Songwriters room

If there is already one of these threads, Mods, please lock this. But if there isn't, well hey, here we go

This a thread for people to express their feelings in song.

I guess I'll start it off,

Never Really There

When I wake up, I see your face calling to me
I reach out to you
You?ll never be
With me because you?re never really there

So I close myself off to the world of feeling
Please excuse me while I fall back into my web of protectiveness

And you lure me out
Out of my cage
It?s all for nothing
We?re not on the same page

Were you really ever in my life?
Or were you just a perfect figment of my imagination?

I wish emotions could be stripped away by iron will
I don?t want to feel
I can?t feel until
The pain you give me makes my skin peel

I know you don?t mean to
But it hurts me so much more
Nevermore
Just make up your damn mind
So I don?t tear myself up anymore

Hang me by a thread
So I can see your face
Staring back at me
Why can?t you see
That you were meant for me

 

Awesome! A place I can kick back and jam a few tunes in

starwars6554 -- Great lyrics. Mesa muoy muoy like

I guess I can start off by showing off "Inside", something I wrote last semester. The recording isn't the greatest, so apologies for that.

I've been working on words for the song forever, but nothing ever comes to mind. I'm not the best at putting words and guitar together. I can only tend do one or the other.

But yeah... I've also got a song -- "Break Me" for download, if anyone would care to hear it and give feedback.

 

I'm downloading it right now Carosel


*rubbing hands together in anticipation*

 

This sucks.

Carosel, I'm not able to play the song after I download it.


I'll try again later.


Here's another song.


Cease

What is the best
I could do
So I won?t detest
Everything about you

Should I pretend
You can?t make me bend
Should I care
?Cause God knows you don?t

I can?t find peace
I?ve been losing sleep
I can?t make it cease
I?ve gotten in too deep

Oh how can I forget you now
I?ll be sure to do my best
?Cause I don?t want you back
Or was it all a test

You never cared
I was your toy
You would have never dared
Putting your feelings in different hands

I can?t find peace
I?ve been losing sleep
I can?t make it cease
I?ve gotten in too deep

 

Why

She looks at me, that smile upon her face
I've seen it before, my friend, but in some other place.
So let me be, in my own disgrace,
for visions have come to me, with their cold embrace.

Why oh why no matter what you say,
When will I ever find my way
out from all of the troubles if I should stay
and all of the hurt I feel everyday
when I'm with you?

This vicious game has me as your pawn.
And in the mind, my emotions withdrawn.
I call your name, but the meaning's gone,
A slave to you, with each pass of dawn.

And so why no matter what we say,
When will I ever find my way
out from all of the troubles if I should stay
and all of the hurt I feel everyday
when I'm with you?

The clouds roll past, the faceless moon tonight,
While down below, there's a still quiet.
The shadows cast by your eyes incite
the feeling of revolution, destructive riot.

And so why no matter what I say,
Now that I've found, I've found my way
out from all of the troubles when I had stayed,
and all of the hurt I felt everyday
so I've left you.

 

Wow.

That was amazing.

You have alot of skill.

Damn

Now I'm jealous

 

Here's another one, to give this thread some life


Only Me

Surrounded by empty walls
Every corner has its own pitfalls
Now I?m afraid to answer calls
Because it feels like I?ve been walking
These empty halls
For the longest time

There?s no door
There?s only the floor
There?s no windows
There?s only me in here
Only me

Come out and play
Maybe another day
What will they say
When I get in their way

Time to go back
Go into my sack
I?ve always had a knack
For not running with the pack

There?s no he
There?s only me
Only me
Hide away the key
Throw it in the sea

There?s only me
Only me

 

Here's the chorus to a song I'm writing. It's about this chick from the summer. I kinda wanted to get with her, but then she went back to her homestate.

Time Will Tell
And tell me, where have you been?
Drifting on the tides and the wind.
And will I ever seen you again?
Time will tell, yeah time will tell.


It's not much.

 

Nice job Dowe. sounds good

 

Carosel...Dowe?

I know you're out there somewhere.

Maybe with some songs ?

 

I wrote a song the other night...

Sometimes it takes so much for you to realize love,
Sometimes you let your selfishness win.
Sometimes it takes a measure of extremity and disgust
to overcome the power of lust.
Through each action one performs,
The truth of the heart reforms.
Finding deep inside yourself how wrong you really are
to let sinful desire pull you from where you are.
Wondering deep inside how unclean you may be,
Praying to God for the light to see --
--worrying about how you appear,
Afraid that you will lose everything near.

Sometimes it takes so much for you to realize you're wrong,
Sometimes you must pour your heart into a song.
Sometimes past incidents haunt your life,
Ripping at you like a sharp knife.
Wondering how to cover your guilt,
Finding the pain is high upon stilts.
Lowering your halo just a little more each day,
Helping make the tears pour away.
Afraid that one mistake will burn you forevermore,
Hoping your heart won't be lost at the door --
--wisihing you could wash away the fear,
Crying at the thought of pain here.

Sometimes you know that you're falling in love,
Sometimes you wish you were as clean as a dove.
Sometimes you're afraid of losing her touch
Because one time you did too much.
The guilt of the sin lays high on you,
Tearing deep, through and through.
Afraid of what she'll think; she'll say,
Afraid she'll just turn away.
For someone you care so much about,
The guilt inside will always shout --
--wondering if she will understand,
Praying she will and can.

One of those sort of songs that brings you to tears when you're writing them..

 

That's really good James. Really good.
I hope to finish a song or three up this weekend.
We'll see if I get enought 'alone' time to do it.

Here's a song I wrote, and the lyrics change every time. It's improv.
This version is from August 13th of this year. It was hot in my room...

Librarian Girl (lyrics on 08-13-02)

Keli, oh Keli!
Keli's back, invite her too.
Here we go...



This girl came to my door
she said she lived up on the 5th floor
and oh, I don't remember her name
oh that's ok, cuz i was lost in her eyes all the same

And I looked at her, and she smiled at me too
And then I walked downstairs away from Yahoo!

And I see my reflection in the snow covered hills
cuz it reminds me of a song I wrote
or did I dream it again

And it's covered by Smashing Pumpkins
That's ok
They kinda suck anyway.

I kinda like 'Disarm', and once I stole a chord progression
but my song sounded too much like Dave Matthews

Did I happen to mention
that he's my hero,
Dave Matthews in my hero

and he...

So anyway back to my story
You just thought I got all the glory

But I walked downstairs to her room on the 5th floor
And then she smiled at me...and then...

Forgot the words, because she was wearing next to nothing.

*Damn, I love college!*

So I found out her name the very next day
and she's the village bicycle
makes you want to turn gay

But that's ok, cuz she's a walking STD
and so I ran away, but she followed me...

It's so hot in my room, now must be 97 degrees,
that's just one degree from the boy band, on their knees
and sometimes the Backstreet Boys are better then they,
it still won't get me a date with Britney, Yeah!

So now I'm playing this...song for my friends,
though I've never met them, and this is the end,
But I could keep this song going for
'bout an hour or two

Pickle Pride and the QuintMan,
Yeah...

There's Kirsty in Canada
and Pickle in Illinois...
and...

Hitler...?

People...

Dammit people why do you interfere with my song
and if the cold rules, it won't be long,

And I'll want to tell how I can rhyme with Texas
'cuz I love my BMW, my Mercedes, and my Lexus.

(But) Back to Canada, which was the land of ice and snow
but I won't... there's where I do want to go.

They got the Blue Jays,
and they got the Saints.
Wait,
That's New Orleans,
I've been eating too much paint.

So here's where I end my song,
it's too hot to sing along.
And now I must talk about her,
She's my Librarian Girl...

I met her one day, cuz see,
the library has A/C, and
She was there sitting behind the Circulation Desk.

And I saw her in a cute pig tails,
and you know the rest...

Oh yeah, she's sweet and innocent
She's my Librarian Girl!

Hope you like my song,
Cuz it reminds me of Dave Matthews,
Dave Matthews,
He's my hero
He's my hero
Dave Matthews is my hero, he's my hero

So Quint better add some drums,
or I will kick his ass.
cuz I have no qualms about going down there,
to the land of Texas.

Just because the President is a moron
and he has a big hat,
doesn't mean we can't be musicians
and pass around, around the bong...

Not that I do that, cuz I haven't in a year,
I'm staying clean and sober, maybe one or two beers...

But I really must end my song,
Cuz I'm hot and sweaty and tired, cuz...

And so....

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So what do you think?

 

That was funny Dowe.

I really enjoyed that

 

Sorry Carosel, I just skipped right over yours. Those are awsome lyrics! I can really connect with what you were saying there

 

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I like the Terminator theme, and I want to write an original song using the melody and chord progression.
Does anybody know how much I'd have to change it to not get sued?

Here's a midi I made tonight, all by ear.