Saga Tainted: A Darth Vader-Anakin Skywalker Poem

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  1. Deneveon Force Ghost

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    Jun 6, 2002
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    TAINTED


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    Fleeting glances of a life gone lost
    I see them in my dreams
    Like a ship whose bow is tossed
    I drown in infinite misery

    Consuming darkness engulfs my soul?
    Forever my mind crumbles,
    Shattering into a bottomless hole
    ?I am left in the overwhelming shambles

    I cry out with a voice not there
    No one heeds my call for salvation
    Only darkness, with its icy stare
    And I am silenced in strange fascination
    I cannot escape its addictive embrace
    Though I know it is my murderer
    But in my mind is another?s face
    Untouched by my cold tormentor
    Her beauty surpasses this tomb of black
    And this hideous mask I wear
    I reach out but am held back
    By my shackles of power and their snares

    And as I look into my ghostly eyes
    I see the truth in them
    No one can save my from my desperate cries
    Or keep me from what I?m meant
    Yet I cannot help but wonder
    What a life would be
    Without these mistakes thrown asunder,
    Without this tainted creed


    Yet I am lost?
    Forever?


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    EDIT: Format.

    --Den
  2. tatooinewizard Jedi Master

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    May 13, 2003
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    I thought this was very good.

    My favorite parts:

    Consuming darkness engulfs my soul?
    Forever my mind crumbles,
    Shattering into a bottomless hole


    and my most favorite

    Only darkness, with its icy stare
    And I am silenced in strange fascination
    I cannot escape its addictive embrace
    Though I know it is my murderer


    and also

    What a life would be
    Without these mistakes thrown asunder,
    Without this tainted creed


    Yet I am lost?
    Forever?



    I loved the feeling of it all. Very well done.

  3. Darth_Leia_6669 Jedi Master

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    Apr 26, 2003
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    That was a very good look into the confusion of Vader/Anakin. I liked it very much!

    --later--
  4. Deneveon Force Ghost

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  5. Deneveon Force Ghost

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