Before Star Wars (Pre Saga) Episode I Mystery of the Sith "Choose Your Own Adventure" Complete

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  1. CodyMonKenobi Force Ghost

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    The winner is #3 Palpatine meeting the assassin on Orth'Zelek City.
  2. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    I can not wait for this one.
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    [Cut to]

    EXT. Orth?Zelek City

    Palptine?s ship lands at the crowded Spaceport in Orth?Zelek City. Palpatine walks out with his guards and they young prisoner with him. The architecture is beautiful, much like Theed except no waterfalls, as they move through the city we see that it is close to the forest and buildings are starting to resemble that, with lots of forestry colors. After traveling several miles through the city they come upon a very big house it differs somewhat from the rest, other than being larger than the rest, it is a shimmering silver, and very technological even down to the greeter.

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    INT. inside of the house

    They walk inside of this very luxurious mansion; it is very beautiful and welcoming full of bright colors and shimmering chandeliers, and the latest in technology in all appliances. As they walk in a servant greets them.

    Servant: Master Palpatine, we are thankful you are home.

    Palpatine: Show this boy to the back room, our friends will no what to do with him. Did you do as I requested?

    Servant: Yes sir, you have a meeting set up with Queen Taimi by holotransmission in one hour, and we have been told that Lord Malice has sent a spy with the Senator.

    Palpatine: This will work out better than I thought. I am expecting a guest?

    Servant: He is already here M?Lord he waits in your office

    Palpatine: Good, now do as I have instructed you to do.

    The Servant humbly bows and escorts the young padawan away. Palpatine turns and heads toward his personal office, when he walks in he can see the machine standing there patiently. Palpatine then walks over and sits in his throne like chair.

    Palpatine: So you are the assassin that Xizor has sent to me?

    Assassin: {in a robotic voice like the techno union} Yes I am

    Palpatine: Why should I send a droid to do this job?

    Assassin: I was designed to be the general of the Techno-Union's droid armies. Yet they tried to decommission me after I lead an attack against them so that I could rule. However, I escaped. Those that attacked me didn't.

    Palpatine: I see. What is your call number?

    Assassin: IG-88

    Palpatine: Well IG-88, you failed to take over the Techno-Union, don?t fail me. You won?t escape the wrath of the dark side.

    IG-88: Yes sir

    Palpatine: One more thing before you go. There is a spy with this party, make sure she is not killed and lets try to pin this on her.

    IG-88 nods to Palpatine and walks out of the office, to carry on his mission of assassination. A chime is then heard from the comlink.

    Palpatine: What is it?

    Voice from comlink: Queen Taimi is ready on the holotransmitter sir.

    Palpatine: Very well

    A large holographic image is then seen of the Queen, she appears to be around the age of sixteen, her face is painted white with to red dots on her cheek, she has blond hair wrapped up in two buns on each side.

    Palpatine: It is a pleasure to see you again your majesty.

    Taimi: {In a regal voice} As it is you Palpatine, I am told that Senator Stanimir is to meet with the Gungan leaders in hopes of peace.

    Palpatine: {sighs} Yes that is his intentions, but to be honest with you your majesty I don?t share his optimism.

    Taimi: I don?t know, he is the best diplomat in the republic; I am hopeful that things will work out.

    Palpatine: Yes as am I, but these Gungans are wild and unsophisticated, not to mention the Brotherhood of Naboo, they want war and until we can get the Republic to help us fight them we are in a very dangerous state. I fear for the senator?s safety. If we were to lose him I don?t know if we would be able to find anyone that could fill his shoes.

    Taimi: It would be difficult it is something we will have to consider just incase. {She pauses and appears to be thinking} What about you?

    Palpatine: What? I don?t know your highness, I just don?t think?

    Taimi: You have experience in Couracsant; dealing with the bureaucrats, and besides Naboo will need you if anything were to happen.

    Palpatine: {with a smile on his face} Well, if it means this mu
  4. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    I have already voted at you know where.

    The coolest section ever by CodyMonKenobi.
  5. PatttyB0123 RSA Latin America

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    Oh! I am tired of Palpatine trying to turn everybody lol

    #1
  6. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    It is what he dose best.
  7. PadawanofNogiuq Jedi Padawan

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    I vote # 1.... it sounds the most page turning.
  8. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    I can not wait for the next section.
  9. CodyMonKenobi Force Ghost

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    Sorry guys hope that I don't piss anyone off but I am going to make this a combo between 1 and 2, and I will try to make it a little longer so that everyone gets what they want.

    I will have something up later today.
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    [Cut to]

    Next we see Senator Stanimir in his humble home in the heart of Theed, The Jedi are off with Naboo delegates searching out the Gungan leaders in hope of getting a meeting for peace talks arranged, meanwhile the Senator, sets in his chamber with the beautiful young handmaiden.

    Zam: I am grateful that I was given to Senator with your beliefs.

    Stanimir: The fact that the republic allows slavery is just horrible, I own them but you will see my dear that you will have much more freedom with me than your former masters. A lot of Senators share this belief, anyone who would be bold enough to make the proclamation would become the most respected senator in the galaxy.

    Zam smiles at him and then gives him a warm kiss on the lips.

    Zam: I know your talks with the Gungans will be successful; do you expect your friend Palpatine to be there?

    Stanimir: No, he is on vacation right now visiting outer rim planets in hope of them joining the republic. He only comes to Naboo today because he was to speak with the Queen.

    Zam: Oh and what of? Where will he go next?

    Stanimir: Well, I am not sure to be exact.

    Zam: Oh well, I just thought with you two being friends that he would have told you.

    Stanimir: Well, we will just find out.

    The Senator pushes a button on his comlink holoprojecter and suddenly Palpatine is seen on the other end.

    Palpatine: Oh Senator, what a pleasant surprise. I just finished talking with the queen moments ago.

    Stanimir: How is the queen?

    Palpatine: She is well, and she has told me that the Gungans are beginning to show a little less hostility. She believes that the talks will go well. Perhaps you don?t need protection after all.

    Stanimir: That is wonderful news, what of the Brotherhood of Naboo?

    Palpatine: We are unsure of their whereabouts; we have confirmed that they killed the former Gungan Boss Otello.

    Stanimir: Until we bring them to justice I fear peace will be harder to maintain. Their hatred for Aliens is what makes it hard to bring traders to Naboo.

    Palpatine: I am certain we will turn things around. It is only a matter of time.

    Stanimir: Yes, I suppose your right. So my friend where are you off to next?

    Palpatine: A small planet I am sure you?ve never heard of, it is called Csillia.

    Stanimir: No, I can?t say that I have. I hope you enjoy your time there. I must prepare to meet with Boss Nass.

    Palpatine: Good luck.

    Stanimir: you too, and may the force be with you.

    Palpatine?s image fades and Stanimir is standing with his young handmaiden Zam.

    Zam: I must go tend to my chores, I will see you later when you return.

    The Jedi masters the return with the young Knight Telabo.

    Stanimir: Mace, how did it go?

    Mace: The talks went well, Boss Nass agreed to meet with you. I assured him that the Naboo wanted peace.

    Stanimir: Well done Master Windu.

    Mace: However, something is not what it seems, I feel that Master Dooku and I need to return to the capital. I am going to leave Telabo here to protect you.

    Telabo: Master, Do you think that I am ready?

    Dooku: Come now, don?t you belive that the council is aware of who is ready and who isn?t? Just stay focused and listen to the will of the force, if there are any problems contact us.

    Telabo: Yes master Dooku. [Bows]

    Dooku and Mace leave the room.

    Stanimir: Well then my young friend I suppose we should be on our way.

    Telabo: As you wish senator.

    [Cut to]

    The dark blue hooded sith lord stands before a holographic image of the Bothan Einar Zla?Tan with a squad of fifty men training behind him.

    Malice: What have you found out?

    Einar: My spy has told me that Sidious is heading to Csillia.

    Malice: He intends on using them against me.

    Einar: M?Lord?

    Malice: My father the King banished me from that planet, I swore I would never return, and the ingrate thinks that he will find safe haven there? I will show him the power of the dark side, and my new apprentice. I will reclaim my fathers throne and take over the galaxy.

    Einar: Then you will be a
  11. PadawanofNogiuq Jedi Padawan

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  12. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    I have already voted, good work on that section CodyMonKenobi.
  13. tatooinewizard Jedi Master

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    Sorry I didn't get to vote on the last section.

    #2 this time though.
  14. CodyMonKenobi Force Ghost

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    We are coming pretty close to the end of this script I only have 14 (unless I come up with some thing befor the end) more sections. So what I need from you guys is some things that you would like to see for Star Wars Pre-Saga Episode II I will write the next section once I get a tie breaker.
  15. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    I would like to see how palps turns dooku in the Pre-Saga Episode II, i think that would be cool.
  16. PadawanofNogiuq Jedi Padawan

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    that would be interesting to know indeed....
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  18. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    Thanks PadawanofNogiuq i thought so as well.
  19. CodyMonKenobi Force Ghost

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    I will have the next scene uo later today.

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    [Cut to]

    INT. Palpatine?s Library

    Palpatine is seen standing in a large library talking to his servant. He pulls a book from the shelf and a secret passage opens.

    Palpatine: You are sure that none of the other servants have been back here?

    Servant: Oh yes sir I promise you.

    Palpatine: Good your service is no longer needed

    Palpatine then begins to send bolts of lightning throw the man, the servant lies on the floor screaming in agony, and Palpatine has a look of almost ecstasy as he slowly kills the man. Once the mans cries and pleads for mercy are no more Palpatine quits and turns to see a group of men waiting for him. One of them is Colmanx the leader for the Brotherhood of Naboo.

    Palpatine: How is my young jedi friend?

    Colmanx: He is fine, but he is a little feisty.

    Palpatine: Good.

    Colmanx: And what of the report of the Gungans?

    Palpatine: The Senator is having his peace talks with them, I have arranged for an assassination to take place.

    Colmanx: Very good, once another Gungan leader is killed. They will storm Theed and the Queen will have no choice but to ask for our help than.

    As the walk down the long dark corridor you can see lots of prisoner cells some with humans, and other alien races but most of them with Gungans. Palpatine then stops at the cell with young Jaron sitting in it. He is seen meditating and then he quickly opens his eyes to look at Palpatine.

    Jaron: You are foolish; the other Jedi will come for me.

    Palpatine: {cackling} I am counting on it.

    Jaron: So what, you?re going to hold me until I bring them to you.

    Palpatine: Oh no my boy I am going to hold you until you call me master.

    Jaron: I will not join you.

    Palpatine: The Jedi have blinded you, with the dark side you could become more powerful.

    Jaron: That?s not true.

    Palpatine: Then how do you explain, your former masters death? Yes, I can feel your anger give in to it let it flow though you use it, destroy the bars that hold you captive.

    Jaron: I will not give into the dark side

    Palpatine: Very well use your insignificant powers to escape; your feeble skills are no match for the dark side.

    Jaron then closes his eyes and begins to reach out with the force, but despite his efforts he is unable to escape from the bars.

    Palpatine: Guards bring me a prisoner.

    The Guards walk off and then bring back a little Gungan girl who looks very terrified.

    Palpatine: [to the little girl] Go ahead tell the boy your name.

    Girl: Mesa called Donda, Mesa es very, very scared

    Jaron: I know it will be okay

    Donda: Mesa think wesa gonna be crunched.

    Jaron: No we will be rescued don?t worry

    Palpatine: Will you?

    Palpatine once again unleashes his lightning on little Donda, her small amphibian like body falls to the ground and she screams in pain.

    Donda: AGHhhhhhhhh Help Mesa, Mesa no wanten to die.

    Jaron: [screaming] NO STOP IT.

    Palpatine continues with his lightning and cackling the whole time. Jarons emotions get the best of him and frustration, anger, and hatred take over. He reaches out again and crushes the cells door, and pulls his lightsaber from Palpatine?s side. Jaron quickly ignites his blue saber, raises it above his head and brings it down forcefully at Palpatine, but before he hits him, the blue blade is met with a red blade.

    Palpatine: Good, your hatred has made you powerful. Only the darkside could save the little girl.

    Jaron comes to his senses and looks around, he sees the small girl in pain trying to get up, then he sees the mangled cell door embedded into the wall and a crushed guard in-between the door and the wall. Then he looks down at the little girl again.

    Jaron: Let her go, [looks back at Palpatine] let her go and I will help you.

    Donda: No mesa stay with you, Mesa your humble servant, tis commanded by the guards.

    Jaron: Very well, let her stay under my protection, and I will help you. But no harm is to come to her.

    Palpatine: Very well

    Colmanx: You can?t possibly tell me your going to let that thing live.

  21. CrystalKenobi Jedi Master

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    Sorry I have been lurking.

    Excellent story.

    I vote for 1
  22. CodyMonKenobi Force Ghost

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    no need to lurk your opinion is just as important as anyone elses.
  23. InquisitorsHand Jedi Youngling

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    I vote for #1, and I'm no lurker, promise.

    Good section, Cody.
  24. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    Hey CodyMonKenobi are you and CrystalKenobi brothers?
  25. DarthNeil Jedi Master

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    CodyMonKenobi, are you planing on doing any more cyoa when this one is done.
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