Saga Shattered Glass - ROTS AU - A/P - NEW UPDATE 5/30 - Chapter 32!

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  1. Jedi_QueenBee Jedi Master

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    SO she's becomin g as corrupt as Anakin then?
  2. Lady_Skywalker87 Jedi Grand Master

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    Love role swich Padlei!...is nice to see that Anakin is still conflicted & yet sensible enough to be able to the "strong & rational" while Padmè is the emotional mess that Anakin was during ROTS with the only difference being that Padme seems more open & reseptive towards him dispte her current state of being, than Ani was towards her.

    ?I begged you...? She sighed shakily. ?I begged you not to use the Dark Side on Leia and Luke. Not like you used it on me.?

    Her arms came to embrace him shakily. His hand came up to squeeze hers.

    ?They're the one last thing I didn't corrupt...? he murmured against her arms. ?I can't, Padmé. I just can't.?
    Beautiful in it's power!@};- Great Chapter overall!=D=

    Have a woderful New Years!:)
  3. FitJedi Jedi Master

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    Ugh... he is so frustrating at times. Why he thinks the force is weaker than the Dark Side, so corrupted by the dark side. I do hope that maybe Obi-Wan can show him the right way again. I'm still really hoping for a somewhat happy ending here.
  4. ROTSFan Force Ghost

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    I agree with him not being able to corrupt them being very sweet. Even if he tried, the Force might deny him, who knows?


    ?They couldn't have gone very far,? she finished for him with the same smile.

    ?They must have taken refuge on a nearby planet,? he confirmed with the smugness he found surprisingly echoed on his wife's face.

    ?All too easy.?


    Scary how much they're thinking alike now.

    Finding Kenobi is definately the right thing to do.
  5. _ThatJediScum_ Force Ghost

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    I love reading this story.

    She pulled away slightly to look at him in the eye.

    ?People sacrifice themselves and die inside for me...?

    He felt a shudder go through him, unnamed emotions filling him until he looked down, away from her bloodshot eyes.

    ?This is still not your fault...? he managed through clenched teeth, literally forcing himself to look at her again.


    Wow. I lost my breath there for a moment.


    ?I promise you, Padmé... I'm going to find those who did this to you and our children. I'm going to save Leia. I promise.?

    Unbidden in his mind, another thought came to him.

    Something that felt strange and confusing but something that wouldn't go away...

    I'm going to save you too.


    Oh Wow. This is such a major shift in characters. It is amazing to me that Anakin even realizes that Padmé needs saving. This actually gives me hope. I felt so horrible for Anakin when he said he was the Darkside. It's crazy that he thinks he is beyond saving i.e. saving. I want him to find the strength within himself. And I'm glad Anakin is going to keep his promise about not using the Darkside on the twins. Btw LOVED the scene of Anakin talking to Padmé with his head in her lap. It was very sweet especially with all the death and destruction going around.


    ?No time for a plan?, he continued with a smirk of satisfaction. ?No time to relocate somewhere safe. Not yet.? Turning around, he looked at her and saw the recognition on her face.

    ?They couldn't have gone very far,? she finished for him with the same smile.

    ?They must have taken refuge on a nearby planet,? he confirmed with the smugness he found surprisingly echoed on his wife's face.

    ?All too easy.?



    But this was just all kinds of creepy. Seriously. I have hope but I know it is going to take a long time to get Anakin and Padmé to turn away from the darkness.

    bran

  6. tamiki Jedi Knight

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    It would not surprise me if this Amedda somehow is involved in the attack [face_skull]
    Its hopefully a good sign that Anakin is holding back in using the dark side to heal Leia, and that he ackowledge the light and the innoncence, but it's still a long way home.
    It's a progress that he brings himself to seek Obi wan for help.
    Love this story, update soon. [:D]
  7. Padlei Jedi Master

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    Hello everyone!

    Happy (belated) new year...

    Here's next chapter. It's divided into two parts. Next part should come soon.

    EverydayAngel

    Thank you! I'm so glad you liked that scene between Anakin and Padmé. I loved writing it. :)


    Jedi_QueenBee

    As corrupted as Anakin? Mmh... We'll see. [face_devil] Padmé and Anakin are different people with different personalities. So Padmé with some darkness is different than Anakin with lots of darkness. We'll see how it turns out.

    Am not sure this was clear. :p


    Lady_Skywalker87

    is nice to see that Anakin is still conflicted & yet sensible enough to be able to the "strong & rational" while Padmè is the emotional mess that Anakin was during ROTS with the only difference being that Padme seems more open & reseptive towards him dispte her current state of being, than Ani was towards her.

    I really like that observation. :) A @};- to you!

    Thank you! I hope you had a great happy new year's eve...



    FitJedi


    Why he thinks the force is weaker than the Dark Side, so corrupted by the dark side.

    Well, he may think the dark side's stronger, he still doesn't use on Leia, does he?

    I'm still really hoping for a somewhat happy ending here.

    You're probably the only optimistic left here since VA-Parky disappeared. :p I can only promise closure.

    Thank you for your comments and for still reading this story. :)



    ROTSFan


    I agree with him not being able to corrupt them being very sweet.

    Me liked it too. ;)

    We'll see if our dear Obi-Wan helps. [face_devil]

    Thank you for always commenting on this story! :)



    _ThatJediScum_


    I love reading this story.

    [face_blush] And I love reading your comments. :)

    Oh Wow. This is such a major shift in characters. It is amazing to me that Anakin even realizes that Padmé needs saving. This actually gives me hope.

    Thank you for spotting that! This is indeed a shift in Anakin.

    Btw LOVED the scene of Anakin talking to Padmé with his head in her lap. It was very sweet especially with all the death and destruction going around.

    Thank you, I loved writing it. :)

    But this was just all kinds of creepy. Seriously. I have hope but I know it is going to take a long time to get Anakin and Padmé to turn away from the darkness.

    You've always been able to catch what I'm going for. :D


    tamiki


    It would not surprise me if this Amedda somehow is involved in the attack

    o_O

    Not saying. :p

    Thanks for your comments! :)






    I would like to thank my beta again, leia_naberrie, because she's the most wonderful beta and I wouldn't be posting this here if not for her. :)

    I would also like to thank you, faithful readers for still reading this fic and commenting. It's almost been three years and I'm most grateful for your presence. :)



    Here we go, Chapter 30 (1/2)! Hope you enjoy it.





    Chapter 30



    Part 1





    There were shouts and arguing.

    Younglings crying soundlessly while adults were panicking above them. In the dark dusty room the survivors were trying to decide on their next refuge.

    From where he stood in the room, Obi-Wan Kenobi sighed in defeat, eyeing the so-called Jedi around him.

    They were still on Arbra.

    Vader really has all the time in the world to find us, he reflected.

    Barriss Offee was sitting on the floor next to him silently, holding a still shell-shocked Lainé.

    For awhile - as he continued to watch what was left of the Jedi Order with something akin to resignation- Obi-Wan allowed himself to miss the calm presence of Master Yoda.

    Your all-mighty Master Yoda joined the Force!

    Unknowingly, his mechanical hand clenched and unclenched.

    Obi-Wan closed his eyes tightly.
    With a deep sigh, he struggled to release his hatred into the Force.

    Every now and then he noticed Barriss looking at him strangely. Her eyes were piercing him.

    He didn't like it.

    ?Umgul! We need to go there!?

    The Jedi speaking was Jad Kahl, one of the young ones w
  8. FitJedi Jedi Master

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    Wow, talk about a mess of emotions right there. From sweet and tender to bitter hatred- wow! Can't wait to see what you have in store next, especially since I have feeling Obi-Wan and Anakin will be seeing each other very soon.
  9. AnakinLuver Jedi Master

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    Padme equals ouch... poor Anakin... nothing is going right for him...

    Obi-wan should leave those other so called Jedi... and now Vader will go after those jedi...

    Good update!

    Rachel Rose@};-
  10. Jedi_QueenBee Jedi Master

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    snap .... hiss.... snap... crackle.... pop!
    this is what anakin and padme's anger would sound like!
  11. Lady_Skywalker87 Jedi Grand Master

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    Oh, thank you for the rose Padlei![:D] I'm thrilled that you like my observation...I really enjoy stories that make me think!;)

    Poor Obi:( I'm glad he won't be alone & Padmè delivers a deathly blow to where it hurts most...her hubby's pride![face_beatup]

    Great update!=D=
  12. Padlei Jedi Master

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    Hello!

    A few replies and then the final part of Chapter 30.

    Lady_Skywalker87

    You're very welcome! :)

    Poor Obi sad I'm glad he won't be alone

    Yeah, I took pity on Obi-Wan... ;)

    Padmé knows Anakin very well and words are her weapon.

    Thank you so much for the review!

    Jedi_QueenBee

    LOL, I can't wait to see what you're going to think of next part. [face_devil]


    AnakinLuver

    Thanks so much! You've been here for a very long time and I'm so grateful for that. :)

    FitJedi

    Wow, talk about a mess of emotions right there.

    It's more interesting to me that way. :p

    Thanks! :) I think you guessed right about an ucpcoming confrontation. [face_mischief]

    Thank you for being there since the beginning. That encourages me to go on with this story. :)


    Here's next chapter.







    Warning : Even though I think it's been obvious since the beginning I'll say this clearly for this chapter. I'm in no way portraying Anakin and Padmé in this story as a role model for a healthy relationship. Remember Anakin turned to the dark side. And Padmé has some issues with it too.



    Now onto next part.





    Chapter 30


    Part 2



    They reached Coruscant soon enough. Strange how the trip had felt so short this time.

    The Emperor had spent the entire trip from Naboo in a room, fixing droids.

    It had taken his mind off a lot of things.

    As Artoo came back to life and helped him repair Threepio, he felt like he suddenly had some focus again. If only he could fix Leia as easily...

    Anakin hadn't seen Padmé since their discussion and strangely found he didn't want to. It felt like all this ordeal had changed her.

    If he was honest with himself, he had noticed some changes for sometime already.

    But he only pushed the thoughts away in annoyance and glanced at the planet below them as the ship began its descent.

    It felt like coming back to hell.

    The Senate dome was ripped apart, smoke still permeating the atmosphere. Stormtroopers filled the streets. There was an unusual silence on some parts of the capital. Even the Palace looked sinister in the distance.

    He escorted his daughter inside their home, looking at her helpless body in despair. He wanted to scream but the yells were stuck in his throat.

    He knew he could do it. He could save her. But he was weak because of his emotions.

    Use the Force... Use the dark side. Save her.

    He closed his eyes against the voice in his mind and his gut instinct spurring him on.




    Padmé was back into her opulent apartments when he found her. She was staring at a robe on a chair, unmoving.

    Anakin took some time to realize.

    They were in Dormé's room.

    Her small hand came to rest on the material. She clutched it so hard her knuckles became white. Swallowing against his resentment, he came closer to her. Gently, he took her hand and removed it from the white garment. She only just seemed to realize he was there, resting her tearful gaze on him.

    ?Come here...? he only murmured, wrapping his arms around her.

    But she only pushed against his chest impatiently, stepping away from him.

    He tried to hide it but he could feel his face fall.

    ?I need to rest...? Padmé only whispered, walking towards her bedroom very slowly.




    Coruscant seemed so dark nowadays.

    Padmé's eyes were resting on the grey horizon. She didn't turn away from the window even when he stepped further into her room.

    All this struck him as painfully familiar. Anakin remembered a time when Padmé couldn't look at him in the eye. He felt deep shame rise into him. He had only failed further in her eyes since.

    He straightened, swallowing against the weak thoughts.

    That was all he was when he was next to her.

    Weakened.

    ?I am leaving today.?

    She didn't react.

    ?Everything is taken care of,? he added. ?You are safe here, I made sure of it.?

    She turned away slowly and eyed him silently. He hated it. It felt like she was despising him.

    ?You'll have to wait for my return before taking care of the Senate matters.?/>/>
  13. Lady_Skywalker87 Jedi Grand Master

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    :eek: That was intense!!!...I'm glad that Anakin was willing to listend to her, hope he agrees with her plan & I just hope that Obi agrees to help them so the tension between them some what...

    Is intersting to see the contrast between the darkness inside Anakin & the darkness inside Padmè throughout the story ...and I love how in this chapter you made that contrast stand out & how it affects them on different levels, specialy Padmè. Anyway, great job Padlei!=D= Can't wait for part 3!!![face_hypnotized] :D
  14. FitJedi Jedi Master

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    Wow.. Intense indeed!!! Once again just a rush of emotion from both Anakin and Padme- It will be interesting to see what he thinks of her plan.
  15. EverydayAngel Jedi Knight

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    Wow, I fell behind and just caught up on two intense chapters!
    I am a bit speechless.

    There was so much anger, blame, bitterness (and dare I say it also felt like hate) towards each other. I felt like I was intruding on their fights.

    That sex scene was so dark. Yea they are not a couple to model after. The dark side messed them up big time.

    What is Padmé's idea, I wonder.
  16. Padlei Jedi Master

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    Hello! Thank you for your reviews!

    Some of you may have noticed I'm no longer sending PMs to everyone. That's because some of you seem to have either left the story or the fandom altogether... And if I send too many unread PMs, I'm blocked by TFN. So there's no longer any PM list. I'll be posting PMs a little bit more randomly. Sorry.


    Lady_Skywalker87

    hope he agrees with her plan & I just hope that Obi agrees to help them so the tension between them some what...

    I see you're still optimistic even with everything that happened to our beloved characters in this story. ;) But you'll see how it goes. ;)

    Is intersting to see the contrast between the darkness inside Anakin & the darkness inside Padmè throughout the story ...and I love how in this chapter you made that contrast stand out & how it affects them on different levels, specialy Padmè.

    Thank you... :) I'm always afraid Padmé or the story gets too dark and no one will follow me there. So thank you. :)

    [:D]

    There's no part 3 but Chapter 31 should come soon.



    FitJedi


    Thank you!

    They're both one big mess, aren't they? :(


    EverydayAngel


    Yep, they're really messed up... :( And that scene was made to be dark, because this is where they are now. And it's not beautiful. But we'll see if something good can come out of the bad, who knows?

    Thank you for the review! :)
  17. Lady_Skywalker87 Jedi Grand Master

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    Well, someone has to think positive!:D Can't wait for the next chaper![:D]
  18. Padlei Jedi Master

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  19. tamiki Jedi Knight

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    Amazing how you still are able to twist the plot in this amazing story and how you're developing the characters.=D=
    If someone thought that Leia's condition would bring Anakin and Padme closer to each other they are presumably wrong. On the contrary, they are drifting apart with many dark thoughts and resenments coming to the surface in their argument.[face_thinking]
    I love how Padmes character is improved, very convincing that she now dares to contradict Anakin.
    Can't wait to see what she will tell.@};-
  20. _ThatJediScum_ Force Ghost

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    I don't know what to say. Anakin and Padmé are a hot mess. It is almost like they get worse no matter what happens. And Leia being hurt is bringing out the absolute worst in them.

    I actually feel bad about the Jedi casting Kenobi out. I know I wanted him to burn for trying to take the twins but I do actually like Obi-wan in canon. I think if he can help Leia he should be able to walk away with his life. A life for a life. As for Anakin and Padmé, I'm almost ready to wash my hands of them. I know I shouldn't give up hope but it seems like they have almost given up on themselves. ::shaking my head::

    bran
  21. Padlei Jedi Master

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    tamiki


    Amazing how you still are able to twist the plot in this amazing story and how you're developing the characters
    .

    *blushes* Thanks so much. I've been really worried about how readers would take these turns of events and I'm so glad you're still following me. :)

    On the contrary, they are drifting apart with many dark thoughts and resenments coming to the surface in their argument.

    Having your child suffer is either a way to make the parents closer OR make them drift apart, there's no in-between. And usually it strengthens the couple when said couple is already united and strong. Which was not the case for Anakin and Padmé. Mix the dark side with this and that's what you get.

    I love how Padmes character is improved, very convincing that she now dares to contradict Anakin.

    Thank you! I'm always afraid people will think she's OOC.

    We won't see her tell things but you'll understand what they're going to do in next chapter.


    _ThatJediScum_


    And Leia being hurt is bringing out the absolute worst in them.

    It does that sometimes to healthy people. They're also messed up with the dark side. Remember Yoda's words about fear... :(

    I actually feel bad about the Jedi casting Kenobi out.

    I felt that way too and I'm glad everyone feels the same way.

    I think if he can help Leia he should be able to walk away with his life. A life for a life.

    It would be a good bargain indeed. Alas, I fear there may be more at stake.

    As for Anakin and Padmé, I'm almost ready to wash my hands of them. I know I shouldn't give up hope but it seems like they have almost given up on themselves.

    :( You might never know. They may start thinking, who knows? ;) I can only say Leia is important in their evolution.

    Thank you so much for still following this! :)
  22. Padlei Jedi Master

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    Hello!



    Once again, I would like to thank leia_naberrie who has never failed to support me. Thank you so much for still caring about this story. [:D]


    Here's Chapter 31. As it is often the case, the chapter is divided into two parts.
    Hope you like it. :)







    Chapter 31


    Part 1



    Padmé tossed in her bed, trashing around, sweat on her brow. Sleepily, she opened her eyes, remnants of nightmares disappearing slowly. Sighing, she got up from her lonely bed and pulled on a robe, slowly making her way to her children's room.

    It was silent save the machines keeping Leia alive.

    She slumped down on a couch nearby, her eyes lost in the distance. Even Luke seemed to be weak lately. As if he could feel his sister's pain and his parents' distress. Padmé couldn't find the energy in her to soothe her son. All her attention could only be turned to the limp body in front of her. She couldn't even touch her baby because of this glass protecting the girl from the world.

    She prayed their plan would work.

    Anakin had accepted it, telling her he would send her a transmission when he fulfilled the first step. There had been no other words when he left. No embrace, no touch. Only their respective sadness they could no longer share.

    A silent tear made its way down her cheek.

    The young mother spent the whole night staring at the bacta tank.





    ?And here we are.?

    A deep breath and for the first time in forever, a glimmer of hope.

    ?Melida/Daan.?

    ?Melida what??

    Obi-Wan chuckled good-naturedly and patted Lainé's head gently.

    ?Melida/Daan,? he repeated. ?There was a war.? If Barriss and Lainé saw the forlorn look on Obi-Wan's face, they made no remark. ?The people here could never agree on a simple name for the planet. One people wanted to call it Melida, the other, Daan. The Republic decided to please both. So the planet was called Melida/Daan.?

    ?So you?ve already been here, Master?? asked Barriss as they slowly made their way to the capital. The landscape was very simple on the planet. Rocks everywhere.

    Obi-Wan nodded and smiled a little bit sadly.

    ?A lifetime ago...?

    The rest of the trip was made in silence as the three Jedi reached the capital.



    ?They are here, Your Highness.?

    Vader nodded once. Turning his eyes to the high mountain in the distance, he silently motioned for the troopers to join him.

    The boots marched on the snowy ground, the sounds muffled by the harsh wind blowing around them. The Emperor was striding purposefully, ignoring the cold gust of wind whipping his face.

    He knew the Jedi had probably felt the threat by now.

    But they were powerless in their hiding place. Their ships were too far away. The inhospitable weather made it impossible to flee.

    They were cornered.

    Vader didn't even let a small smile creep on his face. He only felt determination. His entire being was turned to the small voices embodying the Force. He was listening. He was following It.

    Every step he took was making him get closer to the Jedi.

    Closer to Kenobi.




    There was a sudden silence in the assembly.

    Faces turned in horror in the direction of the cave opening, as if listening to a sound that wouldn't come before long minutes.

    The Jedi looked at each other, senses attuned to the Force, utter fear distorting the faces of every Knight and Padawan.

    Only one Jedi took his sword out, closing his eyes and drawing from the Force.

    Kahl inhaled deeply and voiced everyone's fear.

    ?He is coming.?




    The stones shielding the cave opening exploded into nothingness and white armors came into view.
    The dark figure entered the cave, smoke parting to reveal a hooded face.

    Jad Kahl calmly turned to his fellows and together they lightened their blades, waiting for the onslaught.

    Laughter resonated in the cave. It was icy and shuddering.

    The hood came down.

    Vader's eyes settled on them calmly, as he made no move, his lightsaber still clinging to his waist.

    At last came his voice, calm but terrifying.

    ?Who is the leader??

    Kahl only took a firm step in the Sith's di/>/>/>/>
  23. Jedi_QueenBee Jedi Master

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    so they go into the trap willingly. do they know this? will they help baby leia ?
  24. MoAngel Jedi Knight

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    This is so intense. You can literally feel their feelings! For a while I thought Anakin may have been headed back toward the light, but in reality I think that Padme actually brings his innate darkness out. I look forward to more..
  25. Lady_Skywalker87 Jedi Grand Master

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    I read this yestarday but never commented on it...[face_blush]

    :eek: This is total madness! how in world is this going to help baby Leia???

    I like how Padmè feels repulsed by her husband's behavior as well as the possibility that she send him into the abyss of the Dark Side.

    Great update Padlei!=D=
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