Skirmish in an Ancient War (JA)

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  1. greencat336 Jedi Grand Master

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    Skirmish in an Ancient War by Greencat336

    Time: JA, Obi-Wan is 17

    Summary: Dark Powers try to change the future by eliminating a young Obi-Wan.

    Rating: PG for violence

    Disclaimers: You know to whom Obi & Qui belong, I?m just borrowing them. Some scenes are based on events from the Scholastic Jedi Apprentice books. Most of the other stuff is mine. The idea of using a shotgun type spray to negate a blaster bolt deflecting lightsaber is from P_Stotts? excellent tale Overtures. This story is not intended to proselytize or offend. It is entertainment, although if you find it thought provoking, that?s an added bonus.

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    Prologue:

    A long, long time ago, when the Universe was still young, the first war was fought. One who was beautiful and beloved, second only to the Supreme Ruler, was overcome with the desire to be first in power. Seducing others to rise against the Supreme Ruler, the one who was second sought to usurp that Ultimate Power. For millennia the Battle raged across the heavens. At last, the Rebellious One and those that followed in the rebellion were Cast Out, but the War continued.

    Mortal life came into existence. These sentients became pawns in the endless Conflict, foot soldiers both sides used against the other. All wars fought since have been mere reflections of the Original War, between Light and Dark.



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    One of the minions of the Dark approached a Dread Lord. ?Most Magnificent,? groveled the creature, ?I beg your indulgence. I have a suggestion, a way to strengthen our Cause.?

    ?Speak, worm,? commanded the Dread Lord.

    ?Among those known as the Jedi is a boy called Kenobi, who will one day cause much difficulty for the Darkness. Already he has interfered with several of our plans. I would have him eliminated while he is still young.?

    ?I have also foreseen the events that Kenobi is involved with, fool. His actions and inactions will allow a Mortal Dark Lord to arise. One that will cause much harm to billions. Why would any wish to stop this?? snarled the Dread Lord.

    ?Pardon my impertinence, O Terrible One. But, the Dark Lord to whom you refer will sow the seeds of his own destruction. Kenobi will guard the spawn of the Dark Lord, he will see to their training. Spawn that will not only redeem the Dark Lord, but also destroy an Empire that should have plunged that galaxy into Darkness for a thousand years. Remove the boy Kenobi, and the Dark Lord will never be. The Empire will remain, brought about by the Dark Lord?s mortal Master.?

    ?What of the boy?s teacher? He too plays a part in the Dark Lord?s creation.?

    ?The destruction of the boy, done correctly, will also destroy the teacher,? assured the minion.

    The Dread Lord bared his teeth in a not-smile. ?A subtle plan. We trade a brief lived Dark Lord for the millennium rule of a Dark Emperor. Send forth our operatives and destroy this boy. Much glory will be yours if your plan is successful. Fail and an eternity of torment you will suffer.?
  2. p_stotts Force Ghost

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    Ooooo, man! This sounds serious! Good start!
  3. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    [face_shocked] I'll just say it now, Poor Obi!! BTW Greencat, great start. You've got me hooked. :D
  4. Luke_Starkiller Jedi Master

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    Great opener, greencat! I'm in this one for the long haul!
  5. Jedi-Faith Jedi Master

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    Wow, great start... "done correctly"? uh oh :D I sense much pain coming...
    Can't wait for more!
  6. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    OOoooooooh, this sounds very interesting! MORE!!!!!
  7. Healer_Leona Scattegories Host. Manager Emeritus

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    Wonderful start greencat!!!!

    Post often, post soon!! :) :)
  8. greencat336 Jedi Grand Master

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    Its good to see you all here! Hope you enjoy the story!

    In honor of Fourth of July, this post has another colony gaining its independence (although in a very different manner than the Original Thirteen :) )

    Have a Happy Fourthof July!

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    Two planetary governments laid claim to a colony world near both their systems. Both had legitimate claims, having each helped settle and support the colony during its early years. Rather than go to war over the dispute, the Jedi had convinced the leaders of the two governments to accept a more peaceful solution.

    The niece of the ruling King of one world and the cousin of the King of the other world would marry. Jointly, they would rule over the newly independent colony world. All three governments would sign peace treaties allaying themselves to each other.

    Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn and his Padawan Obi-Wan Kenobi escorted the cousin, Prince Vathas, to the colony world. His bride-to-be, Princess Elsbeth would arrive the next day, accompanied by her own escort. The negotiations the Jedi had mediated had been long and difficult. The wedding would be a joyous conclusion.

    As they exited Prince Vathas? ship, crowds of people cheered, waving the newly designed flag of their now independent world. Prince Vathas walked towards the podium to address his future subjects, flanked by the two Jedi.

    Qui-Gon was intercepted by a sallow complexioned human. ?Master Jedi, there have been some changes to the Prince?s schedule. I need to discuss them with you immediately.?

    Prince Vathas continued to walk towards the podium, Obi-Wan at his side. Qui-Gon attempted to move around the officious man, saying,? After the speech, in the aircar.?

    The man again stepped in front of him, ?It really can?t wait . . . ?

    Through the Force, Qui-Gon had a split second of warning. A woman rushed out of the crowd towards the Prince. From beneath her cloak she drew a strange looking, large barreled blaster. ?Padawan!? Qui-Gon shouted as he ignited his lightsaber.

    Obi-Wan pushed the Prince to the ground, turned and was bringing up his lightsaber when the woman fired. Hundreds of small needle-like projectiles shot from the blaster?s oversized barrel. Unable to block them all, several hit Obi-Wan?s chest and face. Obi-Wan crumpled and lay unmoving.

    Qui-Gon?s green blade sliced down, severing the hand holding the blaster. Reversing his thrust, the hilt came down hard on the woman?s head, knocking her unconscious. Guards rushed forward to apprehend the woman and assist the Prince to his feet.

    ?Get him out of here ? to the air car,? Qui-Gon ordered the guards surrounding the Prince. Lifting up his unconscious Padawan, he hustled the guards escorting the Prince forward.

    After checking the interior of the aircar, Qui-Gon directed the Prince to get inside. Next, he placed Obi-Wan inside and got in himself. ?To the palace,? the driver was told. ?Use alternate route Delta. Call ahead and have two medical teams waiting.? Turning to Prince Vathas, ? I suggest you are also examined to make sure that none of the projectiles hit you.?

    ?Your apprentice made sure of that already. How is he?? the Prince asked in concern.

    ?Alive. Once he receives medical attention, he will be fine.? Qui-Gon spoke calmly, his features a stoic mask. Inside he was screaming. Obi-Wan?s pulse was irregular, his breathing shallow, his skin cold to the touch. Dozens of the small needles were embedded in the flesh of his face, neck and chest. The tips must have been poisoned for him to have collapsed like that. How much longer before they arrived at the palace? Would the medics be able to identify the poison in time to find the correct antidote? What if . . . Stop it, Qui-Gon told himself sternly. You are supposed to be a Jedi Master. Act like one, calm yourself. He forced himself to breathe deeply, to relax his tensed muscles. They would be at the palace in minutes. The med teams would
  9. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    Happy Fourth everyone!!!!! So Obi got hurt in the second post?!? I foresee great Obi torture in this story........*sly grin* :)
  10. I love Sci Fi Force Ghost

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    yea, right, Obi with minor injuries, that's a laugh! Great story!!!
  11. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    I find it thought-provoking! And I just can't imagine that Obi-Wan's injuries would be light, unless more were coming later. Great start!
  12. Kaylla_Norn_II Jedi Knight

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    yup messa very very hooked!
  13. p_stotts Force Ghost

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    Great post, greencat! Good portrayal of Qui's torn feelings...wanting to be with Obi, but bound to protect the prince. Good job!
  14. Healer_Leona Scattegories Host. Manager Emeritus

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    I too loved how concerned Qui was. Of course after what they boy's been through I can't blame him for his pessimistic thoughts.

    And that last line... Perhaps for once his injuries were minor --my firtst thought was there's always a furst time. :D :D

    Great post greencat!! :) :)
  15. Jedi-Faith Jedi Master

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    Great post! Obi got hurt already? hehe, I highly doubt any injury he sustains would ever be minor...

    By the way, did anyone check out the sample chapter to JA14? They put chapter 9 up, and in it, Obi asks Qui at one point: "Do you think they'll torture us?" :D :D :D

    I couldn't help but think "Yes PLEASE!!" :D

    JA14: The Ties that Bind Sample Chapter
  16. Ginger_Jedi Jedi Grand Master

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    Woo hoo! Go greencat go! I love your stuff so POST SOON!!!

    LOL w/ Jedi-Faith! Thanks for letting us in on that! Come on Obi torture in JA14!!!
  17. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    I love the idea for this story. :D
  18. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    Hey Greencat, can we get a post today?? :D Please????
  19. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Minor injuries? Obi? HAHAHHAAH!!!
  20. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    *walks in and looks around* Greencat!! Can we get a post today? Please? I'll even bring this up for you.... :)
  21. greencat336 Jedi Grand Master

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    Yes. You may have a post today :)

    Minor injuries for Obi? For most of this story, Obi will be in perfect physical health. His spirit though . . . [face_devil]

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    The medics had been able to identify the poison used on Obi-Wan almost immediately. It was fairly common, the antidote easily obtained. After receiving the antidote, Obi-Wan?s face and chest were wrapped in bacta soaked bandages. The damage to his eyes and skin was easily repaired, the medics assured Qui-Gon. He should be awake in a few hours.

    That was three days ago.



    Two days ago. Qui-Gon had left Obi-Wan?s side in the morning, to accompany Prince Vathas when he met Princess Elsbeth. The medics had told him that Obi-Wan was recovering nicely, that his continued sleeping must be a side effect of the antidote. No doubt the young man would be awake by the time he returned from the spaceport and the welcoming ceremonies that would be held in honor of Princess Elsbeth?s arrival. Qui-Gon returned that evening to find a still unconscious Obi-Wan and that the first round of tests had begun.

    The medics had been professional and caring, their calm demeanor would do a Jedi proud. But Qui-Gon could sense their puzzlement and concern. There was no medical reason for Obi-Wan?s coma. Qui-Gon had been quizzed intensely about his Padawan?s medical history, in addition to the records that had been sent from the Jedi Temple. According to every test they had run, the young man was in perfect health. Perfect, except for the fact he had not regained consciousness. Even a strong stimulant had failed to wake him.


    One day ago. The entire planet celebrated the marriage of Vathas and Elsbeth, after which they were crowned co-rulers. There would be no war. Their planet was now independent. Even in the med-center there was an atmosphere of euphoria. Except for Qui-Gon, mediating by his Padawan?s side. He had left only to be present at the wedding, one of the official witnesses to a ceremony that bound not only two people, but three planets.

    Qui-Gon had reached out along their training bond, hoping to lead Obi-Wan back to consciousness. It felt as if Obi-Wan was on the other side of the galaxy, not the other side of the room. Obi-Wan had been unconscious due to injury more times than Qui-Gon liked to think about, but his presence along their bond had never been . . . absent. If only I had been quicker, Qui-Gon thought. I should have been at his side, not fooling with some buearecrate. Why won?t he answer me? The bond isn?t blocked. Its as if he was far, far away . . .

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    Obi-Wan wandered through a thick fog. He was uncertain as to where he was or how he had gotten there. The last thing he remembered was his master shouting a warning. What his master had tried to warn him about, he did not know. He couldn?t seem to recall what he had been doing.

    Obi-Wan A voice whispered in the distance.

    ?Master?? Obi-Wan asked in confusion. It sounded like his master, but something was not quite right.

    Obi-Wan. Come to me, Padawan. I need you. The voice entreated him.

    ?I?m coming, Master,? Obi-Wan said as he moved deeper into the fog.

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  22. ApprenticeM Jedi Master

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    Greencat, thank you!! And Obi, ever heard the saying " go toward the light ? Not " go into the fog" !!! Course, this means more Obi torture..... [face_devil]
  23. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    Intriguing post...must have moreeeee!
  24. p_stotts Force Ghost

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    Oooo, very original, and I'm sure well-thought out! Can't wait for more to become...unfogged! ;) *quickly ducks old shoes and rotten fruit* Yes, it's Friday, and I'm in one of those moods!
  25. Jane Jinn Jedi Grand Master

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    Oh, no, Obi-Wan is being tricked! Hopefully he can find his way back!
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