Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by RedGold, Mar 16, 2010.
I like this fixing you do. 'Tis nice. Anakin's thoughts made me chuckle.
This totally and completely makes up for the last chapter!
Good for Mara! Good for Luke; yes, he's his father's son, no doubt about that!
Let the babies work out their problems and come to the adults when they have something useful to say!
Well you certainly fixed that ugly mess! Your characterisation of Mara was spot on in this; the 'get frelled' attitude really works on her.
Anakin's thought process at the end was great!!
Oh lovely, lovely! Strong, kick-butt Mara is always cool; She and Luke are right. Until the Empire and Republic really want peace and not just cutesy tootsy figureheads to smile and milk the cams then they're better off living their lives in neutral territory.
hahaha! Luke is like his dad in the best way.
Adored how quick they came to their true choice and first priority - peace between governments and they for each other.
Now JL and ginchy can get their ... wishes for more action (As if yours truly would object, either)
YYYYYEEEEESSSSS !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that was way better than the last chapter!
Well done, Mara!
Poor kids. The governments should really stop to manipulate their lives like this!
*trying to imagine if someone told me: "Hey, you're getting married" and then " it's time for divorce".
I've never thought I'd love Anakin.
I LOVE IT!!!!!! Great post, girl! Hee hee! You have made my day!
That was absolutely brilliant.
This was unexpectedly excellent.
I had expected you to make Mara say she wanted a divorce and that they would separate for 6 months or some amount of time...Missing each other immensely the whole time. Then Luke goes on some secret mission and captured and tortured for weeks by some super secret imperial spy agency. Who then show him to Jade, so she can gloat over him..Who THEN decides to want him back. Two years and 4-6 chapters later they get together...
You just like to torture Luke waay too much..Especially is Mara if holding the whip. Glad you restrained yourself!!
DON'T GIVE HER IDEAS!!!
See!!! There's the part you left out!!!
They should just have spaced the Imperials and bel Iblis and left for the cluster so they can kriff each other's brains out in peace.
^^ I'm totally going to forget that wbsaw even made that suggestion...
You know what they say when someone makes an assumption?
?I asked you to let us tell her together,? Doruk turned to the senator, ?as a courtesy.?
?Where was your courtesy on Ryloth?? bel Ibis shot back. ?Perhaps you should have thought of that before excluding her from such important talks??
For every fault that both are showing, there's this one grace... and Bel Iblis rocks for calling him on that.
?One moment I?m forced into a marriage, the next I?m being forced out.?
Anakin raised one brow, ?I thought you?d be pleased.?
And apparently, Anakin needs to talk to his son more...
?Why not make a new treaty?? Jade asked. ?Spend this time making a workable treaty instead of backtracking into possible war??
?Because it will never work,? bel Ibis answered. ?The New Republic and Empire simply cannot get along.?
Not with an attitude like this one, no.
And... okay. Entirety of Mara putting politicians in their place and telling them to make nice or else? Loved it. Awesomely done, RedGold.
Oh wow. I am sooooo behind. For some reason, I wasn't getting the PM notices and life was too nuts to go looking for them. Such an amazing chapter. And yes. Luke is totally his father's son. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAA awesomeness. Mara finally got sick of being the figurehead. This has such intricate character development without going through every little detail of their lives. The fic really flows (though I do have some problems keeping track of timing - is it just me? Cause it's listing Luke's birthday, then the wedding after a certain time, then the one year anniversary, which are implied as being months apart, but seem to have little time in between)
Tee hee, will be interesting to see how the governments try to amend their plans now that Luke and Mara aren't on their side...
Good for both of them for standing their ground.
This was a surprisingly non-evil chapter. I am so disappointed in you RG!
Not really - loved it!
New post soon?
I echo the strong request above.
I concur. Let's start chanting! More Symbols, more Symbols, more Symbols!!
I think she just likes to see us beg.
Probably. Isn't that a characteristic of a sociopath?
Oh please update soon!
I agree with everyone else. You NEED to update.