Beyond Second to None (AU L/M, L/H & OC) 03/08/2012 Replies and artwork

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Jedi_Lover, Dec 1, 2011.

Moderators: Briannakin, mavjade
  1. ginchy Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    May 25, 2005
    star 4
    For those of you safely over the age of 18 there is a ginchy-shine to this fic over on LukeandMara (link in my sig). It's called, "Where It Counts". :D
  2. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    I love that title. He's got it where it counts...but does it look like much? Nevermind! Thanks for the shine!
  3. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    I want to thank everybody for reading and a special thanks for ginchy for being my beta and for writing up that awesome ginchy-shine to this fic. It definitely was the best part of this fanfic. =D= Since I am following canon as closely as possible the next couple chapters are events that happened in Dark Empire 1. Therefore I will use the plot of that book as the bases of those chapters. I will have some of the characters saying the same dialog and doing similar things. This is AU though so probably 80% of it isn't canon. But I just wanted to explain that if you see dialog that seems familiar it is probably taken verbatim from DE. I sort of wish I went entirely AU and pretended that DE didn't occur, but I didn't and now I'm stuck with this storyline. Opps. But at least I can rework DE so there is less Dark Luke and more bootknocking.

    This chapter is more plot set up so please don't bail on this fic thinking I got all serious. I promise the story will get stupid again and I am pretty sure in the next chapter I have a few couples bootknocking.

    Thanks everybody for reading. I will have the next chapter up soon.

  4. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    ~New Republic Base, Pinnacle Moon, Da Soocha V.

    The remains of the Rebel Alliance fleet orbited the fifth moon of the planet Da Soocha, an uncharted world in the Cyax System. Among the many starships were the Star Destroyer Emancipator and the Calamari flagship Defiance.

    Admiral Ackbar had recently returned on the Defiance from a reconnaissance mission deep within the galactic core. Upon establishing docking orbit he opened communications with Alliance Leader Mon Mothma located in a Rebel stronghold on Pinnacle Moon.

    ?Something big is happening,? the Admiral?s gravely voice rang out on the ship?s bridge as he stared at a hologram image of the Alliance leader. ?The control of the Imperial Forces appeared to be fragmented. On Coruscant it was reported that Imperial troops loyal to different Moffs were fighting for control of Capital City, but suddenly both sides ceased hostilities and disappeared to an unknown location in the galactic core.?

    The hologram of Mon Mothma frowned. ?Our spies and probe droids report similar occurrences.?

    ?I can think of two reasons for two opposing forces to suddenly disappear into the same quadrant. Either there is something there they both want to fight over, or worse, somebody managed to unify the conflicting factions. Either way, I fear for the Galaxy.? The Calamari paused. ?Is there any news from General Callrisian or Commander Skywalker??

    ?Yes.? The Rebel leader?s face became somber. ?It?s not good news. Luke?s Star Destroyer went down in the middle of Imperial City. A distress beacon went out prior to the ship making planet fall. We lost complete contact shortly after. Princess Leia and General Solo led a mission to rescue any survivors. They?re maintaining radio silence? we won?t know if they are successful until they return.?

    ?Then I have good news for you,? the admiral said. ?I have been informed the Millennium Falcon is back and traveling to your location.? Admiral Ackbar stood from his command chair. ?I?ll come down in my shuttle to attend their debriefing.?
    .
    .
    .
    .
    ?Solo to Pinnacle Base, I?ve got survivors of the Star Destroyer Liberator?open hangar one?we?re coming in?and we need medical support for our injured.? Han maneuvered the Falcon through the treacherous rock spires rising up from the moon?s surface, guided in by a strange flying creature called Ixlls. Behind the Falcon were three command shuttles from the orbiting Rebel fleet and a smaller shuttle from the Wild Karrde.

    ?A medical crew will be standing by in hangar one, General Solo,? the command center responded.

    Carved into the side of a mountainside was a large Rebel operation deck and flight hangers. Han maneuvered his ship deftly and set her down on the stone surface. He turned to Chewie who was occupying the co-pilot seat. ?Run a maintenance check on all systems while I?m gone.? The hairy Wookiee bellowed an affirmative as Han unstrapped himself from his seat and moved to the back compartment.

    ?Threepio, stay here,? he ordered the protocol droid before he could start jabbering about wanting to see Artoo.

    ?Yes sir, General Solo,? the droid responded.

    Han went over the rear of the ship were Lando was tending to the wounded survivors of the Liberator. ?An ambulance speeder should be here any minute. You ready to debrief Mon Mothma and Generals Madine and Dodonna??

    Lando looked very tired. ?I?m as ready as anybody can be when they haven?t slept in days.?

    Leia came up beside Han and Lando. ?Let?s get going.?

    The former smuggler nodded and opened the back boarding ramp. He gestured to his wife. ?After you, Princess.?

    They walked out of the Falcon and were met at the bottom of the ramp by Luke, and the crew of the Wild Karrde. A wide smile spread across Leia?s face when she saw her brother. She ran into his arms and gave him a warm hug. ?Luke, it?s so good to see you again.?

    She took a step back so she could get a better view of her brother. He was wearing a dark green flightsuit that was a
  5. Book-Geek Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    May 28, 2011
    star 3
    ?He really thanked Mara a lot,? Mark snickered and was immediately rewarded by a kick to the shin by the former Emperor?s Hand.

    Mark's lucky that's all he got for that comment!

    This waltzing into Palpatine's lair mission has me worried.[face_worried]
  6. Briannakin Grand Moff Darth Fanfic Manager

    Manager
    Member Since:
    Feb 25, 2010
    star 5
    Hehe. I love Mark and Mara acting like siblings.

    Oh, but I'm worried about this mission, but it is nice to see Mara involved with the events of DE.
  7. Mondra Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    Apr 12, 2010
    star 1
    All right, let's kick some Imperial butt!

    I'm glad my little brother's nothing like your Mark (his name is also Mark though), cause he'd never live to be an adult... I'd just throw him off of a cliff or something of that sort. But your Mark is cute and a perfect "family" for Mara. One of my favorite OCs ;)

  8. Hazel Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 9, 2010
    star 4
    Mark has got the role of Mara's brother down pat. [face_laugh]

    So I guess it's time to storm the castle. May the Force be with them! [-o|
  9. CurtisZidaneZiraa Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Nov 18, 2010
    star 1
    Mark is a truly devoted older sibling - protecting and teasing mericlessly at turns. Fascinated! Baby Anakin kicking around somewhere soon?
  10. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    He's the only person on earth who can treat her like that and live. I think Mara likes having a brother. He is a person who absolutely has no hidden agenda. He has no childhood baggage that will screw up his mind. He can be trusted.
    I just think it is funny that there is little to nothing in the profics explaining where she was and why she didn't come to help. Why are you worried about the mission. I almost never kill anybody in my fics. Okay I did kill off a major character in Choices, but that was necessary. I am a L/M 'shipper after all. Now, if Callista was in this story, maybe you will see a death. I may still do something nasty to Callista.[face_mischief]
    Thank you. It is really a compliment to hear that people like an OC.
    Thanks. I would think a person without a past and no family would cling onto somebody to ground them. Otherwise he is all alone.
    Yes, that is coming up. I am having a little problem with the next chapter. It is a little disjointed. I am going to place to place and I think it is confusing. It reminds me of Scooby Doo where they come out one door, go into another door and then come out a completely different door. Okay that doesn't make sense. It is just hops around a little too much. I sent the chapter to my beta ginchy for advice. I am hoping to have it up by the end of the week.

    Thanks everybody for reading.
  11. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

    Game Host Game Winner
    Member Since:
    Aug 31, 2004
    star 6
    Awesome stuff. Sounds like a more sensible plan - teamwork is always better than going in alone and then realizing you shouldn't have :p

    Thanking Mara huh? With each kiss and caress, he was also counting his blessings - yesness! I got a real hot one!

    And she - she was thinking: Yowsa! LOL She may've had to string guys along as the Hand of Palpy Poopie ;) but she wasn't faking it with Pookie-Lukie-bear. [face_laugh]

  12. ginchy Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    May 25, 2005
    star 4
    I got your new chapter and will get back with you in the next day or two, gal! I think you've created a great character in Mark. Mara needs more family. [face_love]
  13. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    I want to thank ginchy for helping me out with this update. It is really, really hard to write a story with 6 or 7 people in a scene. I sometimes forget they are there. Anyway, I hope this chapter doesn't disappoint. It has some aspects of the Dark Empire plot. Thanks everybody for reading.

    ~JL~





    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    ~Capital City, Khomm~



    The Khommite tavern was well lit with clean polished tile floors, wood paneled walls, and a friendly family atmosphere. Han didn?t like it. It seemed unnatural to be drinking in a place that wasn?t dark, filled with smoke and the smelled of unwashed patrons. This is what he got when he let Luke pick the meeting place.

    Han and the rest of the Byss strike team sat in a private back room of the tavern as they awaited the arrival of Ghent, Karrde?s former slicer and now New Republic Cryptologist, and Han?s friend Shug Ninx from Nar Shaddaa. Shug claimed to have a ship legal for a deep core run. They decided to meet on the planet Khomm because it was the closest friendly planet to Byss.

    A grey-green skinned and hairless Khommite female entered the private room. ?Can I get you gentle beings another round of drinks??

    ?Another whiskey for me,? Han said as he looked at the rest of the group. Karrde was nursing a mug of ale, same as Chin and Chewie. Leia, Mara and Mark opted for a non-alcoholic sweet drink and Luke had his usual hot chocolate.

    ?I?m good,? Karrde replied. The remainder of the group passed on a refill.

    Mark looked bored. ?Isn?t Ghent supposed to be here by now??

    ?He?s probably just being careful, probe droids picked up heavy Imperial activity in the area,? Mara said.

    Karrde looked at Han. ?What did your friend Ninx say about what?s going on in the core??

    ?He said the Imperials are buying up heavy military hardware in massive quantities. He was hired to do a heavy equipment run to Byss aboard his ship Starlight Intruder.?

    ?Is the ship big?? Karrde asked.

    Han nodded. ?It can hold 700 tons of cargo and it is big enough for the Falcon to attach to the back of the main hold and hopefully slip through security unseen.?

    ?Hopefully.? Leia sounded less than optimistic.

    Han looked over to his wife with a cocky grin. ?It?ll be fine. It can?t be any more difficult than sneaking onto the Death Star and rescuing a Princess out of a heavily guarded detention block.?

    "Or me flying in and out of the second Death Star unimpeded,? Luke added.

    ?Or destroying a heavily fortified and guarded storage facility on Wayland with only a handful of people,? Mara laughed.

    Mark shook his head. ?Either the rebels are the luckiest people in the world or the Imperials have the worst security protocols in the galaxy.?

    ?I think it is a little bit of both,? Karrde commented as he finished his drink.

    The waitress came into the room with Han?s whiskey. ?You have two people asking for your group. Should I escort them in??

    Han smiled. ?Yes, please.? He turned to Leia. ?See, I told you Ninx would come through for me.?

    Ghent was the first to arrive. The blue haired, tattooed young man smiled brightly upon seeing the group. ?It?s going to be great working with everybody again.? He walked around the table shaking hands and eventually found an empty seat.

    The next person to arrive was not Ninx.

    Chewie made an unsettling moaning sound causing Han to look up at the new arrival. Han?s eyes went wide and the color drained from his face as a tall, slender woman with dark tanned skin, angular face and a shock of wiry black hair stalked into the room. Her angry orange eyes pinned Solo to his seat.

    ?Han Solo..you nerf-herdin? son of a Hutt! How many years has it been since you walked out on me?? The woman crossed her arms across her chest and rocked back on her heels waiting for an answer.

    Han closed his eyes and took a calming breath while he silently swore to kill his old friend Ninx for sending Salla Zend to meet them. He opened his eyes and gave a forced smile. ?Uh?Hi Salla. Long time no see.? Han could feel his wife?s eyes boring down
  14. Mondra Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    Apr 12, 2010
    star 1
    "Duty calls" Hehehehe...

    I was looking forward to see some Leia/Salla interaction, but I guess it's better to send Leia back to the base and not endanger poor Anakin.

    Very cute H/L and L/M moments! :D
  15. Hazel Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 9, 2010
    star 4
    All my favorite SW adventures are about beating overwhelming odds, so I like the plan.

    Great moments with H/L and L/M, and also Karrde and Mark.

    So, is Leia really going to stay away?
  16. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

    Game Host Game Winner
    Member Since:
    Aug 31, 2004
    star 6
    I wish they had a feigned scowl smiley because I'm really tickled but I don't want it to show too obviously how wonderful your Luke is - that he brags [face_laugh] and has something to brag about although - much of that is because it's Mara. I would be hurling cookies if he was that game on with any other lady - ick!

    :p

    Yeah, go Han!!! Seems like the Skywalker sibs know how to inspire - enthusiasm [face_laugh]

    Huggles!!!!!!

  17. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    To be honest, the Leia/Salla interaction in DE made me uncomfortable...because I would assume it would have made Leia uncomfortable. Also, I understand Leia going after Luke in DE because as far as she knew, she is the only other Force user in the Galaxy that can help Luke (obviously the DE people didn't know about or think about Mara). But in this situation where you have Mara and Mark and Luke, there would be little need to risk Leia and the baby. In my AU universe people have common sense. But the real reason is it is extremely hard to keep track of all of these characters so I decided to get rid of Chin and Leia to make the story more manageable.
    She will be in orbit above Byss and is keeping watch with Chin and Aves. At that point I am going to throw in the plot of DE2 so I can get rid of that story.
    I think the only person Luke would brag to would be Han. Han's the guy that teased Luke earlier in the story about not understanding women and going about things all wrong. Anyway, what Luke said was pretty tame. I can't imagine him giving Han anything more detailed. But you are right...if he was bragging about knocking boots with Callista I would hurl also. I am still secretly wishing that Luke had some unexplainable and chronic case of E.D. during his time with Callista...a problem miraculously cured by Mara.

    Thanks everybody for reading.
  18. taramidala Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Jun 18, 1999
    star 4
    Bow chicka bow wow all around in this chapter! ;)

    No, seriously, you've written all the banter so well - with everyone! And even though I joked about angst earlier I'm glad this has been fun. :)
  19. CurtisZidaneZiraa Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Nov 18, 2010
    star 1
  20. wbsaw Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    Oct 31, 2008
    star 1
    I can't believe anyone who hates DE as much as you is including that..that..THING. All that does is remind me that profic has been full of OOC since practically the end of TTT. No amount of Zahn fixes ever stay fixed.
  21. Briannakin Grand Moff Darth Fanfic Manager

    Manager
    Member Since:
    Feb 25, 2010
    star 5
    Awwwww! Little Anakin is on his way, and he is going to be safe.

    And by the way Luke and Mara are doing it, I wouldn't be surprised if little Ben was on his way too :p
  22. Book-Geek Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    May 28, 2011
    star 3
    Han grinned. ?Not really a problem. I am sending Leia to the Wild Karrde tomorrow morning. It seems I got her pregnant.?

    ?What, just now??


    ROFL![face_laugh]

    So, a chapter of pleasant and unpleasant surprises: Leia's pregnant with baby Ani (who's going to be safe from old evil yellow-eyes![face_dancing] ) and Salla and all her witchiness. I really like how you did both.:)
  23. Jedi_Lover Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 1, 2004
    star 5
    Thanks everybody for your kind comments. I finished the rough draft of the story today, I have probably 15,000 more words to go until it is done, but I will be continuing The Journal of Mark Tantiss through the year. Once again some of this dialog is from DE. And I know it is ironic that somebody who hates DE put in aspects of DE...but I really don't like to go totally AU. I like to intermix canon with the AU. Thanks everybody who has taken the time to read and comment. This post is a little short, but the chapter was originally 6000 words and I thought that was too long, so I broke it up into three posts.

    ~JL~



    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    ~Orbiting above Byss~



    ?Okay Han, you?ve got your wish. We?re entering the deep core security zone. Byss has acknowledged our approach. The whole planet is protected by heavy-duty shield generators.? Salla was at the pilot controls of the Starlight Intruder talking by internal comm to Han and his crew currently in the Millennium Falcon, now clamped on to the rear hold of Salla?s freighter.

    Han clicked on his radio. ?That?s the type of system that was protecting the Endor moon. You?re clear to land, right? Take us down.?

    Everybody waited tensely as the perimeter security officer checked the Starlight Intruder?s clearance registration code and finally opened up the planetary perimeter for the ship to enter. Salla deftly maneuvered her freighter along the approved descent trajectory and docked at the Imperial Freight complex on the outskirts of the Emperor?s ruling city.

    ?Salla.? Han?s voice came over the comm. ?We?re disengaging. We?ll be in touch.?

    ?Solo, I only have clearance for six hours, if you?re not back by then, you?re on your own.?

    ?Copy that,? Han said as he disengaged the Falcon?s landing claw and drifted away from Sala?s ship.

    Chewie glanced down at the sensors and let out a plaintive yowl.

    Han looked at the rear sensors. ?I see them Chewie, it?s an Imperial patrol.? Han made a course correction to see if the patrol ship would follow. ?Great, they?re on to us.?

    Han switched on the ships intercom system. ?Luke, get up here, we?ve got company.?

    Luke darted up to the cockpit followed by Mara and Mark. ?What is it??

    ?We have a patrol on our tail. Can you do a Jedi mind trick and get these guys to forget they saw us??

    Luke focused his attention on the ship following them. ?We would need to get the ysalamiri as far away from me as possible. Right now I barely feel the Force.?

    ?I?m on it!? Mark ran toward the forward hold where the creatures were stored. He grabbed up all six cages, startling the animals and causing them to growl and hiss as he quickly moved them to the engine bay. It was the farthest point from the cockpit and Mark hoped it was far enough. As he ran back to Luke?s location he could feel the Force returning.

    When he arrived to the flight deck he found Luke and Mara with their eyes closed and in deep concentration. The patrol ship appeared to slow and then listed starboard and eventually disappeared among other air traffic.

    ?I think you got him off our tail,? Han remarked as the two Force sensitives slowly opened their eyes and smiled at each other. Han piloted the ship through the numerous towering structures of Throne City but one building stood out among the others.

    As Mark stared at the odd structure he was amazed that the building was standing at all. He was hard pressed to figure out how the building could possibly be structurally sound. There was a relatively thin red and black tower rising up into the clouds. At the top of the spindly column was a very large half sphere shaped building. The architect who designed the building was either a brilliant genius or a complete idiot.

    ?That structure looks a bit top heavy,? Mark remarked.

    Mara stared at the strange building. ?That?s the Citadel,? her voice becoming hollow and stilted. ?I can feel the Emperor?s Force presence becoming stronger.?

    Han got out of the pilot?s chair and gave Mara a sober look. ?You sure you want to
  24. Hazel Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Nov 9, 2010
    star 4
    Clonned Emperor is even creepier than the original. [face_worried]

    I loved L/M's farewell. [face_love]
  25. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

    Game Host Game Winner
    Member Since:
    Aug 31, 2004
    star 6
    No one blends as seamlessly and well as you JL! You leave out all the idiotic parts that's why LOL :p

    Yummy parting/farewell till later between L/M [face_dancing] especially the giving me so much to look forward to & come back to me part (d'awwoon!) :)

    Cool stuff with the Emperor and Mara - she really knows how to play along @};-

Moderators: Briannakin, mavjade