Beyond Shattered Remembrance (L/M, H/L, drama, angst) - Thank You!!

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  1. G__Anakin Jedi Master

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    Great story!

    Can I please be added to the PM list!?
  2. SithGirl132 Force Ghost

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    Very dramatic and tense! Please add me to you PM list!
  3. Knight_Aragorn Jedi Master

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    Hm, so Leia's playing innocent, huh? [face_thinking] ;)

    Poor Mara, I really feel for her here. What a horrible position to be in, not only with Luke so badly injured, but having to deal with Leia and Han as well.

    You really know how to do the angst thing. ;) Looking forward to reading more!

  4. Jedi-2B Force Ghost

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    A great big mass THANK YOU to all my readers! And a special welcome to the new faces! @};-

    RebelMom: It's too bad that Mara and Leia have to bond when Luke is injured. -- You've read ahead, so you know how much bonding goes on. ;)


    ginchy: Seriously sitting here teary-eyed, girl. -- They probably won't dry up with this next post, either.


    PonyTricks: And no one even thinks of Poor Threepio! He's going to be crushed when he realizes his tin-can friend is, um, crushed! -- trying to think if I even have 3PO in this story. May have to do some rewrites. [face_thinking]


    Jedi Trace: I really hope Artoo is okay.... -- Artoo's fate will be revealed tonight, don't worry. :D


    GeithJiseo2: L/C fans are welcome here, so you're safe. I've not yet been mean to Callista in a story. Of course I'll add you to my PM list. :)


    Jade_Pilot:
    Enjoy torturing your fans, do you? -- Do you really, honestly think I'd kill off Luke? *scribbles down plot bunny for next fic*


    dancing_star: And I hope Artoo is okay too! -- I see no one has shed any tears about that poor underpaid droid taxi driver. :p


    PHGS_Weyr: Leia is so going to find out from Mara before Luke wakes up..... -- You think so, huh?


    YodaKenobi:
    Warm up the bacta. -- It's warming as we speak.

    I wonder what will happen when Mara actually gets to see Luke. Hopefully he can make a speedy recovery but it sounds like there's a lot wrong with him... And now I'm all worried about Artoo! -- Artoo might have an easier time recovering than his master.


    Jade_eyes: I'm glad Han took up for Mara so she could wait with them. I feel for her not being able to unload the full extent of her worry and anxiety, though of course she still might not choose to, if given the chance. -- Han's pretty perceptive, but then, Mara's pretty secretive. Luke had better recover fast so he can get things out in the open.

    Very moving part about the things that might be shattered--chances for a happy future. -- Ah, someone noticed what the title referred to. ;)


    RedGold: You'll find out a little more about Luke's fate in this next post. But mind you, just a little.


    smiley_rancor: Wonder whether it was just a crash or something much more sinister? -- Just a crash. My plots are about as complicated as I am. LOL!


    Darth_Marrs: I like the dynamic you've created between Leia and Mara. They're not bonding, they're just co-existing at this stage. -- Yep, you've nailed it. Remember, it was only one book ago (SotP) that Leia met Mara on Wayland and had her doubts about being able to trust her.


    Blue_Milkshake:
    Jinkies! I've been worrying about Artoo for weeks now. I sure hope he's okay. -- Do they make bacta for droids? And I'm sure Threepio would be more than willing to donate any parts needed.


    VaderLVR64: That's our Mara! -- Mara's not about to let a little thing like a droid guard keep her from her true love!



    verybusy: I guess I am too weird, right now I should be scared about Luke, shouldn't I? ...but I am rather looking forward to more "conversations" between Leia and Mara here..... -- It'll be awhile before Leia or Mara feel like conversing with each other. But don't expect them to become best buds over this, either.


    cupid7: Liked the Mara?Leia interaction. You established Leia?s mild distrust and disregard for Mara in a few well chosen words. -- See my answer to Darth_Marrs above as to my influence on how I think Mara & Leia would interact at this point.

    And the word ?holoshills?. Is that general SWFF-speak, or did you think of that? -- I'm sure I've heard it before, but don't remember if it was in fanfics or pro-fic.
  5. Jedi-2B Force Ghost

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    Yes, once again a slightly early post. Schedules, smedules.

    This is a little longer post than others. So I didn't have room to squeeze in the scene where Wes Janson consoles Mara in the waiting room. You all will just have to imagine that union for yourselves. :p

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    Chapter Four

    Hours stretched into half a standard day, and Luke hadn't yet come out of surgery. Even the medical droids began avoiding the waiting room after Han ambushed the tenth employee passing by, badgering him for any information regarding Luke's condition. No one could tell them anything other than multiple injuries meant multiple surgical procedures. Three teams of specialists had rotated in and out of the operating theater.

    Mara stayed huddled in 'her corner,' watching the sun go down, the city's lights flicker on, the rain beat against the window, the rain stop, and the sun come up.

    And still Luke lay on an operating table.

    ***

    As the hours wore on, the waiting area began to swell with visitors. Winter held Leia's hand as Han paced back and forth in helpless frustration. Wedge Antilles and Tycho Celchu talked quietly in a corner. Lando kept excusing himself to answer comm calls. Bibberry muffins brought by Iella sat untouched on the room's low table, though the caf maker was working overtime. It seemed everyone was straggling back to Coruscant about the same time, each of them offering words of comfort to Leia. No one tried to comfort Mara, for which she was thankful. Faughn had commed the first hour, asking if Mara needed anything, and to say that Karrde would be returning in two days. But he could come sooner if Mara wanted. She declined.

    President Gavrisom had made an appearance, talked to Han and Leia quietly, then retreated to his office. Something was up, Mara could tell. Something political. But she didn't think it directly involved her or Luke, so it didn't matter.

    Han had succeeded in finding Artoo-Detoo at the crash site. Or at least, what was left of him. The droid's outer casing was beyond recognition, but he could be rebuilt. Most importantly, his memory bank was intact. The New Republic's best technicians were already working on the astromech, and had reported that they were confident that the Caamasi Document could be saved.

    Mara had this insane notion that Luke cushioned Artoo's fall, more concerned over his metal friend than his own safety. Or maybe not so insane. It was the kind of thing Luke would do.

    She overheard Han describing the crash site to Lando, making sure he was out of Leia's hearing. Horrific ? Nothing but a pile of twisted metal ? Don't know how the kid survived ?

    Shifting slightly, Mara dug her fingernails into the palms of her hands to keep from crying. It had been barely a week ago that her heart had felt torn in two, when she'd feared that Luke had been killed by the Chiss. Later, she'd learned that Luke had had a near-meltdown when her Force presence had suddenly disappeared. Now she was once again filled with anxiety-riddled pain. Was this some wicked byproduct of loving someone? If so, she could better understand Luke's initial reluctance to let himself love her.

    Mara forced her thoughts toward the beautiful, warm feelings that Luke invoked in her. There was no doubt in her mind - their love was worth any heartache that life could throw at them.

    She only hoped that life would give them the chance.


    ***

    Anxious faces all turned one direction as Dr. Panio entered the somber room. "Councilor," the tall Chandrillan medic began before glancing at the large group. "Perhaps we should go into my office."

    "Everyone here is a good friend of Luke's." Leia's red-rimmed eyes swept the room, pausing briefly on Mara before turning back to the doctor. "Please, tell us his condition."

    The doctor nodded, leading Leia back to her seat on the couch. "Master Skywalker's injuries were extremely severe?"

    Leia gave a small gasp, bracing herself for unwanted news.

    "? but he came through the surg
  6. GeithJiseo2 Force Ghost

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    This was great!!!!!!!!

    Can we PLEASE have some more?

    *eyes pleading*
  7. RebelMom Jedi Grand Master

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    Poor Mara. She has to steal ID to see Luke. At least she gets to be an official visitor now.

    I can't wait for the awakening.
  8. Darth_Marrs Force Ghost

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    Definitely the best post so far.
  9. MaraJade001 Jedi Knight

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    This is great! Can I be added to the PM list please?
  10. star_writer24 Jedi Master

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  11. dancing_star Force Ghost

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    Yay! Update time! [face_dancing]
    The whole story has been great,but I have to agree that this was the best post so far. I really can't wait for more.

    Poor Luke. :_| I'm glad he's expected to be okay though. I'm glad Leia and Han finally got to see him, and Mara sneaking in was perfect. [face_mischief]

    Wonderful update. Loved it!
    =D= =D= =D= =D=

  12. sweetdetection Jedi Knight

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    Please add me to the PM list, this is awesome.

    I do like that Mara has maintained appearances as his best friend. And I loved the part where she wondered why him and not someone else -- and then her shame at the thought. Han and Leia are beautifully characterized, too! Awesome job!
  13. YodaKenobi VIP

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    This is a little longer post than others. So I didn't have room to squeeze in the scene where Wes Janson consoles Mara in the waiting room. You all will just have to imagine that union for yourselves.

    *Imagining* [face_laugh]

    Even the medical droids began avoiding the waiting room after Han ambushed the tenth employee passing by

    With Han, you have to wonder if they're avoiding because the ambush involved his DL-44.

    Han had succeeded in finding Artoo-Detoo at the crash site. Or at least, what was left of him. The droid's outer casing was beyond recognition, but he could be rebuilt.

    Thanks goodness [face_praying]

    The New Republic's best technicians were already working on the astromech, and had reported that they were confident that the Caamasi Document could be saved.

    Again, that's a huge relief.

    Mara had this insane notion that Luke cushioned Artoo's fall, more concerned over his metal friend than his own safety. Or maybe not so insane. It was the kind of thing Luke would do.

    Yeah, I can picture that easily. Luke is probably the most selfless character in Star Wars.

    "? but he came through the surgeries in good form, and we are cautiously optimistic that he will have a full recovery."

    [face_dancing]

    That's great!

    "Yes, but only you and Captain Solo," the doctor replied. "Master Skywalker is unconscious, of course, and I prefer that only family members visit the bacta area."

    It's too bad Mara can't tell them about her engagement to Luke so she can visit him :(

    Mara's eyes narrowed as a white-clothed technician strode out of the ward, her identification badge swinging on an orange lanyard. She casually followed the young Ishi Tib toward a nearby employee locker room. Thank the Force, there was no droid monitoring the door. Slipping in unseen, she plucked a clean uniform tunic from a stack of laundry. Now all she needed was one of those I.D. tags.

    I forgot, this is Mara. She doesn't have to tell anyone anything, she can just do what she wants :D

    That was nice of Dr. Paino to put her on the allowed list.

    Great post, Jedi-2B :D Very emotional, especially the scene with Mara seeing Luke for the first time :( You really did a great job describing her feelings, and I particularly liked the way Mara starts theorizing about the crash, wondering about what Luke might have done. Also loved the way she sneaked into the med room [face_mischief]

    Can't wait for the next post so we can find out some more :)
  14. Jedi_Scribe Jedi Master

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    *sigh*

    Poor Mara.

    For a minute there, I thought you might put Luke into a Vader suit or some such terrible condition. But no, it sounds as if the physical damage will be overcome - so now it's a question of the effect on his mind. I notice that there was no mention of brain damage or other psychological concerns in his prognosis...

  15. RedGold Force Ghost

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    He's going to be okay!!

    Mostly...

    *bites nails*
  16. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Oh yeah, that is Mara! [face_laugh] And I loved this, because I'm not sure he DIDN'T.

    Mara had this insane notion that Luke cushioned Artoo's fall, more concerned over his metal friend than his own safety. Or maybe not so insane. It was the kind of thing Luke would do.

    That would be typical of Luke. :p

    Another great update! =D=
  17. PHGS_Weyr Jedi Master

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    So Amazing post,

    Nice doctor letting her be added to the guest list.

    Following the conventions of some of your earlier work Mara will be the one to tell Leia about Mara and Luke (like Prism) or it happens in an amazingly awkward moment (like As Long As We're Together)

    Hmmm maybe I spend too much time reading fan fic..... [face_whistling]



    Luke has amnesia??

    any way cool as ever [face_peace]

    PHGS Weyr
  18. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Was touched by the crowd of friends in the waiting area giving moral support :D Can totally sympathize with Leia and Han wanting to be assuring to the kids, while also worrying to death. Mara "borrowing the ID" [face_laugh] :)
    Total Aw-ness moment:

    Shaking her head wearily, Mara tried to clear her muddled mind. It didn't matter how the crash happened. She could quiz Luke after he recovered, after she
    hugged him, and kissed him, and scolded him for scaring her half to death. Right now she just wanted to be with him, sending him Force energy for healing,
    and sharing with him the warmth of her love.

    Mara brought her fingertips to her lips, then pressed them against the cold smooth surface of the tank. "I love you, Luke," she whispered.

    Thanks for proving that drama/angst can be mushy. :D =D=
  19. Blue_Milkshake Jedi Knight

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    *Hugs Dr. Panio*[:D]

    She spent the night slumped in one of the visitors' conform-chairs, slipping out when she felt Han and Leia arrive at the medcenter the next morning.
    It was a pattern she would repeat for the next five nights.
    :_|

    *Hugs Mara*[:D] (Gee, I hope I don't get knocked unconscious for that.)

    I hope Mara is taking care of herself during all this. Talon will make sure she's okay.
  20. verybusy Jedi Grand Master

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    I agree completely, perfect Mush Moment based an drama/angst.

    I just love the way you write Mara here, so perfectly in character, but the feelings I expected her to have for Luke at the end of VotF coming through perfectly. This is just a scene that could make me cry.... [face_blush]

    cheers,

    VeryBusy

  21. G__Anakin Jedi Master

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  22. PonyTricks Force Ghost

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    Finally had a chance to get online! Wonderful post, as always. :D Poor Mara.... being Luke's fiancee, and not being able to see him. :_| - She needs to confide in someone on the inside to Luke's family circle. I vote for..... [face_whistling]

    And it's now time for Wes to sneak into the hospital room and sabotage Luke's bacta tank, so he can at last have Mara's love as she rebounds!!! I just love insane plot bunnies, don't you? [face_batting]
  23. ginchy Force Ghost

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    Heart wrenching chapter, gal! You amaze me with being able to write humor, and romance, and angst--all all with ease. Poor Mara, not being able (or not being willing) to disclose her true relationship with Luke. At least that doctor was able to get her on the list allowed in to see him. And poor Luke. Sounds like a long, long recovery period is ahead. Great update! =D=
  24. JediMaster_Jen Force Ghost

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    This is good. =D= Can I be added to the PM list, please?
  25. SithGirl132 Force Ghost

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    So tense and dramatic! Great job!
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