Before Someone to Watch Over Me (JA thriller/romance - repost) *final post! 07/7*

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  1. Miana Kenobi Costuming & Props Mod - Retired Admin

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    YAY for Sexy Dexy saving the day!! :D :D

    I'm still loving it, Jem! :D

    Edit: WOO HOO!!! Go me for taking the 100th post! :D
  2. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Fabulous conversation between Qui-Gon and Dex. Love how our handsome Correlian Master can always make a joke. Hmm, a party with the girls, especially those girls would be awfully fun to be at. LOL!

    Jemmy, Jemmy, Jemmy.. why go running out without an escort? After Linus's assessment of what may happen should he try and shoot Dex I really wanted him to do it, just so he would get caught. :D :D
  3. DarthIshtar Chosen One

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    Yeah, I was holding my fat breath (I've been in chorale too long this week and any time we breathe, it has to be a FAT BREATH. Does wonders for our self-esteem) until Dex showed up. I was hoping it was Quiggy, but Sexy Dexy to the rescue? Perfect, anyway.
  4. Jemmiah Jedi Grand Master

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    "Mrs K, you're an absolute star." Rela smiled.

    "Well," Edna Krabople patted her hair at the sides as if trying to deflect attention away from Rela's words, "one tries ones best. And it's not as if we get a celebrity visiting our stairway every day, is it? I'm not sure that swoop racing is a safe occupation," she said lightly, "but all the same it's nice to be able to look back on this momentous occasion and say that I had a small part in that dear, sweet girl's success."

    What part was that, Rela wondered? No matter.

    "You've made enough snacks to last us two lifetimes." Rela eyed the huge mountain of sausages on sticks and flans and pastries and little Sand Dune pizza wedges in the corner.

    "Oh, hush dear. It was nothing. And there's a whole load more where they came from!"

    "You shouldn't have bothered." Rela shook her head in a hybrid of admiration/exasperation.

    "Nonsense!" she reached into her refrigeration unit and pulled back the door to reveal a similar mountain of food, this time all covered in hygienic-film.

    Rela stared, aghast.

    "No, you REALLY shouldn't have bothered." She mumbled.

    "You can leave it all in here." Mrs Krabople gushed. "Then whenever you want to snack on something you just come right across and help yourselves. Tuffy and I will be very glad to see you all having a good time."

    "Thanks." Rela smiled, wondering just what she'd let herself in for that evening.

    "Well, off you go dear. You have to get ready for your guests!"

    Rela turned round as she walked through Mrs Krabople's doorway.

    "You won't go overboard?" Rela warned. "Jemmy wouldn't like a lot of fuss or anything."

    "Oh, no dear! Not at all. I always believe in respecting other people's wishes." She bent down as if to search for something. "Ah, there you are Tuffy dear. Where did we put that banner with 'congratulations' on it?"

    "SQUEAK!"

    Rela rolled her eyes.

    "Yeah, I know Tube Rat. I'm outa here!"

    *************

    "Padawan?"

    "Yes, master?"

    Qui-Gon didn't look up from the assignment he was reading.

    "Where was it you were going tonight?"

    "Out."

    "Yes," Jinn nodded, "I think we'd got that far. Where is 'out', specifically?"

    "Why?" Obi-Wan wondered.

    "Because I might need to contact you. What if there was some sort of surprise emergency?"

    "Like what?"

    "I don't know! If I knew it wouldn't be a surprise!" Qui-Gon pointed out. "So, where is it this time? I hope you're not going to get drunk again."

    "Master, I don't think I?ll EVER get drunk again." Obi-Wan blanched at the memory. "But if you are so worried I'll carry my comlink."

    "You do that." Qui-Gon agreed. "And tell Jemmiah I want you back in one piece, do you hear?"

    "MASTER!" Obi-Wan looked away in embarrassment.

    "Might I remind you that there are certain padawans not a million parsecs away who haven't yet had their medical?"

    "What?" Obi-Wan's eyes bugged.

    "And Master Yoda has asked us to get ready for our next assignment."

    "When?"

    "Next week."

    "But Jemmiah?" Obi-Wan protested.

    Qui-Gon smiled a silky smile.

    "...Will have to sharpen her nails on something else." Qui-Gon eyed him meaningfully. "Obi-Wan, good luck if you are trying to get your relationship back together. But if I see so much as one claw mark or scrape on your back I will be a laughing stock infront of the healers so please have a little consideration for an easily embarassed old man and do as you're told?"

    "What about you and Leona?" Obi-Wan replied curiously.

    "She's not like that." The defensive tone was present in Qui-Gon's voice.

    "No? What is she like?" Kenobi grinned as he straightened out a few creases on his robe.

    "Well, she's?" Qui-Gon stopped dead. "Get out of here. Now!"

    "Yes, master." Obi-Wan laughed.

    *******************

    "This is the life." Spider sprawled along the couch wrapped in her pink dressing gown, resting her chin in her hands. "I like a good holo film."

    "Yeah, I like a GOOD holo film." Rela groaned.

    "What's wrong with it?" Jemm
  5. DarthIshtar Chosen One

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    ::Jumps out of her skin.:: Mi fuerza en los cielos altisimos! (MY FORCE IN HIGHEST HEAVENS!) Don't DO that to me, Jem!
  6. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Oh this was juz hilarious and well played!!

    "...Will have to sharpen her nails on something else." Qui-Gon eyed him meaningfully. "Obi-Wan, good luck if you are trying to get your relationship back together. But if I see so much as one claw mark or scrape on your back I will be a laughing stock infront of the healers so please have a little consideration for an easily embarassed old man and do as you're told?"

    "What about you and Leona?" Obi-Wan replied curiously.

    "She's not like that." The defensive tone was present in Qui-Gon's voice.

    "No? What is she like?" Kenobi grinned as he straightened out a few creases on his robe.

    "Well, she's?" Qui-Gon stopped dead. "Get out of here. Now!"

    "Yes, master." Obi-Wan laughed.


    Uh oh... Linus has shown himself! Scarrrrrrrrrrry!
    Great post!!
  7. JadeSolo Manager Emeritus

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    AAhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!! Evil cliffie! [face_worried]

    I spent a few hours yesterday and today catching up with this, and it was a nice alternative to homework. :p Now I just have to run off and catch up with all the other stories!

    I love the relationship between Obi-Wan and Jemmiah, especially the way it makes me yell in frustration at my computer. :D :p
  8. Miana Kenobi Costuming & Props Mod - Retired Admin

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    *Eyes widen* :eek: RUN, OBI-WAN KENOBI, AND GET YOUR BUTT OVER THERE RIGHT NOW!!

    Or Tube Rat! Go and bite his ankles!!

    Jem, you're evil. :p
  9. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Oh dear, seems I forgot about that conversation between Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan and now I've got a monitor full of coffee. Very cute. Apparently I've also forgotten the clif hanger in this one. Arggg.....
  10. DarthIshtar Chosen One

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    Yes, get tube rat to bite linus. Or Mrs. K can give him a swift kick...
  11. Jemmiah Jedi Grand Master

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    Post co-written with Mouse :)

    *********

    Despite the fact that fear had a vice-like grasp of her throat, paralyzing her voice momentarily, Jemmiah slowly got to her feet. She didn't once take her eyes from Linus, knowing that to do so was a mistake that she might not live to repeat. Spider glanced swiftly from Jemmy to Linus and rolled off the sofa and onto the floor, coming up into a neat squatting position as far away from the man as she could possibly get.

    "Disgusting, am I?" Linus said with his eyes fixed on Jemmiah. "Your friend doesn't know much about manners, does she?"

    "W-what are you doing here?" Jemmiah managed to wheeze through her tightened vocal chords.

    "Somebody was stupid enough to leave the door ajar. An open invitation, as it were." Linus took a step forward and kicked Jemmiah's make up bag out of his way, scattering its contents across the floor. Both Jemmy and Spider began to retreat before Linus withdrew his blaster quite deliberately.

    "Don't make this difficult." He breathed. "Do as I say and you might just live through this."

    "Why?" Jemmy shook her head. "Why are you doing this?"

    The ever-present guarded look on Leaford's cold features melted in raptures of triumph. He eyed Jemmiah with something akin to a predatory grin. "Because, sweetheart," he said, his smile increasing as she flinched at his familiarity, "someone's paying me BIG money to bring you in. Seems he's rather anxious to meet with you again. And you needn't think," he snapped, seeing the way that Jemmiah darted anxious looks in the direction of the door, "that stalling for time will help you or your friend. If you're waiting on that red haired snippet to save your skins you'd better think again."

    He aimed the blaster at Spider.

    "Don't move unless you want your brains fried. I've got some associates waiting who are going to collect you and I'd rather you were both alive. But don't think I won't shoot your friend," he waved the blaster at Spider, "if you don't do what I tell you."

    "Linus!" Jemmy hissed. "You think it's really tough of you waving that blaster around, don't you? Think you're a big man? You think it's really clever to beat up on people till they give you what you want; well I've got news for you. I've seen stunted Jawas with more guts than you have. You're pathetic! You don't have the brains you were born with. I've met real psychopaths before in my time and let me tell you, compared to them you are Nerf dirt!"

    She backed away again the second she finished her little rant, knowing that he would make an attempt to grab her but she hoped it would be enough to allow Spider to escape. Her plan backfired badly, for when Leaford caught hold of her she saw Spider grab hold of a heavy chair and prepare to swing it at the back of Linus' head.

    Leaford went completely berserk.

    He managed to get off a stun shot that clipped the chair that Spider was holding whilst Jemmiah tried to push his gun arm away, so that the second shot blasted harmlessly at Rela's ceiling. The red mist descended suddenly and Leaford brought the butt of the blaster down upon Jemmiah's skull, causing her to reel backwards. Furious, he shoved her against the wall and repeatedly started to smash her head against the surface as she tried to fight him off.

    Spider knew it was no contest. It was like watching a cannoid with a child's rag doll.

    Swinging the chair towards him, Leaford loosened his grip on the dazed Jemmiah and pointed the blaster at the girl with the garish hair. This time he fired.

    Spider went down without a sound; eyes wide open and stunned beyond any chance of quick recovery.

    "One down, one to go." Linus grinned, turning his attention back to Jemmiah. "I hope you're not going to give me any more grief." He smacked her across the face, thinking that the blow would confuse her enough to let him get her tied up. "Don't make me do to you what I did to your friend."

    Jemmiah hung limply for a moment, pretending to be vanquished. She knew that this was her last chance to win their freed
  12. Miana Kenobi Costuming & Props Mod - Retired Admin

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    *Plays the Superman theme* Sexy Dexy to the rescue!! :)

    Dude. I can think of SO many things I'd like to do to Linus right about now... :mad:

    Excellent job, you two!
  13. DarthIshtar Chosen One

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    Jemmy, if you can write an abuse scene that well, you and me should get together for a story. :) Thank the Unifying Force for Sexy Dexy as always!
  14. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Ohhhh great post! Ack bad Linus!! Grrrr! He'll get his shortly! Hurry Qui! Hurry Dex!
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    Grrrrr... Linus is so very bad, but unfortunately the Jedi won't do nearly enogh of what he really deserves. Dex and Qui-Gon to the rescue... why, I think I've had dreams of that. LOL! :D
  16. Jemmiah Jedi Grand Master

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    *******

    That man. That man. Red lady in trouble. Help! Get help!

    Poing!
    Poing!

    Who help? Owner lady? No! She not understand!
    Oooo! Look! Shiny knobs!

    Poing!
    Poing!

    Help? Brak man? Tuffy smarter than Brak man!
    Oooo! What?s that noise?
    Up and downy thing? Up and downy thing!
    Oooo! Shiny!

    Poing!
    Poing!

    Shiny doors! Shiny doors open!
    Funny smelling foot guy! He help!

    Poing!
    Poing!

    ?SQUUUUUUEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAKKKKKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!?

    *~*~*~*~*~


    Rela couldn?t believe that this was happening. How he got the better of her she would never figure out. He had used her. Lied to her! Then out of nowhere this cretin shows up. Again. And this time inside her apartment! Mrs. Krabople was right when she had told her that this man needed to be locked away. Now here she was lying on the floor of her apartment being choked to death by this obsessive creep. Poor Jemmy and Spider had been knocked out and tied up, what made her think that she could save the day. She couldn?t even speak much less scream for help. The only reason she could still breathe was because of the death-grip she had on Linus? arm. Rela knew that if she let go or even relaxed a tiny bit she would be dead.

    ?This should make you think twice about butting into places you don?t belong.? Linus told her snidely as his grip became tighter. ?I thought you said that you could take care of yourself. Like a little slip of a girl like you could kill me. Not likely. I?ll just do to you what I did to all those other girls, but I?ll let you go out with a bang. Something that you?ve probably never had that boy of yours do to you. And just before I let you die I?ll make you watch what I do to your friends.?

    He then leaned over and licked her from her throat to her forehead as he reached his free hand down and started fumbling with the drawstring of her pajama bottoms. Rela looked away as much as she could in wide-eyed disgust, and something caught her eye.

    Jemmiah?s nail file.

    If she could just reach it without letting Linus see it. Rela knew she had to do something fast. She couldn?t breathe and was quickly losing her strength to fight. Rela knew she had to do this, for Jemmy, Spider, and for all those girls he had gotten to earlier. But mostly for herself. She was not about to let this stupid mook win. She had one chance and she had to take it soon.

    ?I wonder Red are you as fiery in bed as your hair is, or are you really a redhead??

    Rela answered him by taking her chance and gouging her thumbnail into his eye. His grip on her throat lessened enough for her to lunge over and grab Jemmy?s nail file. With all of her might Rela brought it down and rammed it home at the base of his neck. Linus reared back with a scream and latched a hold of the nail file still embedded in the side of his neck.

    ?YOU WITCH!? he screamed as he backhanded Rela across the face.

    ?Didn?t you know that it?s improper to speak to a lady in that manner!? a very angry and familiar voice announced.

    Rela, who was too busy concentrating on breathing again, missed it when Obi-Wan grabbed Linus by the hair and launched him out the door. The next thing Rela knew was that someone was asking her if she was okay. She quickly waved them off and pointed to where Jemmiah and Spider were still tied up.

    ?Jemmy. Spider.? she rasped out.

    Obi-Wan let out a pent up breath. ?You win this one, but you?re going to see An-Paj.?

    Rela nodded quickly in agreement with a cough and waved him off again. As she watched Obi-Wan begin to untie Jemmiah and Spider, Rela got up and raced to her room. She continued to cough as she tried to force herself to breathe. She quickly found her blaster and raced back to where she assumed Obi-Wan had thrown Linus. Still coughing she reached the doorway to find the hallway empty.

    Linus was gone.

    ****************

    Leaford ran faster than he had ever run before in his life.

    The lift in the building could not go quickly enough as far as he was concerned. Every f
  17. DarthIshtar Chosen One

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    PHEW!!! HOORAY, THEY'RE SAVED! OBI AND SEXY DEXY TO THE RESCUE! Loved "at last" "couldn't have put it better myself" with Qui-Gon. I forgot how funny it was to have a scene written from the POV of a ferret. "And people think i'M weird!"
  18. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Rock on!! Loverboy to the rescue!!! Great job!!!

    Woo-hoo! Make him tremble in fear boys!!! Rough him up!!!
  19. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    ROFLOL! Tube rat just breaks me up!! [face_laugh] [face_laugh]

    "I couldn't have put it any better myself." The dark voice of Qui-Gon Jinn replied. -- yelled right out out in triumph at this. Realy wish Qui-Gon would do all sorts of very un-Jedilike things to this waste of breath.
  20. Miana Kenobi Costuming & Props Mod - Retired Admin

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    Tube Rat to the rescue!! And Ben, Dexy, and Quiggy, of course. ;)

    Realy wish Qui-Gon would do all sorts of very un-Jedilike things to this waste of breath.

    I second that notion... :mad:

    Excellent job, Jem and Mouse!
  21. Jemmiah Jedi Grand Master

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    *********

    ?It really hurts Ben!? Jemmy wailed as they reached the healers.

    ?I know it does, I had two at the same time.? He reminded her.

    ?I still feel as if someone hit me with a transport.? Spider chimed in.

    Rela stayed quiet since it still hurt too much to talk.

    The small group was soon greeted by An-Paj who quickly assessed the situation and began to bark out orders.

    Rela watched and listened as everyone began talking on top of each other. She didn?t want to be here, and by Force she was going home. She had things to take care of and clean up. With or without security getting in the way. Slowly she took a step back and gleefully noticed that no one was paying attention to her. Slowly she took another step. Still they continued talking. A few more steps and she would be home free. Slowly another and another. She reached the door and quickly turned the corner and ran straight into someone, and she knew exactly who it was.

    ?Not this time my little Sithcat.? He whispered into her ear. ?You are staying here, although this is not what I had planned when I said I wanted to spend more time with you.?

    Rela kept her gaze away from him as she continued to concentrate on getting a deep breath.

    ?Rel, look at me.? He pleaded.

    Rela shook her head and continued to look away. She soon felt his fingers on her face forcing her head to look up.

    ?Do you know how much I hate it when you get into stuff like that? I miss my Sithcat.? He paused a moment as he looked at her face. ?He hit you.?

    ?I?m fine.? She somehow managed to rasp out. ?It?s Jemmy and Spider??

    ?Hurts to talk, doesn?t it? Now come on!?

    Before Rela had a chance to bolt, he scooped her up and slung her over his shoulder.

    ?If this is the only way I can get you to the healers, then so be it!?

    ************

    ?Wait! Where?s the other one?? An-Paj quickly asked noticing that Rela was missing.

    ?I don?t?? Obi-Wan started then he soon caught sight of her. ?There she is.?

    ?Well, I?m glad to know that he found her.? An-Paj sighed.

    ?I wonder if he knows how much she hates being carried around butt first like that?? Obi-Wan said absently.

    ?She?ll let him know, but how do you know?? Jemmiah asked.

    ?Um, nevermind.?

    ?Ben, sometimes you just don?t know when to keep your mouth shut.?


    *******************

    Linus watched the two Jedi circle him predatorily as he struggled to free himself of the binders on his wrists and feet. Round and round they walked, trying their damnedest to intimidate him. It was working, too.

    "What do you want?" Leaford called hoarsely. "I've done nothing wrong. Untie me now or?"

    "Or what? You'll strangle us?" Qui-Gon stated coldly. "Break our arms?"

    "I'm telling you, I don't know what you're talking about!" Linus growled.

    "Then let me put it this way. That's three times you've attacked Jemmiah now. You've also managed to complicate matters further by trying to murder two of her friends. Would have done had my padawan not showed up. I should think that security is out hunting for you by now...which is a great pity because by the time I've finished with you there will be nothing left of you to find."

    Linus rapidly turned an unattractive shade of grey/white.

    "Look, you can't mean that. You're a Jedi. I'm not stupid."

    "Oh?" Dex asked, feigning polite surprise. "And of what relevance is that?"

    "Jedi are not supposed to take revenge." Linus pronounced smugly.

    "What we are supposed to do and what we do are two different matters entirely." Qui-Gon remarked. "For example, most men are taught to be polite and courteous towards women but that doesn't seem to have made any difference to you. You just prefer to strangle them."

    "I've told you?," Linus shouted hoarsely.

    "No, I've told you!" Qui-Gon shouted back, surprising even Dex. "I believe I mentioned what would happen to you if you so much as harmed a hair on Jemmiah's head. Well, guess what?"

    "W-w-what?" Linus swallowed.

    Qui-Gon stooped circling and st
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  23. Kynstar Jedi Grand Master

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    Woohoo!! Qui-Gon is in a huff! Yippee! And Dex doesn't know if he's bluffing! *snrk* he prob ain't bluffing! ;)

    Hehehehe carrying Rela back in to the Healers, that was great!
  24. Miana Kenobi Costuming & Props Mod - Retired Admin

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    Dude Qui, kick his ass. :mad:

    Hehehe... classic, Frizzy. ;) :D

    Excellent job, you two!
  25. Healer_Leona Manager Emeritus

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    Oh, like Rela's really going to mind her healer boy carting her around. LOL!

    I so love the incredibly hardness of Qui-Gon in this post, no wonder Dex isn't sure he's bluffing. I still say throw him in the shaft!! Let him lie broken and bleeding till his life seeps away!
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