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  1. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    italics Denotes mind speech or mind thought..

    Qui-Gon has left the Jedi order to raise his brother, Amos? child, fourteen-year-old Damien. Along with his mother Myra, to help him. He lives on a ranch and right now is in knee-deep debt trying to keep things running.

    Jinn blames himself for the death of his brother who was killed out of revenge against Jinn by Darth Sidious himself.

    Jinn has been called back to the temple to receive some very shocking news. How shocking you will see in my first post.

    I love Q/O stories and that is the only kind I write. Ewen

    Might warn you though, Jinn has people pulling him in every direction. Besides the pressures of credits which he has very little, his brother has put him in debt and he never really could save credits in the Jed order. He is an unhappy man and things go down hill from there.

    HE IS NOT THE RATIONAL THINKING JEDI . Qui is just a regular?Joe? trying to keep a roof over his families? head, plus send Damien to the best school credits can buy, as requested by his dying brother.

    ########## ?SECRETS OF A MOTHER LEAD TO SINS OF A FATHER?###########

    As soon as Qui-Gon Jinn reached the temple he went straight to the office of his old friend Mace Windu,well Master Windu to those at the temple, but since Qui-Gon was o longer a Jedi, he dropped the master to his name and seldom called Mace, Master. Just didn?t seem fitting to him.

    He did not leave the Jedi for any reasons that evoked a falling out between he and the order. His brother Amos died almost a year ago. He left a son, Damien to care for.

    Jinn became the boy?s guardian and felt obligated to raise him, since his mother died years ago and hionly family was Qui-Gon and Jinn?s mother Myra. She felt she was too old to raise the child on her own and Qui-Gon had to agree.

    Now, without giving a reason Mace asked to see him on the sly. Master Yoda was a way and that was why the meeting was planned for now.

    He seemed mysterious abut something when he "commed" me. I hope this is not a ploy to get me to go on some obscure mission that the Jedi are positive that only I can complete. I have heard that mantra for almost a year now and it grows old. Mace did assureme though before having me come all this way, it was not for a mission.

    Mace embraced Qui-Gon in a bear hug, almost squeezing the breath from the big master.

    ?I am so glad to see your ugly face, my friend.?

    ?With compliments like that I think I can find ways to stay away from here even longer.?

    ?Oh no you don?t. You don?t visit us enough. You left the Jedi, not abandoned you friends.?

    ?Well I have been busy on the little ranch-type home I bought for Damien, my mother, and myself to live in.?

    ?Big is it??

    ?No have some horses though. I love equestrian exhibitions. Few animals and a garden, nothing more. Oh and a fish bond down back over a small cliff. Nice serene, Damien likes the school.?

    He is adjusting to his father being gone??

    ?Yes as well as you could expect. I think having me there is really helpful too him. You know man to man kinda thing. I can?t imagine how he would survive with just mother. Let?s quit the chit-chat shall we? So what have you sent for me for??

    The frown that burrowed in Mace?s face worried the former master, Qui-Gon.?

    ?What is it Mace is Yoda alright??

    Yoda was the most dear person to him in his life equal to only his mother and then sometimes begrudgingly Jinn thought he cared more for Yoda, although he would never vocally admit it.

    ?Do you remember Kaylin??

    Jinn frowned.

    ?Of course.?

    Kaylin was the love of his life, but their love could go no further, when Jinn chose the Jedi over her. She left him, never to see each other again.

    ?Mace have you brought me here to torture me. Of course I remember her. How could I not. Why bring her up now. It?s water under the bridge. I haven?t seen her in about eight years.?

    ?Well, I would say you have not seen her in eight years and about nine months.?

  2. Aunecah_Skywalker

    Aunecah_Skywalker Jedi Knight star 5

    Mar 25, 2002
    What?! You have to be joking ewen . Honestly. Qui-Gon is such an idiot! :mad: He wants to take care of his brother's fourteen-year-old son, but doesn't want to even look at his own little, cute Obi-Wan? What in the world is wrong with him? With a mouth like his, I almost happen to think that Obi-Wan requires a mouth like his .

    (Pardon me if that didn' tmake any sense. I don't talk very well after doing two hours straight computer science homework.)

  3. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    Like I said the burden of real everyday living has gotten to the old man[Qui], beating him soundly to the ground!!!! He is not happy with his life as it is

    Besides you will see later, why Qui is so adamant in the beginning, not to keep his son.

    He might not be rational, but who in "real" life stays rational throughout their life. We have all done at least one thing wrong or out of character for us !!! Jinn, in my stories just seems to have done more than the norm.

    PEACE ewen
  4. Jedi_Knight150

    Jedi_Knight150 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2002
    ?Pompous and mouthy little brat aren't you?"

    LMAO [face_laugh]

    This is great! I have a feeling this is going to turn into a battle of the egos. I can't wait to read more!
  5. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    This is going to be one wild ride, ewen, I can feel it. :D

    I can't wait for more. :D
  6. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
  7. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 31, 2001
    I'm really having a hard time trying to post tonight. See my comment at the other site.

    I didn't know you were planning on starting a new one so soon. Thanks :)
  8. Linari_Tanis

    Linari_Tanis Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 25, 2002
    Whoa, Obi-Wan's got an attitude! Well, it only serves Qui-Gon right for not wanting to take care ob Obi as he should! But, Obi could tone it down a little gease!
  9. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    Jinn did not care what he said about boy. He didn?t want him before he met him and now he was wanted less for Qui-Gon thought Obi-Wan was an obnoxious brat.

    ? Jinn that is not the Jedi way to be so critical. You have only just met him.?

    ?Remember this Mace I am a Jedi no longer. I can think and do anything I want. Right now I am going to head out of here and take the next transport home. Hopefully I will get there just before dark to feed the animals.?

    The boy looked incredulously at Master Jinn.

    ?You certainly never planned to take me to a farm in the country.?

    ?I plan to take you no where.?

    Jinn grabbed the door knob and started to leave.

    Mace prattled on as if Qui-Gon planned to take Obi and ignored his friend?s rising anger.

    Maybe you can have his last name changed to yours.?

    ?I won?t change my last name, the name of my mother to his, a stranger, someone just tells me is my father..?

    That brought Jinn?s wrath down on the child.

    ?I didn?t and won?t ask you too since you won?t be with me. Now excuse me Mace.?

    Jinn started out the door again.

    ?Good because I would spit on the name Jinn. It is nothing to me. You chose to make me live in a world branded as an illigimate by all my mother?s family. She was alienated from them. It has always been her and I and now that I she is?. she is.?

    The child could not finish for tears that dripped down his cheeks but he hung his head not willing for this man he hated to see them.

    Qui-Gon stopped and turned around when he heard how Kailin had been treated by her family. Jinn had never known of the child and was not sure what he would have done or could have done about it anyway. His life had been Jedi. Now though he still was unwilling to share his life except with his nephew, his brother?s son Damien.
    There just was no place in his life for the child now.

    Mace was angrier at Jinn as he could have ever believed himself capable of.

    ?Very well then Jinn you will need to take him to the Coruscant orphanage and sign his custody over. I have the papers stating you are his father and the DNA testing to prove it. They will need it at the office there at the orphanage. I?ll call ahead and have them start the procedure. I hope you will be able to leave for home tonight.?

    ?Can?t you do it? I mean I can sign him over to you and??

    ?Don?t Jinn. How dare you talk that way in front of him. Don?t? you see he is already upset??

    Obi-Wan took the sleeve of his shirt and wiped the tears away.

    ?I?m alright just take me there and let?s get this over with. I never wanted to stay with him anyway.?

    Jinn roughly grabbed the boy?s arm.

    ?Very well Mace I will take him home until I can make the arrangements to do something with him. I have Damien to care for now. He is my priority, my only priority.?

    ?A former Jedi Master can?t care for two little young ones??

    Jinn shook the boy he still held strongly with one hand.

    ?I have no intentions of dividing my time. Damien needs me and I promised him I would be there. I never promised him? this one anything.?

    ?Maybe not but then again he wasn?t the one careless enough to let a child be born and then refuse the responsibility of that child, you are my friend and it shames me to have witnessed what I have in this office.?

    Jinn dragged the boy out the door with him Obi?s feet barely touched the floor as his father almost lifted him off of it. Mace stood in the door way and could only shake his head.

    I don?t even know the Qui-Gon Jinn that stood in this office today. I plan to discuss this with Master Yoda. There has to be things going on Jinn was not willing to tell us. I almost feel bad for sending the boy home with his father, but where else was he to go?

    Jinn stowed Obi-Wan?s meager belongings he carried in a small valise up under the seat. The child had not uttered a word to Qui-Gon since they left the office of Mace Windu. While he did not care for the temple he liked being around this overly large man even less. He knew it was fact that Jinn was his father
  10. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 8, 2002
    Qui-gon Jinn, you are such a bastard!!!!! (sorry ewen) Obi-wan is sooooooo alone, nobody wants him, and the woman who loved
    Damien, I always think devil, demon, mean, when I see/hear that name. 7
  11. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001

    "Damien I always think devil, demon, mean, when I see/hear that name." 7

    That's why his name is what it is. I think the same way when I see/hear it.

    PEACE ewen

  12. Linari_Tanis

    Linari_Tanis Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 25, 2002
    *is speechless*

    I can't say anything, Obi and Qui are being unreasonable in this. They both have feelings they aren't willing to share with one another and the only way for things to get better is if they do!
  13. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    Aw, geez, they're both complete lunkheads. [face_plain] Oh goodie. [face_plain]

  14. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 31, 2001
  15. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    Many of Jinn?s friends told him, his brother had asked too much of him, quite possibly blinded by the dying concern of a father for his son. They told Qui-Gon that he could see to the boy?s welfare and still remain a Jedi. Jinn felt though his best place would be with the boy, until he was at the age of consent, twenty-one. Then was soon enough to go back to a Jedi.

    Had the Jedi master realized how much he would miss his way of life? Friends like Yoda, Mace, and several others on the council did not think so. Now Qui-Gon paid for that hasty decision of renouncing the Jedi with a life that just got more and more miserable for him.

    I can never become a Jedi again if I can?t rein in my temper with one little boy, my son no less. Sometimes even I feel Amos asked too much of me, but I did promise?..

    His thoughts trailed off as he looked back up at his son. The son that carried every sweet markings Kailin had. The eyes as blue and clear as the sky, ginger almost strawberry blonde hair, even his mannerisms and flighty nature was gotten from Kaylin. Jinn didn?t see an ounce of him in the boy.

    Qui-Gon chuckled softly to himself.

    Well maybe he did get a couple of things from me, my stubbornness and pig-headed attitude. He certainly doesn?t hesitate to speak up to defend what he thinks is right. Of course he would defend his mother, he does not know what happened between us. He only knows her side and I doubt that she put herself if any ?bad light? when retelling the story. [force rest your soul].

    Although his words were directed at Obi-Wan, his son, his eyes were not. They were fixed on the toe of his boots, his right hand over his brow as he tried to rub away a forming headache.

    ?Let us get this perfectly clear Obi-Wan. Our paths were not meant to cross. At least in your mother?s eyes, for she never breathed a word to me about you or I would have certainly not shirked my duties. I feel she forfeited the right to call on me by her refusal to even acknowledge that she had a son, my son. While I have sympathy for you and your plight, it is not my problem. Since you have no living relatives, except me, you are forced to stay with me until other arrangements can be made. Maybe the Agricorps will take you will without Jedi training since you are a force sensitive or the Healers section there on Bandomeer for your force powers."

    Jinn glanced over once to see if Obi-Wan was listening to him, then continued.

    "Until then you will have to stay with me here on this farm that you seem already to despise. Things are to be done my way, not a word of objection from you is to come from your lips. When I am not here, my mother will be in charge. Her word is gold. Remember that for I will not tolerate any bad mouthing of her. You are to do as she says understand??

    Qui-Gon was not sure he had handled that right. He had never had much dealings with a child under the age of a padawan and by then the crèche masters had them so well versed in the Jedi ways, they were just miniature adults and they were addressed that way by the knights and masters alike. Yes, he took care of Damien but he was a very mature fourteen-year old.

    The child sat on the bed and let self pity take over all common sense he had right then, He so very much would have liked to have been back in his home with his mom right now.

    Oh but she had to get herself killed. I hate her. I hate everyone around me especially him over there. Already trying to find a way to rid himself of me.

    Obi-Wan, who was as stubborn as his father, did not answer.

    A thundering voice that seem to shake the bedroom windows came from the big man.

    ?I didn?t here you. I normally don?t ask a question twice and I want an answer right now. DO YOU UNDERSTAND ME??

    Just a squeak of a voice could be heard from Obi-Wan as fear solicited his reply

    ?Yes sir.?

    Jinn got up and left the boy just sitting there with no instructions of what he should do and left the room. He went out to visit his horses in the barn stalls for a more tranquil and peacef
  16. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 8, 2002
    Well Mr. Jinn in the future you will meditate on keeping your leggings on. :) 7
  17. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Mar 23, 2000
    I'm really liking this story ewen!

    Jinn can be such a cold hearted jerk, his Mother isn't much better :mad:

    What has poor Obi done, other than being born that they could have such hate for him.

    I really look forward to seeing where you are taking us with this one. You always have such sweet mush, but only after you have tortured both Obi and us :D :D :D
  18. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001

    Jinn entered the tiny little school. The tiles on the floor were occasionally missing. The paint flaked from the walls. Anyone who could afford too, sent their children to a private school. Most of them in that area were rich farmers or even richer horse breeders. Jinn was neither. He struggled to keep Damien in school at St, Ives, but now....even that would not help. The boy would have to come here, where classes where together two or three grades because of the of the money for instructors and its small size.

    Qui-Gon cringed with the thought of Damien being put in a school such as this, however he remembered how easily and readily he placed his own son here.

    He walked to the same office he had taken Obi-Wan too when he was enrolled. That had been the first time he had ever to step into the school and its condition horrified and angered the former Jedi master. The children less fortunate suffered the most from the poverty of their parents. Education was not that good here.

    How will Damien ever get into a good University graduating from this school?

    Qui-Gon was escorted to the principle?s office. He noticed Obi-Wan as he stood in a corner of the office. Obi-Wan could not turn around and see his father, he didn?t have too. He could feel his presence and when the secretary escorted his ?Dad? to the principle?s office, Obi-Wan could not penetrate his dad?s shields to know exactly what he was feeling right then but he could through the force feel waves and waves of anger churning just beneath the surface of Jinn?s exterior.

    I bet he is going to kill me for this. Well not kill me but I will probably wish I were dead.

    What Obi-Wan did not know was that Qui-Gon?s anger for him was two-fold. Jinn blamed him for Damien?s dismissal from his school; his chance for a future.

    Mr. Allen extended his hand in greeting Mr. Jinn.

    ?Mr. Jinn I hate to call you away from your farm, but this has to be taken care of. I am aware you were a Jedi and possess the powers of the force. However I did not now that your son was blessed or in this case cursed with it also.?

    Jinn was a little offended.

    ?I did not know it was required of me to tell you of his force abilities.?

    ?Maybe it would not have been if the child was courteous and taught or at least told not to use any of his abilities while at school, certainly not use them to bring harm to another. The Childers? boy, Mica had to be taken to the hospital for a broken arm because of your son and his freaky power.?

    Now the big master was in arage, not for what the man said about Obi, for he was not even in his mind. To insult the Jedi or the force its self was atrocious Jinn taught.

    ?Being a Jedi or possessing the force is not freaky sir and I don?t care for it to be called as such.?

    ?Sorry Mr. Jinn if I have gotten your nose out of joint but that?s what I call it when someone uses it to harm another and a child at that.?

    Mr.Allen would not relent on his stand no more than Jinn would stop defending the Jedi and their power. However the man did have a point.

    ?Very well, I will admit it is not the Jedi way to do harm with the use of the force.?

    ?As I understand it the child was not trained in the way of the force or to be a Jedi.?

    ?Yes but what does that have to do with anything.?

    ?Because I can not have him here if he uses it against another in anger.?

    Jinn had to argree anger and force powers did not worked well together. It was called the dark side but he would not bother to explain that to this layman who surely knew nothing of the Jedi.

    ?What has to be done to insure he stays in school??

    "Yes well a education is promised to all although I will admit we are small. I am sending the boy home and he will stay there the next two days. Come Monday when school resumes he?s welcome to come back if you are assured that he understand this must ever happen or I will not only be forced to put him out of school but I will have him prosecuted. I know there are ways to tame the force if it is to use a force inhibiter.

  19. JoeyKenobi

    JoeyKenobi Jedi Youngling

    Apr 22, 2000
    This is a great story Ewan:) :) :)

    I just found it today, boy have I missed out :)

    I think Yoda may need to come visit Qui-Gon and give him a good thump or two with his cane.

    Can I get started on him before he gets to cute little Obi? I won't rough him up too much. He should still be able to walk, I promise :)

    I can't believe how mean he can be. Poor Obi and he just lost is mom and all :( :(

    I'm glad you threw in the part with Mace not being to happy with how he was treating Obi-Wan. I like Mace and not enough people treat him as a good guy.

    So please, please post more soon and keep posting often. I for one will be here reading.

  20. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Mar 23, 2000
    Qui-Gon you could use some anger management therapy!!! To treat a young boy in this manner is unexcusable.

    I hope you continue with the daily and even better twice daily posts Ewen. I love to see the stories I am following updated often!!!
  21. Lazy-Bones

    Lazy-Bones Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 15, 2002

    I'm reading fo'sure, interesting that QGJ is acting like a complete porridge-brain here (to quote calvin and hobbes)
  22. jedi7

    jedi7 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 8, 2002
    Here's some advice Obi, bad advice run away, you can do bad by yourself.
    ewen I try to post quickly, but have no access to the net, at work, overnight, so try to keep posting daily please, your devoted fan, :) :) :D 7 was that enough kissin up?
  23. ewen

    ewen Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 11, 2001
    I will make every effort to post everyday. Thanx for telling me about your plight, just post when you can and the others the same but I hope it is often!! ewen


    Jinn pulled the Hover car in the driveway and once up beside the house, he slammed on the brakes. Damien thought he would be thrown through the windshield by Jinn?s slamming the brakes on so hard.

    In a low calm tone Jinn spoke to his nephew.

    ?Damien go on in the house and ask Grandmother to make you a snack. I will be in later after Obi-Wan and I have a long ?talk?.?

    Damien had never been to the barn for what Obi-Wan was going for, but his father used to tell him that is where Damien?s grandfather would take Qui-Gon and Amos if they were to receive a spanking. Never was it done in their home.

    Damien went on in with a little satisfaction, Obi-Wan was to get punished. He didn?t even know the child had done something wrong at school, he honestly believed his uncle was punishing him for Damien?s sake, for being there for just existing.

    Qui-Gon got out of the hover car and waited for Obi-Wan, but the child just sat there. He was in no hurry to receive what his father was going to give him.

    The Jedi jerked the door open to the back seat and pulled Obi-Wan out.

    I wish, right now he had a braid. I would have used that to jerk him out of the car.

    He literally dragged Obi-Wan to the barn and stood him in the middle of the it.

    ?Wait right there. I have to get something.?

    Obi-Wan did wait. Sweat formed on his forehead as he waited in anticipation of what was too come.

    Jinn came back carrying a switch cut from a tree. Not a small one either.

    Obi-Wan looked up to see him come in and the look on the big man?s face told Obi-Wan just to take what his father would handout and keep his mouth shut. Qui-Gon Jinn was not in a mood to listen to excuses especially when they came from his son.

    He must truly hate me to do this.

    ?If I suspect you use the force to ward off the severity of this punishment you will get it over do you understand??

    Obi-Wan only nodded and turned around. He would not give this horrible man who happened to be his father the satisfaction of seeing his tears fall as they were now.

    Damien had walked out onto the porch and even heard the swing of the switch and then a small yelp from the boy. He walked closer just so he could hear the boy being punished and got a great deal satisfaction from it.

    Obi-Wan after the first and only cry of pain remained quiet with a threat by his father that if he made another sound he would start all over again with the count. The cry that tore from his lips wasn?t really from intense pain as it was the shock and humiliating feeling of it. Jinn had intended to swing that switch with power behind it but when the blow was landed it was softer more to shame than to inflict pain. One might say it was not to bring harm so much as it was to bring humiliation and it succeeded.

    Ten slaps were aimed and executed on the boy?s bottom except, when Qui-Gon inadvertently went a little lower to his back upper thighs.

    When finished Jinn threw the switch down as if it had been the direct culprit of his anger and punishment on Obi-Wan and not him. He stood and looked at the boy who was clearly shaking from the tears he shed. Qui-Gon could hear little hitches in his voice for he feared to make a sound for fear his father would pick the switch back up and start over.

    There they both remained for a few minutes in total silence.

    In the mean time, Damien went back in, unnoticed from his little spying mission.

    Finally Jinn broke the silence.

    ?Now find yourself a corner and stay there, until I come back for you. If you are really lucky I may let you have last-meal. Is that understood??

    Obi-Wan nodded.

    ?I expect a vocal answer from you, young man Did you hear me??


    Jinn knew then with certainty that the little boy was crying. At that time though he did not care. His entire life had been turned upside
  24. Kelly Kenobi

    Kelly Kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Mar 23, 2000
    You tell him Obi!!!

    It's about time someone said it :mad:
  25. Aunecah_Skywalker

    Aunecah_Skywalker Jedi Knight star 5

    Mar 25, 2002
    Ugh!!! :mad: I am angry enough to kill Qui-Gon right now. ewen , if any of the Jedi ever read your stories, they would surely turn to the Dark side (and that's a compliment ;)). I hate Qui-Gon.

    Please post something more soon; I don't know what Qui-Gon has for a brain (though it's obvious it's not what everyone else has), and I can't wait to see his reaction to poor little Obi's question.

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