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Saga Spoiler Filled EP 3 fan version

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Senator_Cilghal, Jul 20, 2003.

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  1. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    Beware, spoilers, but Grilled Sarlacc said put it here.

    Supreme Chancellor Palpatine/Darth Sidious (human male from Naboo)
    Vice Chancellor Mas Amedda (Chagrian male from Champala)
    Chief Administrative Aide Sly Moore (Umbaran female from Umbara)
    Chief Vizier Sate Pestage (human male)
    Senator Jar Jar Binks (Gungan male from Naboo)
    Senator Yarua (Wookiee male from Kashyyyk)
    Senator Bail Organa (human male from Alderaan)
    Senator Orn Free Taa (Twi?lek male from Ryloth)
    Senator Mon Mothma (human female from Chandrilla)
    Senator Ask Aak (Gran male from Malastare)
    Senator Lexi Dio (human female from Uyter)
    Senator Ronet Coorr (human male from Iseno)
    Senator Onaconda Farr (Rodian male from Rodia)
    Senator Ister Paddie (human male from Sermeria)
    Senator Zo Howler (Anx male from Gravlex Med)
    Chief Representative Fo Kuna (Anx male from Gravlex Med)
    Senator Karzyt (human female from Kuat)
    Senator Darsana (Anselmi male from Glee Anselm)
    Senator Garm Bel Iblis (human male from Corellia)
    Senator Tundra Dowmeia (Quarren male from Calamari)
    Senator Bogg Tyrell (Aleena female from Aleen)
    Queen Jamillia (human female from Naboo)
    Governor Sio Bibble (human male from Naboo)
    C-3PO (Cybot Galactica 3PO Protocol Droid)
    R2-D2 (Industrial Automaton R2 Astromech Droid)
    Captain Typho (human male from Naboo)
    Political Advisor Padmé Naberrie Amidala (human female from Naboo)
    Captain Raymus Antilles (human male from Alderaan)
    General Carlist Rieekan (human male from Alderaan)
    Admiral Jerjerrod (human male from Tinnel IV)
    Captain Jan Dodonna (human male from Commenor)
    Captain Terrinald Screed (human male)
    Chewbacca (Wookiee male from Kashyyyk)
    SBI Director Armand Isard (human male from Coruscant)
    Minister of Education Tzarai Organa (human female from Alderaan)
    Chalmun (Wookiee male from Kashyyyk)
    Jedi Master Agen Kolar (Zabrak male from Iridonia)
    Jedi Master Shaak Ti (Togruta female from Shili)
    Jedi Master Luminara Unduli (Mirialan female from Mirial)
    Jedi Master Saesee Tiin (Iktotchi male from Iktotch)
    Jedi Master Kit Fisto (Nautolan male from Glee Anselm)
    Jedi Master Mace Windu (human male from Haruun Kal)
    Jedi Master Minch Yoda (male)
    Jedi Master Plo Koon (Kel Dor male from Dorin)
    Jedi Master Ki-Adi-Mundi (Cerean male from Cerea)
    Jedi Master Sar Labooda (human male from Chalacta)
    Jedi Master Pablo-Jill (Ongree male)
    Jedi Master Stass Allie (human female from Corellia)
    Jedi Knight Torbin (human male)
    Jedi Knight Bultar Swan (human female)
    Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi (human male)
    Padawan Learner Barriss Offee (Mirialan female from Mirial)
    Padawan Learner Anakin Skywalker (human male from Tatooine)
    Padawan Learner Tremayne (human male)
    Count Dooku/Darth Tyranus (human male from Serenno)
    Settlement Officer Rune Haako (Neimoidian male from Neimoidia)
    Magistrate Passel Argente (Koorivar male from Kooriva)
    ex-Senator Po Nudo (Ualaq male from Ando)
    Trade Viceroy Nute Gunray (Neimoidian male from Neimoidia)
    ex-Senator Tikkes (Quarren male from Calamari)
    President Shu Mai (Gossam female from Castell)
    Foreman Wat Tambor (Skakoan male from Skako)
    Chairman San Hill (Muun male from Muunilist)
    Fleet Admiral Mikleb (Mon Calamari male from Calamari)
    Boba Fett (human male from Kamino)
    Jabba Desilijic Tiure (Hutt from Nal Hutta)
    Prime Minister Lama Su (Kaminoan male from Kamino)
    Owen Lars (human male from Ator)
    Beru Whitesun Lars (human female from Tatooine)

    The Clone War has ended. The forces of the Republic have defeated the Separatists in numerous engagements in the Outer Rim. As Republic forces hunt down the remnants of the Confederacy, peace seems to have come to the Republic at last.
    Seeking to reestablish order and promote morale in their home sectors, many senators have temporarily left Coruscant for visits home. Among them are Senators Bail Organa of Alderaan and Senator Jar Jar Binks of Naboo. Fearing lest remaining Separatists make attempts on the Senators lives, the senators are accompanied by Jedi bodyguards: Senator Orga
  2. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    Scene 36
    A Naboo N-1 Starfighter enters the Imperial system, ANAKIN at the controls, R2-D2 onboard. R2-D2 twitters.

    ANAKIN: A Star Destroyer is hailing me? Patch it through.

    SCREED: ANAKIN SKYWALKER. You will proceed immediately to the main hangar bay of the Star Destroyer Nemes. Emperor Palpatine wishes to meet with you immediately.

    ANAKIN: Understood.

    ANAKIN?s N-1 enters the hangar of the Nemes.
    Scene 37
    The Emperor?s Throneroom aboard the Nemes. Captain SCREED enters.

    PALPATINE: Yes, Captain Screed? What is it?

    SCREED: The Admiral wished me to inform you that SKYWALKER is aboard, Your Highness.

    PALPATINE: Yes, I know it. Bring him to me at once.

    SCREED: At once, Your Higness.
    Scene 38
    Three Jedi Starfighters exit hyperspace in the Kashyyyk system. They land in Rwookrrorro. The four Jedi exit, and are met by Senator YARUA, who growls at them.

    KENOBI: We appreciate your hospitality. We won?t put your people in danger long. We will take various freighters offworld at staggered intervals.

    YODA: Scattered we must be, to survive.

    YARUA growls.

    WINDU: We would be glad of a guide.

    A young Wookiee, CHEWBACCA, approaches. He roars.

    WINDU: Greetings, CHEWBACCA. I am MACE WINDU. These are my associates, Master YODA and Jedi Knight OBI-WAN KENOBI.

    KENOBI: Your city is truly beautiful.

    CHEWBACCA leads them through the branches and vines to a grove where the Jedi are assembled.

    OFFEE: OBI-WAN! (runs forward and hugs him, then bows) My Masters. I am so glad you survived?.I felt Master LUMINARA?s passing.

    YODA: One with the Force, she is.

    OFFEE (a single tear on her check): The Jedi are prepared to follow your instructions.

    YODA: In small groups, leave the planet we must. To a different planet, each group must go. Team with your former clanmates, from when you were younglings, and be their clans again, they shall. Stick together, you shall, but for a short time. When reached your destinations you have, scatter you must. Loners you must be, always on the run. In three months, those of us who survive shall gather together. Find a safe planet I shall., and summon you to me when the time is right. Then we shall discuss further plans.

    The Jedi divide into the clans of their childhood. Due the death toll of the Clone Wars, no group contains all of its original 20?few contain even ten. YODA points to one group.

    YODA (to Chewbacca): Please escort this group to the spaceport immediately. Ask Senator YARUA to put them on the next transport offworld. (to the Jedi) Go to an obscure world, you must. To noone, reveal its name, save those of your clan.

    OFFEE: Not even you?

    YODA: No.

    OFFEE: Then how will you find us?

    YODA: There is no need. Raised you since you were children, have I. Show me where you are, the Force will. Watch all of you from afar, shall I. Go now, my friends. May the Force be with you.

    BARRISS OFFEE and eleven other Jedi leave the clearing with CHEWBACCA.
    Scene 39
    ANAKIN enters PALPATINE?s throneroom. PALPATINE rises, smiling sadly.

    PALPATINE: Colonel SKYWALKER! It warms my heart to see you.

    ANAKIN: Your Highness. I am glad you are safe.

    PALPATINE (grinning): I am glad you remain loyal, ANAKIN. I am afraid your fellow Jedi have betrayed me. I would have been truly heartbroken, my friend, if you had betrayed me as well. I am sorry the Jedi have done this to us. I am sure you are even more hurt by their actions than me. They have betrayed us both; you have been deceived. Evidence was uncovered of their treachery, I am afraid. (hands a datapad to ANAKIN, who reads it for a while)

    ANAKIN: This can?t be true.

    PALPATINE: That was my reaction. I was certain a fair trial would prove the Jedi innocent. But when I attempted to have them brought in for a hearing, look how they reacted. (displays a hologram of the Jedi Councillo
  3. JDH3

    JDH3 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Mar 27, 2003

    As someone who is trying to write a credible AU of EP3. I found this fascinating, it was very well done. I like your use of spoilers and it was a nice(albeit sad) break from my own fic. Great job and my highest regards for your work. I also found it useful in adding some inspiration for the darker parts of my fic, thanks for that. Once more great job, on this fan version of EP3.
  4. darth_shockwave

    darth_shockwave Jedi Youngling star 1

    Apr 15, 2003
    nice script, well done
  5. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    THanks for the praise. As I said, the last 10 scenes or so were rather rushed, and probably need a bit more dialogue, but it some ways I think they are more appropriate rushed (all the other SW movies end pretty rushed, without a lot of talk). I also think the Anakin>Vader transition is a bit hasty in my version, but personally I always imagined that by the time of EP III Anakin was already loyal to Palpatine and very put out with the Council, his only real attachment to the Jedi being OB!. It seems to me all he needs is a little push, a feeling of betrayal by the Council ,to send him over the edge.
  6. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    I just realized I left out an important scene: The death of JAR JAR BINKS!

    Let me improvise.

    VADER: Yes, My Master. But first, could you do me one small favor?

    PALPATINE: A favor?

    Two RED GUARDS pull JAR JAR BINKS into the throneroom.

    VADER: I really hate this creature. I was hoping you would fry him with that neato lightning of yours and let me watch.

    PALPATINE: It will be my pleasure.

    The RED GUARDS pull up three chairs. They and VADER sit in the chairs, and munch on popcorn while contentedly watching the long, painful death of BINKS. sizzle sizzle

    VADER: We're eating BBQ Gungan tonight!
  7. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    Woops! I also forgot to provide a way for R2 to end up with Padme instead of Anakin.

    The following edits:

    When the Inquisitorius come in the shuttle, have Anakin accompany them in his N-1 with R2

    Have Chewie steal the N-1 instead of the shutttle; Padme gives Chewie a disk to instruct R2 to obey him, not Anakin (R2 is PADME's droid, after all).
  8. Senator_Cilghal

    Senator_Cilghal Jedi Master star 5

    Jul 19, 2003
    Some words of explanation

    1) Sate Pestage--the Imperial Grand Vizier, cut from ESB, but seen in ROTJ and numerous EU. EU claims Palpatine made Pestage Vizier when he became Emperor, thus his placement in this story.

    2) Karzyt--a character of my own creation.

    3) Darsana--cut out of AOTC, though in the novel. An Anselmi, not a Nautolan, though from same planet. The Anselmi species has only been named in the EU.

    4) Bogg Tyrell--Aleena senator, of same speices as Ratts Tyerell from Ep I. Seen in Ep II in an air taxi and in Dex's Diner.

    5) Garm Bel Iblis--EU character from Thrawn trilogy. Senator of orellia in Old Republic, as portrayed in HoloNet News. Founding Rebel.

    6) Raymus Antilles--captain of the Tavnti ve IV in Episode IV, perhaps the man choked by Vader (however, the choked dued's rank patch suggests him to be an admiral--perhaps Antilles's superiro officer?)

    7) Carlist Rieekan--Rebel General at Hoth in ESB, EU claims former Alderaanian military head

    8) Jerjerrod--the Moff from ROTJ, EU claims formerly a Judicial and later Admiral in Republic Navy

    9) Jan Dodonna--Rebel Fighter command General from Episode IV, said by Eu to have once been captain of one of the first Victory Star Destroyers and an Imperial officer before defecting to Alliance

    10) Terrinald Screed--portrayed as an Imperial Admiral in the Droid Cartoons, formerly a Republic Judicial favoring the military act in HoloNet News

    11) Armand Isard--Ysanne isard's father; Director of SBI (Republic Intelligence) acc. to HoloNet News, later head of Imp Intel before replaced by Ysanne

    12) Chalmun--an EU Wookiee, owner of the Mos Eisley Cantina

    13) Agen Kolar, Sarr Labooda, and Stass Allie--Eeth Koth, Depa Billaba, and Adi Gallia look-alikes seen in Ep II Geonosis battle, probaably intended to=Eeth Koth, Depa Billaba, and Adi Gallia respectively (the POTJ Sourcebook supports this theory), but different actors than in Ep I. Since the Episode I actors appear in the Council scenes of Ep II, and the new actors in the Geonosis scenes, the EU separated these into new characters. The new actors "Agen Kolar" and "Stass Allie" will replace Eeth Koth and "Adi Gallia" in the Ep III Council scenes. We know Depa is no longer on the Council, so it seems likely she will similarly be replaced by Labooda.

    14) Luminara Unduli, Kit Fisto, and Pablo-Jill--these are Ep II Jedi characters; Luminara and Kit are confirmed to reappear in Ep III, there is no confirmation as to whether or not Pablo-Jill will reappear; their exact role unknown; many former Ep I/II councillors are not returning in Ep III, and these characters may have Council seats in Ep III.

    15) Torbin, Tremayne, and the Inquisitors--West End Games RPG invented these characters; Inquisitor is now a WOTC RPG Prestige Class. Grand Inquisitor Torbin was eventually assassinated, while High Inquisitor Tremayne's fate remains unknown. Other members of the Inquisitorius include Adalric Cessius Brandl (WEG) and Jerec (Dark Forces II: Jedi Knight).

    16) Fleet Admiral Mikleb--the EU portrays a Calamarian faction of the Confederacy in the Battle of Kamino, so a CIS Calamarian naval leader seemed logical; Mikleb is my own creation

    17) Boba Fett--Fett wants to kill Mace, but never gets to: Anakin kills him; this may cause future animosity between Fett and the Skywalkers, Fett holding a grudge (I am operating on the assumption that Fett and Vader get along because Fett does NOT know Vader=Anakin).

    18) Jabba--Jabba claims to have killed Jedi in the ROTJ novel, thus his role in this story

    19) Tantive IV--there are rumors this ship will return in Ep III

    20) Geonosian Dreadnaught--a ship mentioned in the novel Shatterpoint, it remains to be seen if these will remain EU or if Shatterpoint gave them as a spoiler preview of Ep III, much like the appearance of the Shu Mai, San Hill, and Wat Tambor in Cloak of Deception.

    21) Thranta War Cruiser, Moth War Frigate--these Alderaanian warships come from WEG and the Rogue Squadron books. The Thranta-class War Cruiser is so named in the Eu, b
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