Saga Shmi's Gift: A Parting ... Poem - Fear not ! ... *New 4/8*

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  1. oldjedinurse Jedi Padawan

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    Title: Shmi's Gift: A Parting
    Author: oldjedinurse
    Timeframe: TPM
    Characters: Shmi Skywalker
    Genre: Angst
    Keywords: Shmi, Anakin, Qui-Gon
    Summary: Shmi's emotional decision that Ani should go with Qui-Gon.


    Disclaimer: George Lucas owns everything Star Wars. A stellar group of authors own the many characters brought to life in books full of SW stories. I am merely playing in a park dedicated to the Lucas Empire. I own nothing and receive no tangible reward from this.


    A tentative foray into poetry... [face_blush]

    _________________________________________


    Shmi?s Gift: A Parting


    Silhouette in a midday?s radiance
    A halo forms bright ?round serenity
    From his spirit shines patience and wisdom
    Mine but offers a last aching hope
    Yes I?ll give him my past ? my son.

    He is strong and yet gentle and kind
    Had I chosen your father, perhaps
    I would linger in groundless illusion
    But instead I remember our life
    Holding close what is real, for my son.

    A new road stretches out to the infinite
    In between the way fades into darkness
    But the light in your eyes wins me over
    And the light in his eyes gives me courage
    To set free your spirit, my son.

    One last dawn, as I study you closely
    We hold to each other no longer
    You entered my life unexpected
    You leave through the same greater plan
    Walk away in his path, my son.

    You turn back to pledge me your bravery
    With liquid eyes tenderly searching
    I find that you look on me sadly
    I find one last smile to surrender
    But hold back my tears for you, son.

    My joy and my life and my heart
    All my days I will seek out your presence
    When in darkness our home is too still
    When your voice does not rise with the light
    Hear my soul?s endless cries for a son.

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    Poets and Non-poets!
    Be honest - what do you think? [face_whistling]
  2. Arwyn_Whitesun Jedi Padawan

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  3. JediTristan Jedi Youngling

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    Nov 30, 2004
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    You know what I think...

    But I applaud your courage in posting this.

    Excellent, excellent job. Wow.
  4. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    I though it quite beautiful and fitting, lovely imagery too! Bravo! =D=
  5. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    Beautiful!

    One last dawn, as I study you closely
    We hold to each other no longer
    You entered my life unexpected
    You leave through the same greater plan
    Walk away in his path, my son.



    :_|

    =D=

    Simply beautiful!

  6. oldjedinurse Jedi Padawan

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    Oct 6, 2003
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    Arwyn_Whitesun -
    Thanks! I always appreciate it when someone stops by to read and comment (especially when I'm a relative Newbie).
    :)


    Tris -
    Dear Tris! Thank you for your neverending support, and for helping me to make this better!
    ;)

    ojn
  7. oldjedinurse Jedi Padawan

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    Healer_Leona -

    ...lovely imagery too!
    Thank you so much! Of course, there's quite a bit of Qui-Gon in that imagery...
    [face_love]

    Bravo!
    Wow! Always great to get a 'Bravo'!


    VaderLVR -

    Simply beautiful!
    Thanks very much - I appreciate it!
    [face_blush]


    ojn
  8. SoftballJedi Jedi Youngling

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    Mar 24, 2005
    star 1
    This was an excellent poem! Nicely done, I loved it!
  9. oldjedinurse Jedi Padawan

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    Oct 6, 2003
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    Thanks, SoftballJedi!

    Always appreciate those who stop to read!

    ojn @};-
  10. tangled_sphere Jedi Padawan

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    Dec 28, 2003
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    Beautiful imagry and this is so heartfelt, my Padawan.

    You do have a knack for poetry! :)
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