi Masters.

"Padawan." Matthias reached over and gently guided Keni's chin until his gaze met hers. "We'll find him. Thats a promise."

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Countdown to Obi-torture. Next post.
On a side note: Please please reply!!! That was not one of my better written posts. So please reply with suggestions or something!!!

 

Didn't you say that last post. Or did I just misunderstand the meaning of what you said.

 

Bits and pieces? *cringe*

 

I liked it!


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Oooh, yeah, Obi-Wan is still alive, but he's been kidnapped! And Obi-Torture is coming up! Suggestions? Post soon, very soon!

I liked the way that Matthias and Qui-Gon suddenly became "father and uncle" and wore business suits. That was good camoflage! And the way that they told her they'd found the body, pause, and then that Obi-Wan was still alive, they could feel it. That was a good way to drag out the suspense!