Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by CodyMonKenobi, Oct 8, 2003.
CodyMonKenobi, are you planing on doing any more cyoa when this one is done.
Yes, I am helping GA Thrawn with his James Bond CYOA and I have two more pre-saga CYOA's that I am planning. after that I am not sure what I will do, I would like to do a Clone Wars one but I am not sure if I am going to.
1) 5 votes
2) 1 votes
3) 0 votes
EXT. Anchor Head streets
The Jedi Master and the bounty hunter stand face-to-face sabers ignited ready to do battle. The crowd that once bet on pod racers now gathered to bet on the fight, even the illustrious, Jabba the Hutt sat and watched from his skiff. Bareno stands calm and collected with hope that he can reason with Aurra; while she stands her face is full of anger and pain.
Bareno: Aurra, we can work through this let me help you.
Aurra: You have helped me enough.
Aurra pulls back her saber and makes a slashing motion from right to left, but Bareno blocks her causing the sabers to snap and hiss. Aurra then in a rage wildly swings her saber at Bareno but he counters acts each move she makes with his own saber. Bareno trying to get Aurra off of him uses the force to push her backwards but as she flies backward she upholsters her blaster and fires several shots at him that he can barely block.
Bareno: I don?t want to fight you. I want you to come back to Couracsant with me.
Aurra?s eyes swell with tears, as she looks at Bareno.
Aurra: At one time I would have given a thousand systems to hear you say that; I wanted to stay with you. I couldn?t hold up to your standards and you shunned me. I hate the jedi.
Bareno: No, why do you say that?
Aurra: As a baby they took me away from my family, and then they took away my father, the only person that I have ever felt love for.
Bareno: I am here for you now, just get a hold of yourself you must control your emotions.
Aurra?s tears stop and she looks up at Bareno sharply.
Aurra: [screaming] DON?T LECTURE ME
Aurra then charges at Bareno, she swings her lightsaber at his head, and when it is blocked she goes for his legs but he blocks again. She then uses the force and picks up several trash bins that are lined up out side of the Arena and tosses them at Bareno, while he is distracted with those she also swing her saber at him again this time with much more force. Bareno then focuses his attention to the lightsaber and blocks her but is hit by one of the trash bins. This sends Bareno spinning toward the ground, but he catches his balance and turns just in time to raise his saber above his head just in time to block Aurra?s from cutting him into, but Aurra also had her blaster positioned right at his chest. At point blank range Aurra fired one shot that Bareno was unable to stop. Bareno fell to the Ground.
INT. Republic Cruiser somewhere in hyperspace
Count Dooku and Mace Windu are seen sitting holding their stomach, and the just give each other a discomforting glance.
INT. Jedi Temple
Yoda is seen meditating, and then his eyes come open, his ears fall lower, and a look of despair comes up on his small green face.
INT. Republic Cruiser at Anchor Head spaceport
Each of the Jedi in the ship look at each other
Qui Gon: Master Bareno! We have to help him.
Echuu: No, it is to late we cannot help him now. He has become one with the force, we need to worry about catching his assailant. As soon as she takes off we will know. Obi Wan you and Lond watch for her signal. Ki Ada, Qui Gon will need a co-pilot I need to send a transmission to the council.
Each one does as he is instructed; young Obi Wan and Lond are sitting looking at the monitors.
Lond: I want to thank you for saving my master and I
Obi Wan: It?s no problem.
Lond: Are you okay, you seem tense. We?re you close to master Bareno?
Obi Wan: No not really, but it?s not only that I am not used to fling yet; It is going to take me a while.
The two sit and talk for a few moments until a blip is seen on the screen.
Lond: [into comlink] There it is Masters. She is heading toward sector 3-7-2
The Ship takes off and starts of into space.
EXT. Tatooine atmosphere
Aurra?s newly acquired ship is seen following the ship owned by Ilger Shmi Skywalkers owner.
Aurra: Well, so much for that.
A tear falls fr
I will pick NO.1.
That was a great section.
I vote 1
Great story. The characters are captured real well, especially Palpatine and I liked the way you blended characters from the Expanded Universe with those of the movies.
It was cool to read about Qui-Gon and the prophecy of the Force. This links well to The Phantom Menace.
Seeing interaction between Qui-Gon and Dooku was awesome.
Yes i agree with Keeper_of_Swords, CodyMonKenobi is amazing at this i think he is just as good as scooby dooku.
I vote 1
I'll be different. #2.
I don't know if I am as good as ScoobyDooku, but I am improving, and I didn't write every section, almost everyone but not all. I had help from Tegerend, and a little help from LukeGroundtripper, and Imright87 a.k.a Tahiri.
#1 sound interesting.....
#2. This is cool! I hope my CYOA is as good as this!
1) 5 votes
2) 2 votes
Voting is now locked, the next scene will be up later today.
Sith, just remeber to be patient people will start to come, and do your best. You are more than welcome to leave a post in hear telling when you have updated your story, CYOA fans will useually read all of the CYOA's.
I can not wiat.
Will you be doing your next cyoa here as well.
Sith9211, where is your cyoa and what is it called.
yes Neil Sith is doing his here, this is a link to it of you want to check it out.
[link="http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=13697551&start=13698628"] Sith's CYOA [/link]
I will have the next section up in just a little bit.
EXT. outdoor meeting ground near the swamps of Naboo
The Senator?s party is walking through a wooded area, and many ancient statues can be seen in the distance. Senator Stanimir is in the middle of the party of five with two royal Naboo guards behind him and in front of him on each side is Capt. Alvero, and Jedi Knight Telabo. They come to a cleared area where there are stone seats sitting right outside of the water, Boss Nass is sitting and is guarded by four Gungan soldiers.
Stanimir: Thank you for coming Boss Nass, I hope that our people can once again live in peace.
Boss Nass: Mesa no thinken so, as long as yousa Naboo crunchen Da guungans wesa be crunchen back.
Stanimir: No you must understand, The Naboo government means you no harm.
Boss Nass: Da Naboo Killed mesa father 24 gungans esa missing, wesa wanten them back.
Stanimir: There is a small group on Naboo, and they do not want us to have peace. They are responsible for killing your father, and kidnapping your people. I promise you that we will work together to bring them down, and bring your loved ones back home to the great city in the lake. But we need your help; if our men have to protect the cities from attacks then they cannot be looking for the real evil behind this.
Boss Nass peers at the Senator suspiciously trying to see if he is being truthful.
Boss Nass: Yousa gonna treat the Gungans as equal? [Stanimir nods] Mesa warnen yousa nosa funny business.
Suddenly out pops the robot IG-88 from the top of one of the statues, with a plasma rifle in his hand.
IG-88: [robotic voice] Good job senator, now we have them.
IG-88 fires and kills a Gungan guard and then he fires at Boss Nass, but his other guard come to rush him back to the water and he only receives a shot to the shoulder. The senator is shocked. Telabo ignites his blue saber and the Naboo guards rush around the senator trying to get away, leaving Telabo alone. IG-88 fires at the young Dug but Telbo deflects them. IG-88 rockets off into the sky firing at Telabo but again Telabo blocks them, then Telabo notices that the droid is holding something in his hand for a few moments and then drops it on the ground. Telabo looks around to find it and then around the foot of a statue he sees it.
Telabo: OH NO, Plasma grenade.
Senator Stanimir and his guard are running when suddenly the ground shakes them and they all fall to the ground. IG-88 lands 15 feet in front of them, the two guards draw their blaster but IG-88 with a precise shot, shoots their blasters right out of their hands. He then fires two more shots and kills the two guards with ease.
Capt Alvero: Get down sir.
He rushes at the machine and sends shots at him. IG-88 tries to fly off again but Alvero dives at him and causes him to fall to the ground. Alvero begins to beat the droid with the handle of his blaster, however the IG-88 strength out matched the human as he grabbed his arm and then his own blaster from his hand, IG-88 fired one shot into Alvero?s stomach and the man collapsed. IG-88 stood now fixed on his target the senator of Naboo. Senator Stanimir sat against a tree frozen with fear IG-88 raised his rifle when suddenly a burned and bleeding Telabo rushed him and wrestled him to the ground. Telabo held him on the ground and put the claw on his foot (which would be a Dugs arms) around the throat of the machine.
Telabo: I will rip you apart.
Then with a sudden jerk Telabo pulled out a large chunk of metal from the droids neck. And IG-88?s eyes went from a glowing yellow to a lifeless black and he fell backwards.
Senator: Oh my, I thought that was the end, how did you get away from the blast.
Telabo: When I noticed what it was I used the force to speed my running, but I wasn?t fast enough to keep from injury at least I am not as bad as the statues back there, they are all in pieces. I am going to have to make a new lightsaber as well.
Colemanx: Don?t worry about it alien scum.
Telabo turned around and saw the human man with a robotic arm, along with twenty o
i vote 2
I vote Two
Qui-Gon's my favourite character.
I have already voted at the other place.
That was a very good section CodyMonKenobi.
You should all go here it is only just starting up and it looks like it could be a good read, Quel-Droma's fate (AU Ancient Jedi Tale. Find your own fate).
Qui-Gon's my favourite character.
He's my fav to.
#2. Qui-Gon is my favorite Jedi.
What is the tally for the vote.
Sorry it took so long to update I have put in a lot of over time at work this week. so without further adue.
The camera pans round showing the pylon of the Jedi temple.
INT. Jedi Temple Council room
Jedi Knights Qui Gon Jinn and Ki Ada Mundi stand in the middle of the room in which twelve seats sit. Five seats sat empty the seats which are full have Jedi Masters Mace Windu, Yoda, Yareel Poof, Plo Koon, Yaddle, Dooku, and Syfo Dyas. Qui Gon explains what happened on the mission and tells them of the death of Master Bareno, and their contact with Prince Xizor, and following Aurra Singh to Csillia.
Qui Gon: I request that I be given a team to go back Csillia and rescue Jaron
Qui Gon: No? What do you mean?
Mace: What will you have us do Qui Gon? We have already lost three Jedi in a short time; you want us to send more to their death for one?
Qui Gon: No, I would have you send the to their death for the protection of the weak.
Yoda: To dangerous it is Qui Gon. Know nothing we do, of the people from Csillia.
Qui Gon: So you expect me to leave him to die?
Yoda: If you honor what we stand for?Yes
Mace: We have to much to deal with, the death of two Jedi masters, a missing padawan, jedi knight Telabo was killed by what our intelligence tells us was the slave girl given to Stanimir by the senator of Sullest. Because of this the citizens of Sullest know believe that their senator is a humanist and have started riots.
Qui Gon: My feelings tell me that it is all connected.
Mace: We don?t have time for this, Ki Ada you and your Padawan Lond will go with Master Yaddle to Sullest. Master Echuu is going to be sent to look for the Senators assassin, While Master Dooku and I go back to Naboo and help protect the Queen. Qui Gon It has been a while since you have been on leave; I want you to take one.
The Jedi Knights bow before the council Ki Ada is given his orders and leaves the room, Qui Gon also leaves the chamber frustrated. The council members each get up and file out one by one.
Mace: Your former Padawan will most defiantly be next in line to join the council if he doesn?t do anything foolish.
Dooku: The boy is right, you know. How can we take a child from their family and when he needs us the most we leave him to die?
Mace: I understand, but we cannot risk it (Dooku nods). I am going to get my things ready and I will meet you in the hanger.
Mace walks down a corridor and Dooku is left standing alone, and then he speaks into a comlink.
Dooku: (into comlink) Jocasta?
Jocasta: (from the comlink) Yes Master Dooku? What can I do for you?
Dooku: My former padawan Qui Gon Jinn will be in the library soon. Please be sure that he receives some assistance.
INT. Jedi Library
Qui Gon is seen staring at a computer screen when a lady around the age of fifty with long hair that is mostly black but is graying walks up behind him.
Jocasta: Is there something that I can help you with?
Qui Gon: Not likely.
Jocasta: Are you having a problem Jedi Knight Jinn?
Qui Gon: Yes, I need eighty jedi to help me rescue a young padawan.
Jocasta: Ah I see you are looking at the profiles, have you chosen whom you wanted to take along?
Qui Gon: Well I have compiled a list, why do you ask?
Jocasta: Give the list to me and I will make sure that they get their orders to meet you.
Qui Gon: (in shock) Yes Master Jocasta.
Qui Gon excited about getting help jumps up out of his seat and hands the woman his list and starts to run off when she stops him.
Jocasta: One more thing (she hands him orders) take this to the hanger it is orders for two Nebulon-B escort frigate each stocked with two squads of Jedi Starfighters. (Qui Gon smiles) Now hurry and may the force be with you.
The little woman wanders back to her desk, and begins her work, as Qui Gon hurries off toward the Jedi temple hanger.
Where do we go from here?
1) Palpatine meeting with the Chiss officials
2) Darth Malice and Black Sun
Great post. I am going with 2 also on this one.