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Streak of Madness MAJOR AU/JA /Angst /Drama (Obi-Wan develops Split personality) UPDATED DEC 1

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    FELICIA_ZEZILI Jedi Youngling star 3

    Aug 5, 2001
    Title: Streak of Madness
    Author: Felicia Zezili
    Rating: PG-13 MAJOR AU/Angst /Drama/little romance (sort of)
    Summary: Obi-Wan blames himself for the death of a friend which causes him to develop a split personality that causes havoc on an unsuspecting society.
    Author?s notes: This was idea came to me before I knew in depth about the Jedi and all. I always heard that they couldn?t get angry (I didn?t know about releasing anger into the force at the time.) and from what I know regressing anger is not a good thing. Thinking of that DID immediately came to mind but I didn?t actually begin writing till I saw Jekyll & Hyde the Musical.
    Disclaimer: do not own Star Wars but I?m sure you all already knew that.
    Time Frame: Obi-Wan is 24
    Quick note: //=flash backs and ~=Dreams

    In each of us there are two natures. If this primitive duality of man, good and evil can be housed in separate identities, life would be relieved of all that is unbearable. It is the curse of mankind that these polar twins should be constantly struggling.

    ?Prologue from Jekyll and Hyde the musical

    Prologue - How can I continue on?

    ~Obi-Wan was walking down a long tall ceiling dull gray colored hallway. There were no windows or doors with the exception of a door at the very end of the hall. As Obi-Wan drew closer to the hall he could just make out a faint voice singing.

    ?Ring around the rosy. Pocket full of posies.? As he came to the door, Obi-Wan palmed the button to the door, which opened with a whoosh. He entered a room that he recognized to be a room in the healer?s ward. He looked around there but was no one there. Then he looked over to where the balcony was and Obi-Wan saw her, Jori. She climbed up onto the railing of the balcony that over looked the temple gardens. As She began to walk along the railing she was singing to herself. ?Ashes, ashes, we all fall down.? Jori spread her arms and let herself fall back.

    ?Jori! No!? Obi-Wan cried and tried to get over to try and pull her back on the safe side of the railing. But when he got there it was too late. Jori had already gone over the edge and plummeted down to the gardens.

    Obi-Wan stood at the balcony looking down at her body in shock. Blood began to pool on to the ground and other Jedi rushed to Jori side but she was already gone. Then right before his eyes the dark red blood that surrounded her body began to fade and turn to gray. ~

    Obi-Wan awoke from the nightmare with a start. His body was coved in sweat and he was breathing heavily. Force! Why can?t these dreams stop! He thought to himself. A few days earlier Obi-wan had gone to see Jori Kidron, a healer and friend, whom had been committed to the healer?s ward for server depression. When Obi-Wan?s comlink went off and he stepped out of the room to answer the call, Jori had gone over to the balcony that over looked the temple gardens. The view was meant to bring calm to the patient but Jori had another idea.

    Obi-Wan got up and walked out in to the common room. He passed it and went into the kitchen for some water. He could still hear her voice. Then last conversation they had. Jori was seated on the bed and Obi-Wan in a hospital chair.

    //Jori, you are going to have to get past this and go on with your life. // Obi-Wan had said.

    The reason for Jori?s depression was the result of a mistake, a single mistake in judgment that she had made during an operation. The patient was a young child and died because of Jori?s bad judgment. After that it was like her life had taken a down ward spiral. She had begun to doubt her abilities as a healer and Jedi.

    Her words echoed through his mind //I can?t Obi-Wan! That child died because of me! A child, an innocent life! // Her voice had then dropped to just above a whisper //I can?t even look at myself in the mirror anymore. I think I prefer the view outside. // She had looked out a
  2. Trixter_Goddess

    Trixter_Goddess Jedi Youngling star 1

    Oct 27, 2002
    Whoa! That was really good, FZ! Please post more soon. :)
  3. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    This looks really interesting, Felicia. I like it.

    Please write some more.
  4. Sheila

    Sheila Jedi Master star 4

    Oct 6, 2002
    A very interesting beginning. I look forward to seeing where you take this. :D
  5. CalaisKenobi

    CalaisKenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 15, 2002
    Wow, sounds very good. And since Dissassociative Identity Disorder can come from a traumatic experience, I would say that you are right on track. Great job and please continue! :D

    FELICIA_ZEZILI Jedi Youngling star 3

    Aug 5, 2001
    Thanks for the feedback Trixter_Goddess,Jedi_Suzuran,Shelia, and CalaisKenobi! Glad you guys injoyed that first bit. I was afraid that the Jedi commiting suicide would scare people away.

    And just one small question: did anyone happen to catch a stray "Naomi" or "Eve" in the post? I had changed the Healer's name to Jori at the last minute and just want to make sure I didn't miss any.

    Felicia Z.

    FELICIA_ZEZILI Jedi Youngling star 3

    Aug 5, 2001
    Chapter 1 ? This is the Moment

    Coruscant, the capital of the republic, the planet where the galactic senate met and the Jedi temple stood. It was early in the morning and already the planet wide city was bustling with life. Beings of many different species went to their work or homes and the air traffic was as it usually was for that time of day, or anytime of day for that matter.

    The dining hall of the Jedi Temple was already filled with young initiates, Padawans, Knights and Masters. Since it was one of the extremely rare moments where Obi-Wan and his three best friends: Garen, Reeft and Bant were on Coruscant at the same time, they had decided to have a meal together at the same table where they had always sat as kids.

    ?Its sad that we don?t get more chances to be together like old times.? Bant said but her comment seemed to go unnoticed as Obi-Wan was in deep thought and Garen was watching Reeft as he piled all the food on his tray, onto a slice of thick bread and made a sandwich like creation.

    ?That?s disgusting! Do you know what all that is gonna do to your insides?? Garen asked but Reeft only shrugged his shoulders and took a huge bite.

    Bant shook her head and let out a chuckle. ?Some things never change.? She looked over to Obi-Wan who still held a preoccupied look on his face. ?Hey space cowboy, you with us??

    Obi-Wan looked up. ?What? Oh?Yeah I just have a lot on my mind.?

    ?You?re still thinking about her??

    ?Trying not to actually.? Obi-Wan replied as he looked down at his food and began to pick at it. ?It?s other things. I?ve been having these dreams lately and it?s the same thing over and over. I enter Jori?s room and she jumps but when I look down at her, her blood turns?gray.?

    Reeft mumbled something around mouthful of food. Garen looked at him and said, ?Swallow.?

    After doing so Reeft repeated, ?Denying of red is the denying of emotion.? The other three Padawans at the table just gave him questioning looks. ?It?s just something I heard from a medicine man once.? He then returned to his meal.

    ?Anything else bothering you?? Bant asked.

    ?Yeah?? Obi-Wan began slowly. ?Lately I?ve been hearing voices in my head: laughter, crying, sometimes even screaming.?

    ?Obi-Wan, you should talk to your master about this or at least go see a healer.? Bant warned.

    ?I will but not tonight. We have that celebration at the Senate to attend tonight and he doesn?t need to worry about me. I?m 24 for force sake.? Obi-Wan said but Bant still looked concerned for he friend. ?I promise I?ll tell him everything tomorrow.?

    Qui-Gon and his apprentice Obi-Wan stood at the entrance of the Foundation Day Celebration. The Republic Foundation Day was an event cherished by all citizens. All government buildings and business were closed and planet wide parties were held all throughout the Republic but on no planet was there a party as the one held by the Senate. The celebration each year was considered the social event of the season and only the best of the best attended.

    The two Jedi were attending the affair as a security measure. For the past few weeks there had been threats from separatist planets that desired to free themselves from what they believed to be republic oppression. While the threats were minor the Senate was not about to risk any mishaps occurring on such an important day. They hoped that the presence of the Jedi would scare anyone who tried to crash the party. And if that person still had the nerve to try anything, Master Adi Gallia and her Padawan Siri would also be attending the celebration dressed in civilian clothing.

    Over the next hour all the invited guests had begun to arrive. Obi-Wan tried to hide the small smile that threatened to cross his lips as he saw Adi and Siri coming towards them. Adi was wearing a sea green evening dress with a loose fitting robe over top that had long over sleeves that made it easy for her to conceal her lightsaber. She also wore her usual Tholoth headdress. Siri wore a two-piece outfit. The top was a long slee
  8. CalaisKenobi

    CalaisKenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 15, 2002
    Oh, I hope your foot feels better Felicia!
    And thanks for letting me know about the update! Great post! :D I love the Siri/Obi interaction.
  9. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    Obi's beginning to have weird dreams. Hmm, most interesting. :)

    Sorry to hear about your foot, Felicia. Hope you get better soon. :)
  10. Sheila

    Sheila Jedi Master star 4

    Oct 6, 2002
    Oh my, Obi-Wan is hearing voices in his head. :eek:

    Loved the lighthearted interaction between Obi-Wan and Siri.

    Hope your foot is feeling better soon. :)
  11. snowbee-wan kenobi

    snowbee-wan kenobi Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jan 28, 2000
    Yay! A new Felicia story!
    This is great, cant wait for more!!!
  12. LuvEwan

    LuvEwan Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 24, 2002
    Looks like it's gonna get real good...
    Not that it isn't already! :D
  13. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 31, 2001
    Looks good Felicia
  14. Padawan_Amanda

    Padawan_Amanda Jedi Youngling

    Sep 21, 2002
    This is a very interesting idea. And it leaves all kinds of opportunities for Obi torture, which is always good. In a strange sort of way. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

    btw- when did you see Jekyll & Hyde? I saw it about 4 years ago in New York, just after Linda Eder left the cast. It's an incredible show! :)

    FELICIA_ZEZILI Jedi Youngling star 3

    Aug 5, 2001
    I forgot to mention that the song used and the comedy are not mine (I couldn't write a song to save my life and what I think funny is inappropriote for this board) They belong to Martina McBride and Dane Cook.

    Once all the invited quests had arrived, the doors to the entrance were closed off to the outside world and there were two of the chancellor?s guards positioned by the entrance. From the entrance it was a short walk through a wide hall where a few of Coruscant?s best had lingered to chatter with friends. As Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon passed as few of the guests turned their gazes to the two Jedi.

    The end of the wide hall opened up into the grand reception area. Silver streamers hung from the high ceiling, weaving over and under one another. A dozen of the silver decorations ran from the tops of the walls to the center of the room where an elevated stage was set up. The streamers were connected to the stage by a pole that stood just behind the Bith band. Dozens of assigned tables had been set up around the hall, leaving room in the middle for dancing.

    Everyone took their seats. On the stage, lights dimmed and a single spotlight fell onto the figure of a woman. A hush came over the crowd as the Bith band began to play and the woman?s angelic voiced echoed through the room. ?I have been blessed and I feel like I found my way! I thank the Gods for all I?ve been given, at the end of every day. I have been blessed?with so much more then I deserve. To be here with the ones who love me, to love them so much it hurts!? As the song continued, some of the guests moved out onto the dance floor and began moving to the beat.

    When the song and music had ended the MC, Daen Cuk came out onto the stage, ?Please give a big hand for Maratyna and the band.? The crowd let out a round of applause. ?I always wanted to be in a band. Hell every comedian does. Because all a band guy gotta do is come out and go, ?YAAAAAAY Coruscant! I can?t hear you!? but a comedian, we come out and ask, ?By a round of applause how do you feel?? It?s the only job in the world where you judge how a person is feeling by a round of applause. Like, you can?t be at a twenty speeder crash?? Cuk ran over to the edge of the stage and kneeled down. ?Ma?am by a round of applause how do you feel?!? He looked out to the audience. ?She?s not clapping!?

    There were several performers that came onto the stage over the course of the night: a group of Twi?lek dancers, a jizz band and a theatrical group of Camaasi actors, who preformed a scene from the latest hit play.

    All in all the evening went by with very little disturbances with the exception of a few disputes between some of the guests. One person had even smuggled a concealed blaster into the event. He was immediately detained as soon as he drew it and escorted off the premises.

    It was close to midnight when Siri walked over to the table were Obi-Wan was and sat down. ?Well, This night has been a complete waste. My mind has become mush listening to these people complain about one another.? She changed her voice into a high squeaky pitch, ?What a pretty smile, Mrs. Belie. Pity they are not all her teeth.? She mimicked. ?Looks like you got off easy tonight.? She commented and picked at the plate of appetizers.

    ?The night is still young.? As though on cue and small explosion rocked the room. Obi-Wan and Siri immediately got to their feet and ran to where the sound had originated.

    To be continued...

    I'm so sorry about how short that was. I ran into a bit of writers block hopefully I'll get over it soon.
  16. Sheila

    Sheila Jedi Master star 4

    Oct 6, 2002
    Oh no, an evil cliffhanger! :eek:

    Can't wait to find out what happens, I hope that writer's block of yours has fled the premises! :)
  17. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    Uh-oh, you had to leave it there, didn't you? :_|

    And DWB... :mad:

    *kicks DWB*

    Go away!
  18. Trixter_Goddess

    Trixter_Goddess Jedi Youngling star 1

    Oct 27, 2002
    Omg! The evil cliffie! :mad:

    You have to post more soon.
  19. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

    Dec 31, 2001
    Oh nooo- Felicia has cliffie-itis. Of course most of the authors these days think that's a good thing... 8-}
  20. Jedi_Knight_Hunter

    Jedi_Knight_Hunter Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jun 6, 2002
    What is it with all this cliff hangers lurking about these days?

    Excellent thus far...waiting for more.
  21. SARAH_5

    SARAH_5 Jedi Youngling

    Sep 12, 2002
    I've decided to now stalk you *evil laugh*

    I liked it, you've made me feel so sorry for Obi Awww!

    So carry on writing more


    FELICIA_ZEZILI Jedi Youngling star 3

    Aug 5, 2001
    Shelia: If you thought that cliff hanger was bad you'll hate me for this...

    Jedi_Suzuran: You know DWB did leave but just not for this story. I came up and started two other stories but this one took me a while to work out. I think he stuck here just in spite

    Trixter_Goddess: thanks! I was afraid it wouldn't apease people.

    PadawanKitara: Oh no! and just as I got over my other injury! Is there any medication for this illness you speak of?

    Jedi_Knight_HunterGlad you like it so far and now fun begins!

    SARAH_5: Great a stalker! I was wondering when I would get mine! It's good you feel sorry for him now. that way when he does stuff ou always look back.

    Black smoke began to fill the hall as a fire caused by the explosion ignited. It quickly spread, engulfing the many decorations that were draped around the room. The crowd began to move frantically to the exits, not wanting to be overcome by the blaze and smoke. Luckily because of the late hour a majority of the guests had left.

    Flaming decorations began to fall from the ceiling like a deadly rain. Using their Jedi reflexes the two Padawans easily dodged the flaming rain. When they reached where the explosion had originated, their masters were already their trying to get to those who were trapped under fallen debris to safety.

    Obi-Wan felt a warning from the force and looked up as a loud crack sounded and a large piece of debris began to fall from the ceiling heading to where Master Adi was helping one of the guest who had been close to the blast. Siri called out a warning to her master and just before the woman was hit, she was pushed out of the way by a blur of motion.

    ?Master!? Obi-Wan cried out and ran to his master?s side. The man lay unconscious under the rubble that had hit him after he had pushed Adi out of the way. Obi-Wan tried to lift and push the wreckage from his master?s back but that proved to be futile. He stepped back and took a deep breath to calm his nerves as he focused on the rubble that covered his master. Using the power of the force the piece of the debris lifted into the air and away from his master. Then with the help of Master Adi and Siri, Obi-wan used the force to lift his master from the ground and take him out of the hall to safety

    Obi-Wan paced back and forth in the waiting area of the healer?s ward like a caged animal. Siri sat in one of the cushioned seats with her master. It had been more then two hours since Qui-Gon had been taken back to the emergency room and Obi-Wan was growing increasingly agitated with every passing minute. ?What?s taking them so long??

    ?He was badly injured, Obi-Wan.? Master Adi said trying to sooth the young man. ?They are doing all they can for him and it will take time if they want to do it right.?

    Obi-Wan stopped his pacing and stared down at the floor. His fist clenched so tight that his knuckles turned white. ?I swear when I find who was behind this??

    ?Obi-Wan.? Master Adi warned. When he had begun to speak she could feel a dark energy growing around him.

    Obi-Wan relaxed some and flopped down onto a chair, placing his head in his hands. That headache from the other night was returning with vengeance and he was beginning to feel dizzy. ?I?I need to get out of here?? He stood up and hurried out the waiting area leaving behind a concerned Master and her padawan.
    Obi-Wan ran back to the quarters that he had shared with his master for the past 11 years. He stumbled into the fresher, bracing himself against the sink. He turned on the water and cupped the cool liquid in his hands then splashed it onto his fevered face. The young man grabbed a towel and dried his face.

    When he lowered the towel and got a good look in the mirror that hung over the sink he jumped back, hitting the wall behind him. The reflection was not his but of someone else, someone dark and sinister with glowing red eyes.

    Obi-Wan closed his eyes as he slide down the wall till he was sitting on the fresher floo
  23. Jedi_Suzuran

    Jedi_Suzuran Jedi Knight star 5

    May 22, 2002
    Uh-oh, that is a cliffie.

    What happens now? I know you're not gonna tell me, but I have to ask, right? :p

    Good post, Felicia. :)
  24. NikSteevi

    NikSteevi Jedi Youngling star 1

    Oct 18, 2002
    Great post and a wicked Cliffie there.

    Obi-wan's going to have a few problems in the foreseeable future I guess.

    Keep it up!

    "Want More I do" - Says Yoda.

  25. Trixter_Goddess

    Trixter_Goddess Jedi Youngling star 1

    Oct 27, 2002
    [face_shocked] [face_shocked] [face_shocked]

    :_| Can you please tell me what happens next?
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