Silly question, but would anyone be interested if I posted a rewrite of The Phantom Menace on here?

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So, Oakes, where are you? Busy at your new job for the day?

 

Mr. Gorbachev...Bring me a drink!

(set to the tune of "Mr. Sandman...bring me a dream)

Also, I won a soccer game today. Hooray. The other team's keeper, who was not the sharpest tool in the shed, and certainly the bossiest, had "The Wall" on the back of his shirt.

My team subsequently yelled: "Mr. Gunderson(a kid on my team's last name) take down that wall!"

Reagan is so fun to quote.

 

Post, damn you!

Or I'll return to writing gungan fanfiction

 

Pish Posh Poe.

GRRRRRRRRR!

 

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I'm still trying how to end this thing, but that isn't much of an excuse, as it doesn't effect the scenes before hand at all, really. I'm off college at the moment, and I was going to do some today, but I had to help my friend with his film. Well, I had to carry the camera, tripod, and leads around for him, and log all the stupid shots in, while he had fun shouting at the actors. It's not fair. I want to shout at someone too. I know, I'll shout at my cat. Better not...she looks moody. Anyway, I will post again tonight! Trust me, I'm a snake charmer.

 

Looking forward to it, Oakes.

 

Glad to see that I'm not the only person who has to act out sword fights to get them right.

I usually dance around my room with a yardstick.

 

Well, I've got a proper lightsaber, but sometimes when my cat is in the room, she thinks all the lightsaber swirling is for her benefit and entertainment, so she decides to start attack it. It can be terribly annoying!

 

And here's the next part! It's not very much, but it's a start. Well, it's not really a start, striclty speaking, as we're very close to the end, but...well, you know what I'm talking about. Please forgive the spelling and grammar mistakes. Here we go:-



EXT. NABOO-THEED-PALACE COURTYARD-SUNSET

The sun is beginning to set on the beautiful city of THEED. Out of the burnt orange sky comes the SUPREME CHANCELLOR?s PERSONAL TRANSPORT, which slowly lands in the centre of the COURTYARD. Landing next to the CHANCELLOR?s TRANSPORT is a REPUBLIC CRUISER. Two lines of TROOPS, one NABOO, the other GUNGAN, stand to attention as the RAMP of the PERSONAL TRANSPORT slides open. PALAPTINE escorted by TEN REPUBLIC GUARDS, and SEVERAL aides march down the RAMP. OBI-WAN, followed by ANAKIN, walk up to PALPATINE. They both bow respectfully. PALPATINE smiles pleasantly at them.

PALPATINE: The entire galaxy will be forever indebted to you for your bravery, Obi-Wan Kenobi.

OBI-WAN bows his head at PALPATINE.

OBI-WAN: Thank you, Chancellor.

PALPATINE glances at ANAKIN, who is standing attentively beside OBI-WAN.

PALPATINE: (to ANAKIN, smiling warmly) And you, young Skywalker. We shall watch your career with great interest.

As he passes, SUPREME CHANCELLOR PALPATINE heartily pats ANAKIN on the shoulder. ANAKIN grins proudly.
The RAMP of the REPUBLIC CRUISER opens, and the COUNCIL of the JEDI, followed by SEVERAL JEDI KNIGHTS and PADAWANS, march down the RAMP. OBI-WAN walks towards YODA and MACE WINDU, bowing at them. ANAKIN does the same.

YODA: Share your sorrow, we all do, for the loss of Master Qui-Gon Jinn.

OBI-WAN glances down at the ground, a sad look on his face. ANAKIN glances up at his friend, a concerned look on his face.

OBI-WAN: I appreciate it, Master Yoda.

ANAKIN holds onto OBI-WAN?s hand, trying to comfort him. MACE WINDU steps forward. ANAKIN shoots him a cold glare.

MACE WINDU: There is a great deal that needs to be discussed, Padawan Kenobi.

OBI-WAN looks up at MACE WINDU, a frown on his face.

OBI-WAN: Yes, master. (placing his hand on ANAKIN?s shoulder) There is a great deal that needs to be discussed.

Turning away from MACE WINDU, OBI-WAN and ANAKIN walk back over to PALPATINE, the JEDI COUNCIL following him. THE SUPREME CHANCELLOR is greeted by AMIDALA. She is wearing sombre, yet elegant black dress. ANAKIN looks at her longingly.

AMIDALA: Congratulations on the election, Chancellor.

PALPATINE: Your majesty, it was your boldness that saved our planet, our people. It is you who should be congratulated. Together we shall bring harmony, justice and prosperity to the Republic.

The GUNGAN and the NABOO SOLDIERS begin to cheer at this. PALPATINE smiles.

 

Nice! Loved the Jedi Council addition!

 

MONKEYS MONKEYS MONKEYS MONKEYS MONKEYS!!!!

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Awesome posts!!! Keep it up!

 

Yet another great post, Oakes.

 

Ani_rhymeswith_pansy, you're scaring me, there aren't any monkeys in this thread. Well, only one or two, but they're busy trying to write Macbeth at the moment, I think. Anyway, thank you all very much! More should come today. So long as I get a nice sandwhich for lunch. And a cup of coffee, of course. Or maybe tea. I haven't decided yet. Trust me, I'm a lion tamer.

 

I can be both at once! It's not fair. Anyway, I've been fired from the lion taming business, and now I'm in the daisy taming business. Don't snigger. Those daisies are very nasty indeed.

 

Mesa here Oakessteve!

Is this the scene:
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PADME: (stepping forward) Why not?

RUNE: Because...because I can?t.

PADME: Why not?

RUNE: (angrily) There?s been enough killing!

PADME stares icily into RUNE?s eyes.

PADME: (calmly) Throw away your gun"
That Padme sure is one cocky lady in your re-write! Cool.

"PADME: I have come to take back my world!

Suddenly FIFTEEN BATTLE-DROIDS, and FIVE DROIDEKAS march into the THRONE ROOM, their weapons all aimed at PADME and PANAKA.

RUNE: It is our world now, My Queen.
TWO BATTLE-DROIDS advance on PADME. PADME glances at BIBBLE, who avoids her gaze, and looks to the floor, his
face hard to read.

PADME: (shocked, almost a whisper) Governor... "
Bibble a traitor a la Lando in ESB? I like it. But then he takes a bullet...hmmm...guess he's not in your AOTC rewrite!

 

How's the ending coming along, Oakes? Still undecided? Looking forward to whichever you choose, happy or dark. This rewrite has been a pleasure.

And, at Oakes' suggestion, I will take this opportunity to shamelessly plug a rewrite of my own that I'm posting. The link is in my signature. Give it a look if you get a chance, and feel free to comment.

 

We are nearing the ending. What will oakes take as his pet project now?

Or rather, What will I shamelessly beg for updates on?

So confusing...Daisy tamers

*lack of snickering*

 

Unfortunately, I still haven't decided yet how to end it, and, very annoyingly, I wrote the next scene in my rewrite yesterday, and my bloomin' computer crashed! Stupid thing...anyway, I will try to get this whole thing finished by the weekend, and do have a look at Scarr1106's rewrite. It's far more adventurous than my one!

Emperor_Kefka: I have been entertaining the idea of doing an Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom rewrite, but I don't know who'd be interested in that.

 

I thought Temple of Doom was great as it was! I'd still read your rewrite though, as long as you don't change Willie Scott too much.

 

Nah, Willie great. I wish I knew someone like her....sigh...

*day dreams about Willie Scott*

Awww.....err...anyway, there will be more tonight! Trust me, I'm Guybrush Threepwood.